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Miwa gaku - Hiza makura de sugo su houkago

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YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
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YoshinoSakura
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2013年11月10日星期日 at 17:41:14

Artist: Miwa gaku
Title: Hiza makura de sugo su houkago
Source: ヨスガノソラ
BPM: 77
Filesize: 2421kb
Play Time: 02:43
Difficulties Available:
  1. Hard (3.94 stars, 238 notes)
  2. wkyik's Normal (2.19 stars, 169 notes)
Download: Miwa gaku - Hiza makura de sugo su houkago
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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Oh shit why I can have at most 3 pending maps only?
Normal - Done by ugly kawaiwkyik
Hard - Done by me
Hope to rank soon
Last edited by YoshinoSakura , edited 4 times in total.
Koiyuki
2,531 posts
Joined March 2013
Koiyuki


From my queue of Normal Mod

[General]
  1. 啊可口美味的2kd！
  2. 至少人名要首字母大写吧？标题确定不用大写么？
  3. 静音滑条好吗！拖slider的声音难听死了。

[柚子]
  1. 建议去掉所有finish音效，不适合这歌，改whistle
  2. 00:22:579 (1) - spin也要加NC，后面的spin一样
  3. 00:27:644 (5,1) - 没包好
  4. 00:33:878 (3) - 这3没必要去包前面的1，因为这时候1已经消失了，还不如让尾巴被后面的00:34:657 (1) - 包住，把00:34:657 (1) - 调整下
  5. 01:20:232 (3,1) - 高度貌似贴血条了
  6. 最后那段复制前面的对吧……跟前面一样的地方就看上面的改吧

[615]
  1. 00:01:930 (3) - sorry,5%的静音滑条unrankable，滑条尾可能还可以rank但滑条头一定不能静音，后面同样的地方请一起改掉，谢谢合作，还有5%的Note也一样，请改掉，请改掉，请务必改掉，很重要所以我重复了很多次，很多次很多次。为什么有些明显有音的你还有用5%？想被bat喷么？
  2. 00:38:943 (3) -
  3. 00:51:800 (4) - 这里明显俩音不建议一根滑条带过
  4. 01:43:219 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 看着有点乱
  5. 02:33:284 (2) - 删了，还有前面的个别三连我也建议删了，有BAT在我的那个图里面也讲过，这种图不适合overmap，没有明显三连的地方就不要三连，比如还有这里01:06:011 (2) - ，我就不一一指出了。Map according to the music

最后祝您身体健康
Rizia
3,114 posts
Joined January 2012
Rizia

[Minakami Yuki] wrote:

[柚子]
  1. 建议去掉所有finish音效，不适合这歌，改whistle
  2. 00:22:579 (1) - spin也要加NC，后面的spin一样
  3. 00:27:644 (5,1) - 没包好
  4. 00:33:878 (3) - 这3没必要去包前面的1，因为这时候1已经消失了，还不如让尾巴被后面的00:34:657 (1) - 包住，把00:34:657 (1) - 调整下
  5. 01:20:232 (3,1) - 高度貌似贴血条了
  6. 最后那段复制前面的对吧……跟前面一样的地方就看上面的改吧


最后祝您身体健康
全都改完了
osu file format v12

[General]
AudioFilename: BGM.mp3
AudioLeadIn: 0
PreviewTime: 109462
Countdown: 1
SampleSet: Soft
StackLeniency: 0.7
Mode: 0
LetterboxInBreaks: 1
WidescreenStoryboard: 1

[Editor]
Bookmarks: 120361,128154
DistanceSpacing: 1.1
BeatDivisor: 4
GridSize: 4

[Metadata]
Title:hiza makura de sugo su houkago
TitleUnicode:膝枕で過ごす放課後
Artist:miwa gaku
ArtistUnicode:三輪学
Creator:615915887
Version:wkyik's Normal
Source:ヨスガノソラ
Tags:
BeatmapID:319116
BeatmapSetID:123261

[Difficulty]
HPDrainRate:3
CircleSize:3
OverallDifficulty:3
ApproachRate:4
SliderMultiplier:1.5
SliderTickRate:1

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//Break Periods
//Storyboard Layer 0 (Background)
//Storyboard Layer 1 (Fail)
//Storyboard Layer 2 (Pass)
//Storyboard Layer 3 (Foreground)
//Storyboard Sound Samples
//Background Colour Transformations
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YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
Topic Starter
YoshinoSakura

[Minakami Yuki] wrote:



From my queue of Normal Mod

[General]
  1. 啊可口美味的2kd！
  2. 至少人名要首字母大写吧？标题确定不用大写么？
  3. 静音滑条好吗！拖slider的声音难听死了。为何没静音


[615]
  1. 00:01:930 (3) - sorry,5%的静音滑条unrankable，滑条尾可能还可以rank但滑条头一定不能静音，后面同样的地方请一起改掉，谢谢合作，还有5%的Note也一样，请改掉，请改掉，请务必改掉，很重要所以我重复了很多次，很多次很多次。为什么有些明显有音的你还有用5%？想被bat喷么？不想OAO
  2. 00:38:943 (3) -
  3. 00:51:800 (4) - 这里明显俩音不建议一根滑条带过？
  4. 01:43:219 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 看着有点乱一改
  5. 02:33:284 (2) - 删了，还有前面的个别三连我也建议删了，有BAT在我的那个图里面也讲过，这种图不适合overmap，没有明显三连的地方就不要三连，比如还有这里01:06:011 (2) - ，我就不一一指出了。Map according to the musicOK

最后祝您身体健康再见
Lust
osu! Alumni
2,667 posts
Joined January 2013
Lust
From my queueueueueueue~

[General]
  1. Find a better mp3, the one you have now is quite bad.
  2. No kiai time?
  3. Hitsounds, hitsounds, hitsounds
[Normal]
SPOILER

In a normal difficulty, keep the spacing equal throughout.
  1. 00:12:839 (1) - i would recommend moving this up under 00:11:281 (2) so that (2) covers it
  2. 00:22:190 (4) - this is definitely a no go in this kind of map and difficulty, what you have here is a relatively easier "normal", so I suggest you move (4) from underneath (3)'s sldier end to somewhere else
  3. 00:22:579 (1) - this spinner does not fit very well with the music, please map this out
  4. 00:25:696 - note here
  5. 00:44:008 (1,2,3,4) - does not fit with the music well at all, please remove and change to something similar to this
  6. 00:47:125 (1) - another long spinner that does not fit, remove and change, or put break
  7. 01:33:868 (1) - remove NC
  8. 01:44:777 (3) - newer players are not going to know to make more than one turn, split this up would be recommended
  9. 01:46:336 (1,1) - instead of these ugly double spinners, why not have a few calmer notes that hit those "pangs"?
Overall this difficulty needs work, the sliders are pretty though
[Hard]
  1. 00:10:891 - needs note here
  2. 00:22:190 (1) - same suggestion as in normal
  3. 00:25:307 (1,2,3,4) - ugly, please change up or move
  4. 00:44:787 (3) - do not need this type of slider here, split up and move on
  5. 00:53:349 (1) - same suggestion as in normal
  6. 02:15:556 (2,3,4,5) - before when you had this rhythm you stacked the triplet on top of the slider or did something similar to that, do so here to keep in uniform

In conclusion, I feel as this map is unfinished and needs work. Call me back down the line to see changes.
Good luck.
YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
Topic Starter
YoshinoSakura
Fixed some of it,thx
Komeiji Hatsu
Komeiji Hatsu
无妹恨穹不是妹~~有妹恨妹不是穹~~

[general]

线太少，虽然这个曲子不需要变速，不过多插几根改动音量还是很舒服的，尤其是柚子那个坑爹的normal，我检查了好几遍确认我下载的版本是不是最新的，特喵就两根线啊……还是红的

默认的hitsound不太好……http://pan.baidu.com/s/1ePaYv……LKs的东西，慢慢挑……

用可爱的颜色……那个亮度只有30的啥蓝快删掉

降点OD和HP吧……尤其是hard……这个曲子的意义应该是让人SS的！

减少笔直的滑条，尤其是长滑……这个曲子虽然单调但是很柔和，适合弧度5~20的滑条

减少部分折返和一些节奏明显的转盘，用转盘带过节奏是在节奏很复杂的时候

[normal]

00:08:943 (4,1) - 偷工减料……这个缝中间大了点，像00:27:644 (5,1) - 不就很好么

00:12:839 (1,3) - 弯掉长滑

00:22:190 (4) - （414,114）

00:34:657 (1) - 其实闲着没事用这样的东西没什么意义

00:38:943 (2,1,2) - 你要做easy还是normal……00:43:229 - 这里有个很明显的声音啊喂，而且曲子没有起伏，按键频率应该也固定

01:58:024 (4,1) - 还复制了0-0……锚点下的倒是真多

02:28:024 (2) - 扭曲的曲子才拉这样扭曲的滑条好吧……

02:48:284 - 转盘到这里

[hard]

结束时间跟normal统一一下

00:04:657 (2) - 贴着墙下来啊……换个朝向不

00:53:349 (1) - 用转盘意义不明，我觉得这里算曲子出彩的地方了，为什么不下note

01:22:959 (4) - 就一个直的太不合群了

01:50:621 (3,4,5,6) - 01:54:907 (5,6,7,8,1) - 这个曲子不应该有难度跳跃，01:51:011 (5,6) - 改成一个长滑……去掉01:55:102 (6,8) -

02:06:400 (3) - 去掉

02:12:829 (5) - （257,106）看着右上角的1.8舒服多了

02:43:219 (1) - good……

关于去掉note，也可以选择在前面重复的地方加入，也能保证没有难度跳跃，不过我觉得还是删了好
eniyan
107 posts
Joined September 2011
eniyan
Hi! From my queue!

[Wayik's Normal]

  1. 00:12:839 (1) - Spacing is not same.
  1. 00:18:683 (3) - ^
  1. 00:22:190 (4) - shouldn't stack it
  1. 00:58:024 (4,5) - ^
  1. 01:44:777 (3) - You should make a return once.It is difficult that there is a return more than twice in Normal dif.How about in this way?
    SS
[Hard]

AR+1

I felt that spacing was unified too much for the degree of difficulty of the most barrier.I think that you may make it hard a little more.
YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
Topic Starter
YoshinoSakura
这是最好音质了233，太好了会超出范围
Thanks for modding,fix some of it.
DreaM117er
1,594 posts
Joined September 2012
DreaM117er
From Queue~

Hard
打開吧
變成四星的話，有的地方要用Snap修正一下
其實說真的已經做得很好了，也不用修正很多

01:01:920 (5,1) - 距離，看大大要不要調
01:44:387 (4,8) - 要不要試著把這個放在最中間
01:55:102 (6) - 事實上這裡是沒有聲音的
02:00:751 (4,5) - 這裡感覺和]下一個滑條一樣比較好
02:03:284 (3) - 沒有聲音可以跟
02:06:400 (3) - ^
02:29:193 (4,5) - ^
02:43:219 (1) - 最後一個放Spinner好像比較好


wkyik's Normal
打開吧
00:22:190 (4) - 我不記得Normal可以藏在下面
00:51:800 (1) 到 01:48:089 (1) - 我喜歡這一段，做得很棒
02:14:388 (1) - 去掉finish，改用whistle

基本上沒有什麼問題了

加油吧，好圖
Atrue
osu! Alumni
1,017 posts
Joined July 2012
Atrue
Hello~
From my modding queue



[Notion]
This color means something you can either choose to fix or not to fix cause I prefer to do this.
This color means some suggestions.
And this color means some issue to fix I think.

[General]
Good map and a little suggestions here.
这图没啥写论文的。。曲子有点闷，有点想睡觉
[wkyik's Normal]
滑条whistle的声音额。。长滑条会很明显并且感觉不搭曲的。。
00:03:488 (1) - 真心不适合。。这种滑条
00:17:514 (2,3) - 联系不够，flow不顺
00:51:800 (1,2) - 不适合stack
01:21:400 (1) - 有点高？
01:40:102 (1,2,3,4,5) - 挤在一起，这里曲子还是很流动的
02:01:920 (1) - stack？
02:07:764 (3) - 音乐趋势向下为何反flow跑到这么远的上边？
02:14:388 (1) - finish 感觉没有必要



[Hard]
从大局上说，我感觉缺乏必要的梗。。既然曲子闷，那么在细微的可以出梗的地方要求会更高些，当今这图做的相当稳妥，太过中规中矩。
00:09:722 (1,2) - 啊，挑刺了，这个地方的梗不是特别特别合曲。。。尤其是滑条2的音比较低适合在下面不适合扬上来
00:18:683 (4) - 建个议，改成四分滑条，前边类似的音你用了四分滑条
00:20:242 (2,3) - 还是建个议，这个地方四分滑条有点缀余不如改成单点
00:50:242 (3) - 前边有个对称滑条，显得这个滑条跟前边联系不大
00:56:465 - 音已经出来了，转盘尾在这里结束不科学，建议转盘提前结束1/2这里加note
01:18:284 (1) - 突然冒出来的1/4节奏不适合曲子 说实在的这曲子适合空都不适合加1/4
01:40:102 (1,2,3) - 前边两个滑条关系大些，后面这个转向滑条不是太适合个前边组成一个梗
02:11:271 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 梗本身没问题，考虑这个梗出现在哪里比较好，因为从上一个点到这个1已经是换flow了，而我认为这不是换flow的好时机，同样，7到下一个part的1也是换flow，这里我认为可以stack的
02:39:323 (3,4) - 不适合对称并且flow还逆了
02:43:219 (1) - 酷爱教我拉滑条！！好漂亮！


That's my suggestions. Thanks for joining my queue.:) .
Rizia
3,114 posts
Joined January 2012
Rizia
about above five mod
i'm fixed some important
http://puu.sh/5dZs6.osu
YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
Topic Starter
YoshinoSakura
Fix something important我真的改了你想啥呢
小黄书真是越来越会写作文了，好评给一个
Atrue
osu! Alumni
1,017 posts
Joined July 2012
Atrue

615915887 wrote:

我真的改了你想啥呢
小黄书真是越来越会写作文了，好评给一个
诶嘿~
Chloe
1,160 posts
Joined April 2011
Chloe
here's your special ticket, hope it can help you~

[General]
  1. 音量有点高了 在我看来总体需要降5%-10%的样子，另外custom只挑了一个soft-sliderslide也太简单了.. 建议增加一些
  2. 排列有些乱，看的出是一张新手图，有一些想法，不过做的并不是很好。
[Hard]
  1. 00:01:540 (2,3) - 作为一个新人来说开着DS作图也是没什么问题 但是这里排列有一些问题 美观和FLOW 从美观上来讲 现在这种排列非常非常普通 可以说仅仅是放了个NOTE 只有节奏 根本算不上osu的mapping 如果是我来排列 结果可能就会变成这样 http://puu.sh/5iVg5.jpg 由于1/4长度滑条的头、尾和身体都和下一个滑条的开头非常近 打起来会比较舒服 然后后面00:01:540 (2,3,4) - 也可以用这样的梗 http://puu.sh/5iVhC.jpg
  2. 00:08:164 (3,4,5,6) - 排列方面依然是普通 不如00:08:164 (3,4,5) - 做成直线 因为00:08:943 (5,6) - 这里音乐开始变化了 这边转个弯再保持着DS到00:09:722 (1) - http://puu.sh/5iVrQ.jpg
  3. 00:14:397 (3,4) - 这边的节奏照我看来做成1/1的大滑条会更好
  4. 00:28:423 (1,2,3) - 现在的状态是3的尾巴和1的尾巴非常近 如果像 http://puu.sh/5iVzx.jpg 这样 会不会比较美观？
  5. 00:38:943 (3) - 这种滑条如果不是整张图都在用我建议取消 单个滑条看起来有点2
  6. 00:50:242 (3) - 形状不如之前那两根
  7. 00:51:800 (4,5) - 这边我也是建议改成一根1/1的滑条 从00:51:800 - 到 00:52:579 -
  8. 00:59:592 (1,2) - 其实就算开着DS你也可以把前面那根（4）首尾换一下 然后放完（1）之后再换回去 比如：http://puu.sh/5iVHi.jpg 现在这样看起来太近了 不是很美观 虽然实际上间距是一样
  9. 01:02:709 (1) - flow被破坏 整体设计也被破坏
  10. 01:06:216 (2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/5iVJK.jpg 这边3个点很明显没有组成一个正三角 改一下如何？
  11. 02:43:229 (1) - 从节奏来说比较糟糕

比较典型的新人善良图 想吐槽又无槽可吐 以上我指出的基本上都是全局性的通病 重复的地方我就不一一指出了. Good luck to your map <3.
YoshinoSakura
472 posts
Joined January 2011
Topic Starter
YoshinoSakura

Chloe wrote:

here's your special ticket, hope it can help you~

[General]
  1. 音量有点高了 在我看来总体需要降5%-10%的样子，另外custom只挑了一个soft-sliderslide也太简单了.. 建议增加一些
  2. 排列有些乱，看的出是一张新手图，有一些想法，不过做的并不是很好。
[Hard]
  1. 00:01:540 (2,3) - 作为一个新人来说开着DS作图也是没什么问题 但是这里排列有一些问题 美观和FLOW 从美观上来讲 现在这种排列非常非常普通 可以说仅仅是放了个NOTE 只有节奏 根本算不上osu的mapping 如果是我来排列 结果可能就会变成这样 http://puu.sh/5iVg5.jpg 由于1/4长度滑条的头、尾和身体都和下一个滑条的开头非常近 打起来会比较舒服 然后后面00:01:540 (2,3,4) - 也可以用这样的梗 http://puu.sh/5iVhC.jpg
  2. 00:08:164 (3,4,5,6) - 排列方面依然是普通 不如00:08:164 (3,4,5) - 做成直线 因为00:08:943 (5,6) - 这里音乐开始变化了 这边转个弯再保持着DS到00:09:722 (1) - http://puu.sh/5iVrQ.jpg
  3. 00:14:397 (3,4) - 这边的节奏照我看来做成1/1的大滑条会更好
  4. 00:28:423 (1,2,3) - 现在的状态是3的尾巴和1的尾巴非常近 如果像 http://puu.sh/5iVzx.jpg 这样 会不会比较美观？
  5. 00:38:943 (3) - 这种滑条如果不是整张图都在用我建议取消 单个滑条看起来有点2
  6. 00:50:242 (3) - 形状不如之前那两根
  7. 00:51:800 (4,5) - 这边我也是建议改成一根1/1的滑条 从00:51:800 - 到 00:52:579 -
  8. 00:59:592 (1,2) - 其实就算开着DS你也可以把前面那根（4）首尾换一下 然后放完（1）之后再换回去 比如：http://puu.sh/5iVHi.jpg 现在这样看起来太近了 不是很美观 虽然实际上间距是一样
  9. 01:02:709 (1) - flow被破坏 整体设计也被破坏
  10. 01:06:216 (2,3,4) - http://puu.sh/5iVJK.jpg 这边3个点很明显没有组成一个正三角 改一下如何？
  11. 02:43:229 (1) - 从节奏来说比较糟糕

比较典型的新人善良图 想吐槽又无槽可吐 以上我指出的基本上都是全局性的通病 重复的地方我就不一一指出了. Good luck to your map <3.
谢mod，我就不一一回了，柑橘需要remap
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