1. Lunatic (5,05 stars, 1529 notes)

1. OD+1? lol i think this map is hard enough. so feels fit OD8

1. 00:31:184 (7,1) - hard to read... recommend simple rhythm. this.
   
2. 01:19:934 (1) - unnecessary NC?
3. 04:15:636 (5,6,1) - move to x120 y346? stack on head of 04:14:904 (3) -

1. 02:25:514 (7,8) - feels too far try this. stack on 02:26:794 (3) -
   
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handsome wrote:

lol hi m4m

Lunatic

1. increase OD added +0,5
2. nice sv
3. add audioleadin of 900~ 500 instead
4. 00:26:063 - duplicate green line ups, removed
5. Xinely
   
   1. 00:13:441 (2) - same ds? 1,17x and 1,21x is almost same but dunno looked a little bit weird lol, fixed
   2. 00:31:276 (1) - threw me off guard since spacing+bluetick end note~ i suggest turning into circle>1/4 slider. it still covers the prominent beats well and gives the stream odd number~ i have no idea for this one, it looks nice for me so let me keep
   3. 00:31:916 (1,2) - i prefer the rhythm here: 00:26:063 (1,2) - , more fitting. ok
   4. 01:18:563 (2) - make a nicer blanket of this slider~ hopefully better lol
   5. 01:19:934 (1) - remove nc? supposed for marking 1/4 jump
   6. 02:20:483 (1,1) - ^ same as above
   7. 02:21:672 (1,2) - distance here is very much like 3/4+1, consider spacing it out since 1/4 jump spacing is quite prevalent in this map moved the circle instead, okay much better to read ~
   8. 03:11:428 (1,2) - do that 1/4 slider x2 thing again along with the rest i guess. i suggest doing less of the current pattern and more patterns that place emphasis here 03:11:794 -. even a regular 5note stream would work, imo. sure
   9. 03:15:178 (1,2) - lol

   koreapenguin wrote:

   [notice]WARNING! xinelazy, PAN
   
   General
   

   1. decrease HP -1 it would be better in app map, also about AR when i have play then think AR9 is more better than 9.2 AR 9 and HP 6,5 since HP 6 looks like Hard lol
   2. how about use "Widescreen Support" ? > enabled < > disabled < test in 1920x1080 ok
   3. add audioleadin just 600 added in 500 :3

   Lunatic - Xinelazy
   

   1. 00:26:063 - WARNING~ WARNING~ you should check this http://puu.sh/g4L1G/c82fde8640.png fark, fixed lol
   2. 00:25:239 (1) - newcombo delete and add here 00:25:331 (2) - , ya make same like this 00:24:874 (2) - look this pic http://puu.sh/g4MdP/81336fec50.jpg there is have followpoint? right? then easier to read for 1/4 gap ok
   3. 00:31:276 (1) - i guess you should increase distance here, when i have play first time get confused at there. it's 1/2 gap or 1/4 gap but not bad just adjust distance little bit. like this http://puu.sh/g4Muv/530a8bbe29.jpg make more noticeable ok moved it :3
   4. 01:11:428 (1,2,3,4) - i think anti-jumps are doesn't fit that point imo. there are have strong sounds so make jumps or place, well it's just personal think don't mind let me keep, i feel the anti jumps are the most epic here before you go to 1/4 jumps
   5. 01:19:934 (1) - this newcombo is useless delete it, also there are not special enough to newcombo
   6. 03:15:178 (1,2) - same here, i passed this pattern but you must make noticeable or readable both removed
   7. 04:03:563 (4) - how about move other place? http://puu.sh/g4NfH/2fa6d260c3.jpg like this. http://puu.sh/g4Ngc/41842b79e5.jpg this shape is too ugly yep moved on rightward instead, i noticed when see testplay xD
   8. 04:26:063 (7,1) - swap newcombo there done

Euny wrote:

Xinely! your request! from your message<3

Xinely00:14:904 (3) - place this slider to x152y154 for overlap previous slider(00:13:806 (4)?00:19:111 (2,4) - fix blanket.00:26:611 (2,3,4,6) - i know it's your style, and it's already nice:D but, how about this? flows get curvy. kinda hard to catch (6) there, let me consider later

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03:13:166 (2) - move this x132y296 for better overlap?04:14:904 (3,1) - make perfect stack? it looks better!

iMage-- wrote:

yo Xinely and PAN

Lunatic

1. OD+1? lol i think this map is hard enough. so feels fit OD8 ok then the final is use OD8 xD

Xinely

1. 00:31:184 (7,1) - hard to read... recommend simple rhythm. this. fixed in penguin's mod by move the (1) instead
   
2. 01:19:934 (1) - unnecessary NC? yep baka me
3. 04:15:636 (5,6,1) - move to x120 y346? stack on head of 04:14:904 (3) - fixed on previous mod too XD

really good map. i can't find any issue ._.
good luck~

handsome wrote:

lol hi m4m

[*]P A N

1. 01:00:544 - 01:00:910 - map this so its a stream! i know but we dont need to map all sounds, i think pan prefer this as well
2. 01:49:020 (2,3) - swap rhythm to follow synths 01:49:020 - 01:49:294 - are the pitch so i can understand why pan map like this, let me keep
3. 01:54:050 (2) - i think something like this would be nice https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2797491 since 1 and 2 have same sounds 01:54:142 - i know this has sound but the loud musics are 01:53:867 - 01:53:959 - 01:54:050 - 01:54:233 - so i think i can understand why pan did like this
4. 01:58:258 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - now it sounds quite off, maybe try: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2797509 (see timeline) imo this rhythm works nicely, i guess let me keep as well
5. 03:45:819 (3,4,5) - 1/8 slider stream -w-
6. 03:49:477 (1) - i think the shape is much nicer if it was bent more, a la https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/2797540 ok

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that looks like all, goodluck!

472,292,178989,5,0,1:0:0:0:
404,273,179172,1,0,0:0:0:0:
456,224,179355,1,0,0:0:0:0:
491,312,179538,5,0,1:0:0:0:
375,280,179721,1,0,0:0:0:0:
464,196,179904,1,0,0:0:0:0:
511,332,180087,5,0,1:0:0:0:
349,287,180270,1,0,0:0:0:0:
473,170,180453,1,0,0:0:0:0:

pkhg wrote:

sorry for the delay :3/

[Lunatic]
Add "marathon" to tags? done
AiMod says there are missing files, idk what that means though http://puu.sh/ga3nh.png

00:26:428 (3) - Remove NC. It might be confusing since the player could think that it's from a new section and hit it later (because the ds) ok
00:29:721 (1) - NC seems unnecesary nc here to giving mark there are 1/4 jumps for next
00:31:184 (7,1) - Space them properly, around 0.8x. 1/4 jumps from circle to slider are anoying to play done
00:35:575 (4) - add nc here to be consistent with 00:33:380 (1) - 00:34:111 (1) - remove their NC instead
01:11:611 (1,1,1) - You can remove these NCs, looks better without them i have asked several testplays and they got trap to read as 1/1 when i didnt put NC so imo give NC would be easier here
01:53:136 (1) - Add NC for consistency (also i dont like when combo reaches 10) nc for stream which didnt increase spacing looks weird, i'd keep it now
02:20:483 (1,1) - There's no reason for these NCs mark 1/4? *let me keep
02:50:575 (7,8) - Ctrl+g, better rhythm :p changed to 2 circles instead
02:58:989 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Perfect triangle: fixed

472,292,178989,5,0,1:0:0:0:
404,273,179172,1,0,0:0:0:0:
456,224,179355,1,0,0:0:0:0:
491,312,179538,5,0,1:0:0:0:
375,280,179721,1,0,0:0:0:0:
464,196,179904,1,0,0:0:0:0:
511,332,180087,5,0,1:0:0:0:
349,287,180270,1,0,0:0:0:0:
473,170,180453,1,0,0:0:0:0:

03:18:014 (3,4,5) - Its weird. This 03:16:550 (4,5,6) - plays much better than the current one ok changed
03:51:672 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - You dont need all these NCs here, keeping these 03:51:672 (1,1) - works better im sure pan gives these NCs because the spacing
04:12:160 (2,3,4) - what about stacking these on 04:12:892 (1) - 's tail? also move this 04:12:526 (5) - 1 grid down for better blanket. personally i dont like something stack or overlap, let me keep first
04:57:526 (4) - NC for consistency
05:03:380 (4) - ^
05:04:843 (3) - ^ removed a NC that makes inconsistency instead
05:05:209 (5) - a triplet will be great here since the music on blue tick not really loud as white and redtick, i'd like to keep first, i'll consider when someone tells this one again

Hope it helps :3/

1. The current offset is too early, adding +12ms to the current one is more precise.

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  Xinely:

1. 00:07:038 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whistles in these combo's sound weird comparing to the previous ones.
2. 00:29:264 - Don't miss this beat ;-;
3. 01:09:050 (3,4) - The offbeat slider sounds really off here, it doesn't fit to the vocal. Ctrl+g?
4. 01:14:995 (3) - Same problem with offbeat slider like above, how about wapping with two circles instead.
5. 02:03:197 (5) - Annoying offbeat slider, switch with circles.
6. 03:12:892 (1,2) - ^, should delete 2 and make slider 1 a kickslider instead, or ministream. The important thing is that 03:13:258 - this beat should be played as well, not only followed.
7. 03:18:014 (3,4) - Fuse into a slider goes really well with the melody here.
8. 03:20:209 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - This looks somewhat squished, could make the curve rounder
9. 03:21:489 (4,5,6) - Suddenly stopping the motion at this point feel awkward imo, you should space them a little bit out:
   
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10. 04:00:636 (4) - Yes I admit, I hate offbeat sliders very much orz
11. 04:12:160 (2,3,4,5) - Stacking feels really awkward here, the should be some kind of motion to express the vocal on the next slider better.
12. 04:17:831 (3,4) - Same as 01:09:050 (3,4) -
13. 04:23:776 (3) - orz... I know it's for variation, but these sound really weird to play to me.
14. 04:59:995 - Don't miss this beat out.
15. 05:01:733 (5,6) - Angle is really awkward and makes the flow awkward, please smooth it:
    
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16. 05:04:934 (4) -05:16:642 (4) - Not sure why you starting a slider here since there's no notable beat at these blue ticks. It makes the rhythm feel really forced.
17. 05:08:319 (4,1,2) - Ctrl+g and reposition, this feels more natural to play and makes it consistent to 05:09:965 (1,2) -
18. 05:15:087 (4,5,6) - Spacing is weird here, shouldn't it be equal?
    
    PAN:
19. 00:40:331 (4) - I feel ending this on the red tick already goes much better with the vocal, as the syllable is already ending at 00:40:514 -
20. 00:42:526 (2,3) - Missing a lot of percussion beats here. They might be faint, but should be followed with kicksliders imo:
    
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21. 00:51:489 (2,3) - 00:57:343 (2,3) - Idk man, would be better you just ministream regularly, this feels a bit trolly.
22. 01:50:209 (1,2) - Shouldn't this be a slider like 01:48:745 (1) -?
23. 01:57:526 (1,2) - Same as above, should be like 01:56:063 (1) - .
24. 02:07:038 (1,2) - Align the slider 1 with 2. http://puu.sh/gg5E1/cfeb3d0568.jpg
25. 02:24:965 (3) - Switching these off with 2 circles feels better imo.
26. 02:26:794 (3,4) - How about jump here, it would fit in good to the vocal:
    
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27. 02:55:148 (7) - Having this directing to the next slider more would be better:
    
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28. 03:44:355 (4) - Finish.
29. 03:45:819 (1,2,3) - This might be a terrible suggestion, but the following follows the percussions much better:
    
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    Why this part sounds so sketchy ;-;
30. 03:50:117 (2) - Feels like unnecessary overmap.
31. 03:51:306 (3,4) - Same like 00:42:526 (2,3) -
32. 04:48:380 (2) - This extended slider feels unnecessary, not sure what you are following with it as the vocal is already finished at the previous red tick at 04:48:563 - . Should crop it to that point.

Pho wrote:

P A N's part is dead? :c

Putting this as placeholder hier, post will come within hours

Pho wrote:

P A N's part is dead? :c

Putting this as placeholder hier, post will come within hours

Bold: Fix quickly/unrankable stuff
Red: Highly recommend
Note: Almost all suggestions concerning offbeat sliders should be marked red, I kept them black for better readability.

[General]

1. The current offset is too early, adding +12ms to the current one is more precise. ok, my timing is bad lol

[Lunatic]
[list]
Xinely:
[*]00:07:038 (1,2,3,4,5) - Whistles in these combo's sound weird comparing to the previous ones. yeah but im hitsounding from the pattern actually. i dont have any better idea too
[*]00:29:264 - Don't miss this beat ;-; lol mapped
[*]01:09:050 (3,4) - The offbeat slider sounds really off here, it doesn't fit to the vocal. Ctrl+g? aaaa i map this according the pattern, imo they played well too
[*]01:14:995 (3) - Same problem with offbeat slider like above, how about wapping with two circles instead. ok
[*]02:03:197 (5) - Annoying offbeat slider, switch with circles. ok
[*]03:12:892 (1,2) - ^, should delete 2 and make slider 1 a kickslider instead, or ministream. The important thing is that 03:13:258 - this beat should be played as well, not only followed. ok
[*]03:18:014 (3,4) - Fuse into a slider goes really well with the melody here. i'd like to keep circles like this. i want to map triplet for 03:18:209 (4,5,6) - and imo circle works fine here
[*]03:20:209 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - This looks somewhat squished, could make the curve rounder curve the slider to downward instead
[*]03:21:489 (4,5,6) - Suddenly stopping the motion at this point feel awkward imo, you should space them a little bit out: ok

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[*]04:00:636 (4) - Yes I admit, I hate offbeat sliders very much orz aa wait i dont get what do you mean offbeat here o.o
[*]04:12:160 (2,3,4,5) - Stacking feels really awkward here, the should be some kind of motion to express the vocal on the next slider better. lol agree, i forgot to fix this
[*]04:17:831 (3,4) - Same as 01:09:050 (3,4) - same too :<
[*]04:23:776 (3) - orz... I know it's for variation, but these sound really weird to play to me. ok fixed
[*]04:59:995 - Don't miss this beat out. mapped
[*]05:01:733 (5,6) - Angle is really awkward and makes the flow awkward, please smooth it: i think i missplace this slider lol fixed

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[*]05:04:934 (4) -05:16:642 (4) - Not sure why you starting a slider here since there's no notable beat at these blue ticks. It makes the rhythm feel really forced. they were for variation but since you said like that, changed the rhythms
[*]05:08:319 (4,1,2) - Ctrl+g and reposition, this feels more natural to play and makes it consistent to 05:09:965 (1,2) - ok then lol
[*]05:15:087 (4,5,6) - Spacing is weird here, shouldn't it be equal? ups, fixed

Pho wrote:

[strike]P A N's part is dead? :c

PAN:
[*]00:40:331 (4) - I feel ending this on the red tick already goes much better with the vocal, as the syllable is already ending at 00:40:514 - it really ruin my pattern if i fix this.
[*]00:51:489 (2,3) - 00:57:343 (2,3) - Idk man, would be better you just ministream regularly, this feels a bit trolly. let's keep like this first >_> it's not a problem imo.
[*]01:50:209 (1,2) - Shouldn't this be a slider like 01:48:745 (1) -? it still same imo just change the pattern.
[*]01:57:526 (1,2) - Same as above, should be like 01:56:063 (1) - . same
[*]02:24:965 (3) - Switching these off with 2 circles feels better imo. keep it first, i love this
[*]03:45:819 (1,2,3) - This might be a terrible suggestion, but the following follows the percussions much better: that beat is too calm imo XD

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Why this part sounds so sketchy ;-;
[*]03:50:117 (2) - Feels like unnecessary overmap. it's not overmapped imo.
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Looks neat, I might come back later and check hitsounds and NCs. GL with this!

1. 00:31:288 (1) - This feels pretty weird being on the blue tick, maybe turn it into a 1/4 slider and add a circle?
2. 03:01:196 (1) - Make this a curved slider to carry a bit more flow from 03:00:922 (2,3,4) and to transition better into 03:01:562 (2) especially with the sv boost
3. 03:19:764 (5) - Try a ctrl+g here and moving it down a bit, the sound you map to here is slightly higher pitch than in 03:19:489 (4) so having them different in some way would be nice. It should also create more emphasis on 03:20:038 (6) which is even higher in pitch
4. 03:30:465 (1,2) - Make these parallel? Just looks neater imo
5. 03:51:684 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) -I don't think that many NC's is necessary, just NC for each pair that you increased spacing and volume on
6. 03:44:001 (3) - Curve this a bit for a better flow into the stream
7. 04:37:782 (1) - ^
8. 04:38:514 (1) - ^