HoneyWorks feat. Gom - Terekakushi Kinenbi

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Topic Starter
Serizawa Haruki
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CircleFairy
Hi from my mod queue :-)

Easy
00:32:845 (6) - Add a note here.

01:31:792 (6) - Same as above.
01:45:301 (2) - A reverse slider fits better here.

02:44:248 (3) - Same as above.

Normal
03:07:757 (2) - I like a reverse slider here, it fits the song better.


Hard
00:00:739 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - This whole section doesn't know what it wants to be, the song plays the same but the mapping changes, I would advise choosing 1 type of mapping out of these different sections and sticking with that 1.
00:13:371 (2,3) - I don't like the spacing of these notes.

00:22:494 (6) - ctrl+g here for diversity.
00:48:459 (1,2,3,4) - This can be mapped better.

01:21:441 (7) - ctrl+g for diversity.

Anniversary
00:39:862 (1) - This slider needs moving up higher, it makes the spacing for the next jumps too much.
02:21:968 (7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Move these 2 sections a slight direction so that they are not just stacked on top of each other.
02:52:669 (3) - Be more creative here and here 02:53:371 (5) - Moving the sliders slightly so they are not stacked makes a big difference.
02:57:625 (1) - Spinner needs to end on white tick.
03:07:757 (2) - ctrl+g
03:14:424 (1) - Consider mapping this spinner.

Hope it helped :-)
Topic Starter
Serizawa Haruki
Thank you very much! :)
CucumberCuc
Hi :3

[Easy]
00:06:354 (1,2,3) are close and 2,3 far
00:11:968 (1,2,3) ^
00:16:178 (3,4,1) ^
00:20:389 (1,2,3) far
00:24:599 (3,4,1) far and 4,1 are close
00:27:406 (2,1) are close, but you can certainly leave, but this is not recommended for such complexity if they are close to each other
00:31:617 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
00:46:354 (2,1) {if you removed circle} ^
01:26:354 (2,1) ^
01:30:564 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
01:45:301 (2,1) ^
02:18:283 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
00:30:915 (4,5) overlap
00:32:845 (6) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
00:41:266 (3,4,5) are close
00:46:880 (3) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
00:52:494 (3,1) overlap
00:53:371 (4) move 1 right
01:18:985 (4,1) are close
01:22:143 (1,2) ^
01:23:547 (3,1) overlap
01:31:792 (6) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
01:39:687 (2,3) are close
01:52:318 (4,1) ^
01:53:722 (2,3) slightly ^
02:16:178 (2,3) ^
02:17:932 (4,5) ^
02:23:897 put circle
02:44:248 (2,1) are close
02:48:985 (1,2) ^
02:51:968 (1,2) slightly ^
03:06:003 (1,2) ^
03:08:810 (1,2) ^
03:10:213 (3,1,2) ^

[Normal]
00:06:354 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) blanket
00:08:810 (8,1) are close
00:10:564 (3) move down
00:13:196 (3,1) slightly far
00:20:389 (3,4) slightly are close
00:31:617 (2,3) ^
00:33:196 (2,3) ^
00:34:424 (1,2) ^
00:41:792 (4,5,6) different range
00:46:354 (3) move 1 right
00:49:161 (2) ^
00:51:090 (1) ^
00:52:143 (3) move 1 right and down
00:54:073 (1) ^
01:16:529 (2,3) slightly far
01:44:424 (1,2) are close
01:46:704 (7,1) ^
01:48:459 (2) move 1 up
01:56:529 (3,4) slightly far
01:57:231 (1,2) slightly are close
02:21:090 - 02:21:792 - 02:22:494 - 02:23:196 - 02:23:897 : 2 sliders and circle for end?

[Hard]
00:05:301 (6,7) far
00:06:704 (2,3) ^
00:09:511 (2,3) ^
00:13:371 (2,3) do far?
00:46:354 (4,5) ctrl+g?
00:52:494 (4,5,6,7) different range
01:39:336 (2,3,4,1) do far?
02:23:897 put circle?

[Anniversary]
00:38:634 (5,6,7) do far if you can
01:26:529 NC
01:32:143 (6,7,8) do far if you can
01:54:950 (6) maybe slider be better?
02:23:897 put circle?
Topic Starter
Serizawa Haruki

CucumberCuc wrote:

Hi :3

[Easy]
00:06:354 (1,2,3) are close and 2,3 far
00:11:968 (1,2,3) ^
00:16:178 (3,4,1) ^
00:20:389 (1,2,3) far
00:24:599 (3,4,1) far and 4,1 are close
00:27:406 (2,1) are close, but you can certainly leave, but this is not recommended for such complexity if they are close to each other
00:31:617 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
00:46:354 (2,1) {if you removed circle} ^
01:26:354 (2,1) ^
01:30:564 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
01:45:301 (2,1) ^
02:18:283 (5,1) {if you removed circle} ^
00:30:915 (4,5) overlap
00:32:845 (6) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
00:41:266 (3,4,5) are close
00:46:880 (3) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
00:52:494 (3,1) overlap
00:53:371 (4) move 1 right
01:18:985 (4,1) are close
01:22:143 (1,2) ^
01:23:547 (3,1) overlap
01:31:792 (6) it's fast for beginners, remove pls
01:39:687 (2,3) are close
01:52:318 (4,1) ^
01:53:722 (2,3) slightly ^
02:16:178 (2,3) ^
02:17:932 (4,5) ^
02:23:897 put circle
02:44:248 (2,1) are close
02:48:985 (1,2) ^
02:51:968 (1,2) slightly ^
03:06:003 (1,2) ^
03:08:810 (1,2) ^
03:10:213 (3,1,2) ^

[Normal]
00:06:354 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) blanket
00:08:810 (8,1) are close
00:10:564 (3) move down
00:13:196 (3,1) slightly far
00:20:389 (3,4) slightly are close
00:31:617 (2,3) ^
00:33:196 (2,3) ^
00:34:424 (1,2) ^
00:41:792 (4,5,6) different range
00:46:354 (3) move 1 right
00:49:161 (2) ^
00:51:090 (1) ^
00:52:143 (3) move 1 right and down
00:54:073 (1) ^
01:16:529 (2,3) slightly far
01:44:424 (1,2) are close
01:46:704 (7,1) ^
01:48:459 (2) move 1 up
01:56:529 (3,4) slightly far
01:57:231 (1,2) slightly are close
02:21:090 - 02:21:792 - 02:22:494 - 02:23:196 - 02:23:897 : 2 sliders and circle for end?

[Hard]
00:05:301 (6,7) far
00:06:704 (2,3) ^
00:09:511 (2,3) ^
00:13:371 (2,3) do far?
00:46:354 (4,5) ctrl+g?
00:52:494 (4,5,6,7) different range
01:39:336 (2,3,4,1) do far?
02:23:897 put circle?

[Anniversary]
00:38:634 (5,6,7) do far if you can
01:26:529 NC
01:32:143 (6,7,8) do far if you can
01:54:950 (6) maybe slider be better?
02:23:897 put circle?
Thanks a lot! :)
greeeeeeeeg
NM from my queue

Anniversary
00:00:739 (1) - you overuse this pattern, same goes for 00:02:143 (1) - 00:04:248 (3) - 00:05:652 (3) - 00:07:055 (3) - 00:08:459 (3) - 00:09:161 (1) - 00:18:108 (10) - and so on, you cant just use the same pattern over and over and call it a finished map, try to introduce at least some variety

00:03:547 (1) - why did you break the flow here? You can decide to break the flow wherever there is a SV change or a distinctive sound in the song, meanwhile you decided to break it for no reason

This map isn't good. It feels like you placed circles and sliders randomly. Circle placement has no thought put into it. You ignore important sounds in the song like here 00:21:617 (5) - you ignored the triple sound, same goes for 00:18:810 (2) - I won't bother looking for more, you get the point.

The structure looks ugly, tons of unnecessary overlaps like 00:07:757 (1,3) - 00:01:441 (3,4) - 00:04:073 (2,4) - 00:06:354 (1,4) - and so on, I guess you can call them patterns but as I mentioned before try to keep the number of times you repeat a structure as low as possible

00:20:915 (4,5) - gaps between sounds larger than 1/4 are awkward to read and play, try to never leave such gaps and use filler rythm (pishifat has a video on this subject)

To sum this up, it looks like you have some idea on how to place circles and sliders on a canvas but you put no thought into it. You don't listen to the song. You should try to educate yourself in the basics of mapping first, and I'd recommend you to watch some of the pishifat tutorials as he explains stuff quite nicely.
Topic Starter
Serizawa Haruki

8eight8eight wrote:

NM from my queue

Anniversary
00:00:739 (1) - you overuse this pattern, same goes for 00:02:143 (1) - 00:04:248 (3) - 00:05:652 (3) - 00:07:055 (3) - 00:08:459 (3) - 00:09:161 (1) - 00:18:108 (10) - and so on, you cant just use the same pattern over and over and call it a finished map, try to introduce at least some variety

00:03:547 (1) - why did you break the flow here? You can decide to break the flow wherever there is a SV change or a distinctive sound in the song, meanwhile you decided to break it for no reason

This map isn't good. It feels like you placed circles and sliders randomly. Circle placement has no thought put into it. You ignore important sounds in the song like here 00:21:617 (5) - you ignored the triple sound, same goes for 00:18:810 (2) - I won't bother looking for more, you get the point.

The structure looks ugly, tons of unnecessary overlaps like 00:07:757 (1,3) - 00:01:441 (3,4) - 00:04:073 (2,4) - 00:06:354 (1,4) - and so on, I guess you can call them patterns but as I mentioned before try to keep the number of times you repeat a structure as low as possible

00:20:915 (4,5) - gaps between sounds larger than 1/4 are awkward to read and play, try to never leave such gaps and use filler rythm (pishifat has a video on this subject)

To sum this up, it looks like you have some idea on how to place circles and sliders on a canvas but you put no thought into it. You don't listen to the song. You should try to educate yourself in the basics of mapping first, and I'd recommend you to watch some of the pishifat tutorials as he explains stuff quite nicely.
Thanks for the advice
3mplify
Anniversary

00:02:143 (7,8) - change them to this http://i.imgur.com/hRCFODy.jpg (you should make a circle with 7 8 9 10 sliders) slider 7 is on x:304 y:258, slider 8 is on x:241 y:81
00:08:283 (2,3,4) - this goes better i guess http://i.imgur.com/R5VIBPh.jpg
00:09:862 (1,2) - copy prev 2 sliders and move them to x:260 y:77 http://i.imgur.com/uwf7yHy.jpg
00:10:564 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - copy and move to x:121 y:66
00:13:722 (4,5,6) - copy, rotate by -7 (Selection centre)
00:17:582 (7) - new combo
00:18:810 (2) - rotate by 20 and move to x:328 y:173
00:21:441 (5) - move to x:369 y:104
00:37:231 - 00:59:686 - kiai?
01:23:020 (4) - move to x:325 y:198
02:16:003 (2,3,4,5) - looks bad tbh
02:57:582 (1) - end spinner here and add break

GOOD LUCK WITH RANKING CAUSE IT WAS AWAZING AND I HOPE I WILL FARM IT IN THE FUTURE
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