Kocari wrote:

Here for the first mod because requested, and of course this is my proposal to you, MARRY ME SENPAI
This mod will be more about the playstyle and how it will be played out by other people rather than just a normal mod, but I will also include faults that I find

Bit Rate at 284kbs please change
Also make sure to add down Shad0w1land because he helped out with the video you bad
[General Overview]

Tari, Tari, Tari. It's good man. Keep up the good work, even though I'm nitpicky with the tiniest of overlaps as I want to keep things clean and not have them touch at inappropriate times. It's only on its first mod anyways. In a short while more people should come in and possibly make this map into a good one. I hope I can help in anyway. Time to jot this mod down in my modding calender. Thanks again

[Insane]

• Widescreen and Countdown turned off please for the rest as well

1. 00:03:837 (2) - The way it is now doesn't serve a purpose of note placement especially with the support of these notes 00:03:409 (1,1) - All it is, is just a slider being there without a purpose. How about arcing to make a subtle flow towards the next slider? Plus it helps with the formation of triangles for visuals http://puu.sh/iOKJd/6dfb89a741.jpg
2. 00:05:123 (1) - Going to be nit picky for consistency, but you can move this down to exactly how much the distance for this slider would be 00:05:980 (1) - as they do serve the same purpose.
3. 00:08:980 (2) - Move slightly down more for the good blanket
4. 00:10:373 (2) - Can do the same here slightly better as well
5. 00:12:623 (3) - Can adjust to make the distance here 1.3 all around
6. 00:13:695 (1) - Blanket here can work
7. 00:19:266 (2) - This overlap works but it just seems weird to me having it be placed like this, considering the other times there weren't any overlaps with the rhythm it previously had before this, so changing it and just putting a slider on top of the other changes the way it feels visually keeping it, flows well.
8. 00:25:159 (5,6) - Can move these slightly up more for better transitioning in playing x:431 y:206 they are fine to me, make nice shape.
9. 00:43:695 (5,5,6,7) - Can possibly center this in between the notes more fine shape to me.
10. 01:00:409 (2) - I think this note is a bit closer than the others one, can try moving it further out, preferably x:330 y:154, or something along the lines of it being like this 01:01:909 (1) -
11. 01:08:980 (3) - I think curving this a lot makes it look sloppy seeing how its arced during this pattern, something with less demeanor would work as well http://puu.sh/iOLmw/8aaba9f276.jpg good transition so no change,
12. 01:28:909 (1) - Nazi Blanket!
13. 01:30:195 (6) - Can start a NC here, to make the drum roll have more emphasis nah, it'll ruin my nc pattern.
14. 01:59:766 (7) - Hmm, on where this is placed it feels lackluster and doesn't provide the essential "jump" that makes it feel natural, this suddenly decreases the jump, or in other words shorten the time and makes the distance here drastically smaller than normal to feel good to be able to essentially hit the note. Especially when the next NC is particularly closer, how about moving it to here 01:59:766 (7) - x:184 y:260 Trust me this will feel pretty good to transition to hit on every occasion, like how this one works 02:01:480 (7) -
15. 02:08:123 (5) - Same as above with the distance gapping, seems a bit too close imo, compared to this 02:08:980 (2) -
16. 02:18:837 (1) - During this part, something like this would've greatly fit in for note (4) as now it's just in there filling its own role instead of playing a role for the other notes, but I would say it's fine, but you limited yourself to doing that because of the slider here 02:16:909 (1) - and the the resolve to have a blanket here It flows well to me, the movement might be a bit forced, but changing direction to approach to the next note, is more emphasis.
17. 02:17:980 (4) - but it works nontheless
18. 02:26:016 (2,3) - I think you can drop them low but straighter, kinda like this http://puu.sh/iOLQB/9993c7202f.jpg
19. 02:46:480 (2) - I think you can make this go in deeper into that previous slider, right now it's on the verge of questioning, "Should I keep it like this", "Or should I emphasize the jump more to play along with the strong suit of the music here" http://puu.sh/iOLVC/3a78b851d1.jpg (It's fine the way it is now)
20. 03:02:123 (3,4,5,6) - Distance here isn't the same as before during these sort of "anti" jumps
21. 03:15:409 (1,4) - Copy paste?
22. 03:44:980 (2) - Can make this more parallel, but could be on purpose for subtle flow, either way it's good
23. 03:48:837 (1) - Could end on a better slider tbh http://puu.sh/iOMAM/9950f3d728.jpg
    Hitsounds
24. 00:02:552 (3) - Whistle Onegai Shimasu
25. 00:06:837 (1,2,3) - Can have a clap on head to play along with the three hard beats here that can be heard quite extrodinarily well nah, no sound to support it.
26. 00:48:837 (4) - Whistle here can work
27. 00:51:409 (1) - Strong drum beat but there isn't any hitsounds to back it up with. Drum-finish can work but it leaves the next place to put the hitsound empty handed
28. 00:53:552 (3) - Drum-clap on tail, but yea the drums can really be utilized here more than the whistles can, because it's 1/2 drum parts and 1/2 whistle parts
29. 01:30:837 (12) - Possible finish to end on a strong beat? loouuud and annoying.
    Pretty gud!

[Hard]

1. 00:19:480 (3) - Wouldn't it be better to have the note up instead of zigzagging? as the next long slider already does enough down movement already http://puu.sh/iOMXo/b5331fa36e.jpg
2. 00:34:909 (2) - Slightly too close?
3. 00:55:266 (3) - I think you should map this out, really strong beat on the red tick that should be mapped out imo, like this one 00:58:909 (4,5) - nah, i wanted to emphasize certain sounds here.
4. 01:09:623 (6,1) - Oh this is something new!
5. 01:08:980 (4,5,6) - DS is really strange here, as it doesn't, possibility? http://puu.sh/iONkw/79f240e0c0.jpg
6. 01:16:266 (4,5) - This changed from how it was before, I think you should keep spacing the same as before to keep it consistent 01:02:552 (4,5) - but I do prefer the way it is now as the gap isn't too big to be transitioned into playing o.o< i don't see anything wrong with this, its a better transition.
7. 01:23:337 (6,1) - Probably keep the same for same consistency http://puu.sh/iONoG/6aef287924.jpg
8. 01:46:052 (5) - Distance snap can be the same here
9. 02:23:123 (1,2) - Overlap op
   I don't see anything problems with it, hitsounds are the same as above but it's really good

[Normal]

1. 00:05:980 (2,3,4) - DS
2. 00:11:766 (3,1) - Flow here is rather exquisitely pleasing even though it does look strange at a glance
3. 00:15:195 (4) - Both can be 1.2 too keep it clean
4. 00:22:266 (1) - Can definitely be changed so it doesn't have to touch the previous slider http://puu.sh/iONMv/97bf11949b.jpg
5. 00:24:837 (2,3) - DS
   TBH nothing is really wrong with this, A simple checkup on how you want each notes to be placed and DS properly for each one would be really good to keeping the map consistent and clean overall, otherwise rhythm and stuff checks out well
   EASY IS SAME THING

Verdict! I'D RANK IT

Euny wrote:

as your request!♥

• General

1. why you didnt changed mp3 for 192kbps? i gave to you.
2. disable widescreen support because there's a video
   
3. remove soft-hitnormal3.wav thats unused

• Easy

1. 00:01:695 - duplicate timing point. remove it~
   

• Normal

1. 00:01:695 - again. seems you used that copy program lol. anyways, duplicate timing point. remove it~
   
2. 00:11:123 (2,3,1) - i feel bit awkward from this part. when i play. flow feels uncomfortable. i think, you can make this for smoother
   
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:21:409 (3,1) - i think it overlap disturbance to reading. how about place 00:22:266 (1) - this object on bit sideward?
   
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• Hard

1. looks nice to me. just hope you follow hitsound suggestion from your insane diff

• Insane

1. 00:01:695 (1) - why you used s:c2 for only insane diff?
   
2. 00:07:695 (3) - you put finish for whole slider, but i think finish doesnt fit for this tail(on blue tick). so.. remove that please
3. 00:55:695 (6) - drum addition should be better for music
4. 00:59:123 (4) - seems you miss whistle and finish for here cause you used to 02:07:695 (4) - this head.
5. 01:02:123 (2) - drum addition should be better too. it is up to your map
6. 01:03:409 (1,2,3) - you can improve this flow i think, there are 2 suggestion for you. 01:03:409 (1) - make this more curvy, or just stack these like 02:11:980 (1,2,3) - them.
   
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   or
   
   
7. 01:10:052 (9,1) - i think these are too far. i feel hard to streaming when i play this part. if you want to keep ds with 01:09:409 (4) - , just ctrl J and move 01:09:623 (5,6,7,8,9) - this streams like this.
   
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8. 01:13:266 (1,1) - why you put nc for these? they are necessary? ye, colorhaxing
9. 01:23:766 (9,1) - same reason by 01:10:052 (9,1). isnt too far? this one no, kick slider give some leniency for the stream, so approaching next note is not a problem.
10. 01:25:909 (2) - unpretty flow imo. move it on bit left, and change slider tail direction like this.
    
    SPOILER

    
11. 01:30:837 (12) - new combo. cause did that for other parts. or if its intentional, just ignore this. its intended.
12. 01:58:266 (1,2,3) - i saw you used many slider jumps in this map. but its note~ hope you make their closer like 00:49:695 (1,2,3) - that
13. 02:04:266 (6) - add drum addition.
14. 02:10:695 (2) - ^ same as above
15. 02:21:837 (1,1) - this nc again. i cant understand its need to.
16. 02:32:337 (9,1) - same reason by 01:10:052 (9,1) i feels so far
17. 02:52:695 (9) - add drum addition for music and,,,, nah, clap sounds better here and fits drums more.
18. 02:53:123 (1) - ^and if you follow this suggest, i think finish should be more better.
19. 02:53:552 (4) - add drum addition no, same reason as above.
20. 02:55:266 (4) - ^ and finish...
21. follow above suggestion ~till 03:07:266 (9) - this.
22. 03:02:123 (3,4) - bit close compared with others thing. 03:02:123 (3) - move it on near by 144l295
23. 03:07:695 (3,1) - swap this nc casue new melody is start from 03:07:695 (3) - here imo.
24. 03:09:623 (1) - remove nc for here. nah, the next note have strong sound, its better to have new combo to start it.
25. 03:15:409 (1) - add whistle for this head. seems you missed.
26. 03:18:409 (1,1) - lol.. this nc really need to!?
27. 03:22:266 (1) - add finish for this front, you missed.
28. 03:29:123 (1) - ^

damn it! Kocari is too nice LOL
anyways, that's it
hope this is helpful...

DahplA wrote:

From PM

BTW I think you might need audio-lead in because it starts on 00:01:695

Insane

2. 00:01:695 (1,2,3) - I feel that you should move 3 down slightly, so it creates a good triangle here with the slider starts
3. 00:41:980 (5) - I don't feel this shape is necessary for the song
4. 01:30:837 (12) - No NC at the end here? You've placed it on Easy and Normal
5. 02:25:695 (1,2,3) - From looking at it, I don't think the circles are going in a straight line from sliderend
6. 02:37:266 (2,1) - While yes, you want to stack and blanket at the same time, the flow here isn't great because of the curve causing a bump. I recommend moving 2 and stacking on 02:34:052 (1) - or something that would ruin the emphasis i am going for in 1
   
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Hard

1. 00:34:909 (2) - Slightly touches the previous object. I suggest moving up
2. 00:59:123 (5,6,7) - I suggest moving 7 down so it makes a straight line from 5 sliderend
3. 01:02:552 (4,5,1) - How come no consistent spacing here? I wanted a better transition to kiai, since of harder rhythms and increasing spacing here w/o causing troubles was the best part.
   
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4. 01:21:409 (5,1) - I feel a blanket works here better, because you've done it already quite a few times. It makes sense as it's sort of the theme of the map there is a blanket
5. 02:08:016 (6) - Why not just use two circles here. It keeps consistency with other patterns, and it also might confuse players at this level with their tapping. lol i'll change if others complain i wanted variety tbh
6. 02:14:337 (4,5) - Same as the flow note I mentioned in Insane
7. 02:47:766 (1) - S curve isn't smooth
   
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Normal

1. 00:11:123 (2,3,1) - The flow here isn't the best. I know there isn't much room to work with here, but you could try just having 1 00:11:980 (1) - face upwards instead
2. 00:21:409 (3,1) - How come these two are almost touching. Doesn't look the best.
3. 00:23:123 (2,1) - Same here
4. 00:56:552 (1,2,3) - ...What. The stack on the blanket goes over 00:56:552 (1) -

Easy

1. Nothing

Enjoy. Feel free to request again via PM again

FreeSongs wrote:

From forum-pm request~

[Insane]

1. 00:35:445 (4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - feel like the jumps here are a bit too small imo (compared to the jumps you used before. the pattern is nice, and there is a breakdown there
   
   For example: 00:22:266 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - and 00:29:123 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - ). Considering to increase the distance a bit.
2. 00:48:409 (2,3,4) - Feel like spreading these circle out to make some small jumps fit here more. (or at least make the
   
   spacing a bit different to emphasize the stronger beats at 00:48:623 (3,4) - as you did here 01:29:766 (4,5) - )
3. 02:10:480 (1,2,3) - the flow feels awkard here. Try something like this?
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4. 02:37:266 (2) - The flow to 02:37:480 (1) - is a little bit awkward imo. Try moving 02:37:266 (2) - left to x:320 y:48 or
   
   so
5. 02:46:587 - missing a note here? the instrumental sound is more prominent, and i wanted to emphasize it more.
6. 02:47:445 - ^. Also, to emphasize the strong beat here 02:47:766 - , I would turn 02:47:552 - into a 1/4 slider. Like this:
   
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   Rhythm:
7. 02:50:980 (7,1) - Consider to increase the spacing between the circle and the slider to emphasize the strong beat (as
   emphasis is correct here,
   what you did here 02:44:123 (8,1) - )
8. 02:53:337 (2) - I can hardly here any sound here. Consider to remove this note
9. 02:55:052 (2) - 02:54:195 (2) - 02:55:052 (2) - 02:56:766 (2) - 02:57:623 (2) - 02:58:480 (2) - ^ intuitive clicking,
10. 03:05:766 (4,5,6) - and 03:06:623 (7,8,9) - are nearly identical to 03:04:909 (1,2,3) - in terms of their pattern and rhythm,
    
    well the music actually provides different things. I suggest to change the rhythm a bit like this: you maybe be right, but i'm right too. There are 3 identical vocal sounds there, and so each should be represented the same way.
    
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11. 03:26:016 - there is a pretty strong beat here(vocals too). I notice that you intend to increase the difficulty in the last kiai I've decided to break following instruments there, however i think its hard enough. I made these jumps quite big already.
    
    by making the rhythm denser. Therefore, adding a circle here 03:26:016 would make a pretty good contrast to your jumps
    
    in the first and second kiai (for example: 01:06:837 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) -)
12. 03:18:302 - ^

[Hard]

1. 01:21:409 (5,1) - imperfect blanket
2. 02:15:623 - miss a note here? nah, i wanted to emphasize that part.
3. 02:23:337 (2,1) - the distance here is a little too big imo.

[Normal]

1. 00:23:123 (2,3) - ds is slightly broken here
2. 02:38:552 (3,4) - ^
3. 02:58:052 (3,1) - ^
4. 02:15:409 (1,2) - the distance is too big here

[Easy]

1. 01:11:766 (3,5) - blanket
2. 03:36:837 (2,3) - ^

Nice map

Good Luck!!

Regraz wrote:

Here I am~ A simple mod

[Insane]
00:06:837 (1,2,3) - Hmm I guess you can polish them. Make a slider first and rotate it 120 degree as the second slider, and 240 degree as the third. They would be perfect.
00:20:873 (2,3) - Add a note at the red-line ah, i feel 3/4 rhythms fit more better here.
00:35:766 (6,7,1,2,3,4,5) - Use larger DS here. Since your DS at other sections are not as small as this part.
00:47:980 (1,2,3,4) - Try this: http://puu.sh/j4Bjg/17cf9be878.jpg So that there will be a jump at 00:48:837 (4) - to emphasize the music. no, i want a good transition.
00:53:980 (4) - Though this is nazi but I'd like to point it out because this blanket is really off and seems not visually appealing in gameplay.
01:13:266 (1,1,2,1,1,2,3) - 02:21:837 (1,1,2,1,1,2,3) - 02:35:980 (1,1,2,1,2) - 03:18:409 (1,1,2,1,1,2,3) - 03:32:552 (1,1,2,1,2) - NC settings here a little messy.
01:30:409 (8) - NC? nah, it will ruin consistency
01:49:695 (1,2) - just think the DS is too large. The music is smooth here and using such large DS seems not appropriate. Moreover it also does not match with other sections.
03:03:623 (2,4,6) - make them in a straight line. Same at 03:03:409 (1,3,5) -
03:08:552 (8,1) - Swap NC?

Very nice song! Good Luck!