m i z u k i wrote:

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• ●Red-You must fix it.
  ●Blue-You'd better to fix it.
  ●Black-Suggestion only.

• Fine.

• ●00:05:301 (3) - Add new combo to consist your setting .
  ●00:11:654 (3) - ^

• ●Although I never mind but still to remind you .. You have used 4 slider speeds in this diff and I think the 1.1x section from 01:59:654 is really needless tho .. I can't feel any obvious difference between 1.0x and 1.1x .
  ●00:25:595 (4,5,6) - 1 grid left ? Looks better imo.
  ●00:26:124 (6,1,2) - Spacing here is a little confused .. @_@
  ●00:57:007 (2) - I suggest to stack this on slider 3 instead of 1 to make it more readable .

• ●00:40:242 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - (Comment only) Hard to read at 1st play O.O
  ●01:59:124 (x) - End KIAI here instead of 01:58:595 like how you did on other 2 diffs . I think it will be better if you unify them .
  ●02:09:889 (4) - Could be stacked better .

1. Timing: To play this map comfortably I had to add +10ms local. I still had some slightly late, but that's normal in a way. I suggest you try offset 1076 (+10ms).

1. 01:24:360 (1) - I think a whistle would be more fitting than a finish here. The finish sound doesn't have an immediate impact, but it leaves a nice sound after a while, I just can't see this note with anything other than a whistle though. That's just what I think atleast, it's only a suggestion.
2. 01:33:360 (2,3,4,5) - I really HATE to be nazi, but since the mapset is so flawless, for these, swap to grid level 4 and move them 1 grid right. This will make the pattern look perfect. The star still won't be a perfect star, but it doesn't have to be, its symmetrical, plays good and looks damn nice!
3. 01:35:301 (5) - You could shape this slider a little better. Look here.

1. 00:04:595 (6) - Make this slider look like this?
   Here's the code if you can't do it yourself (slightly improved on grid4 though).
   
   SPOILER

   232,280,4595,2,0,B|216:312|180:328|136:324|112:292,1,140,0|4

2. 00:28:595 (7) - New combo.
3. 00:36:007 (2) - This slider was kinda ugly as well. Maybe try this?
   Here's the code for the slider, and the circle after it, so they both look nice.
   
   SPOILER

   400,208,36007,2,0,B|372:256|316:280|252:260|224:216,1,210,4|0
   200,176,36889,1,0

4. 01:42:713 (1,2,3) - Fix the spacing a little, so they are distanced from each other the same. Best way to do this is to move the endpoint of the slider 01:42:713 (1) by 1 grid to the right.
5. 02:04:595 (5,1) - This spacing is too misleading. You need to distance the other sakura pattern further away. Such spacing is really confusing and is hard to read. If you can't distance it further, I suggest to put 1 where 3 is currently, and go from there somehow. You could also fix the pattern a little so it looks better, but that's up to you.

1. HPdrain -1.
2. 01:18:360 (2,3) - You should increase spacing between these, it could be slightly confusing. Best way would probably be to move the slider a bit further down.
3. 01:36:360 (1) - Remove this new combo, it makes your combos look better if you do.
4. 01:38:477 (5) - New combo and remove new combo from 01:39:536 (1).
5. 01:55:065 (6) - Whistle?
6. 02:09:183 (2,3) - Same thing, you need to increase the spacing between these.

lolcubes wrote:

[General]:

1. Timing: To play this map comfortably I had to add +10ms local. I still had some slightly late, but that's normal in a way. I suggest you try offset 1076 (+10ms).
   fixed! also fixed all of timing points.

[Insane]:

1. 01:24:360 (1) - I think a whistle would be more fitting than a finish here. The finish sound doesn't have an immediate impact, but it leaves a nice sound after a while, I just can't see this note with anything other than a whistle though. That's just what I think atleast, it's only a suggestion.
   fixed! and, fixed 01:23:644 (1) finish sound too.
2. 01:33:360 (2,3,4,5) - I really HATE to be nazi, but since the mapset is so flawless, for these, swap to grid level 4 and move them 1 grid right. This will make the pattern look perfect. The star still won't be a perfect star, but it doesn't have to be, its symmetrical, plays good and looks damn nice!
   fixed!!1
3. 01:35:301 (5) - You could shape this slider a little better. Look here.
   fixed.

[Hard]:

1. 00:04:595 (6) - Make this slider look like this?
   Here's the code if you can't do it yourself (slightly improved on grid4 though).
   
   SPOILER

   232,280,4595,2,0,B|216:312|180:328|136:324|112:292,1,140,0|4

   fixed! thank you for the code.
2. 00:28:595 (7) - New combo.
   fixed.
3. 00:36:007 (2) - This slider was kinda ugly as well. Maybe try this?
   Here's the code for the slider, and the circle after it, so they both look nice.
   
   SPOILER

   400,208,36007,2,0,B|372:256|316:280|252:260|224:216,1,210,4|0
   200,176,36889,1,0

   fixed! thank you for the code.
4. 01:42:713 (1,2,3) - Fix the spacing a little, so they are distanced from each other the same. Best way to do this is to move the endpoint of the slider 01:42:713 (1) by 1 grid to the right.
   fixed.
5. 02:04:595 (5,1) - This spacing is too misleading. You need to distance the other sakura pattern further away. Such spacing is really confusing and is hard to read. If you can't distance it further, I suggest to put 1 where 3 is currently, and go from there somehow. You could also fix the pattern a little so it looks better, but that's up to you.
   fixed.

[Normal]:

1. HPdrain -1.
   fixed.
2. 01:18:360 (2,3) - You should increase spacing between these, it could be slightly confusing. Best way would probably be to move the slider a bit further down.
   fixed.
3. 01:36:360 (1) - Remove this new combo, it makes your combos look better if you do.
   fixed.
4. 01:38:477 (5) - New combo and remove new combo from 01:39:536 (1).
   fixed.
5. 01:55:065 (6) - Whistle?
   fixed.
6. 02:09:183 (2,3) - Same thing, you need to increase the spacing between these.
   fixed.

That's about it!
You could probably make some sliders more pretty in your hard diff, lots of them looked slightly weird. I didn't want to fix all of them, instead I just provided 2 of the fixes, and maybe you can try to fix them yourself, it's pretty fun to do so! Try grid4 if you can't shape them properly with grid3 btw.
fixed some sliders.

All in all, I was really amazed how well this map plays. I am not a fan of replacing the default hitnormal, however this worked really nicely and was really enjoyable.
Just remember, try to fix the sliders if you can, when you fix the above and apply the suggestions you want, call me back once more.
Meanwhile, it looks like I lost some kudosu...

Patchouli wrote:

Hi Apricot

[Normal]
Fine

[hard]
Fine

[Insane]
00:08:467 (1,2,3,4,5) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

368,100,8467,5,4
188,136,8644,1,2
324,200,8820,1,0
228,216,8997,1,2
272,296,9173,1,4

グリッドのずれを修正して見た目を綺麗に。
DSに合わせて置いてるので修正しませんでした

00:08:820 (3) - add whistle
00:08:997 (4) - remove whistle
00:09:173 (5) - add whistle
↑3つ直しました

00:10:055 (3,4) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

1グリッド下げてかつスライダーの向きの調整。

216,108,10055,1,0
216,108,10232,2,0,B|180:124|132:112,2,80,2|0|2

修正しました

00:16:585 (8) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

7のスライダーを左右反転して配置。座標:x464,y140

464,140,16585,2,0,B|432:148|416:180|416:180|400:196|376:204,1,80,2|4

少し配置変えました
00:16:938 (1) - 1グリッドずつ左下へ
上に伴ってここも少し配置を変えました
00:26:114 (7) - 左右反転
修正しました
00:56:644 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

Spacing調整。もしこの提案を受け入れる場合(2)の位置を少し調整したほうがいいかも

224,280,56467,1,0
312,200,56644,1,0
288,184,56732,1,8
264,168,56820,1,0
240,152,56908,1,2
216,168,56997,1,2
192,184,57085,1,0

ここはこのままで貫きます！

01:06:703 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - 4グリッド左?
DSに沿っているのでNo
01:20:114 (4) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

こんな感じの向きにしてみては?
Ctrl+shift+RでSelection Centerにチェックを入れて45度回転。

128,208,80114,2,0,B|79:216|54:185,2,80,0|2|2

No

01:28:761 (5) - 座標:x204,y140
位置調整しました
01:53:291 (1,2) - 1を2gird down,2を2grid up
No


01:56:026 (3,4,5,6,7) - Suggestion!

SPOILER

少し形がいびつだったのでgrid snapはずして置きなおし。

102,107,116026,1,0
118,70,116114,1,2
150,45,116203,1,0
189,38,116291,1,2
227,49,116379,1,0

修正しました

Chocopikel wrote:

ッシャ！！！！！！
Let's go my noob mod!!

[General]
NormalとHard・Insaneの気合タイムが若干違います
Normalの01:59:114で１回気合タイムを止めましょう fixed.

[Normal]
NoteがResnapされてません
TimingタブからResnap All Notesして下さい fixed.
00:57:183 (2) - 少し重なり気味だから見栄え的に1grid up? Just a suggestion fixed.
01:02:477 (4) - New combo No.
01:48:007 (2) - Same comment as 00:57:183 (2) fixed.
01:53:301 (4) - New combo No.
MAT/BATによっては１つのコンボが長いと指摘されるかもしれません

[Hard]
NoteがResnapされてません
TimingタブからResnap All Notesして下さい fixed.
00:03:536 (2) - 終点を00:02:124 (4)の始点に置けるとべたー fixed.
00:07:418 (1) - もう１回リターンのほうが合ってるかな No.
00:15:889 (3) - ^ No.
00:40:242 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - サークルが重なってるとこと重なってないところがばらばらしてるので配置を整えてみてください fixed.
00:47:301 (7) - Same comment as 00:07:418 (1) No.

[Insane]
Looks fine!!

Zelos wrote:

General:
I know this came form one of the BMS games but I cant figure out which one
Crimmi can probably figure out specifically which one and if he does, you put that in the tags fixed.

Normal:
00:16:938 (2) - grab the 2nd slider point and move to the left 1 grid point so it becomes symmetrical a little more with the previous slider that is like this
00:40:232 (2,3,4) - the spacing is inconsistent here. you should probably fix this.
01:19:408 (3) - new combo since timing wise, its quite distant with the previous note.
01:23:644 (3) - new combo since timing wise, its quite distant with the previous note.
01:50:114 (4) - the little hump in this slider looks a bit more towards the up side of the slider (I think) if it is, make the slider symmetrical?
02:10:232 (3) - new combo since timing wise, its quite distant with the previous note?
all fixed.

Hard:
00:02:114 (4,2) - if you were trying to make the ends stacked, they are just a teeny bit unstacked. fix if you want. fixed. (probably...)
00:17:997 (1) - remove the new combo here? it seems kinda useless since there is no significance as to why it is one. it also keeps it consistent with the last note in the song also. I'll keep it
00:54:703 (3,4) - (suggestion) perhaps maybe move slider 4 outwards a little away from slider 3? the only reason I didnt say this for slider 2 is because slider 2 makes the pattern with slider 3 whereas slider 4 doesnt really. fixed some sliders.
01:05:291 (3,4,5) - kick back slider so that it keeps the map consistent? you use kick back sliders mostly for 1/4th parts I'll keep it
01:55:938 (2,3,4,5,6) - ^^^ ^

Insane:
00:17:467 (4,5,1) - 4,5 are a 1/2 timing distance and 5,1 are 1/1 timing distance. this just may cause some confusion since grid wise they are the same distance. keep if you want though ^

1. 00:42:723 (2) - This slider is unrankable because you can't see the repeater arrow from a previous hitburst. You will need to reposition it somewhere else.
2. 02:00:370 (1,2,3,4) - You should fix the spacing so it's equal. It looks better too. Move 2 by 7 grids to the left, move 3 by 7 grids to the right.