00:23:669 (5) - the sharp of the slider doesnt fit to the (4)
00:25:726 (1,3) - I don't like the placing of these two objects, I mean they are close to each over, but havent any relation, and it also doesnt look that good imo. I also don't like the sharp of the (1) in relation to the (9).
00:29:840 (1,2,3,4,5) - I didnt play your map, but I think that would be a bit ugly to read.
00:34:126 (7,8,9) - try to make it a bit more sharp like on 00:27:269 (8,9,1) -
00:36:698 (5,6,1) - dont like the postioning of these. Probably a bit difficult to read the (2) and (3).
00:38:069 (1,2,3) - hm... the angle (1) and (2) doesnt fit in my opinion.
00:38:755 (3) - I think it has blanket potential if you modify the (1)
00:41:498 (4) - sliderangle:o Probably it's just the concept I dont like that much, in the end its your decision what you are doing^^
At least I would make it more like this http://puu.sh/vga2d/429aefe5d0.jpg
00:48:698 (4) - fix that please, more like this http://puu.sh/vga8e/abc2d6f0f4.jpg
00:51:269 (6,7,8,9,10) - they look like blueberrys:) I would make them more dynamic instead of placing them that close to each other.
00:54:012 (4,7) - http://www.youscreen.de/fhveziopl06.jpg would move it a bit more to the right.
00:55:726 (6,1) - doesnt look that good. Your following concept looks interesting, but I am not sure if other people think the same way.
00:57:440 (5,6,7) - angle
01:11:669 (2,3,4) - probably reading hard because of angle
01:20:583 (5,6,7,8) - distance?
01:22:298 (3,4,5,6) - -^
01:23:669 (2) - make the angle more in relation with the (1). Should look better afterwards.
for the following part, I wouldn't make these slider which end on blue ticks, but just personal opinion.
01:29:840 (1,2,3) - I think it would be more correct to make it like this http://www.youscreen.de/lzfxoyeik96.jpg or any other variations. 01:30:526 - is the most important vocal here, but you 'ignored' it.
01:32:069 (3,4) - I would just switch them in the timing -> http://www.youscreen.de/ifupztzpe84.jpg
01:35:840 (3,4) - same here
01:34:983 (1,2,3) - http://www.youscreen.de/zlijmgidu74.jpg I would do it like that, would fit better to vocal and is just more correct in my opinion. (And if you follow my recomandation I also would delete 01:37:898 (4) - .)
01:38:069 (5) - check this, would make a slider with this note.