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General

  1. combo 4 brighter..?


Normal

  1. try to add a little more notes for 750+ combo?
  2. 01:16:351 (1) - 3rd sliderpoint (440,320) 4th (488,188) end (368,120) it looks better to me
  3. 01:18:402 (2) - ^
  4. fine in general


Hard

  1. 00:54:812 (6) - symmetric with (5)?
  2. 01:22:505 (5) - move to (328,300)/?
  3. 02:51:735 (3,4,5) - move right a little
  4. 03:41:735 (9) - symmetrical with 3?
  5. 04:16:607 (6) - symmetrical?
  6. nice map


Insane

  1. 00:46:351 (6) - http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot472.jpg
  2. 00:58:787 (6) - move to 00:58:915 (6) and remove 1 reverse, vocal starts there
  3. 01:07:120 (7) - this is out of the grids
  4. 01:24:299 (1) - http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot473.jpg
  5. 01:30:069 (3) - http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot474.jpg this is 3/4, not 1/2s in the song... you can also try "x ox ox" rhythm
  6. 02:23:017 (3) - doesn't look good...
  7. 02:47:659 - this part is good
  8. some sliders can be made better 0.0


A calm map 0.0 but I think Insane needs more work, it's a bit too monotonous, needs some highlight parts

Good luck~
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[General]

Hmm I'm not sure but DJPOP has a ranked version which has different artist with your map. http://osu.ppy.sh/b/74074. I think if there's no other reason then the artist should follow the ranked version.

You're missing reversearrow.png in your folder

You need to add a SliderBorder Value in every diff since you have hitcircle. The suggested value is 255, 255, 255


[Normal]

00:09:940 (x) - add a circle
00:14:299 (4) - try x=348, y=308
00:57:889 (4,5) - change both of the fin on tail to the head
01:16:351 (1) - adjust the shape .. the middle point should move right upward a little bit
02:12:761 (6) - add fin in the middle
02:24:043 (3) - hmmm I don't like the increase of volume here, still try 70%
04:01:992 (6) - add clap

[Hard]

lol, why slider velocity 1.42
02:13:017 (9) - try ctrl+R
04:16:607 (6) - try make it same as 4?

[Insane]

00:18:658 (11) - try ctrl+R
00:40:710 (3,4) - separate a little bit
00:44:299 (2) - try x=192, y=110
00:49:171 (4) - make it same as 3
01:59:428 (7) - 2 grids right
02:24:043 (5) - adjust the shape a little bit.


I like the way you deal with slider ticks however just as [CSGA]Ar3sgice said your insane need more highlight points that attract players. Otherwise it will be boring.

hmm star for the sliderticks.
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Why you have Tags: in your tags ?

ลบออกด้วยนะฮะ :o
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Here is my mod~ most of them are suggestion

[General]
Some use of slidertick hitsound is good but I think example like 03:14:043 (2) in hard is just too much.

[Normal]
HP - 2?
AR - 1?
OD - 2? (Becuase you don't have an easy)
03:05:838 (5) - This rhythm maybe too hard for newbie
03:37:633 (1) - ^
04:20:197 (3,4) - ^

[Hard]
OD - 1?
01:29:684 (2,3,4,5) - follow the vocal part...?
01:54:556 (4) - Change this? I find it strange to just have a slider tick at 01:54:812
02:13:017 (9) - This sounds a little bit awkward, you may keep it if you think that's fine.
02:45:325 (2,3) - Quite a large jump comparing to other parts of the map
02:53:274 (6) - I think this play better if you want that hitsound:

03:14:043 (2) - This slider does not match the hitsound
03:56:863 (5) - Similar to 02:53:274 (6)


[Insane]
00:42:248 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - I think the jump can be bigger
01:12:248 (1) - Make it more symmetric?
01:29:684 (2,3,4,5) - same as hard 01:29:684 (2,3,4,5)? because I miss these notes for twice lol.
01:32:761 (7) - Unstack it?
02:07:120 (2) - same as 01:12:248 (1)?
02:09:684 (8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3) - The slider starts at red tick make me feels weird... Maybe change the whole thing to this?

02:28:915 - Add a note here? I can clearly a drum hit.
02:47:633 (3) - same as 01:12:248 (1)?
02:49:684 (7) - ^
03:07:120 (1,2,3) - I think it is a little bit strange to have jump here, but it's ok if you think it's fine.

Great song and great map :) Double star~
Amazing hitsound despite the slidertick :)
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IRC mod
ครั้งที่เท่าไหร่แล้ววะเนี่ย
18:06 <regenz> : เสดยังวะแป
18:06 <regenz> : แมป
18:06 <indyinyou> : แล้ว
18:06 <indyinyou> : นั้งแก้ ม๊อด
18:06 <indyinyou> : ไปโพส 5-6 คน
18:06 <indyinyou> : มา คนเดียว
18:06 <indyinyou> : สงสัย เพลงนาน
18:08 <regenz> : มี
18:08 <regenz> : ให้กูดูให้
18:08 <regenz> : ป่ะ
18:08 <regenz> : ไม่มีจะไปละ
18:08 <indyinyou> : ดูพวกโดดให้หน่อยดิ
18:08 <indyinyou> : ว่ามัน มีที่ต้องโดดเพิ่มป่าว
18:08 <indyinyou> : ดิฟ insane อะ
18:10 <regenz> : 00:39:684 (1,2,3,4) -
18:10 <regenz> : ให้มันห่างกว่านี้หน่อย
18:10 <regenz> : ฉีกออกมาอีกเยอะๆ
18:10 <indyinyou> : พิมยาว เลย เด๋วตาม
18:10 <regenz> : 00:41:735 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) -
18:10 <regenz> : โดดได้ทั้งชุดเลย
18:10 <regenz> : ทำเป็นวงกลมให้หมด
18:10 <regenz> : อันไหนรัวให้ซ้อนสาม
18:11 <regenz> : 01:08:146 (2,3) - Ctrl R โดดแบบอื่นๆมั่ง
18:11 <regenz> : โดด x
18:12 <regenz> : อย่าสี่เหลียมอย่างเดียว
18:12 <regenz> : แม่งสิ้นคิด
18:13 <regenz> : 01:55:325 (6) - ctrl J
18:14 <regenz> : 02:10:966 (3,4) - ฉีกแยกออกจากกันอีก
18:14 <regenz> : 02:11:992 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - โดดได้เหมือนเดิม
18:14 <regenz> : จังหวะเดิมๆ
18:14 <regenz> : 02:14:299 (1,2,3,4) - อย่าก๊อป
18:16 <regenz> : 03:04:556 (9) - เอาไปทับสไลเดอร์ตัวถัดไป
18:18 <regenz> : 03:21:479 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - โดด ดาวโดดหกเหลี่ยมห้าเหลี่ยม
18:18 <regenz> : ห่าไรก็โดดไปเลย
18:18 <regenz> : โน๊ตยังกะนอมอล
18:18 <regenz> : สาด
18:21 <regenz> : 03:57:633 (10) - เช็ค hitsound
18:21 <indyinyou> : นอมอลเลยเหรอวะ สาด
18:21 <indyinyou> : 55
18:23 <regenz> : 04:18:915 (1,2,3,4) - โดดแบบนี้อย่าใช้เยอะ
18:23 <regenz> : เชยแล้ว
18:23 <regenz> : ใช้ สลับเอา
18:23 <regenz> : เป็นตัว X
18:23 <regenz> : สลับ สามกับ สอง
18:23 <regenz> : หมดละ
18:25 <regenz> : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/334279
18:25 <regenz> : รู้เปล่าว่าบนซ้ายคืออะไร
18:25 <regenz> : คิดดีๆก่อนตอบ
18:27 <indyinyou> : ยังไล่แก้ไม่เสร็จเลย
18:27 <indyinyou> : แปป
18:27 <regenz> : ดูก่อน
18:27 <regenz> : ไม่นาน
18:27 <regenz> : ค่อยแก้
18:27 <regenz> : จะไปพักละ
18:27 <indyinyou> : ถามว่าไรนะ
18:27 <indyinyou> : bpm
18:27 <regenz> : เออ
18:28 <regenz> : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/334283
18:28 <regenz> : กูกำลังคิดว่าต้องใส่คำว่า bpm
18:28 <regenz> : บอกคนเล่นไหม
18:28 <regenz> : แต่ดูแล้วแม่งมีสมองกัน
18:28 <indyinyou> : ไม่รู้วะ
18:28 <regenz> : คงไม่ต้องใช้
18:28 <indyinyou> : 555
18:28 <indyinyou> : ว่างั้น
18:28 <regenz> : 5555
18:28 <regenz> : สีต่างกันด้วยนะ
18:28 <regenz> : ยิ่งโหดยื่งไว
18:28 <regenz> : ยื่งสีแดง
18:28 <regenz> : เปลี่ยนไปยังกะปรอท
18:28 <regenz> : สเกาเต้อ
18:28 <regenz> : แถบวัดพลัง
18:28 <regenz> : เมพ
18:28 *regenz is editing (Various Artists - SUPER SHOT Compilation)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51037]
18:29 <regenz> : ลองโหลดมาดู
18:29 <regenz> : วิ่งได้ด้วย
18:29 <regenz> : หมุนปิ้วๆเลย
18:51 <indyinyou> : เออ ใจมาก
18:51 <indyinyou> : เสร็จแระ
18:52 <regenz> : er mai pen ria
18:57 <indyinyou> : เทสรอบนึงดิ ว่างปะ
18:57 <regenz> : อีกนาที
19:00 <regenz> : มา
19:00 <indyinyou> : เออ
19:01 <regenz> : โดดเป็นแค่นั้นหรอวะ
19:01 <regenz> : ไม่บนก็ล่าง
19:01 <regenz> : สาดด
19:01 <indyinyou> : 555
19:01 <regenz> : อุตสาห์บอกให้แยกออกเป็นวงกลมแล้วโดด
19:01 <regenz> : แม่งก็ไม่ทำ
19:02 <indyinyou> : ไม่เห็นรูป
19:02 <indyinyou> : กุไม่ค่อยเก็ต
19:02 <regenz> : เปิดดูแมปกู
19:02 <regenz> : เดวก็เกทเอง
19:02 <regenz> : supershot
19:06 <regenz> : ไปเอาหัวมุดส้วมซะ
19:06 <regenz> : แมปเมิงโดนพิชิตบาย
19:06 <indyinyou> : 555
19:06 <regenz> : กาก
19:07 <indyinyou> : ขนาดนั้นเลยเหรอวะ
19:07 <regenz> : by กาก
19:07 <regenz> : ง่ายเวอร์
19:07 <regenz> : โหลด super shot
19:07 <regenz> : กูมาสิ
19:07 <regenz> : จะบอกว่าจั้มที่ว่าเป็นไง
19:07 <indyinyou> : 55
19:08 <regenz> : ไวๆ
19:08 <regenz> : สัดง่วง
19:08 <indyinyou> : เด๋วค่อยทำใหม่
19:08 <regenz> : กูจะสอนพาทเทินโดด
19:08 <regenz> : ที่รู้
19:08 <regenz> : ให้หมด
19:08 <regenz> : รีบๆเปิด
19:08 <indyinyou> : กุ พักแล้ว ไม่ไหว
19:08 <indyinyou> : ปวดหัว
19:08 <indyinyou> : ไม่อยากทำ
19:08 <regenz> : สาดกาก
19:09 <indyinyou> : 555
19:09 <regenz> : ไม่ต้องทำ
19:09 <regenz> : ดูเฉยๆ
19:09 *regenz is editing (Various Artists - SUPER SHOT Compilation)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51037]
19:09 <regenz> : เร็วๆ
19:09 <indyinyou> : เออ
19:09 <indyinyou> : พิม เวลามา เด๋วดูตาม
19:10 <regenz> : อธิบายก่อน
19:10 <regenz> : เมิงต้องเข้าใจก่อนว่า
19:10 <regenz> : จะทำโดด
19:10 <regenz> : ต้องเข้าใจว่า
19:10 <regenz> : โดด 1/1 กับ โดด 1/2
19:11 <regenz> : 00:40:730 (1,2) -
19:11 <regenz> : นี่คือโดด 1/2
19:11 <regenz> : ห่างกัน 1 เส้นแดง
19:11 <regenz> : หรือครึ่งจังหวะ
19:12 <regenz> : จะโดดได้สั้น
19:12 <regenz> : เพราะเวลามันน้อย
19:12 <regenz> : 01:24:147 (3,4) -
19:12 <regenz> : แบบนี้โดดจังหวะเต็ม
19:12 <regenz> : มีเวลาเยอะมาก
19:12 <regenz> : วางไกลๆได้
19:12 <regenz> : พอไหว
19:12 <indyinyou> : อือ
19:13 <regenz> : ต้องดูว่าโดด 1/1 1/2 วางระยะต้องกะให้พอดีผู้เล่นเดาออก
19:13 <regenz> : อย่าวางมั่ว
19:13 <regenz> : ต่อไปเป็นรูปแบบจั้ม แบบต่างๆ
19:13 <regenz> : 00:11:719 (3,4) -
19:13 <regenz> : นี่
19:14 <regenz> : ลองกด เลือก 4 แล้ว ctrl R
19:14 <regenz> : สไลเดอร์จะกลับสภาพปกติ
19:14 <indyinyou> : เออ
19:14 <regenz> : จั้มแบบสไลเดอร์วิ่งกลับหลัง
19:14 <indyinyou> : อืม อันนี้เคยสอนแล้ว
19:14 <regenz> : ไม่เห็นเมิงใช้
19:14 <regenz> : กระดอ
19:14 <indyinyou> : 555
19:14 <regenz> : 00:16:575 (1,2,3,4) -
19:15 <regenz> : โดด X
19:15 <regenz> : แบบไม่เท่ากันบนล่าง
19:15 <regenz> : 00:18:656 (9,10) - โดด วงล้อ
19:16 <regenz> : โดด ไปหน้าแล้ว ถอยกลับ แล้วไปหน้าอีก 00:19:349 (1,2,3,4) -
19:16 <regenz> : เนี่ยที่บอกว่าให้แยกๆเป็นวงกลม
19:16 <regenz> : คือจะให้ทำแบบนี้00:20:216 (6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7) -
19:17 <regenz> : 00:30:447 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - อันนี้วางโน๊ตธรรมดาแต่เพิ่มระยะ
19:18 <regenz> : 01:30:490 (4,5,6) -
19:18 <regenz> : ไอ้นี่ก็ย้อนศรสไลเดอร์
19:18 <regenz> : โดดนิดหน่อย
19:18 <regenz> : ไม่ยากเลย
19:18 <indyinyou> : อืม
19:18 <indyinyou> : พอก่อนก้ได้
19:18 <indyinyou> : กุจำยังไม่หมดเลย
19:19 <regenz> : มีไม่เยอะหรอก
19:19 <regenz> : 02:16:266 (1,2,3,4,5) -
19:19 <indyinyou> : เด๋วลองใช้ โดด 1/2 กับ โดด ที่โน๊ตเว้น เยอะก่อน
19:19 <regenz> : อันนี้เบสิคสุดๆ
19:19 <regenz> : มีได้ไม่แปลก
19:19 <regenz> : เพราะมันขยับเม้าปากกาง่าย
19:19 <regenz> : แบบวาดรูป
19:19 <regenz> : 02:17:854 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1) -
19:19 <regenz> : โดดอันนี้กูก๊อปเมิงมา
19:19 <indyinyou> : เคยทำเหรอวะ 55
19:20 *regenz is editing (Various Artists - Thai mappers compilation)[http://osu.ppy.sh/s/51345]
19:20 <regenz> : 04:52:755 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1) -
19:20 <regenz> : คล้ายๆ
19:20 <regenz> : ดัดแปลงหน่อย
19:20 <regenz> : http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/334329
19:21 <regenz> : 02:27:560 (1,2,3,4) - โดดใบพัด
19:21 <regenz> : ค่อนข้างเชยแล้ว
19:21 <regenz> : แต่ดีกว่าสี่เหลี่ยมแน่นอน
19:22 <indyinyou> : อืม
19:22 <indyinyou> : เด๋วใช้อันนี้แทน
19:22 <regenz> : 02:45:572 (3,4,5,6,7) - อันนี้โดดตามใจ
19:22 <regenz> : โนคอมเม้น
19:22 <regenz> : โดดหัวปลาหมึก
19:22 <regenz> : ไม่รู้เอาชื่อไรดี
19:23 <regenz> : 03:01:444 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - อันนี่ก๋เหมือนใบพัด
19:23 <regenz> : แค่วางคนละแบบ
19:24 <regenz> : 03:39:094 (5,6,7,8) - โดดไกลๆแบบนี้อะไม่ต้องวางแม่งตรงมุมก็ได้
19:24 <regenz> : เอะอะไรตรงมุม
19:24 <regenz> : เพลงมันสี่นาที
19:24 <regenz> : มันน่าเบื่อ
19:24 <indyinyou> : อือ
19:24 <regenz> : ยังกะเล่นซ้ำสามรอบ
19:24 <regenz> : สาด
19:25 <regenz> : 03:42:408 (7,8,9,10,1,2) - โดดซิกแซก
19:25 <regenz> : 03:43:803 (3,4,5,6) - ไหลบนลงล่าง
19:26 <regenz> : 04:06:298 (6,7,8,9,10) - อันนี้ก็ใบพัดแต่ห้าแฉก
19:26 <regenz> : เมิงต้องใช้หมุนแบบตั้งค่าเอง
19:26 <regenz> : ถ้าห้าแฉก
19:26 <regenz> : 360/5 = 72
19:26 <regenz> : ให้มันหมุนทีละ 72 องศา
19:28 <regenz> : 05:50:858 (6,7,8,9,10,1) - โดด แบบค่อยๆเพิ่มระยะ
19:28 <regenz> : 06:04:809 (2,3,4) - นี่ก็โดด สไลเดอร์วิ่งถอยหลัง
19:29 <regenz> : 06:18:909 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - วางโน๊ตปกติ
19:29 <regenz> : แต่ระยะค่อยๆเพิ่มขึ้น
19:29 <regenz> : เพราะทำนองมันให้
19:29 <regenz> : จาก 1.2 1.6 2.0 2.4 2.8
19:29 <regenz> : มั้ง
19:29 <regenz> : ลืมละ
19:29 <indyinyou> : ก๊อบได้ปะ 55
19:29 <regenz> : ก๊อปวาง ?
19:29 <indyinyou> : ไม่
19:29 <indyinyou> : ยืม
19:29 <indyinyou> : แนวๆ
19:30 <regenz> : อ้อ
19:30 <regenz> : เอาไปดิ
19:30 <regenz> : กูบอกคือให้เมิงเอาไปใช้แล้ว
19:30 <indyinyou> : เออ
19:30 <indyinyou> : คงใช้ แค่ 2-3 อัน
19:30 <regenz> : 06:53:624 (4,5,6,1,2,3) - วงกลมซ้อนกัน
19:30 <regenz> : สามเหลี่ยม
19:30 <regenz> : 07:20:814 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - นี่ก็เหมือนกัน
19:31 <regenz> : พอ
19:31 <regenz> : น่าจะหมดละนะ
19:31 <regenz> : โดดในแมปนี้
19:32 <regenz> : โพสเอาคุดโ้ดแปป
19:32 <indyinyou> : อืม
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Alrighty let's get started :)

Bold: Unrankable/must fix.
Red: You should fix it, but it's up to you.
Italic: Suggestion. Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it.
Blue: Comment. My opinions or questions about something.

[General]
maybe it's me but i think that the BG looks stretched. i suggest finding a clear BG similar to this. it's gonna bother me when this song gets ranked.
Add "Insert song" in the tags. this was sung during the 24th episode of k-on season 2.
i think that the spinner BG and the spinner metre's dimensions should be the same. as it stands, they're different. from what I see, it should be at 1023x692.
i don't think a lead in is needed since the song starts 2 seconds ahead. i suggest that remove the lead in because of that.

[Normal]
00:14:299 (4) - delete this circle and add a 1/2 repeat slider starting at 00:14:043 to follow the drums.
00:18:402 (4) - same as above but this follows the bass.
00:20:966 (4) - make this a NC. the lyrics change from here.
00:25:069 (4) - ^
00:30:710 (4) - same as 00:18:402.
00:37:376 (4) - same as 00:20:966.
00:41:479 (4) - same as above but the instrumental changes.
00:49:684 (2) - ik you can make a wave slider nicer than this. it plays weird during gameplay.
00:53:787 (3,4) - tbh i was expecting these 2 notes to point in the same direction as (1,2). it'll flow a lot smoother if you do this.
01:04:043 (1) - maybe add a finish at the beginning? the vocal pitch sounds the same as 00:59:940.
01:08:146 (1,2) - same as 00:49:684.
01:24:556 (1,2) - see? this looks nice. try to fix the wave sliders and make them similar to this.
01:30:710 (3) - since (1) is a curved slider, make this slider a curved slider to flow a lot smoother during gameplay.
02:03:530 (2) - the flow looks weird because the flow from the wave slider to the straight slider makes me feel ucomfortable. make this a curved slider so that it'd blanket the 1st half of the slider. it should look like this.
02:34:299 (1) - same as 01:04:043
02:46:607 (1,2,3,4) - this pattern might be hard for players. since this is the easiest diff, players might feel uncomfortable as they have to move in a weird motion. re-arrange the pattern like this. it'd be easier and it'll flow smoother during gameplay.
03:46:094 (1) - same as 01:04:043.
03:47:120 (2) - Do Ctrl+R. you should blanket the repeat slider on (4).
04:06:607 (1) - Ctrl+H and leave it around that spot. the overlap on the repeat slider makes it look bad during gameplay.
04:22:889 (1) - i understand that this is at the 1/6 line, but it'd be better if you can re-snap it to the 1/4 line. the delay is almost the same if you ask me. for the 2nd spinner.
nice map and use of the hitsounds, but i think the combos need a bit of work. if the combos are intentional, then ignore this, and replace the circles for 1/2 repeat sliders like at 00:14:299.

[Hard]
00:05:838 (8) - add a repeat to follow the guitar and to keep it consistent with (7).
00:08:402 (3) - idk after seeing a map unranked due to something like this, this might be unrankable. ask a MAT or BAT to confirm about this.
00:16:863 (2) - make this a curved slider. you'll blanket the previous slider if you do so.
01:04:043 (1) - same as normal.
01:47:120 (2) - curve it a lot more, you'll make a blanket for the previous slider.
02:27:120 (3,4) - remove (4) and add a repeat on (3). i see a potential pattern on this combo. a slider to circle pattern.
02:34:299 (1) - same as normal.
02:46:607 (1) - make to make this slider similar to (5). it plays weird during gameplay.
03:43:017 (3) - same as 00:49:684 on normal.
03:46:094 (1) - same as 01:04:043.
03:49:171 (7) - *nazi* move this up a bit to avoid the slight overlap on (5).
04:18:658 - add a circle or a repeat to follow the guitar.
04:20:710 (3) - same as 00:08:402.
same comment about the combos.

[Insane]
00:11:479 (3) - aww i was expecting a jump on this. it'd look fun for players, so do Ctrl+R for this slider.
00:42:248 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - manual stacking right? if not stack these notes perfectly. it looks weird during gameplay.
01:04:043 (1) - same as normal.
01:29:684 (2,3,4,5,6) - instead of a flower pattern, how about a star pattern? same reason as 00:11:479.
02:21:222 (7) - make this a symmetrical curved slider. you'll make a blanket for the previous slider.
02:34:299 (1,3) - for a smoother flow, 1 of the slider should look the same as the other. example: 1 should look like (3) and vice versa.
03:17:120 (1) - this slowdown on the slider might throw off players. put the SV back to its original speed to make it easier for players.
same comment about the combos.

I guess that's it. Star because of the song. when graduation comes, i'm gonna think of this song :cry:. anyways GL :D
posted
Hi~ From my Queue
Almost Modding is Suggestion so you can ignore this


Normal
Unsnapped inherited (green) timing point(s) at
00:06:492 (snap to 00:06:479)
01:22:897 (snap to 01:22:889)
01:41:100 (snap to 01:41:094)
03:01:368 (snap to 03:01:351)
03:01:855 (snap to 03:01:863)
03:14:297 (snap to 03:14:299)
03:53:669 (snap to 03:53:658)

00:47:633 (1) - how about making this slide more rounder? it looks little bit ugly



Hard
Unsnapped inherited (green) timing point(s) at
00:06:492 (snap to 00:06:479)
00:14:424 (snap to 00:14:428)
01:41:100 (snap to 01:41:094)
03:01:368 (snap to 03:01:351)
03:01:855 (snap to 03:01:863)
03:14:297 (snap to 03:14:299)

00:42:505 (7) - how about 1/2 slider instead of 3/4 slider?
01:14:812 (5) - ^
02:33:017 (6) - how about this? http://puu.sh/DhEt
03:00:966 (4) - finish -> clap?


Insane
Unsnapped inherited (green) timing point(s) at
00:06:492 (snap to 00:06:479)
00:09:807 (snap to 00:09:812)
00:14:424 (snap to 00:14:428)
00:42:642 (snap to 00:42:633)
01:41:100 (snap to 01:41:094)
03:01:368 (snap to 03:01:351)

01:43:787 (9) - how about use 1 more slider point like this? http://puu.sh/Dhp3
02:05:838 (1) - trying this pattern? http://puu.sh/DhqU
03:09:940 (8) - change this slider's shape like 03:08:915 (6) - this?
03:48:146 (6) - Ctrl + r?

Nice mapset! good luck xD
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hofahowahello from n y a -'s queue
Black means suggestion c:

[General]
Turn off the letterbox ?
Suggest to make a slider ball elements

[Normal]
- Second spinner: start from 04:22:889 end at 04:25:710

[Hard]
- 00:05:838 : distance o v o
- 01:54:299 : ^
- 04:22:889 : spinner end at 04:25:710

[Insane]
- 01:32:761 : nc? o v o
- 04:10:069 : remove clap?
- 04:22:889 : spinner end at 04:25:710

thats all I can found! Rank good luck > w <
super nice map , rank good luck <33 :)
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> scorebar-ki, scorebar-kidanger, and scorebar-kidanger2 seems to be a bit cut at the top when it's on play.
> You may want to use custom sliderborder.

=Normal=
1. 00:06:607 (1) - Perhaps make this symmetric? Don't forget to use grid snap for better result!
2. 00:14:812 (1) - I believe this would be better if it blanket 00:14:299 (4) - like this http://puu.sh/I0mN
3. 00:27:120 (1) - Use 3 points. Seriously, it would looks better. http://puu.sh/I0oX
4. 00:47:633 (1) - Use 5 points. You can make it better. http://puu.sh/I0qU

=Hard=
1. 00:05:069 (7) - To tell you the truth, I prefer to make it in the center like this http://puu.sh/I0yj you may want to fix this too 00:05:838 (8) -
2. 00:19:171 (2) - Make this following approach circle would be better! http://puu.sh/I0A4 you may want to fix this too 00:21:222 (4) -
3. 00:27:120 (1) - Symmetric, please :)

=Insane=
1. 00:25:069 (5,6) - Neater, please. You can use 3 points instead of 5, that honestly too much.
2. 01:12:248 (1,4) - Symmetric, please :(
3. 01:29:684 (2,3,4,5,6) - Is it me or this pattern doesn't look so cute? Use create polygon circle.
4. 01:31:992 (2,6) - Whistle instead of clap will make this sounds more authentic.
5. 01:32:248 (4) - Move to (92,192) to make a better 5plets.
6. 03:21:479 (1) - Snap to center.
7. 03:21:735 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Looks a bit plain, how about zigzag? http://puu.sh/I0WD
8. 03:23:274 (8) - Again, snap to center. If you follow number 7, flip vertically.



Good Luck
posted
Hi there

[Normal]
01:31:735 (1) - Why new combo?
03:05:838 (5) - New combo?
04:01:992 (6) - Stack under slider can be confuse for beginners


[Insane]
* AR -1?


Perfect map~
posted
Hi, sorry for little late mod~

Normal

00:47:633(1) - I think this slider a little bit ugly(the smoothness of the slider, I mean), you can fix this little ugliness by yourself or you can use mine edited ver.
254,118,47633,6,0,B|209:35|150:24|95:32|40:92|19:155|57:232,1,366,0|8
Insane

02:09:556(7) - I think you should delete this circle. If the circle still there, the sound and the music get weird.


Good map! I hope it will ranked soon. ;)
Sorry for the short mod~
Well, I'll take my leave...
posted
Ranked
:) good beatmap with lyrics :)
posted
Niva, Can you allow rank this map?
posted
Hey!

[General]

  1. As I see there are various unsnapped inherited sections. Remember to snap them correctly!


[Normal]

  1. 00:23:017 (1,2,3) - Well,it could be just me,however I think this pattern could flow much more fluently by using 2 curve-opposed sliders with the note right after them. Here's an example of what I've done:
    212,356,23017,6,0,P|268:372|309:326,1,122
    344,268,23787,2,0,P|376:224|441:241,1,122
    492,280,24556,1,0,0:0:0
    500,132,25069,6,0,P|480:80|412:72,1,122
    352,92,25838,2,0,B|316:132|272:108|272:108|228:84|188:124,1,183,0|12,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    132,260,27120,6,0,B|115:314|149:376|200:384|253:349,2,183,4|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    I fixed the spacing of the other patterns modifying them a bit too! :3
  2. 00:41:479 (4) - New combo here? I think this fits pretty good to emphatize the transition to the "drums" part.
  3. 00:44:299 (2) - Why don't you split this into a a 1/1 slider and a note just 1/2 after it? It fits really good the vocal parts,and I really can't see why not doing this there. If you want to modify it to create a pretty cool-looking symmetric pattern,try to use this:
    352,208,44043,5,8,0:0:0
    312,268,44299,2,0,P|256:292|200:268,1,122
    156,216,45069,1,8,0:0:0
    144,144,45325,2,0,P|136:64|224:40,1,183,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    291,38,46351,2,0,P|376:64|368:144,1,183,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    This could not look so incredible in the screenshot because of the low AR I had to put to screenshot the entire pattern,but believe me,this patterns works really good there! :D
  4. 01:16:351 (1,2) - Imho,these two arcs there really don't flow good,because of their "linear" position. With some tweaking and rotating,I managed to get this pattern,which flows really good,especially with sliders such as 01:20:453 (1) - :
    464,164,76351,6,0,P|364:32|236:144,1,366,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    232,280,78402,2,0,P|74:239|119:80,1,366,4|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  5. 01:59:428 (2,3) - Oh well,I really don't like that much this "returning" you have there. What about using instead an arc-based pattern there,which can be combined with the next note? This is just an example,however this could be pretty good to use:
    192,200,119428,2,0,P|168:148|188:88,1,122
    252,56,120197,1,0,0:0:0
    The same applies to 02:03:530 (2,3) - ,as it is this pattern just flipped horizontally!
  6. 02:09:684 (1) - What about curving this a bit out just to continue in a better way the flow with 02:10:453 (2) - ?
  7. 02:11:735 (4) - Same as 00:41:479 (4) -: it works really good to delimitate this symmetric pattern too!
  8. 02:14:299 (1,2,3,4) - Again,same as 00:44:299 (2) -
  9. 02:34:299 (1,2) - After all these 1/2 patterns you used there,this actually sounds quite strange,as it is just a 1/1 pattern... What about adding a note at 02:35:069 - or extending 02:34:299 (1) - until 02:35:069 -to complete the rhythm there?
  10. 02:54:043 (x)- This is really a minor thing,as it sounds good on its own there: anyways,what do you think on having a note here? it would be pretty cool to follow all the drums 1/2 there,it sounds and plays really good!
  11. 03:56:863 (4) - Well,a 3/2 slider here isn't the best choice here... It is better to follow the voces and drums a bit more by using a 1/1 slider with 2 notes or by making the whole pattern 1/2. By using instead a 3/2 ~ 1/2 pattern you have semplified this a lot,and I don't like that much how it sounds :<


[Hard]

  1. 00:05:069 (7,8) - Not really an issue,and this is mostly a personal thing,nut what about making these 2 sliders a bit oblique? Right now,because of them being just vertical, I think this transiction is a bit rough. That's pretty much optional though!
    184,104,5069,2,0,B|166:34,2,71,8|0|0,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    328,104,5838,2,0,B|346:34,1,71
  2. 00:31:222 (1,2) - Oh well,it would be good if the flow there continued with the slider 00:34:043 (3) - 's position,actually... What about flipping the whole pattern 00:33:274 (2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - horizontally? It flows better than before because of that transition I told you and it doesen't ruin the spacing being used there!
    There really shouldn't be any problem with using that 1/4 slider,as it is pretty easy to follow and play!
  3. 01:44:556 (4,5) - What about making these as an arc-based pattern? It really doesn't follow the symmetry,but it flows really good with 01:43:787 (3) - and it plays just awesome!
    210,180,103017,2,0,B|150:180|150:89|215:89,1,142
    296,89,103787,2,0,B|359:89|359:181|292:181,1,142,0|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    210,180,104556,1,8,0:0:0
    148,236,104812,1,2,0:0:0
    152,324,105069,6,0,B|35:318|5:159,2,213,0|0|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  4. 02:15:581 (4,5) - This is a really minor graphical thing,feel free to ignore this: what about making some blankets there instead of using just a red waypoint there? They look really good! Here's what I have done:
    480,84,135581,2,0,B|436:36|368:56|357:112|357:112|304:128,1,213,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    208,128,136607,2,0,B|155:112|155:112|144:56|76:36|32:84,1,213,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  5. 02:53:274 (1) - What do you think on making this part here less semplified,by using a 1/4 slider and some 1/2 circles to follow the drums? They fit really good,and they really aren't that difficult to play! Here I have a pretty good idea to make this kind of pattern following the symmetry too! What do you thing about this?
    8,324,172761,1,2,0:0:0
    32,152,173274,5,8,0:0:0
    96,208,173530,2,0,P|104:244,2,35.5,8|8|8,0:0|0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    168,161,174043,2,0,B|201:98,1,71,8|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    256,32,174556,1,8,0:0:0
    311,98,174812,6,0,B|358:191,1,71,4|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  6. 02:56:351 (4,5,6,7) - Well,this arc's structure is not that great. You might want to use this? Choose just if you want:
    396,332,176351,1,10,0:0:0
    312,320,176607,1,0,0:0:0
    272,244,176863,1,4,0:0:0
    315,170,177120,2,0,B|300:136|268:120,1,71,0|10,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  7. 03:01:992 (6) - Why aren't you using the claps you used at the first refrain at this slider? They fit really good to emphatize the drums,as just a whistle isn't that good to emphatizing them. I suggest you instead to replace the whistles with some claps there.
  8. 03:14:043 (2) - Rhythmically talking,this 1/1 slider in these red ticks fits quite bad,probably because of the voces being played there. What about using instead a note with a 3/4 repeated slider? That's jst your choice,though! Here's an example:


[Insane]

  1. 00:25:069 (5,6,7) - Little pattern suggestion here: what do you think about using a pattern like this instead of the current one? It flows really good because of this use of oval flows!
    365,212,25069,2,0,P|432:160|396:84,1,182
    116,84,25838,2,0,P|80:160|147:212,1,182,0|4,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    256,160,26607,1,12,0:0:0
  2. 00:40:710 (3,4) - What do you think on creating a different type of pattern here,instead of using that "slider progression"? Something like this would work pretty good actually ^^
    84,176,40710,2,0,P|112:212|156:224,1,91
    428,176,41222,2,0,P|400:212|356:224,1,91,0|2,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
  3. 00:58:787 (6) - What about emphatizing that drum you are following with this slider by adding a whistle at the first repeat? It sounds really good imho :P
  4. 01:45:069 (1,2,3) - This is a really little thing,please ignore if you don't want to fix this: what do you think on "inverting" 01:45:069 (1) - 's curve to make it dropoff perfectly with 01:45:581 (2,3) - ? To be gonest,I have been surprsed the first time because of this...
    256,220,105069,6,0,B|216:192|212:136,1,91,0|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    248,48,105581,1,0,0:0:0
    146,60,105838,2,0,B|49:121,1,91
  5. 02:40:453 (7) - You could add a New combo here to keep the consistency with the previous refrain and to avoid the combo chain there from being too long.
  6. 02:41:607 (11,12) - Please,refrain from doing these kind of stacks. Because of 02:41:607 (11) - ongoing, 02:41:992 (12) - 's stack is really unneded and breaks the flow. Consider moving it instead at x:200 y:144
  7. 03:49:940 (11,1,2) - I don't like that much how you are using this transition. I would have prefered instead something like this,as it fits really good and flows pretty much naturally.
    347,192,229940,2,0,B|304:212|248:192,1,91,0|6,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
    144,136,230453,5,0,0:0:0
    255,301,230710,1,10,0:0:0
    256,302,230966,2,0,B|51:302,1,182,6|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0


That's all. Really nice map,even if I'm a bit unsure about the normal diff itself. For the rest you have done a pretty good job,good work!
posted
all fix

thx :)
posted
Mod finished,feel free to check it whenever you want! :D
posted
update ~ 8-)

need- recheck

thx
posted
Love it , then + star :)
posted
Mod Infos:

Suggestion.
You should fix this.
You must fix this.
______________________________________________
______________________________________________

General

  • There are some unsnapped green timing sections, use AIBat to see and fix them.
    Audio Lead-in: 0,5



Hard

  • 00:05:838 (8) - Add a repetition.
    00:53:787 (5,6) - Try to do something like this:

    01:54:556 (4,5) - ^



I played all diffs and they're fine, good job.
posted
hi
found some issues. you must fix those.

[General]
  1. "normal-slidertick.wav" and "normal-sliderslide.wav" are completely silent. you must remove one.

    Ranking Criteria wrote:

    Hitsounds from notes and sliders must be audible. These provide feedback for the player, and having them silent in a rhythm game doesn't make much sense. If you don't like the default sounds, then find replacements rather than silencing notes. You can use hitsounds from the Custom Hitsound Library or easily find others online. Lowering the volume of a few notes to provide a dampened effect is usually fine, but complete silence is always unacceptable. The end of a spinner (or even the entire spinner) the sliding sound of a slider, and the end of a slider can be silent, but only do it if it makes sense. Finally, you cannot silence both slider ticks and slider slides together.


[Normal]
  1. 02:13:274 - two inherited timing sections. you must remove one.

    Ranking Criteria wrote:

    No two uninherited or two inherited timing sections should be placed at the same point. An inherited timing section may be placed on an uninherited timing section (but only to change the slider speed). Having two uninherited or two inherited sections on top of each other will cause problems within the beatmap.


[Hard]
  1. 02:13:274 - same as normal
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