Better late than never :<
00:12:799 (1,2,3) - the music has 3 indentical accents, consider making it a stack, line, or equilateral triangle.
00:50:606 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - make this symmetrical.
00:54:280 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - spacing is a little awkward between notes 2 and 3.
01:11:116 (7,8) - seems to be an awkward time to break the pattern. Continue in the same pattern as Notes 1-6 and then change between combos.
01:34:993 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - consider increasing the spacing on these for more emphasis; they're around the same size as the other jumps in the kiai.
02:03:769 (10,11,1) - sounds more like a 5 note stream.
02:22:443 (6,7) - these sliders seem too long.
02:24:433 (1,2,3,1) - consider using increasing jumps.
02:55:504 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14) - consider splitting this into two combos.
02:57:953 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - consider splitting this up also.
03:00:402 (1,2,3) - decrease the spacing a bit for contrast into the next two combos.
03:02:851 (1,2,3,4) - decrease the spacing or increase the spacing for 03:05:606 (6,7,8,9)
03:11:422 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,15,16) - increase the spacing a tiny bit or make a very slight accelerator stream.
03:12:647 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - replace notes 5 and 6 with a slider similar sliders 1 and 3; change 7 and 8 to jumps.
03:32:239 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - make the spacing increase more noticeable.
04:26:269 (2,3) - pause feels awkward; change stack to some sort of jump.
04:27:953 (1) - consider changing this stream to stacked notes instead to start the stream; current slider start timing is very awkward.
04:28:871 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - spacing of the triples is too big, spacing between triples could be larger.
04:29:790 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - spacing in the stream seems slightly inconsistent.
04:30:402 (1) - align this note with notes 6, 7, and 8 of the previous combo.
04:59:178 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - jump between notes 1 and 2 seems unnaturally big; make slightly smaller than notes 3 and 4.
05:08:055 (9,10,11) - spacing seems too big for this part of the kiai, especially since the combos after have smaller spacing.
05:57:035 (9,10) - increase the spacing between these two notes.