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00:06:247 (5) - Would flow better if you make the slider go up, you can make it blanket the (3) as well but make sure to move (6) and the next pattern since it'll make an ugly overlap
00:29:798 (6,7) - Since these two notes are kicks and not hats, it could be nice to make them stand out a bit more by making this a spaced triplet. You could also apply drum-hitfinishes to these notes, select these two and over on the left is a list under "Additions", set those two notes to "Drum" and then add finish hitsounds. You should do this for all of the kicks if you like
00:32:689 (4,5) - These two are also kicks, so you should space them a little bit out rather than being stacked, like
this (I used 0.5x ds)
00:34:135 (2,3) - Same as above, applies to all like it so I won't repeat
You should try and keep your overlaps consistent, as 01:05:761 (2,7) - this is one and then 01:09:376 (4,8) - this is different
02:03:697 (1) - I can hear that the piano here starts at 02:03:614 -
02:06:711 (1) - The note on the start of this slider is weaker than the note on the end of the slider, so it would be better to make the stronger note (sliderend) clickable
It's nice to see improvement
Remember there are other modders than me who can help
