Lilyanna wrote:

Hii from queue

Farewell

00:29:448 - 00:29:886 - can map the vocals here its feels better than going straight into kiai like that imo I didn't mapped vocal at anypart before kiai, take a look at 01:57:039 - 03:38:645 - 05:02:732 -
00:39:083 (1,4) - they are not stacked properly omg that's true, fixed
00:48:499 (2,3) - this movement feels forced imo i would ctrl g these 00:48:499 (2,4) - for better jump and it reduce this 00:48:937 (4,5) - jump because it emphasize nothing strong the movement is great imo, every transition is thinking on vocal pitches.
00:57:915 (6,7,8) - this the only time u did this kind of triple here maybe just stack them like other that's the purpose imo, having all stacked maybe feels kinda repetitive, I wanna add this variation to emphasize the beginning of a new section, also consistency with 05:17:185 (4,5,6) -
01:48:061 (2) - i think moving this to x126 y368 will be better placed imo it follow up the slider direction better the distance between 01:48:061 (2,3) - will be too short if I do that, also I usually use this kind of movements and I really like it uwu
02:37:112 (2,3,4) - this triple could use polishing move the 02:37:112 (2) - ctrl- right arrow like 5 grid Okay
03:11:492 (1) - i would suggest flip this to -90 degree and replace for better flow the current one looks better, also I did it lot of times throught the whole map, I don't think that is bad or something
04:00:543 (1,1) - can stack these also ctrl h this 04:02:294 (1) - and replace nice catch, fixed
04:43:242 (2,3,4) - same polish unless its intended to be curved that way fixed
05:30:762 (1) - no reason for nc here remove nc and add nc here 05:31:638 (3) - at first was like your suggestion but after some discussion with xinely, we decided to place NC at 05:30:762 - for readability on snap

sry if not helpful but map is good gl !

Sotarks wrote:

nice chitanda bg

Farewell
00:39:740 (2) - imo spacing is too big compared to the previous ones you use really small spacing.. that's true, fixed
01:52:659 (1,2) - it's pretty sad that player can't click that kick here, i can suggest you to change to smth like this
it will be better imo. I can't hear something at 01:52:878 -, I testplayed and plays nice tbh
01:54:411 (1) - oh please reduce the SV here, it's really too fast!! Try something like 0,70x 70 feels like too pasive, I don't like uwu
02:26:711 (3,4) - try and use 0,92x spacing here, you can move it like x391y171 okie
02:33:718 (3,4) - ^ okie
02:37:112 (2,3,2,3,5,6,7) - make those 1/4 spacing the same please, for consistency. ohohoho nice catch
02:53:535 (4,1) - try and move those 182|42, to give more emphasis to 02:53:535 (4) - 's clap. okie fixed
02:57:039 (3,1) - ^ if you do that do it everywhere in this section if possible I only did on 03:07:112 (1,2) - cause the part you pointed out previously was the middle of this section, so deserve more emphasis imo, also clap are more prominent there, for consistency :3
03:06:236 (1,2,1) - increase SV for those pls more than the current one? the previous part was on 0.70 of SV and I'm increasing to 0.85 at 03:06:236 - , I think that is enough.
03:09:740 (1) - fix stack xd lol rip me
03:36:017 (1) - same as above reduce SV pls same as my previous answer
04:15:324 (3,4) - 1/4 spacing fixed
04:26:820 (1) - i'd avoid the overlap imo Okie, no more unsightly overlap
04:45:214 (4) - fix stack xd² lol how?? hahaha I suck orz, anyways how you detect that? did you checked note by note?
05:09:520 (2) - too far from 05:08:864 (1) - reduce pls like 05:13:024 (2) - here for exemple oks, fixed

nice sb, nice map! Thank you!

gl buddy

Xinely wrote:

kono mappu ga daisuki :3

Jean time :
- 04:52:222 (5,6) - dont you think if 1/1 slider is better for conistency vocal with 04:49:594 (1,2) - ? because u gave much circles for piano so imo a chill time for while would be nice to keep relax fixed
- 05:31:638 - this piano is strong compared with previous, also 10% is kinda unaudible for me. how about 20 or 30 instead? I'm agree, so I changed to 30%

also personally i think the diffname could be better. farewell is like for sad stuff when memories of graduation (imo) should be happiness memories so how about "Precious Memories" or "Reminisce" ? mmm graduation was sad at least for me, I miss my friends, my teachers, my routine uwu, etc, also the song is kinda sad too imo, I'll keep like that uwu

Xinely wrote:

kono mappu ga daisuki

SB time :
- 05:03:608 - i think you can give sakura fall effect here. so far my life when watching anime.. all graduation scene is always in spring time with falling sakura so imo it would be nice (and current this time is pretty plain w/o effect The sakura effect on this part it's following how it seems in the BG. The BG shows how the petals are getting into the classroom, so that's why the petals are going left to right instead of up and down
- 04:21:565 - since in here those circles effect is moving up and down for bridge time (more than 20 seconds), imo its quite boring for having up and down circles in 20 sec. how about divide it by two? so circle up and down starts from there until 04:35:579 - and 04:35:579 - to 04:49:594 - with circles move left to right and so on That's actually a nice idea, but how it's widescreen, having circles moving left to right it would looks kinda strange. Besides, the circles are following the claps across that part, and it's the same

also personally i think the diffname could be better. farewell is like for sad stuff when memories of graduation (imo) should be happiness memories so how about "Precious Memories" or "Reminisce" ?

1. 00:29:448 - For consistency, around that timestamp the lyric of "あな" better be placed on centre and have same effect like 01:57:039 - 03:38:645 - and 05:02:732 - . I'm not really sure why that one is diffrent while each part have similiar vocal pitch on the music
2. 01:12:367 - The lyric of "少し切った前髪　出会ったあの頃のよう" have too much additive color compared to the rest lyrics of this part 00:58:353 - . That excesive additive color make the lyric weird and hard to read lol
3. 01:19:375 - Same as above, too much additive color on "鼻先かすめる春の匂い" also on this one 01:40:397 - on the lyric "教室、廊下、"
4. 01:54:411 - Even though the whole lyric of "気がつけばあなたのこと探してる" is correct, but around that timestamp you wrongly to have "る" as a vowel lol, in this case it supposed to be an "う" instead "る", and I don't really think the current lyric effect is the best way to suit the vocal there. Maybe you can just simply adjust the fade out of "気がつけばあなたのこと探してる" to be end on 01:56:163 - instead so it can suit the vocal better on that one without having a wrong vowel of "る"
5. 02:18:061 - The fade out effect of this lyric "“行かないで”　胸の奥が苦しくなる" is supposed to be end here 02:25:944 - instead 02:26:820 - imo, because it's not looks good and contradictive when the flash here 02:25:944 - over but the sb lyric still play or more like recurring after the flash
6. 03:07:112 - The fade out effect of this lyric "またすぐ会えるよ、と笑うあなたの" is supposed to be end around here 03:13:681 - instead 03:21:127 - . Because it is obvious the lyric itself stop on 03:13:681 - and it not recurring after that
7. 03:36:017 - Same problem as 01:54:411 - regarding the wrongly vowel, it's supposed to be "う" instead "く". Maybe you can just simply adjust the fade out of "あたしも精一杯笑って頷く" to be end on 03:37:769 - instead so it can suit the vocal better on that one without having a wrong vowel of "く"
8. 04:06:674 - The fade out effect of this lyric "一生分　目に焼き付けておくんだ" is supposed to be end here 04:07:550 - instead 04:08:426 - imo, because it's not looks good and contradictive when the flash here 02:25:944 - over but the sb lyric still play or more like recurring after the flash
9. 05:09:740 - Around that timestamp, the lyric of "あなたに恋をしたあたしの青春" feels weird imo. Why is "あな" have a pink font? yet "恋" have a white color lol. I think you should recomposition the font color on that one if you want to highlight the lyric better

1. 01:25:068 (4,5,6) - I think a larger spacing works better on that one imo like you did on 03:06:236 - to highlight and emphsized the drum sequence on that one, something like http://puu.sh/tQgvg/8889922878.jpg or somthing better?
2. 01:48:499 (4,5) - The low spacing somewhat play a bit weird imo. I think to match the vocal sequence here 01:48:061 (2,3,4,5,1) - I think you can do ctrl+g on these two 01:48:280 (3,4) - so at least (4,5) have a better emphasized http://puu.sh/tQgPG/168f956f13.jpg, somewhat same like you did on 03:29:667 (2,3,4,5) -
3. 03:07:112 (1) - Redundant nc, not really necesarry imo

Mako Sakata wrote:

Hello!
Sugestion,

Sb

1. 00:29:448 - For consistency, around that timestamp the lyric of "あな" better be placed on centre and have same effect like 01:57:039 - 03:38:645 - and 05:02:732 - . I'm not really sure why that one is diffrent while each part have similiar vocal pitch on the music I feel the intensity different, so no
2. 01:12:367 - The lyric of "少し切った前髪　出会ったあの頃のよう" have too much additive color compared to the rest lyrics of this part 00:58:353 - . That excesive additive color make the lyric weird and hard to read lol I've think that too, but regardless what I do, it will always be that shiny, because disabling the additive would look really messy, and I don't want to overcharge the .osb copypasting the lyric code without additive
3. 01:19:375 - Same as above, too much additive color on "鼻先かすめる春の匂い" also on this one 01:40:397 - on the lyric "教室、廊下、" Same
4. 01:54:411 - Even though the whole lyric of "気がつけばあなたのこと探してる" is correct, but around that timestamp you wrongly to have "る" as a vowel lol, in this case it supposed to be an "う" instead "る", and I don't really think the current lyric effect is the best way to suit the vocal there. Maybe you can just simply adjust the fade out of "気がつけばあなたのこと探してる" to be end on 01:56:163 - instead so it can suit the vocal better on that one without having a wrong vowel of "る" At the end, switched to "う" instead of "る". Putting the whole verse it would look overfillied
5. 02:18:061 - The fade out effect of this lyric "“行かないで”　胸の奥が苦しくなる" is supposed to be end here 02:25:944 - instead 02:26:820 - imo, because it's not looks good and contradictive when the flash here 02:25:944 - over but the sb lyric still play or more like recurring after the flash Hell no, I'm trying to follow the lyrics until the vocal it's over, and IMHO it doesn't seems contradictive or bad
6. 03:07:112 - The fade out effect of this lyric "またすぐ会えるよ、と笑うあなたの" is supposed to be end around here 03:13:681 - instead 03:21:127 - . Because it is obvious the lyric itself stop on 03:13:681 - and it not recurring after that For variation, in that part I decided to let both verses of the song end at the same time
7. 03:36:017 - Same problem as 01:54:411 - regarding the wrongly vowel, it's supposed to be "う" instead "く". Maybe you can just simply adjust the fade out of "あたしも精一杯笑って頷く" to be end on 03:37:769 - instead so it can suit the vocal better on that one without having a wrong vowel of "く" Same that in the previous situation
8. 04:06:674 - The fade out effect of this lyric "一生分　目に焼き付けておくんだ" is supposed to be end here 04:07:550 - instead 04:08:426 - imo, because it's not looks good and contradictive when the flash here 02:25:944 - over but the sb lyric still play or more like recurring after the flash Same as I said before
9. 05:09:740 - Around that timestamp, the lyric of "あなたに恋をしたあたしの青春" feels weird imo. Why is "あな" have a pink font? yet "恋" have a white color lol. I think you should recomposition the font color on that one if you want to highlight the lyric better No, that "あなた" it's special, that's why it does have a font color

The sb reminds me of rizen's
I think it worth to be popped or have a further discussion regarding the sb, anw gl~ No, popping the bubble for the SB it's unnecesary, because if you don't like the storyboard, or it's too shiny and kawaii for you, then just disable it. It doesn't have to be a DQ/Pop reason

Mako Sakata wrote:

Hello! Yahallo!
Sugestion

Diff

1. 01:25:068 (4,5,6) - I think a larger spacing works better on that one imo like you did on 03:06:236 - to highlight and emphsized the drum sequence on that one, something like http://puu.sh/tQgvg/8889922878.jpg or somthing better? nope, they are very different to take it as an example, also the current distance is because there isn't vocal.
2. 01:48:499 (4,5) - The low spacing somewhat play a bit weird imo. I think to match the vocal sequence here 01:48:061 (2,3,4,5,1) - I think you can do ctrl+g on these two 01:48:280 (3,4) - so at least (4,5) have a better emphasized http://puu.sh/tQgPG/168f956f13.jpg, somewhat same like you did on 03:29:667 (2,3,4,5) - Well I'm agree with you tbh, I decided to change this part in another way, very similar but with a jump between 01:48:499 (4,5) -
3. 03:07:112 (1) - Redundant nc, not really necesarry imo minor stuff but yeah, thanks for point out

The sb reminds me of rizen's
I think it worth to be popped or have a further discussion regarding the sb, anw gl~

Nao Tomori wrote:

why is the sb a bunch of random anime girls xd mmm cause this song isn't from an specific anime and is more interesting imo >.<

[farewell]

00:48:937 (4,5) - don't really like how much emphasis is given to 5 here, it's a really big jump but other similar vocal starts like 00:49:594 (1) - are much smaller spacing. well is kinda overenphasized that's true, but I'm trying to increase distances gradually here to give more intense according to the movements, also trying to do something similar as 02:16:090 (2,3,4,5) -

01:25:287 (5) - think this one has too low spacing, it has a hitsounded kick and everything, something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7366037 is better imo. Okie, fixed

01:34:703 (3,1,2) - could have more consistent visual spacing Ok, fixed

01:48:499 (4,5) - think 5 should have more emphasis than 4 since 4 isn't really a strong sound and 5 is a vocal downbeat. yeah, I hope is fine now

01:57:915 (1,4,5) - could be more consistent visual spacing hope is fine now

01:57:915 (1,1) - isn't actually stacked lul sure

02:03:170 (1,2) - cmon lol ayyy /me sucks D: fixed >.<

02:12:805 (4,5) - these things look kinda pinched compared to the more flat ones used elsewhere. I don't think so, actually 02:09:302 (4,5) - have more distance, I really wanna keep this one uwu

02:24:849 (4,5) - i feel that this spacing is also too large considering the intensity of the song. well this part is still kiai and could be acceptable imo, uwu let me keep that D:

03:06:236 (1,2) - these look kinda ugly, if you move the red point further into the slider it'd look better imo. I saw it on Natsu's maps and I love it, looks cute and gives more challenge to players imo

03:57:915 (3,4) - this spacing is too big imo, even though it fits a pattern. something like https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/7366082 is better. okie, uwu rip sr

04:31:419 (4,5,1) - i think this pattern emphasizes 4 too much compared to 1, even though 1 is a stronger downbeat. That's true, fixed

05:01:857 - think you should add a circle here before spinner. okie, added circle
tbh i dont think there should be a spinner anyway Spin is fine imo pls pls uwu

05:17:185 (4,5,6) - i think this one is a bit overspaced, the movement was kind of uncomfortable for me. reduced >.<

05:30:324 (3,4) - and this one is a bit too big too, even though the overall spacing itself is not that large the repeated back and forth make it a bit more intense than i think it should be. uwu ok fixed.

respond and pm me Okie >.<

my map: https://osu.ppy.sh/s/568198

Monstrata wrote:

Randomly downloaded this map xD.

You have duplicate osb files. One of them is unused and is taking up unnecessary file space. wtf, is this a bug? cause it wasn't here before update, anyways removed, Thanks for pointing out

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01:31:200 (4,1) - This jump felt quite big compared to previous jumps. It doesn't really emphasize a particularly strong note in the song so I think you can do something smaller here. I could say the same for 01:43:462 (4,1) - . At least here theres vocals, but its not a really emphasized note vocally I'm emphasizing a drum here, if you take a look to 01:33:389 - 01:35:141 - 01:36:893 - 01:38:645 - etc, all the ones are enphasized with jumps, now why I decided to use a long jump here, maybe is just to have more consistent visual spacing.
03:06:236 (1,2,3) - I think this arrangement makes it look very similar to 1/2 spacings. I tried something similar, but brought the sliders a bit closer together so players will wonder why they are closer than usual. Okie, fixed.

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03:18:061 (3,4) - This sounds better as just a slider. 4 isn't really that audible so I think mapping a jump to it feels kinda odd. This rhythm is the "reply" to 03:16:309 (3) - . true, fixed
04:56:601 (1,2) - This jump isn't very characteristic of the section. Your SV is slower and so is your base structure and spacing, so this comes across as unusual due to the large spacing and the flowbreak from 1>2 is to enphasize vocal, also I put a similar jump at 04:52:003 (4,5) -
05:00:981 (4,5,6) - I would also recommend making these jumps smaller to fit the quiet atmosphere better. Okie, fixed

[]

Only popping for unrankable issue, if you need another BN you can poke me. if not, anyone is free to rebubble once the duplicate osb has been deleted.

Thank you very much

05:09:740 - Around that timestamp, the lyric of "あなたに恋をしたあたしの青春" feels weird imo. Why is "あな" have a pink font? yet "恋" have a white color lol. I think you should recomposition the font color on that one if you want to highlight the lyric better No, that "あなた" it's special, that's why it does have a font color

Mako Sakata wrote:

I have one more concern, hope you don't mind

05:09:740 - Around that timestamp, the lyric of "あなたに恋をしたあたしの青春" feels weird imo. Why is "あな" have a pink font? yet "恋" have a white color lol. I think you should recomposition the font color on that one if you want to highlight the lyric better No, that "あなた" it's special, that's why it does have a font color

That one a bit questionable actually, because if you think the "あなた" is special, then the "た" supposed to be have pink color as well right? it's a bit weird if you just highlight the "あな" instead the whole "あなた" http://puu.sh/ue1C9/c088573c21.jpg.

The rest reasoning understandable enough to me, waiting to play the full ver ~

Xinely wrote:

SB :
- 01:54:411 - there is a dot left in black bg while its friends are faded out. is this intentional? Yep
- can you move the light effects in first kiai 01:57:915 - a bit to rightside? while the lyrics are stacked with it, we cant read the lyrics Moving the effect would be outplaced from the bg. The lyrics with background dim are readable (those are one of the consecuences of additive uwu, that actually discussed it with Monstrata, so it's fine)
- 05:19:375 - until 05:28:134 - it would be nicer if the lyrics are in center? Those are on the center, aren't they? The editor field it's not the same that the play field, so it's normal that the objects are some left-up on the editor field

Xinely wrote:

diff :
- 05:08:864 (1) - based on flow, ctrl+g gives smoother flow here. if u agree you can move 05:09:520 (2) - 288,180 to keep the jump Done