OzzyOzrock wrote:

[Easy]
Good.

[Normal]
Also good.

[Hard]
Also good, orz

[Insane]
Gaah. Good as well.


The only thing I didn't like were some of your sliders. Work on making them delicious.

but good job~

1. Well instead of using the default soft claps on the first timing section, you could use the "normal-hitnormal" from the template skin as your "soft-hitclap". Believe me, it sounds good. To download the template skin, just open "osume" on the same folder where osu! is installed, and go to the "extra" tab. Remember to set the custom overrides on.
   It's just a suggestion though Keep those soft claps if you want to.

1. 01:14:486 (4, 5) - Move these one grid left.
2. 01:19:153 (1, 2) - Even though this seems to be ok, I'd say it would look more consistent if you moved these one grid down.
3. 01:26:153 (SP) - This should end with a finish >:D Same for all difficulties.

1. 09:486 (1) - Just for you to know, there's an easier way to do these kinds of sliders:
   
   SPOILER

   
2. 34:153 (9) - New combo here, and remove it from the next slider.
3. 38:819 (1) - Remove the new combo, and add it to the next slider. Then remove the new combo at 40:486.

1. 40:153 (8) - Add a clap.

1. 05:799 (5) - 1 grid left.
2. 1:09:133 (5) - 1 grid right.
3. 1:09:466 (7, 8, 9, 1) - 1 grid left and 2 grids up.
4. 1:25:466 (1) - Add a clap at the end of the slider (after the repetition).

ziin wrote:

[skin]
I really do not like this skin, background, and combo color choice. Sure, it fits and is well done, but it's blinding me. Kiai is especially blinding.
The song is about sakura flowers and sakura flowers are pink, light pink so that is what I wanted, a skin that will match the theme ._.
And I know is blinding during kiai, I will try to get a diff. bg I guess

approachcircle.png - This is very thin. Could you use the default one (from templateskin)? Is the same as the template one ._.
default numbers - There is a reason most numbers are outlined. If you weren't using such light colors, (ie dark purple, dark orange like you see in those nightcore maps with the purely white numbers) this would be fine. However it is very difficult to see as is. A slightly gray outline would help tremendously. Ok, I will make the outline or something
fruit-ryuuta.png - I think the actual plate needs to be centered perfectly. I'm going to delete the fruit-ryuutas, I don't like them anymore
hit50, etc... - This is another personal problem. I think the hits should always be different colors (so it's easier to see what hit you got). Often times I'll play these maps and find out I got a 100 when I thought I was doing perfectly. You could do a light gray for 50, light green for 100, and keep the pink ones for 300.
Maybe the gray for 50 is good but sakura flowers are not green ._. I'll think about something

So for colors, if you can find some colors you like better which are darker, that would be good. It would also be good to use the same colors on all difficulties. Easy's colors are pretty good, though they could be a little darker.
I used the same colors for all diffs, I'm changing one

[general]
can you go through and delete most/all of the claps which are on beat 1 (the long white tick)? Generally clapping patterns go best on beats 2 and 4, and since this is song is in cut time (2:2) it would be best to only put them on beat 3 (which is beat 2 in cut time). My explanation may be a little confusing, but I think it sounds better. You can keep some of the claps on beat 1 in kiai.
I'm doing 2 and 4 beat thing

[easy]
00:24:486 (1) - move over to 00:24:819 and either take off 1 repeat or delete the circle it overlaps. Pickup notes aren't worth mapping in easy.
00:35:153 (1) - http://puu.sh/11Gk
and so on. Just make sure you're hitting a note on beat 1, don't just slide over it. That's really important for easy.
Remapping this, not all Easy but some parts

[normal]
same as easy, don't slide over beat 1.
00:51:153 (1) -

[hard]
00:10:153 (3,4,5,6,7) - these beats never make any sense to me, and you mapped it differently in insane too (and I don't like it there either). If you want to map the vibrato in the vocals, just use a slider.
00:13:653 (4,6,7) - ^
00:16:320 (6,7) - ^
00:26:819 (8) - move back 1/2 to red tick, shorten by 1, fill in the empty space with circles.
00:29:653 - add note
00:38:486 (4) - delete this
00:38:986 - add note
00:41:819 - ^
00:44:153 (4,5) - make these 1/2 sliders.
00:45:820 (1,2,3) - this is boring
00:48:819 - add note
01:06:153 - if you map the bass guitar's rhythm, you'll get most of the drum's rhythm, and all of the vocals. I have no idea why you put your sliders where you did. Here's the first measure: http://puu.sh/11Ha
Remapping some parts ~

[insane]
00:22:799 (5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - no.
00:23:466 - so this whole section has a really nice guitar section. Could you map that?
Remapping this ~
I can't mod anymore, It's got too many rhythms which don't make any sense to me.
Umm, thanks. Your comments actually motivated me to remap this

1. Timing on every stage is 820. Why here it's 800? o_O (way too early) Fix it please.
2. 00:14:236 (5) - Note is out of rhythm, put it on white tick (on the left of course).

1. Some sliders don't look symmetrical. Examples: slider at 00:41:819 (2), 00:47:153 (4), 00:58:153 (4). Other than that, nothing to complain.

1. Just like in easy a couple of sliders that are not symmetrical, however these are alot harder to spot with naked eye. I won't say which ones since you probably wouldn't even notice until you look at the grid closely. Nobody is perfect. :p Nothing to complain here.

1. 00:05:486 (4) - Why not change this slider into a triplet + 1 circle like it is in the previous combo?
2. 00:35:153 (1,2) - I suggest to curve this slider better and make it symmetrical. Currently this doesn't look nice to me. Try something like this. I think this looks much better, just don't forget to re-align other notes in the combo so they are in line with the previous ones (move 3 to the same height as 2 is now, etc).
3. 00:37:486 (4) - Move this note to 00:37:319 so it follows the voice properly.

1. 00:32:486 (5) - Clap on the start of the slider.
2. 01:05:153 (1) - ^
3. I am not sure if this is intentional but there are places where you can put more claps after the times above.

Dragvon wrote:

<Hard>
• 00:29:653 (X) - Maybe a note here? To sound like 00:34:153 (1,2,3,4) ~ Done ~
• 00:37:319 (4) - I would put this one a bit farther.Okk ~
• 00:59:153 (5) - +2 repeats? I see why you did it like this but, i just had to say it I'll keep it for now ;3
Comments: Fun hard :>

<Insane>
• 00:22:403 (6,7,8,9) - Those kick-sliders scared me at first due to their speed but, since this is an insane i think it's okay to keep them.Keeping them ~
• 00:41:986 (3) - Imo a 1/2 slider with one repeat would sound better here.Done ~
• 00:48:486 (X) - Adding a note here with Claps sounds nice and keeps a constant flow~ Yessss ~
Comments: I see what you did there...lol I didn't notice until now I swear xD

Okay... i think that's it for now :3
Star!

Combo1 : 255,100,100
Combo2 : 251,187,203

180,224,84153,6,0,B|112:312|-24:192|112:72|184:164,1,300,0|8

Mafiamaster wrote:

I couldn't see my cursor at all during the spinner. Consider doing something about it.
Okk ~ Added a custom cursor, I hope is better now ;~;

[Insane]
00:22:403 (6,7,8) - This is unnecessary. It doesn't sound good either. Changed to something else

For consistency, uncheck letterboxing from this difficulty. Done ~

Sandpig wrote:

star -w-

Insane

00:24:653 (1) - end it on a white tick or a red tick. the note on blue tick doesn't follow the music and has a bad effect on your flow.
Oh! I missed that, thanks for pointing that out, fixed ~

no kds Are you sure ? Anyways, thanks for the mod ~

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Next map on the queue, yay!

Just a note, symmetrical slider points does not mean the slider will be symmetrical, sadly. (Some of the sliders really annoy me, but I guess they are okay. I pointed out a few of them, but I know there are plenty I did not point out. Change them if you want.)

"Continue" on the pause screen is really hard to see against the pause bg, so I suggest changing the font a bit Done~

Easy:
Normal/Nazi mod:
00:41:819 (2) - It would look nicer if the ends of the slider were closer aligned (I can see a difference in-game) Done~
00:58:153 (4) - ^ Done~

Combo mod:
00:54:153 (1) - Why is this new combo here? I would suggest removing this combo to follow the lyrics since that seems to be the pattern so far
01:08:153 (4) - new combo to be consistent with 01:19:153 (1)
All done~

Normal:
Combo mod:
00:32:319 (5) - new combo to be consistent with 00:43:153 (1) Done~

Hard:
Combo mod:
01:08:153 (8,1) - Remove 1's new combo and add a new combo to 8 to follow the lyrics Done~

Insane:
Normal mod:
00:59:653 (10) - please make this more symmetrical Done~

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Wow, I didn't find much. I guess I am open to giving this map a bubble then. Tell me when you finish the mod and I'll recheck. For now, star!
Okk, thanks for the mod! >w<

blissfulyoshi wrote:

Pls no kds (These are all things that I should have caught earlier)
I am getting 826 for the offset, so ycan you get someone to check it (if doesn't help that the drumbeat is not exactly constant)
I think 826 is better, well it seems better to me, so, changed!

Add 6918 as a tag??? This is a thing that has to do with the characters and the anime pairings, I added them at the start but some people suggested me to take them off, but I will add them again, oh and I say "them" because I have to add 1869 too

Easy: fine

Normal: fine

Hard:

Insane:
Normal/nazi mod:
01:10:820 (1,2) - make sliders follow each other's curve better (you can easily see that they are not very silimar)
Done

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Fix all of those, and I'll remod. (hopefully for a bubble)

1. your combo colours are abit too close, make them abit more different tbh
2. your spinner needs a center so people find it easier to spin, spinners without a center are not advised

jericho2442 wrote:

1. your combo colours are abit too close, make them abit more different tbh Tried to make them more different from each other, hope is good now
2. your spinner needs a center so people find it easier to spin, spinners without a center are not advised Okk~ Added a center

Insane
00:14:826 (1,2,3,4,5) - this pattern having large space for fast notes and small space for slow notes kinda played bad :/, maybe space this normal?, it also felt out of place in your map being the only pattern in this style Fixed
01:13:492 (1,2) - due to the pattern before being the same spacing as this but double the speed, it makes this rather hard to notice the slower timing, maybe think of spacing different so its easier to read? I ... think I fixed it, I stacked (1,2) I don't really now if it is okk now, because I'm not that good at insane maps ;~;

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only small stuff since its visual and suggestions, so call me back after for rank

jericho2442 wrote:

well since it took quite awhile for this to get updated (and for me to check it) i dont feel fully happy just ranking it due to the time, so rebubble for now

whymeman wrote:

Hmm.... Good enough.

Kenezz wrote:

Congratz my waifu xD <3