KiyoshiX101 wrote:

[Normal]
00:54:452 - I don't see why is this Inherited Point there o: Since the next one changes from Normal to Soft, this one is not needed o:

KiyoshiX101 wrote:

[Normal]
00:54:452 - I don't see why is this Inherited Point there o: Since the next one changes from Normal to Soft, this one is not needed o: -> Fix

[Hard]
01:06:884 (1) - Place it at X:160 Y:304 for shape :3 -> Fix

[Another]
00:47:158 - Add a circle? Sounds bad with 2 beats only there -> No change
00:52:500 - ^ -> No change
00:57:637 (5,6,7,8,1) - Strack it like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/375401 ? -> Fix

[Comments]
Not much mods, I love the song and the maps <33 Also the Kiai time on Hyper was bigger challenge than the Another for me I hope it will get ranked asap :3 I'll give a star for it ;3 thanks lol

1. 00:15:308 (1) - Remove one repeat and CTRL+R? Then, move (2,3) 1/1 earlier plus:
2. 00:18:596 (x) - Add a note with new combo here (stacked with your pink slider's start)~
3. 00:26:815 (2) - (optional) Put in ~x:93 y:57 to continue with (1)'s arc angle? (you get more freedom to place (3) this way xD)
4. 00:28:459 (1,2,3) - (1) could be curved more naturally with this code imo >_<
   

   410,81,28459,6,0,B|486:120|506:209|471:292|387:316,1,300,4|8
   312,328,30103,2,0,B|260:316|236:268,1,100,0|8
   156,276,30925,2,0,B|148:224|176:180,1,100,0|8

5. 00:31:747 (1,2,3,4,5) - (optional) You can stack (5) to your previous slider's end by using a pentagon here, actually ._.
   
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6. 00:49:829 (2) - Perhaps stack this to your previous (4) to make it tidier? (arranging (3) won't be that hard though :3)
7. 00:56:199 (3) - Just a minor stuff... Put the second waypoint in ~x:229 y:311 and the endpoint in ~x:209 y:256 for a smoother curve?
8. 01:01:952 (2,1) - (optional) idk... I feel this pattern is fancier (:
   
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9. 01:06:267 (1,2,3) - Hmm, for this case, I think it would flow better if (1) is placed a bit more to the left, so the arc from your previous (2) can be emphasized~
10. 01:11:815 (2) - Put in ~x:344 y:137? (yes, you have few more space on your right xD)
11. 01:20:856 (6) - Not really sure about the finish here... There's no cymbal here on the song, imo removing the finish here can emphasize the surrounding two finishes (if you want to keep the finish you can try to lower the volume here though)
12. 01:22:294 (x) - Add note here with clap, clap blends really well before your long slider imo~ (also do this to next parts like this if you decided to change)
13. 01:23:938 (4,5) - Hmm, I prefer to put the whistles on (4)'s start, (5)'s start, and (5)'s end instead as the piano goes strong on those parts... (if you decided to change, do this to next parts like this)
14. 01:26:404 (1,2,3,4) - I think the angle is somewhat too sharp here... I prefer this arrangement, (3,4,1) flows very smooth this way~
    
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15. 01:32:568 (1,2,3,4) - (optional) Would be fancy imo if you added a zig-zag formation here... For example put (1) in ~x:263 y:343, (2) in ~x:243 y:265, and so on :3
16. 01:47:158 (5) - Same as before about the finish hitsound...
17. 02:13:664 (1) - Whistle/finish would be good for the ending here~

1. 00:15:308 (1) - Uhm, what does this inherit section do? It does the same with your previous red waypoint o.o
2. 00:20:240 (1,2,3) - Move to ~x:224 y:272 - due to stacking's nature, this is required to get your next (5) stacked correctly~
3. 00:22:705 (3,4,5,6) - (optional) Hmm, I prefer a square jump rather than diamond here xD
4. 00:27:637 (5) - I can clearly hear a triple here from the song... Perhaps set a triple here and use a triangle formation like this?
   
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5. 00:33:390 (1) - Minor stuff... But I personally think curving this downward instead flows better with your (7,8) :3
6. 00:40:172 (2,3,4) - Hmm, (somewhat) clustering too much here... I prefer to put these more to the bottom-left (~x:257 y:375) to reduce the cluster~
7. 00:43:253 (6,7) - Hmm, the long delay between these two is quite unattractive imo... I prefer a 1/1 slider instead (yes, it'll encircle your next (1)'s end as well :3)
   
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8. 00:46:541 (6) - The clap on slider's repeat here, is it intentional? (also I prefer a triangle jump with three circles here to avoid overlap with (2))
9. 00:50:651 (9) - (optional) To follow the synth more, perhaps place this 1/2 earlier and stack this to your previous (1)'s start (to form a windmill pattern)?
10. 01:00:103 (2) - Put it lower (~:290 y:205) so (3,1,2) forms a straight line?
11. 01:06:267 (1,2,3) - Just a small suggestion here - as your previous (3) to (1) is a jump already, would be nice imo to create a small jump here as well (by dragging (2,3) further) to keep the feel~
12. 01:15:205 (3) - (optional) Rotate it ~30° selection centre so (2,3) will be mirrored?
13. 01:20:651 (6,7,8) - Arrange like this, to create a circular movement around here? (you might want to do the same thing to (2,3,4) :3
    
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14. 01:27:123 (8,10) - Just a suggestion here, for fancier rhythm perhaps put whistle on (8) and change the clap on (10) to whistle? (if you decide to change, apply to next parts like this)
15. 01:34:212 (1) - No finish on slider's start here? The cymbals are strong enough imo o.o
16. 01:47:979 (4) - (optional) Adding a very slight curve downward for accent won't hurt imo (:
17. 01:49:007 (1) - Curve this more by dragging the endpoint upper (don't drag the midpoint) would emphasize the arc imo~
18. 02:06:061 (2) - Another minor stuff here, is it intentional to put the waypoint that high? Dragging the midpoint few grids down (to make the slider more symmetrical) won't hurt imo~
19. 02:13:664 (x) - Hmm, I prefer to end the diff here with a jump from your (6) - if you decided to use a whistle here, make sure to remove the whistle on (6)'s end to emphasize the whistle here~

1. 00:17:877 (5,6) - Hmm, I prefer to make these two encircle (8) as well, will be much tidier imo~
2. 00:22:501 (4) - Stack to your previous (6) to form a fan pattern between (1,2,3,4) here? And if you decided to do this:
3. 00:22:911 (6) - Move to ~x:239 y:301 to make a fan pattern on (5,6,7,8) as well (try it on editor's autoplay, it looks fancy~)
4. 00:26:815 (1,2,3,4,5) - (optional) I think it would be fancier if you can stack (3) to your previous brown note like this: (you can also put (2) higher with this formation, though)
   
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5. 00:32:568 (5,6) - Put it more to the bottom-left? Would flow better imo if (4,5,7) is arranged in an arc instead of straight line >_<
6. 00:40:788 (7) - (optional) About this, I prefer to put the whistle on (6) and (8) instead (to follow the drum sequence) - this also sounds good with your claps on (10) and (12) :3
7. 00:44:486 (6,7,8,9,1) - Here, you can encircle (2) with this formation, actually xD
   
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8. 00:56:815 (2,3) - (optional) Move both to ~x:42 y:349? I think a bigger gap between your two pink sliders here plays better~
9. 01:07:911 (1) - No finish on slider's start here? The song's cymbal is strong enough imo ._.
10. 01:08:322 (2,3,4,5) - Perhaps arrange like this (especially for (5))? This way, (5,1) will form a beautiful continuous arc~
    
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11. 01:13:254 (2) - On patterns like this, I prefer to put (2) lower than (8)'s end... Not a must, though :3
12. 01:19:829 (2,3) - I personally think the angle you're trying to take is too narrow here... Perhaps put (2)'s end more to the left and vice-versa for (3)?
13. 01:25:171 (5,6,7,8) - (optional) Because of (1)'s shape, would be really fancy to create an arc upward for this stream imo~
14. 01:34:212 (1) - Again, no finish on slider's start here? Blends well with your cymbal :3
15. 01:47:363 (1) - Minor stuff, but try to put the endpoint in x:107 y:227 to get a smoother curve~
16. 01:48:493 (6) - It's not that hard to make this encircle (2), really xD
17. 01:52:808 (6,7,8,9) - Not sure with this stream shape... I think a circular movement plays/flows a lot better here:
    
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18. 02:05:650 (4,7) - (optional) Place (4) more to the left and (7) more to the right, so (3,4,5) and (6,7,8) both has a slight arc to the center?
19. 02:13:664 (9) - Same as Hyper :3

Niva wrote:

[General]

-> Hmm, is this song really from BMS? (as far as I know) SHIKI's BMS songs from the album "Trancer Doll's" are only Jade Star, Lapis, and Pure Ruby ._. >oh..well..yup your right
-> Why lead-in time 1000? The map starts way after >_< >fix
-> Try PreviewTime: 80959 (1/4 before) for a more accurate preview time (: >fix

[Hyper]

1. 00:15:308 (1) - Uhm, what does this inherit section do? It does the same with your previous red waypoint o.o > fix
2. 00:20:240 (1,2,3) - Move to ~x:224 y:272 - due to stacking's nature, this is required to get your next (5) stacked correctly~ > no change
3. 00:22:705 (3,4,5,6) - (optional) Hmm, I prefer a square jump rather than diamond here xD > no change
4. 00:27:637 (5) - I can clearly hear a triple here from the song... Perhaps set a triple here and use a triangle formation like this? > no change
5. 00:33:390 (1) - Minor stuff... But I personally think curving this downward instead flows better with your (7,8) :3 > fix
6. 00:40:172 (2,3,4) - Hmm, (somewhat) clustering too much here... I prefer to put these more to the bottom-left (~x:257 y:375) to reduce the cluster~ > no change
7. 00:43:253 (6,7) - Hmm, the long delay between these two is quite unattractive imo... I prefer a 1/1 slider instead (yes, it'll encircle your next (1)'s end as well :3) > no change
8. 00:46:541 (6) - The clap on slider's repeat here, is it intentional? (also I prefer a triangle jump with three circles here to avoid overlap with (2)) > no change
9. 00:50:651 (9) - (optional) To follow the synth more, perhaps place this 1/2 earlier and stack this to your previous (1)'s start (to form a windmill pattern)? > no change
10. 01:00:103 (2) - Put it lower (~:290 y:205) so (3,1,2) forms a straight line? > fix
11. 01:06:267 (1,2,3) - Just a small suggestion here - as your previous (3) to (1) is a jump already, would be nice imo to create a small jump here as well (by dragging (2,3) further) to keep the feel~ > no change
12. 01:15:205 (3) - (optional) Rotate it ~30° selection centre so (2,3) will be mirrored? > fix
13. 01:20:651 (6,7,8) - Arrange like this, to create a circular movement around here? (you might want to do the same thing to (2,3,4) :3 > fix
14. 01:27:123 (8,10) - Just a suggestion here, for fancier rhythm perhaps put whistle on (8) and change the clap on (10) to whistle? (if you decide to change, apply to next parts like this) > make a different change
15. 01:34:212 (1) - No finish on slider's start here? The cymbals are strong enough imo o.o > fix
16. 01:47:979 (4) - (optional) Adding a very slight curve downward for accent won't hurt imo (: > no change
17. 01:49:007 (1) - Curve this more by dragging the endpoint upper (don't drag the midpoint) would emphasize the arc imo~ > fix
18. 02:06:061 (2) - Another minor stuff here, is it intentional to put the waypoint that high? Dragging the midpoint few grids down (to make the slider more symmetrical) won't hurt imo~ > fix
19. 02:13:664 (x) - Hmm, I prefer to end the diff here with a jump from your (6) - if you decided to use a whistle here, make sure to remove the whistle on (6)'s end to emphasize the whistle here~ > no change

[Another]

1. 00:17:877 (5,6) - Hmm, I prefer to make these two encircle (8) as well, will be much tidier imo~ > no change
2. 00:22:501 (4) - Stack to your previous (6) to form a fan pattern between (1,2,3,4) here? And if you decided to do this: > no change
3. 00:22:911 (6) - Move to ~x:239 y:301 to make a fan pattern on (5,6,7,8) as well (try it on editor's autoplay, it looks fancy~) > no change
4. 00:26:815 (1,2,3,4,5) - (optional) I think it would be fancier if you can stack (3) to your previous brown note like this: (you can also put (2) higher with this formation, though) > no change
5. 00:32:568 (5,6) - Put it more to the bottom-left? Would flow better imo if (4,5,7) is arranged in an arc instead of straight line >_< > fix
6. 00:40:788 (7) - (optional) About this, I prefer to put the whistle on (6) and (8) instead (to follow the drum sequence) - this also sounds good with your claps on (10) and (12) :3 > make a different change
7. 00:44:486 (6,7,8,9,1) - Here, you can encircle (2) with this formation, actually xD > no change
8. 00:56:815 (2,3) - (optional) Move both to ~x:42 y:349? I think a bigger gap between your two pink sliders here plays better~ > no change
9. 01:07:911 (1) - No finish on slider's start here? The song's cymbal is strong enough imo ._. > fix
10. 01:08:322 (2,3,4,5) - Perhaps arrange like this (especially for (5))? This way, (5,1) will form a beautiful continuous arc~ > make a different change
11. 01:13:254 (2) - On patterns like this, I prefer to put (2) lower than (8)'s end... Not a must, though :3 > no change
12. 01:19:829 (2,3) - I personally think the angle you're trying to take is too narrow here... Perhaps put (2)'s end more to the left and vice-versa for (3)? > no change
13. 01:25:171 (5,6,7,8) - (optional) Because of (1)'s shape, would be really fancy to create an arc upward for this stream imo~ > no change
14. 01:34:212 (1) - Again, no finish on slider's start here? Blends well with your cymbal :3 > fix
15. 01:47:363 (1) - Minor stuff, but try to put the endpoint in x:107 y:227 to get a smoother curve~ > fix
16. 01:48:493 (6) - It's not that hard to make this encircle (2), really xD > fix
17. 01:52:808 (6,7,8,9) - Not sure with this stream shape... I think a circular movement plays/flows a lot better here: > fix
18. 02:05:650 (4,7) - (optional) Place (4) more to the left and (7) more to the right, so (3,4,5) and (6,7,8) both has a slight arc to the center? > make a different change
19. 02:13:664 (9) - Same as Hyper :3 > no change

SHIKI's trance songs are always great >_< (I wonder why you put this in WIP though ._.) > Go pending now lol
Overall I love your complex square patterns, although I'd like to see more whistles placed to follow the piano (not only the kiai time synths) (:
Good luck with this mapset xD

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1. 02:13:459 - there's no object on kiai start point, i'd make this point as kiai ends and kiai on last note if you really need

1. 01:30:925 (4) - make a symmetry slider, 01:32:568 (1,2,3,4,5,1) - are just straight
2. 01:33:801 (4,5,1) - replace with a 1/2 slider with 1 arrow will be easy to play
3. 01:52:294 (1,2,3,4) - no zig-zag, just make the shape like 01:50:651 (3) -
4. 01:58:870 (1,2,3,4,1) - make a perfect pentagon? (use ctrl+shift+d)
5. 02:05:445 (1,2,3,4) - same as 01:52:294 (1,2,3,4) -

1. 00:30:925 (3,4) - really confusing to read, for me, it should be ctrl+r
2. 01:22:705 (6) - NC
3. 01:35:856 (6) - NC
4. 01:45:719 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - wrong beat, listen carefully and remap this part
5. 01:52:294 (9) - combo should start from here
6. 02:11:507 (2,3,4,5,6) - really silly rhythm, they're just like 'i like 3/4 slider so i mapped like this'.

1. CS-1
2. 00:17:158 - add a circle here
3. 01:20:137 (3) - if i were you, i move it to 01:20:137 (3) - and add a circle at 01:20:342 -

Kawayi Rika wrote:

[General]

1. Difficulty Spread is too bad, so you need make a Hard diff.

hmm,I dont think this map is hard

[Hyper]

1. 02:12:019 (5) - Unsnapped circle. ->fix
2. 02:13:664 - Why not add circle to here?->fix

[Another]

1. 02:13:664 - Same as Hyper.->fix

[Normal]

1. 01:23:938 (4) - Change a circle on 01:23:938,make more easy playble. ->no
2. 01:30:514 (3) - Same as above. ->no
3. 01:37:089 (4) - ^ ->no
4. 01:43:664 (4) - ^ ->no