Well, hmmm
Your offset should be so that the first note of a bar coincides with "0:0" under current stanza. But also, your offset is off in my opinion, I think 4,380 sounds better. Make sure you don't select the "Move already placed notes..." option if you do this manually, or just make this change under the timing setup panel.
This is kind of a tricky song to time due to the syncopation. The following applies after you apply the above timing setup. Also I will only comment on normal for the time being.
First combo (red) after the spinner should be as follows
00:16:28 (1) - 00:16:65 (2) - 00:16:77 (3) - 00:17:14 (4) - 00:17:27 (5) - 00:17:64 (6) - 00:17:77 (7)
So the syncopation is like alternating between the white ticks and the 2nd blue tick (if you use 1/4 beat snap divisor).
There are also issues with distance spacing (the amount of distance between each beat). Generally, you should have the distance proportional to the time between notes. So for the syncopated combos, not every note will have the same distance. Using the example combo above, note 3 should be about 3 times closer to note 2 than note 2 to 1. You dig?
The distance snapping feature can toggled by pressing "d" in the editor or you can hold alt. Check the FAQ for further help.
So yeah, have another attempt at mapping your song incorporating these changes and we'll look over it again.