1. Collab Insane (4.07 stars, 307 notes)
2. Hard (2.9 stars, 221 notes)
3. Normal (2.46 stars, 172 notes)
4. Platter (5.43 stars, 273 notes)
5. Rain (6.26 stars, 275 notes)

• This is your mapset. You're making a ctb diffs for your mapset so i suppose naming the diff with a hint of your username isn't really necessary. Just name it 'Basket' and 'Platter' will do, except if you're making a ctb guest diff for other person, then you can name the diff with a hint of your username

• uh for your difficulty setup, you better check this https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Normal currently OD and AR is too high. HP is moderately fine. CS should be 3 or 4. CS2 is for easy
  
  Generally i wouldn't suggest a change in slider velocity especially in easiest diff. After all you only change it from 1.0x to 1.2x , not a really big change.
  
  00:03:174 (1,2,3,4,5) - refrain yourself from stacking in easiest diff in mapset since this may cause confusion for beginners. You can make a pattern with this
  00:04:822 (6) - i suggest to end this slider at 00:05:152 - fits the lyrics more
  00:11:086 (1) - end this spinner at 00:14:712 - to give player (especially beginner)some time to prepare for clicking after massive spinning
  00:21:306 (5) - nc
  00:21:306 (5,6) - not really identical, you can ctrl+c and ctrl+v (5)'s shape
  00:24:273 (8,9) - also same as above, make them identical. it can be more appealing
  
  00:26:580 - so you change the distance snap into 0.8x . I suggest you to not to do that. This is the the easiest diff so you should make the distance snap consistent thoroughly in this diff
  
  00:28:558 (4) - nc
  00:35:152 (5) - i see no reason to lower the sliderslide's sound. in fact it makes it quite weird imo
  00:36:635 - kiai starts here 00:37:130 -
  00:36:635 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - suggestion about rhythm since this quite weird. Following the vocal is fine, but if it doesn't balanced with following the steady rhythm, it may be confusing
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:44:712 (3,4,5,6) - keep the same distance
  00:42:405 (1,2) - also rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:47:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:55:591 (3) - ini kenapa miring sendiri
  00:56:910 (1,2) - how about lowering their hitsounds then after that the hitsound will back to normal volume at 00:58:229 (1) -
  01:00:207 (3) - nc
  01:01:525 (4,5,6) - this triplet has different spacing with 01:02:844 (1,2,3) - and 01:04:163 (4,5,6) - . you should make them consistent
  01:05:481 (1) - rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  01:10:427 (4,1) - fill the gap between them
  01:14:383 (5) - nc
  01:15:042 (7,8) - don't stack them
  
  01:19:657 - it's a pity to put a break in here, when the song is actually getting at the good part. i strongly suggest to map this part. After all the song is only 1:40 mins, much alike to TV size ver. and most tv size map don't have break time even in their easiest diff
  
  01:30:207 (1,2) - you can blanket them http://puu.sh/3yq5G.jpg
  01:32:844 (3) - nc
  01:32:844 (3,4,5) - don't stack them

• we have done some irc mods yesterday. i don't know how to copy the chats but we've discussed something about
  
  1. Some distance problems
  2. Placement suggestions (blanket, symmetry, etc.)
  3. A little bit rhythm suggestions

• This is your mapset. You're making a ctb diffs for your mapset so i suppose naming the diff with a hint of your username isn't really necessary. Just name it 'Basket' and 'Platter' will do, except if you're making a ctb guest diff for other person, then you can name the diff with a hint of your username

• uh for your difficulty setup, you better check this https://osu.ppy.sh/wiki/Normal currently OD and AR is too high. HP is moderately fine. CS should be 3 or 4. CS2 is for easy
  
  Generally i wouldn't suggest a change in slider velocity especially in easiest diff. After all you only change it from 1.0x to 1.2x , not a really big change.
  
  00:03:174 (1,2,3,4,5) - refrain yourself from stacking in easiest diff in mapset since this may cause confusion for beginners. You can make a pattern with this
  00:04:822 (6) - i suggest to end this slider at 00:05:152 - fits the lyrics more
  00:11:086 (1) - end this spinner at 00:14:712 - to give player (especially beginner)some time to prepare for clicking after massive spinning
  00:21:306 (5) - nc
  00:21:306 (5,6) - not really identical, you can ctrl+c and ctrl+v (5)'s shape
  00:24:273 (8,9) - also same as above, make them identical. it can be more appealing
  
  00:26:580 - so you change the distance snap into 0.8x . I suggest you to not to do that. This is the the easiest diff so you should make the distance snap consistent thoroughly in this diff
  
  00:28:558 (4) - nc
  00:35:152 (5) - i see no reason to lower the sliderslide's sound. in fact it makes it quite weird imo
  00:36:635 - kiai starts here 00:37:130 -
  00:36:635 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - suggestion about rhythm since this quite weird. Following the vocal is fine, but if it doesn't balanced with following the steady rhythm, it may be confusing
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:44:712 (3,4,5,6) - keep the same distance
  00:42:405 (1,2) - also rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:47:679 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:55:591 (3) - ini kenapa miring sendiri
  00:56:910 (1,2) - how about lowering their hitsounds then after that the hitsound will back to normal volume at 00:58:229 (1) -
  01:00:207 (3) - nc
  01:01:525 (4,5,6) - this triplet has different spacing with 01:02:844 (1,2,3) - and 01:04:163 (4,5,6) - . you should make them consistent
  01:05:481 (1) - rhythm suggestion
  
  SPOILER

  
  01:10:427 (4,1) - fill the gap between them
  01:14:383 (5) - nc
  01:15:042 (7,8) - don't stack them
  
  01:19:657 - it's a pity to put a break in here, when the song is actually getting at the good part. i strongly suggest to map this part. After all the song is only 1:40 mins, much alike to TV size ver. and most tv size map don't have break time even in their easiest diff
  
  01:30:207 (1,2) - you can blanket them http://puu.sh/3yq5G.jpg
  01:32:844 (3) - nc
  01:32:844 (3,4,5) - don't stack them

• we have done some irc mods yesterday. i don't know how to copy the chats but we've discussed something about
  
  1. Some distance problems
  2. Placement suggestions (blanket, symmetry, etc.)
  3. A little bit rhythm suggestions

I hear many people said that if you do not make storyboard, you should disable the letterbox during breaks.

Different preview point

Hard: PreviewTime: 36635
Normal: PreviewTime: 37057

Different kiai time
please check it

What you should do first? I think you must fix the variable distance spacing in this level. As a common sense, this is unrankable issue if variable distance spacing existing in EASY or NORMAL map

Hitsound must be added at all map. If you map do not have hitsound, it will not be ranked.

Also, i prefer AR-1 and OD-1. I think AR6 and OD6 has a little bit high for normal. But this is just suggestion

00:04:492 (5,6) - make a blanket to make it more good looking like this:

00:05:481 - consider to add a note here
00:07:459 (2) - can move to 00:07:130 - . or add a note at 00:07:130 -
00:24:273 (4,5) - will you try to use other shape of slider?? I think a little bit boring.
00:28:558 (1) - I don't why you put nc here. suggest remove it and add nc at 00:29:218 (3) -
00:31:855 (6) - add nc and remove nc at 00:32:514 -
00:39:438 - to 00:40:427 - suggest the rhythm like this

00:44:712 (4,5,6,7) - obviously add 4 notes here is not suitable with the song. suggest change some to slider
00:48:998 (3,4,5,1,2,3) - make the slider be curved to make it not too boring
01:06:141 (3) - suggest reverse at 01:06:635 - and end at 01:07:130 - then add spinner at 01:07:459 - , end at 01:08:778 -
01:14:383 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - remap this part please and make more sliders~
01:30:207 (1,2) - nice. but move 01:31:525 (2) - to left by 1 tick will be more prefect
01:38:119 (1) - for long slider, will you consider make it more funny?

AR+1, OD+1, CS+1, HD+1 please~
00:02:844 - here can add a note. am i correct?
00:05:811 (1) - I test two times and I miss this slider two times. suggest add note at 00:05:481 - to fit the song
00:06:800 - ^
00:05:811 (1,2) - this type of slider is really strange. try to make them don't be too sharp

00:10:097 (6) - I don't suggest the change of spacing here. If you still want to keep it, add nc here 00:09:767 (5) - to notice player the change of spacing.
00:28:888 (1,2,3) - try this

00:31:196 (6) - strange slider again~
00:32:844 (1) - the spacing has a little far.
00:32:844 (1,2,3) - the spacing of them should be same
00:34:163 (5) - do you think this slider should end at 00:34:492 - ?? I'd think so.
00:39:767 - to 00:41:416 - suggest the rhythm like this

00:50:317 (6) - nc
01:06:635 (8) - a spinner will be more better
01:09:767 (2,3,4) - suggest make the spacing of them be same
01:16:690 - to 01:18:009 - try this:

01:22:295 (3,4) - same Y-axial please~
01:22:955 (5,6) - ^
01:23:614 (7,8,9) - ^
01:27:899 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - rhythm fit the song. but the pattern can be more better

AR+1, OD+1, CS+1, HD+1 please~ OK
00:02:844 - here can add a note. am i correct? ADDED
00:05:811 (1) - I test two times and I miss this slider two times. suggest add note at 00:05:481 - to fit the song OK
00:06:800 - ^OK
00:05:811 (1,2) - this type of slider is really strange. try to make them don't be too sharpCurved

00:10:097 (6) - I don't suggest the change of spacing here. If you still want to keep it, add nc here 00:09:767 (5) - to notice player the change of spacing.2nd suggestion
00:28:888 (1,2,3) - try this -> too easy

00:31:196 (6) - strange slider again~CHANGED
00:32:844 (1) - the spacing has a little far. FIXED?
00:32:844 (1,2,3) - the spacing of them should be same OK
00:34:163 (5) - do you think this slider should end at 00:34:492 - ?? I'd think so. FIXED
00:39:767 - to 00:41:416 - suggest the rhythm like this OK

00:50:317 (6) - nc OK
01:06:635 (8) - a spinner will be more better I don't think so, but it's considerable
01:09:767 (2,3,4) - suggest make the spacing of them be same OK
01:16:690 - to 01:18:009 - try this:OK

01:22:295 (3,4) - same Y-axial please~[b]OK
01:22:955 (5,6) - ^^
01:23:614 (7,8,9) - ^^
01:27:899 (4,5,6,7,8,9) - rhythm fit the song. but the pattern can be more betterCould I have an example?

1. The difficulty is good structured and most of the patterns make sense. Not bad at all. I suggest you anyway to make it harder on some parts, especially the Kiai was playing easier than the non-Kiai parts. It is recommendable to make the "more epic" part more explosive and remarkable than the others with a certain amount of jumps and dashes. I want to make you some suggestions in my mod which can help you.
2. 00:03:174 (1,2,3,4) - Ok why did you make the distances smaller here? It is much cooler to play if you start with a lower distance here and increase it, like here: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865096. It also fits very nice to the rhythm and gives this part a better symmetry.
3. 00:05:811 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - You were using this stream only once and it's probably more difficult than this one: 00:07:130 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - And you were using the second stream 3 consecutive times. This is quite boring. To make this more impressive you can think of repeating the first stream at 00:11:086 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - . Then you'd have it on the first and third part. That's more structured.
4. 00:14:712 (5) - Wow, I really do not advise you to put a fruit so strong on the border of the screen. Inasmuch as the Ryuuta downright knocks the wall of the screen. To avoid this you can select this section: 00:13:723 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - and just move it a few grids to the left.
5. 00:16:361 (2,3,4) - If you do a triplet like this you should not put circle 4 in the same line as circle 3. It is much more interesting if you try to keep a constant distance between all the fruits, as here: http://puu.sh/3C5uk.jpg. However, this part was quite boring to play because you were using two simple, vertical sliders here. Instead you can make it more interesting for the player. I was trying this here and it plays pretty well: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865122, just as example.
6. 00:19:822 (4,5) - , 00:22:295 (7,8) - , 00:24:932 (7,8) - , 00:30:207 (4,5) - and so on, and so on... Those parts are boring to play. If we listen clear to the rhythm on these parts we can see that the singer is raising her voice a lot here. To make this more interesting try to increase the distance a bit. You don't have to worry so much. Some easy jumps are also gladly seen in a Platter, it doesn't deserve the title "hard" for nothing.
7. 00:37:459 (5,6) - This jump makes a lot of sense here, nothing against it. But you can think of putting a similar jump at 00:38:613 (2,3) - either.
8. 00:42:240 (1,2,3,4,5) - Same counts for here. Those triplets are kinda boring since you were using a lot of them already in the non-Kiai part. Try something like this here: http://puu.sh/3C6eh.jpg. It fits well to the rhythm and is challenging but not too hard to overcome.
9. 00:44:053 (2) - That slider could also be a horicontal flip of 00:43:394 (1) - . Looks much better and more structured.
10. 00:46:361 (3,4,5,6,7) - Kinda boring that you kept all the time the same distance here. This here is really cool to play in a kiai, too: http://puu.sh/3C6tV.jpg. If the distance always becomes a bit higher that's more fun and more challenging to the player. Listen to the vocals here, it is fitting very well.
11. 01:00:207 (5) - That slider sounds strange with its rhythm. Shouldn't it start at 01:00:042 - already?
12. 01:15:042 (4,5,6,7) - Why making all these fruits in the same row? There could be a little jump from 6 to 7 for example. You might consider making this part a bit more difficult.
13. 01:19:657 (1,2,3) - It's definitely worthy to put a dash from 2 to 3. Just swap 2 and 3 and it's much better.
14. 01:20:976 (4) - You already put circles on the same rhythm part before and they fit much better here anyway. This is the ending of the song and it should give an epic feeling to the player. You should do it with 3 circles and jumpy as in the point I mentioned above.
15. What I described in the last two points also counts for the other parts which sound the same way. Try to make them more epic for the player. It should be a remarkable part here.
16. 01:32:844 (1,2,3) - Distances are too short here. Try this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865161
17. 01:39:108 (5,6,7) - This is not a really great ending for a song using three circles in a vertical grid. To create a much better ending feeling try again something like this: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865162. Even a HDash to the left can be made here, for example from 5 to 6 and then an easy movement to the right to reach 7 again.

1. First of all, I do like your mapping style. It is pretty clean and you really tried hard keeping a good flow here. Unfortunately this difficulty is not a typical Rain yet. Too less HDashes and it needs to be more difficult. I was FC'ing this after 2 tries and for a normal Rain I normally need 10-20 tries. I try to help you a bit in making this more difficult. I also do not understand why the Slider Velocity is just 1,0 here. That is pretty low for a Rain.
2. 00:14:547 (6,7) - There can be a jump on this part. Why are the fruits so extremely close here?
3. 00:15:536 (9,10) - Same counts for here. These vocals are shouting for a HDash. Consider to put one here. Here a suggestion for the whole section: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865185. Really... Sections like this needs jump, this is EXTRA important in a Rain because they need to be challenging.
4. 00:17:350 (3) - ctrl + G to keep the symmetry here. You could also reverse the selection of 00:16:031 (1) - since the distances will increase then and make this part at least a bit more challenging. This is a calm part, it doesn't have to be done anyway.
5. 00:22:624 (5,6,7) - Select all of them and ctrg + G. A small jump fits to the rhythm and a motionless stream as this one is just boring to play in a Rain.
6. 00:26:580 (1,2,3) - If you want to keep a constant distance here you'll need to ctrl+G 00:27:899 (3) -
7. 00:38:119 (7,8) - Make them completely straight, ctrl+G on slider 8 and increase the distance. That makes this part more interesting. Those "anti sliders" are commonly used in CtB difficulties: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/865202
8. 00:48:998 (3) - That should be the mirrored version of 00:48:009 (2) - .
9. 00:58:888 (3,4,5) - Parts as this can be much more jumpy. This is the Kiai and it was quite boring to play tbh, try to make it more challenging. There can be a dash from 4 to 5 for example.
10. 01:00:207 (1,2,3) - , 01:01:525 (5,6,7) - Distances here are definitely too low. Try to make the whole section jumpy and interesting for the player.
11. 01:09:108 (2) - Make it symmetrical to 01:08:449 (1) - . Just copy it there and flip it horicontally. That also increases the distance a bit.
12. 01:11:251 (6,7) - The distance here can be MUCH higher. A HDash is fitting here!
13. 01:13:394 (1,2,3,4) - To keep this section at least A BIT more challenging do the following: Put 01:14:053 (2) - where 01:14:383 (3) - starts, then select 01:15:042 (4) - and put it just where 01:13:394 (1) - started before. That makes this section a bit jumpier and doesn't destroy your symmetry.
14. Don't think I pointed out many things in my mod. I highly suggest you to work on the difficulty and work on yourself by making it harder. A few advices from my side: Play some other Rain's and compare it to your own difficulty. You'll recognize that yours is very easy compared to your difficulty. Here a few good examples: http://osu.ppy.sh/s/91485, http://osu.ppy.sh/s/90323. If you want to find good ideas of jumps interpret the song in your own voice. If you think there's a part sounding more epic than the others it probably deserves a jump or even a HDash. Right now it is definitely not a typical Rain and needs to be improved in its difficulty. But I think you can do it since you seem to have a slight idea of CtB mapping.

1. I suggest to add the following for tags
   gust
   Revo
2. it is better that Preview point is at 00:58:229, I think

1. I recommend to use DS(Distance Snap). I think 0.8x is suitable for this diff
2. For Easy(normal), it is better not to change Slider velocity
3. 00:03:174 (1,2,3,4,5) - Regular pentagonal formation is better like this
   
   SPOILER

   
   

   175,199,3174,1,4,0:0:0:0:
   199,275,3503,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   279,275,3833,1,2,0:0:0:0:
   304,199,4163,1,10,0:0:0:0:
   240,152,4492,1,2,0:0:0:0:

4. 01:09:438- add a note
5. 01:24:932 (1,2) - stack correctly.
   

1. 00:05:481 (1,2) - stack correctly
2. 00:08:449 (1,1) - ^
3. 00:11:086 (1,4) - ^
4. 00:55:262 (6,7) - I suggest to change the rhythm like the following
   
5. 01:08:778 (1) - end at 01:09:438

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• GENERAL
  literally confused with the distance because you changed it a lot in every part. this is really confusing. although you're being consistent with the numbers, the amount of the changes are too many it's not easy to read.
  For normal, try to use only one consistent distance snap and apply it thoroughly in this diff
  
  idk because the sv is kinda fast, ds 0.8x makes the diff looked too dense imo. i strongly suggest 1.0x if you want.
  
  00:56:910 - kinda weird when the kiai starts there. i still prefer your previous kiai pattern
  
  HITSOUND
  a friendly reminder that i'm giving you hitsound suggestion based on my taste. you followed the vocal too much, it makes hitsounding's kinda hard because it crash with the vocal
  
  00:03:503 (2,4) - better remove those whistle. only clap is fine
  00:04:822 (1) - remove clap at slider's end. add clap at slider's head and whistle at slider's end if you want to keep it consistent with the previous hitsound pattern
  
  SPOILER

  [img]http://puu.sh/3RPYE.jpg
  F = Finish
  W= Whistle
  C = Clap[/img]
  00:06:141 (1,3) - i assume you're trying to be consistent by adding finish to downbeat. but it doesn't match the song imo because we're still in the middle of the choral voices and those finishes are kinda ruining the mood. finish should be added at places where it fits the song or to accent the start of a new verse. like 00:05:481 (2) - 00:16:031 (1) - so i suggest to remove those finishes at slider's end
  i hope you follow the above. if you follow 00:06:141 (1,3) - also remove clap at slider's end and 00:07:459 (3) - remove clap at slider's head. the clap should be at 00:07:130 (2) - so it can be consistent with 00:05:811 (3) - also if you think the new hitsound pattern sounds boring, you can add whistle at 00:06:141 (1,3) - slider's head. i'm keeping a consistent pattern with 00:03:174 (1,2,3,4,5) - 's hitsound pattern btw
  00:08:449 (4) - clap and whistle doesn't suit together imo
  
  from 00:09:438 (7) - 00:26:580 - , lower the hitsound to 30%, the vocal is really quiet so 50% and 60% is too loud
  
  00:21:306 (1) - add finish at slider's head
  00:21:306 (1,2) - remove clap from slider's end
  00:22:624 (2) - add whistle at slider's head, same like 00:23:943 (3) -
  00:24:273 (4) - adding clap at slider's head seems nice
  00:26:580 (1) - add finish, it match 00:25:262 (5) - 's slider's end
  00:27:899 (3) - add whistle, so it'll be fit with 00:28:888 (5,1) -
  00:31:196 (3) - remove clap. only finish is fine
  00:31:855 (1) - remove whistle. same reason as above
  00:32:514 (2) - remove whistle
  00:34:492 (5) - add whistle
  00:37:789 (2) - remove finish and if you want, add whistle
  00:38:449 (3) - finish at red tick doesn't match. remove it
  00:41:580 (7) - remove finish. finish should be at 00:41:745 (8) -
  00:42:405 (1) - add finish at slider's head. remove finish at slider's end and add whistle at slider's end if you want
  00:42:405 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - where's the clap
  00:46:361 (6) - add finish at slider's end if you want. if you follow, add finish at 00:47:679 (1) - and remove whistle
  
  
  00:47:185 - why the hitsound is suddenly quiet here. i mean, from this part, it's relatively the same with 00:36:635 - , so the hitsound should be the same volume
  
  00:52:954 (1) - add finish at slider's head
  00:58:229 (1) - add finish and remove whistle
  00:58:558 (2) - adding clap at both ends fits the song more
  01:00:042 (1) - add whistle at slider's end
  01:01:855 (3,2,5) - remove finish
  01:01:855 (3) - add clap. if you follow, 01:02:185 (4) - remove clap and add whistle. 01:02:844 (1) - remove clap and add whistle. 01:03:174 (2) - add clap. 01:04:492 (5) - add clap. 01:04:822 (6) - add whistle. it'll make a better consistent pattern
  01:07:459 (1) - add finish
  
  from 01:09:438 - , lower the hitsound a bit
  
  01:09:438 (1) - add whistle if you want
  01:09:767 (2) - add clap at slider's head and whistle at slider's end seems nice
  01:12:075 (6,7) - why this lack hitsound. if you want, add claps at 01:13:064 (7) - both ends. it match the song
  01:14:053 (8) - switch clap with finish
  01:19:657 (1) - add clap at slider's head and slider's end. remove finish at slider's end
  01:20:976 (2) - remove finish at slider's end and add clap
  01:22:295 (3) - switch whistle with clap. add whistle at reverse arrow
  01:23:613 (5) - ^
  01:23:284 (4) - switch whistle with clap
  01:27:569 (1,3,2) - add claps. if you follow, 01:27:569 (1) - remove finish. 01:27:899 (2) - remove clap. 01:28:558 (1) - remove finish and add whistle. 01:28:888 (2) - remove whistle
  01:30:207 (1) - add finish at slider's head
  01:35:481 (1) - ^
  01:32:185 (3) - add finish, it match the previous slider's end
  01:32:844 (1,3,5,7) - should be finish only
  01:33:174 (2,4,6) - whistle only
  01:35:481 (1) - finish at slider's head
  
  you didn't use any clap since 01:30:207 - to 01:36:141 - and then suddenly 01:36:800 (2,4) - these have claps
  
  COMBO
  00:04:822 (1,2) - switch nc because 00:05:481 (2) - is the downbeat and where the actual music started. if you follow, then remove nc 00:06:141 (1) - and nc at 00:08:449 (4) -
  00:23:943 (3) - nc
  00:28:888 (5,1) - switch nc, the downbeat is at (5)
  00:34:492 (5) - nc
  00:39:438 (4) - ^ , try to nc every two downbeat / one downbeat
  00:44:712 (4) - ^
  00:50:317 (4) - ^
  01:12:075 (6) - ^
  
  etc
  00:03:174 (1,2,3,4,5) - rotate by -1 and you'll get a balanced flower. sweet
  00:10:756 - add a note here to keep a steady rhythm. although you're following the vocal, but it's kinda empty when you don't add a note there
  00:06:141 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - why do you change the ds into 0.5x? this is really confusing, because the previous ds is 0.8x, so i suggest to use 0.8x at this part
  00:11:086 (1) - end this spinner at 00:15:372 - seems better. the current one is too early
  00:19:657 (4,1) - the flow is kinda bad, since this is normal, i suggest to make the flow better
  
  SPOILER

  
  00:25:262 (5) - lower this and make it in the same level with 00:24:273 (4) -
  00:29:877 (2,3) - distance error. ds properly
  00:33:833 (4,5) - too close. ds properly
  00:36:635 (1) - this is really hard to read. you're following the vocal, but most of the previous pattern are consistent at the white tick, and suddenly this starts at red tick
  00:39:767 (5,6) - don't change the ds at the middle of this part.
  00:42:405 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - use one distance snap and make it consistent for this part
  00:47:679 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^
  01:00:042 (1) - same as 00:36:635 (1) -
  01:11:086 (3,4,5) - i suggest to make this a reversed slider
  01:31:196 (2) - ctrl+g then place 01:32:185 (3) - somewhere else

• [Hard]
  
  GENERAL
  agak aneh pas di hard kamu kasih circle di downbeat 00:02:844 - sedangkan di normal nggak. lebih bagus kalo normal dan hard awalannya sama. walaupun normal ngikutin vokal, tapi 00:02:844 - itu awal mulai lagunya. jelas2 ada beat di 00:02:844 - . mending di normal ditambahin circle di 00:02:844 -
  
  HITSOUND
  00:05:811 (2) - whistle di awalan slider kayak 00:07:130 (4) -
  00:06:800 (3) - remove whistle
  00:07:130 (4) - remove finish di akhiran slider. itu bukan downbeat, dan pattern-nya pecah
  00:10:427 (3) - 00:11:086 (1,3,4,6) - remove finish. same reason ^ . terserah mau diganti whistle atau clap
  00:15:042 (5) - whistle, same pattern with 00:14:053 (2,3) -
  00:16:031 (1) - remove finish di akhiran slider
  00:17:350 (3) - remove finish di awalan slider
  00:19:987 (4) - lebih enak kalo finish di akhiran slider diganti clap
  00:22:624 (3) - add clap. tadi ada clap di 00:21:306 - , biar sinkron
  00:25:921 (1) - remove whistle and add finish. itu awal verse baru
  
  00:26:580 - mulai dari sini volumenya terlalu keras, padahal vokalnya volumenya sama rendahnya dengan yg sebelumnya. mending yg disini volumenya tetep 50%
  
  00:32:185 (1,2) - mending remove finish
  00:33:174 - 00:34:492 - add finish
  00:37:130 - remove clap dan whistle. ganti finish
  00:37:459 (2,3) - remove finish. terlalu berlebihan
  00:41:086 - remove clap. ganti finish
  00:41:580 (7,8) - remove finish. ganti whistle kalo mau
  00:46:361 - remove clap. add finish
  00:49:987 (4,5) - remove finish. terlalu berlebihan
  00:49:987 (4) - clap
  00:50:646 (2) - remove whistle. ganti clap
  00:51:306 (5) - remove finish. ganti clap
  00:52:954 (1) - finish di awalan slider
  00:54:273 (4) - remove whistle. ganti finish
  00:54:767 (6) - remove finish
  00:55:591 (9) - hitsoundnya mana
  00:56:910 (10) - remove clap. ganti finish
  00:58:229 (1) - finish di awalan slider
  00:59:218 (2) - clap di awalan slider
  01:00:207 (3,6) - remove finish
  01:03:174 (2) - remove whistle. ganti clap
  01:04:163 - 01:04:492 - remove finish
  01:04:492 - clap
  01:05:811 (6) - remove whistle
  01:06:141 (7) - remove clap. ganti finish
  01:06:635 - remove finish
  01:08:778 (1) - remove finish di akhiran slider. tambahin di awalan
  01:09:767 (2,3) - remove finish
  01:09:767 (2) - clap
  01:10:756 - remove finish. add finish di 01:10:097 -
  01:11:086 (1) - clap
  01:11:745 - ^
  01:12:405 (5) - remove whistle
  01:19:657 - finish
  01:22:295 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - mana clapnya
  01:27:569 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - ^
  
  
  COMBO
  00:25:921 (1) - remove nc, ini masih bagian dari 00:23:613 (1,2,3,4,5) -
  00:26:580 (3) - nc
  00:38:119 (1) - remove nc, masih bagian dari pattern 00:36:635 (1,2,3) -
  00:39:438 (3) - nc
  
  etc
  00:08:119 - 00:10:756 - 00:12:075 - 00:13:394 - add a note. walaupun kamu ngikutin vokal, alasannya sama kayak diatas
  00:15:372 (6,7) - stack it more properly. or is this intentional
  00:46:031 - add a note. ada beat disini. ini hard. ngikutin vokal mlulu terlalu monoton
  00:59:877 - 01:01:196 - 01:02:514 - 01:03:833 - 01:05:152 - add a note. alasan sama ^
  01:13:064 - 01:14:383 - 01:16:361 - ^
  01:20:646 - 01:21:965 - 01:24:602 - 01:25:921 - 01:27:240 - ^
  01:35:152 - 01:36:470 - 01:37:789 - ^

general：
please write the mapper to tag who map to you a GD/Collab. if the "collab" difficulty you map it alone.please rename to "insane". FIXED

diff:Normal
try to fix the compose of problem what AiMod reported.(select "check distance snap" in aimod)
i feel the slider is a little fast I used DS when I map, so I think it's not really a problem, thanks
00:07:130 (1) - remove NC？I think I don't need to. Well, I follow the vocal when use NC
00:41:580 (4,5) - change to a slider? i think here is hard for newbie. FIXED
01:11:086 (1,2,3) - ^ I want to keep it, my style(?) *runs
diff:Hard
00:36:141 (3,1) - too far? FIXED

diff:Collab
OK

diff:Platter
00:11:333 (4,5,6) - reverse them
00:12:652 (4,5,6) - ^
00:26:580 (2,3) - too hard to catch
00:42:734 (4,5) - ^
01:02:844 (1,2) - ^
You need to practice, ganbatte >w<, I want to keep them as is for now

-S c a r l e t- wrote:

Hi~ m4m from your queue~

[General]

I believe the title should be this "Haruka Shimotsuki + Revo - schwarzweiß ~Worlds Connected Beyond the Mist~" and remove Revo from your tags. Revo is also one of the composer for this song. (I'm not sure whether it should be "Haruka Shimotsuki feat. Revo" or what I stated though. Need BATs for this)
For Japanese, it should be "霜月はるか†Revo - schwarzweiß ～霧の向こうに繋がる世界～"
You can add "Kiri no mukou ni tsunagaru sekai" in your tags
You probably need to add these people in your tags "Haruka Shimotsuki Shingo jake Saito Atsushi Hasegawa Kenichi Fujimoto Kana Strings Abenwald Choir Motoi Sakuraba Hiroshi Shibayama Tomonori Asakawa" because they're part of this song. They played the instruments in this song which I believe is significant. Up to you I guess?

Source: http://vgmdb.net/album/1788 I'll take the tags
and I think the romanised should not be changed, coz when I played the game in credit, it is written like that, plus ~Worlds Connected Beyond the Mist~ is a direct translation, I think. Umm... usually artist box is filled with the one who sings the song and tags is filled with something related to the song, people who contributed in that song(composer,arranger,lyricist,etc), and lastly people (not including us) who contributed diffs in your map, but an exception for vocaloid song (use the composer). I'll ask a BAT later. Safer is better ^,^

[Collab]

+1 HP for better spread. I suggest if you reduce the OD by 1 too.
Also, due to new difficulty naming rule, you have to change your diff to "Collab Insane"
00:03:833 (5,8) - Maybe NC these two? Even though stick with one combo is okay but NC will be better imo FIXED
00:04:822 (10) - Why not stack this with 00:03:503 (4) ? Looks much better the pattern. intentional, tehehee
00:05:481 - Add a circle here? If you do, add cymbal here too. It sounds nicer to me. The slight pause here feels weird. I will consider it
00:07:212 (1) - Why is this at blue tick? Move it to 00:07:130 FIXED (omigosh, just realized it)
00:08:449 (1,2) - Why whistle all of the sudden? Better if you keep it consistent by adding clap at 00:08:449 (1) I think I used it to initiate new verse
00:08:778 (4) - Shape this slider nicer maybe? http://puu.sh/7ZD0M.jpg FIXED
00:09:438 (5,6,7,8,9) - You sure about using streams here? I prefer if you use 1/2 slider like 00:09:932 (1,2) instead to add a diversity
00:10:756 - Add a circle here, it somehow keeps your map going. The pause here for Insane isn't really nice imo FIXED
00:11:745 (3,4) - Shape your slider nicer please~ http://puu.sh/7ZDQK.jpg FIXED
00:13:064 (3,4) - Same thing FIXED
00:15:372 (8,9,10) - Maybe spread this circles might be better IMO, stacked is good
00:20:317 (7) - NC here? Your combo is too long FIXED
00:20:976 (11) - Remove clap and maybe add cymbal instead? Additional clap here sounds weird FIXED
00:23:284 - Leaving this part empty is very weird for this song. I suggest either you change 00:23:119 (6) into 1/2 slider or add a circle instead. Umm, I follow the vocal
00:24:602 (4) - Remove clap. Too much claps in this part here which is noisy FIXED
00:24:932 (6) - Remove clap at the end of the slider. Same reason as ^ Add clap at 00:25:591 (8) slider head instead? I think this one is okay, coz it's at the end of verse, IMO
00:27:075 (2,4,5) - Remove claps. Too noisy when the music is actually soft. FIXED
00:28:394 (6) - Too cramp. Make a jump at this part. FIXED
00:28:558 (7) - You might wanna shape this slider nicer this is intentional
00:29:383 - Add circle? I don't think it match with vocal
00:29:547 (9,1,2,3,4) - too much 1/2 circle. try this? http://puu.sh/7ZFzg.jpg I have remapped this
00:31:855 (7) - Change this to 1/1 slider is better ^
00:32:514 - 00:33:998 - too much claps! Remove claps from (2,4,5,6) . Is really noisy fixed, removed only 6 coz 2,4,5 is inside the pattern
00:34:657 (8) - Why not change them to 1/2 circle instead? Following this part 00:35:317 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) intentional
00:38:119 (1) - Don't repeat too much. Use 2 1/2 sliders instead FIXED
00:40:427 (7,8,9) - Unnecessary claps FIXED
00:42:240 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Not sure whether you want or not, but for me this part has too much claps too FIXED
00:42:569 (2,3) - Blanket it nicer. http://puu.sh/7ZFZn.jpg FIXED
00:43:723 (5,6) - Same ^ FIXED
00:47:020 (4) - Missing clap? Add one here. FIXED
00:50:317 (9) - Change this to 1/2 slider please. The pause between 00:50:317 (9) - 00:50:811 (1) is too much FIXED
00:50:811 (1) - Add circle? already remapped
01:02:844 (3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Make it neater, the streams. and NC this part 01:03:339 (8) >> http://puu.sh/7ZGrX.jpg FIXED
01:03:998 (1,2,3) - Make better sliders > http://puu.sh/7ZGwW.jpg Yours is too curvy it's intentional

That's a lot of things I didn't point out later in the map. But sorry to say, you need to remap this map due to its messiness. You can try tidying up the map to make is nicer and more readable~

I won't be modding Hard and Normal. I can't even map them properly myself xD
Good luck~

Gray Veyron wrote:

[> General <]

Fine~


[> Normal <]

- The spacing you made is too big for Normal players, I suggest using 1.0x or 1.2x spacing for this. I think the normal players these days are more capable to play it
- OD and HP -1 I think it's fine as is
- I think you need to remove NCs on the second track of rhythm, like this rhythm. Since it's likely a fast song, this should be common on the ranked maps you've played. FIXED
00:09:438 (1,2,1) - Make a symmetry here, flow will be a little smoother than the current one. FIXED
00:13:723 (1,1) - This is likely unrankable, spinner should end a bit early, since it's a Normal diff, try reducing the spinner to 00:15:372 -. FIXED
00:18:339 (1) - The rhythm here sounds awkward when there is a downbeat like this, how about replacing it to two circles? FIXED
00:28:723 (1) - ^ It'll destroy the flow, IMO
00:31:196 (4) - Almost the same reason as above, but reduce the repeat and add a circle next to it. FIXED
00:32:679 (1) - Same as 00:18:339 (1) - It'll destroy the flow, IMO
00:33:833 (3,4) - Ctrl + G for better rhythm, if you did this, Swap NC with 00:34:822 (1) - and circle (3). It'll destroy the flow, IMO
00:40:097 (2,3,4,5,1,2) - I feel these notes are overmapped, Try following the vocals here. FIXED
00:51:635 (5,6) - Try making a blanket here, flow will be smoother. FIXED
00:58:229 - The Kiai time should start here, it's quite intense than the early part you've adjusted. I think the refrain starts here
01:02:844 (1) - Same as 00:31:196 (4) - I think I want to keep the flow
01:14:712 (1) - I wonder why you've added this long slider, what does this follow on the song track anyway? remove it and add notes. it's intended
01:20:976 (1) - Remove NC FIXED
01:21:965 (2,1) - Swap NC FIXED
- Well, i can't mod much here, because your mapping level is too low for me to mod, looks like you need a little work with NCs, rhythms, and spacings. Patterns and flows are okay, you just need to give more attention to the rhythms(Try reading this wiki to learn more about it). Also, Every new track you see, Add the NC there. Also, for the spacing, just don't extend the spacing big for players to play.


[> Hard <]

- HP -1 AR -2 OD -3 FIXED
- Mapping level is too low for me, and almost the same issues as the previous diff. As for now, I will focus on NCs and some pattern issues.
00:05:481 (6,1) - Swap NC FIXED
00:12:405 (4,5) - Make a symmetry here? FIXED
00:22:624 (4,5,6,1) - Instead of stacking, make something playable better than this one. FIXED
00:27:899 (4,1) - A little blanket is needed here.FIXED
00:31:855 (8,1) - Swap NC FIXED
00:36:635 (1,2) - ^ FIXED
00:39:438 (1,2) - ^ FIXED
00:42:240 (1,2) - ^ FIXED
00:47:185 (1,2,3,4) - Make something stylish here, like a Square/Diamond formation. it's intended
00:58:229 - Same reason as the previous diff, adjust the kiai time here. same as Normal
00:59:877 (1,2,3,4,5) - I don't understand why you've made this notes not following the rhythm on the song track, Try hearing the vocals here and add notes by following it. I follow the rhythm of the music
01:02:185 (9,1) - Swap NC FIXED
01:05:481 (1,2) - ^ FIXED
- Some flows are fine to me, but just a small work with the NCs and rhythm, That's all i can find in this diff.



Hmm... I'm sorry if my mod might piss you off on reworking your map again, but this is right for mappers to make their map greater and more perfect than their low level mapping, which can be aimed for rank. So try that by getting more ideas from recent ranked maps or read some mapping wiki(s) to learn more about mapping. Well, This is my little advice for you.

I hope to see this map improved and ranked in the future days! o3o/