1. Christmas Eve (3.23 stars, 236 notes)
2. Christmas (4.55 stars, 308 notes)

Sathron wrote:

I'm gonna rank this one note for you! 'v'

Seriously, though, that's a nice song, but you should consider making the beatmap a bit longer ;o

Bobo wrote:

Heyhey.
This looks nice.

:3

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  Christmas

1. 00:19:915(?) add a note, or change (8) to a slider and end at here
2. 01:20:622(5) add a note at here, and the silder begin at 01:20:846
   
   Christmas Eve
3. 00:28:682(3) change to a slider ended at 00:28:906
4. 01:20:622(4) ^
   
   I love your hitsounds~ Good luck!

DarkRingSystem wrote:

[Timing]
I see kanpakyin post so much red line here
But I just feel offset -10~-12ms is fine by using BPM 134.065

1. you should consider adding an easy diff, as your easiest diff is sort of normal/hard atm
2. put heatkai to tags on [Christmas Eve]
3. maybe also put xmas to tags
4. In the intro parts you should use a silenced custom sliderslide (needed only in the beginning imo)
   
   hitsound

   Download: soft-sliderslide.rar
5. maybe you want to add name SB since this is a collab

1. use 2061ms as offset (-6ms in effect) and 134.050bpm and resnap notes and time sections
2. 02:15:433 - this section of 50% volume is 2ms earlier than the actual hitobject which got an extra section of 70% volume, so it's not in effect. Looking at the pattern I guess this might have been moved by accident to this point.
3. 03:06:567 (1) - gradually reduce the volume on the last spinner to reduce the spinning sound, or put 5% from the start

1. there are some unneeded sections (before kiai sections) you can delete
2. 00:37:870 (4) - reshape this a bit
3. 00:50:178 (3) - this could be a bit more symmetric
4. 01:25:981 (2,3) - even if there is no return point on the (3) slider, I would rather not make it overlap like that (I would probably make (2) longer by 1/2 anyway)
5. 02:08:274 (1) - this section is 70% volume in the other diff, here it is 90%
6. 02:37:588 (5,6) - these are exact copies of the previous 2 sliders. You should come up with something else here

1. 00:09:893 (2,3)
2. 00:17:279 (5) - shape it a bit more like (3) before
3. 00:18:174 (7)
4. 00:50:177 (1,2,3,4,5)
5. 00:58:905 (2) - this could look a bit more similar to (1)
6. 01:02:710 (1,2,3) - copy paste the shape of (2) for (1) and (3)
7. 01:31:579 (2)
8. 01:43:888 (1,2,3,4,5)
9. 01:58:211 (3,4) - this overlap of them is pretty ugly imo, you should change this pattern
10. 02:19:920 (3,4) - looks a bit off
11. 02:30:438 (8) - more symmetry would be nice
12. 02:35:809 (1)
13. 02:50:132 (1,2,3,4)

Dangaard wrote:

general

1. you should consider adding an easy diff, as your easiest diff is sort of normal/hard atm
2. put heatkai to tags on [Christmas Eve] Actually, he doesn't want to join this so I'll remove it
3. maybe also put xmas to tags ok
4. In the intro parts you should use a silenced custom sliderslide (needed only in the beginning imo) Im not sure about this
   
   hitsound

   [attachment=0:f8407]soft-sliderslide.rar[/attachment:f8407]
5. maybe you want to add name SB since this is a collab

its no longer a collab x3

timing

1. use 2061ms as offset (-6ms in effect) and 134.050bpm and resnap notes and time sections done
2. 02:15:433 - this section of 50% volume is 2ms earlier than the actual hitobject which got an extra section of 70% volume, so it's not in effect. Looking at the pattern I guess this might have been moved by accident to this point. ok
3. 03:06:567 (1) - gradually reduce the volume on the last spinner to reduce the spinning sound, or put 5% from the start

ok

[Christmas Eve]

1. there are some unneeded sections (before kiai sections) you can delete done, i suppose
2. 00:37:870 (4) - reshape this a bit done
3. 00:50:178 (3) - this could be a bit more symmetric done
4. 01:25:981 (2,3) - even if there is no return point on the (3) slider, I would rather not make it overlap like that (I would probably make (2) longer by 1/2 anyway)
5. 02:08:274 (1) - this section is 70% volume in the other diff, here it is 90% changed to 70%
6. 02:37:588 (5,6) - these are exact copies of the previous 2 sliders. You should come up with something else here

made different sliders

[Christmas]
The map itself is pretty good, though there are some slidershapes you should polish a bit, here are some examples:

1. 00:09:893 (2,3)
2. 00:17:279 (5) - shape it a bit more like (3) before
3. 00:18:174 (7)
4. 00:50:177 (1,2,3,4,5)
5. 00:58:905 (2) - this could look a bit more similar to (1)
6. 01:02:710 (1,2,3) - copy paste the shape of (2) for (1) and (3)
7. 01:31:579 (2)
8. 01:43:888 (1,2,3,4,5)
9. 01:58:211 (3,4) - this overlap of them is pretty ugly imo, you should change this pattern
10. 02:19:920 (3,4) - looks a bit off
11. 02:30:438 (8) - more symmetry would be nice
12. 02:35:809 (1)
13. 02:50:132 (1,2,3,4)

thanks for modding

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Stating only thing that Dan did not state or can be improved further

Make the kiai sections between the 2 diffs consistent and make sure the kiai sections are snapped to the beat

Christmas Eve:
Normal/Aesthetics:
00:08:998 (3) - this slider is a little bit too sharp imo. Here is the code for a smoother slider
176,192,8998,2,0,B|224:159|274:187|274:187|312:208|354:204|392:166,1,225,2|2
00:50:177 (3) - even more symmetrical (destroyed the pointy edge though, so you might want to adjust it a bit more if you want the pointy edge)
192,168,50177,2,0,B|196:241|256:248|256:248|322:241|321:146,1,225,2|8
01:22:404 (3) - It would probably look better if the edges on this slider aren't as sharp
01:36:950 (3) - I found this jump a little surprising since there is no epic lead up to the chorus, so you are feeling the faster speed yet imo (it is fine if you want o keep it, just commenting)
01:56:421 (3,5) - Please make these wave sliders look less sharp
02:35:809 (3,4) - Try to make these sliders blanket themselves (don't like the way there is an edge on the bottom slider with my code, but it does blanket)
128,176,155809,2,0,B|202:236|232:192|280:144|360:193,1,225,2|8
352,272,156704,2,0,B|324:262|295:244|279:250|259:272|240:285|206:291|157:295|113:258,1,225,2|8
02:58:413 (1,2,3,4) - A little confused as to why the spacing increased between 1, 2 and 2,3,4 (I actually broke on 3 in my first play...)

Christmas:
Normal/Aesthetics:
00:45:925 (1) - It would look a little better if the bottom edges weren't as sharp (don't like my own enough, so not sharing code)

SPOILER

01:31:579 (2) - try to make the curves a little rounder (not perfect but I think you get the idea, and you'll probably want to remove the red anchor point)

SPOILER

02:19:024 (1) - this would look better if the edge stuck out a bit more

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Not a bad mapset, just needs a little cleaning. I guess either contact me or Dan (whoever you can reach first to get this map moving)

Breeze wrote:

Red : Unrankable/error staff
Blue : Important things that I think you'd better fix
Black : Just suggestions

Christmas Eve

1. 02:15:431 (T) - Useless timing section
2. 02:55:712 (T) - Make sure this KIAI start timing section is right on 02:55:727 when is the Climax start
3. 01:40:979 (3) - Slider end, are you missing a clap here?
4. 01:47:245 (4) - ^
5. 01:56:868 (3) - Remove this clap or add clap to 01:57:764 (5), 01:58:659 slider end for clap consistency
6. 01:57:204 (5) - put this slider 1/4 beat backword

lols okays.

Christmas

1. 02:15:431 (T) - Useless timing section done
2. 02:55:712 (T) - Make sure this KIAI start timing section is right on 02:55:727 when is the Climax start
3. 02:20:367 (3) - Slider end, add clap
4. 02:36:480 (1) - ^
5. 02:38:271 (3) - ^
6. 02:47:223 (3) - ^

That's all
Send me a forum PM or connect me in game directly for a recheck when you done changes