Sakaue Nachi wrote:

In game req
[general]
感觉有些1/3节拍好像对不上音，是自创节奏吗_(:з」∠)_，建议减少一点，打起来柑橘不太好
[Jealousy]
00:14:988 (3) - 这个摆去00:15:263 (1) - 重合试下 难改
00:34:942 (5) - （321,278） fix
01:35:630 (6,8) - CTRL+G 然后三个旋转60度，选3个移到把(7)和这个重叠01:34:529 (1) - 试下，大概这鸟样

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fixed
01:46:227 (3) - 感觉离上个再远一点好点
02:06:318 (7) - 和02:06:456 (1) - 重叠是不是好点
02:24:071 (1) - 感觉可以包一下02:23:796 (4) - fixed
02:26:824 (3) - ctrl+g？
02:33:704 (3) - NC然后后面的也跟着改
02:38:383 (1) - 感觉这个节奏好点？fixed

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03:02:327 (3) - 弄成和03:02:465 (1) - 重叠吧，现在太近了
03:07:695 (4) - （431,142）fixed
03:22:970 (3) - （165,78） fixed
03:35:080 (1) - 感觉这个离上个远点好点，突然音变重了
03:35:355 (2,3) - 然后这两个我认为重合或者弄成跳一点好
03:46:915 (2) - ctrl+g？
04:29:025 (3,4) - 这两个弄成和04:30:126 (3,4) - 这里一样有一个和滑条头重合吧？ fixed
05:11:685 (2,3,4,5) - 试下这样？

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lightr wrote:

Hi from in-game req

00:32:603 (1,1) - 用finish感觉有点吵，whistle吧 fixed
00:48:292 (3) - 加个finish fixed
01:06:732 (3) - 加clap fixed
01:09:071 (7,8,1) - 感觉这个overmap不怎么合适，换个减速的1/1滑条怎样 再看看
01:29:300 (6) - 这一段为啥要14clap...听原曲不还是24clap吗 这里跟bass
01:44:438 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这个有点太难了吧lol,我还是建议缩短(2,3)的间距，(4,5)也一样，感觉2和4换成两个1/4滑条好点 改了
02:31:503 (5,6) - ctrl+g? 现在还行
02:38:107 (7,1) - 1应该离7远点 改了
02:48:429 (2,3,4,6,7,8) - 这里换成两个折返吧 我觉得还行

pic

02:58:062 (1) - finish fixed
03:15:676 (1) - ^ fixed
03:42:649 (1,2,3,1,1,2,3,1) - 要么全部3连，要么全部滑条 挺带感的现在

flow还是一如既往的棒啊..good luck ~

moonlightleaf wrote:

[Jealousy]

00:05:493 (2) - (424,122)

01:35:080 (4) - 叠到8那 hao

01:36:318 (10,11) - 试试 hao

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01:38:520 (8,9) - 节奏对换？

01:39:484 (4) - 叠到6那

02:00:676 (5) - 滑条？

02:15:264 (1,3) - blanket？

02:17:879 (2,3) - 这样好点 tai yuan le

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02:20:630 (4,1) - 这怎么样

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02:32:465 (3) -

03:00:676 (2,5) - 叠好

03:02:327 (3) - 叠前面1尾巴

03:23:796 (2,5) - 叠好

03:28:337 (2,3,4,5) - 试试？

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04:09:484 (5) - 试试？

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04:20:081 (2,3,4) - ...

04:30:951 (2) - 04:30:951 (2) - hao

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04:33:980 (1) - ctrl+g？ gai le

04:41:135 (3) - 拆反，04:41:410 单note

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04:43:337 (3) - ^

05:16:502 我觉得这边个单点转盘延后 hao

1. 00:18:841 (2,3) - 怎么不拉开点
2. 00:19:942 (2) - 这是四分拍五连
3. 00:20:493 (4) - 这是四分拍三连
4. 00:40:447 (5,1,3) - 放这里吧 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562831
5. 01:03:153 (6) - 拉开些 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562834
6. 01:27:924 (1,2,3,4) - 这一段怎么都塞到中间来了, 往外放一放吧
7. 01:33:016 (5) - balnkte
8. 02:11:273 (3,4,5,6) - 往下放一点比较好看
9. 03:02:465 (1) - 不好看
10. 04:01:227 (2) - 建议这样 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562820
11. 04:44:713 (5,6) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562843

[CSGA]Ar3sgice wrote:

你先别大改 我写了一分钟的了 估计晚点post


Jealousy

1. 00:18:841 (2,3) - 怎么不拉开点
2. 00:19:942 (2) - 这是四分拍五连
3. 00:20:493 (4) - 这是四分拍三连
4. 00:40:447 (5,1,3) - 放这里吧 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562831 好
5. 01:03:153 (6) - 拉开些 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562834 好
6. 01:27:924 (1,2,3,4) - 这一段怎么都塞到中间来了, 往外放一放吧
7. 01:33:016 (5) - balnkte
8. 02:11:273 (3,4,5,6) - 往下放一点比较好看 好
9. 03:02:465 (1) - 不好看
10. 04:01:227 (2) - 建议这样 https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562820 好远阿1111
11. 04:44:713 (5,6) - https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562843

好
美丽

Rad- wrote:

Doesn't it need 6 minutes to be a map for approval?

ZZHBOY wrote:

好
01:16:502 (9) - ctrl+g试试 好
01:20:906 (9) - 漏音多不爽啊
01:22:282 (6) - ^
01:24:484 (6) - 感觉长白线上那音更重更值得跟啊o.o /.\
01:29:851 (10) - ctrl+g试试 好
01:34:529 (1,2,3,4,5) - 复制粘贴大法?挺好玩.-.
01:36:731 (1,2) - 对称试试? 不
01:43:337 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 试试摆三个正三角形可能感觉好点 像这样 其实6781是一个四方
01:44:575 (2,4) - 什么几把 我打的时候还没看出来 感觉没必要啊 要这样弄就多弄几个啊 改了
01:58:750 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 吐槽感觉前后flow都不怎么好.-. 改了

03:16:915 (1,2) - 这样建议合并成滑条呗合曲而且这么多连续单点感觉有点几把 play的时候点不过来 好
03:33:979 (1,1,1) - 不加点音效吗 soft whistle也可啊 这里没音啊
03:37:695 (3) - nc? 好
03:49:806 (5,6,1) - 这里建议更换前两个note的走向 然后整体下移 像这样 换了走向没下移

ZZHBOY wrote:

好

[General]
[*]00:33:979 - 建议这里加根红线
[*]建议设置几段kiai 它们在
00:33:979 - 00:48:291
02:58:062 - 03:31:227
04:23:933 - 04:56:961

感觉没什么必要

[Jealousy]
N2的whistle还是太zz 我也有点感觉
00:00:952 (1,2,3,1) - 往下移点好看些 好
00:05:355 (1,2) - clap
00:10:309 (3) - clap 好
00:11:135 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - 细节移动 2移到68丨18 把7移到92丨289会美观些 没感觉阿
00:15:263 (1) - 空了一拍建议移远点或者直接ctrl+g和上一个stack感觉打起来舒服一些 好
00:15:951 (,1) - ^ 而且感觉这里flow巨差 下凸感觉会好些 没感觉阿
00:26:823 (3,4) - clap 好
00:33:979 (1,2,3) - 这里建议滑条尾静音 懒加绿线就改soft 不然打的挺不爽 滑条尾都没音的 来个normal的hit还把下一个滑条头的音感觉弄轻了 试了下感觉还行
00:41:135 (3,4) - 一起上移一些感觉flow好些 好
00:47:535 (6,6) - 试试把这两个删了 比一串连打感觉好些 那就不连贯的
00:48:292 (3,4) - 试试合并成一个滑条 这里打的好不爽 这个我再看看
00:48:842 (6,7) - 试试ctrl+g 感觉不好
00:49:392 (1,2) - ^ 可以和下一个滑条blanket
00:53:796 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 试试[img=http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1562814]这样[/img] 感觉flow好些 要改感觉也不是DS减小
00:54:347 (5,7) - 滑条弧度大一点blanket好
00:55:310 (2) - 改到286丨68之类的地方让前后ds一致感觉好些
00:56:961 - 像这里音这么强你那个几把音效兼职纸张 加了身体WHIS感觉良好
00:57:925 (4) - 也是建议前后ds一致而且这里flow感觉不好 我感觉FLOW还行
01:03:153 (1,2,3,1) - 修改nc 像这样 好
01:03:567 (1,3) - overlap感觉有点没必要 移开点?
01:04:668 (2) - 这里flow不好 试试这个滑条向上凸起然后后面两个滑条分别ctrl+g感觉会好些 我觉得还行现在
01:08:659 (5,6) - 这里漏音啊 放串爽啊(不 这里就算了
01:58:750 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 吐槽感觉前后flow都不怎么好.-.
02:03:498 (2) - 打的时候感觉违和进edit听了听是overmap 感觉不妥 这里就老实跟1/2感觉就好 美丽
02:06:318 (7) - 这里音乐还是比较平淡啊忽然大跳感觉没啥必要 放170丨90这一带平衡前后ds感觉就可
02:10:310 (4,5,6) - overlap而且感觉flow也不少 这是建议 好
02:11:273 (3,4,5) - ctrl+h然后再移到适当位置跟后面的长滑条反向感觉flow好些 试试
02:12:512 (3,4) - 节奏对换 两个单点突出下一个滑条头的重音感觉好得多
02:13:062 (1) - 弧度小一点让flow better 像这样调整试试
02:19:186 (3) - 这里可以加个note因为后面那个滑条头音比较重
02:19:186 (3) - 如果采纳上一条这个note就可以delete 好，虽然你写错了，但是我还看懂了
02:19:943 (5,7,1) - 考虑换成1/4 滑条因为有乐器音跟着比较爽 好
02:25:860 (4) - ctrl+g试试
02:26:824 (3) - ^ 好
02:27:649 (3) - 向坐标凸起试试 感觉flow好些
02:34:943 (6) - 放着flow bad 试试和这个颜色的滑条4头部blanket
02:40:034 (5) - 从这里就可nc然后和前面拉开间距了啊
02:46:089 (1,2,3) - 不摆直线的话让弧度大一些呗 正好和后面的滑条一起看起来更美观flow更好
02:48:291 (1,2,3) - 试试这样的节奏 感觉好些 不然四分拍的连打有点overmap的感觉 我再想想
03:56:823 (2) - 丑而且flow不好 试试改一下方向连接前后的物件
03:57:924 (2,4) - 分别ctrl+g然后把圈3移到下一个滑条头上感觉flow好些 就像那个长滑条前面的part一样
03:59:094 - 这里倒是可以加个圈overmap一下突出下一个滑条头的音
04:05:356 (1,2,3,4) - 前面见过 你改改移动吧偷懒被窝发现了
04:08:658 (1) - 之前别人给我建议说空拍前后的两个note要么间隔巨大要么特别近比较好我觉得有道理啊 你可以试试改一下让上一组color的6和7向左移动 试试
04:23:934 (1) - 可以和前面的间距大点爽啊
04:23:934 (1) - ctrl+g试试
04:27:787 (2,1) - 这blanket也太丑 修一下
04:29:300 - 这音漏了不爽啊 放三连都好啊 我觉得还好阿这里
04:32:741 (1,2,3) - 什么几把flow 又丑 美丽 就是要JBFLOW
04:33:980 (1,2,3,4,5) - 这里跟琴音多不爽 不如跟电音 三分拍打的也别扭 我觉得还好
05:03:567 (1) - 旋转30度左右然后再改改位置试试 感觉好些
05:05:081 (2) - 改成下凸会好得多啊 没感觉
05:10:172 (1) - 弧度大点blanket好呗 懒改
05:14:851 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - 还是觉得这有点几把 则呢打则呢死 试着用滑条代替代替点节奏?结尾一串连打就够了啊毕竟bpm这么高 再看看

美丽 十分喜欢这首歌❤

chenwu wrote:

Thanks for modding.

OblivioN wrote:

00:25:860 (4) - 不和00:24:346 (3) - 的头重叠一下吗？
00:28:887 (3,4,5,6,7,1) - 是要摆一个六边形吗？好像歪哩，用多边形工具修一下吧 咦我一开始没想摆6既然说了我就摆吧
00:38:383 (1,2) - 没包好 FIXED
00:43:337 (3,2) - ^ FIXED
00:46:915 (3) - 是不是直的？是阿
01:06:181 (3,1) - 换个位置？ 感觉现在还行
01:50:768 (5) - 这样是不是要好看点

Img

01:50:768 (5,5,6) - 没包好？FIXED
02:13:475 (2,3) - ^ FIXED
02:43:888 (1,2) - ^ FIXED
02:44:713 (3,3) - 尾巴没有叠好 FIXED
04:26:548 (2) - 尾巴和04:25:448 (2) - 的头是叠起来的么？好像没有叠好哦 FIXED

[Other]
其实Letterbox during breaks可以不要了吧，这个图没有break time 那取消了
新人渣摸
感谢了
射星

gxytcgxytc wrote:

窝也来m4m

[Jealousy]

00:47:190 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - 排列美丽 你想个给我阿
00:56:961-01:06:181之间是不是少了很多whistle...比如00:58:750 (3) - 00:59:851 (4) - 01:03:153 (1) - 哇你说的对
02:23:521 (3) - whistle柑橘多余 有道理
03:08:383 (4) - 可以拿到03:08:750 (2) - 后面 感觉不好
04:00:126 (2,3,4,5) - 不太好看 这四个note ds弄一致比较好吧 好
04:01:502 (3) - flow美丽 和04:01:227 (2) - 弄个blanket?感觉还好/color]
04:11:410 (3) - 下凸?
04:56:273 (2,3) - flow美丽 这样会好些? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1576447厚
05:06:181 (2,3) - ^ 尝尝这个 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1576450现在FLOW还行阿

下面美丽
屌
good luck

edit :::: 00:20:355 (3,4) - 这里的节奏应该是这个样子的 http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/1576468 fixed
少张图

1. 00:00:952 (1,2,3,1) - I prefer the deffrent spacing from 00:01:777 (1,2) -
2. 00:02:878 (7) - it is better to avoid revese slider at this part, imo. how about this?
   
3. 00:22:695 (4,5) - change the positions?
4. 00:25:860 (4) - straight slider is better, imo
5. 02:11:824 (1) - x:186 y:150
6. 02:34:392 (4,5,6,1) - not good flow, imo
7. 02:37:007 (5) - rightward slider is better
8. 04:05:630 (2) - Ctrl+G
9. 04:35:631 (3,4) - how about adding soft-hitwhistle like 04:35:081 (1,2) -
10. 04:48:980 (4) - x:368 y:173

1. 01:17:190 (3,4) - align in a straight line for better flow
2. 01:25:172 (8,9) - ^
3. 01:53:245 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - cool!
4. 01:55:172 (5,1,2,3,4) - the follwoing is better to suit to back music
   

1. Red - Unrankable issue, you must fixed
2. Purple - Highly recommended, consider to use it
3. Black - Suggestion, feel free to fixed or not
4. Gray - Presonal preference

1. Fine

1. 00:16:640 (2,3,4) - If you change like this, it will be better to hit
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2. 00:30:745 (2) - Resnap to 00:30:768 -
3. 00:31:020 (4) - Resnap to 00:31:043 -
4. 02:03:497 (2) - overmapped, plz remove
5. 02:21:663 (4) - overmapped, plz remove
6. 02:51:112 (3) - overmapped, plz remove
7. 02:53:314 (4) - overmapped, plz remove
8. 04:12:580 (4) - Resnap to 04:12:603 -
9. 04:12:855 (6) - Resnap to 04:12:878 -
10. 04:41:961 (2) - Here is some 1/3 drum beats, please replace this slider with one 1/3 slider with a repeat like this
11. 04:42:787 (1,2) - Same as above
12. 04:51:594 (1,2) - Same as above

1. 00:02:603 (5,6) - I think you can whistle these to follow the piano
2. 00:03:979 (4) - The tone of piano is quite high here, I highly suggest you to put a whistle here
3. 00:04:529 (2) - As you put a whistle at 00:02:328 (3) - , I think you should put one here too
4. 00:04:942 (5) - If you added whistle at 00:02:740 (6) - , don't forget to add another here
5. 00:09:484 - Add a clap here since you always put a clap at 4th white line?
6. 00:10:034 (1) - I know there is no piano here, but I wouldn't feel that empty if you add a whistle here
7. 00:11:135 (2) - Add a whistle here to follow the piano? it sounds really nice
8. 00:11:548 (5) - Same as above
9. 00:16:777 - whistle here and remove whistle at 00:16:915 - , so it fits the piano
10. 00:18:704 (1) - Remove this whistle please, and...
11. 00:19:254 - here, so that the higher tunes can be performed better
12. 00:26:961 (4) - Put a whistle here to make consistency with 00:26:823 (3) - ?
13. 00:29:163 (5) - Whistle here to follow the piano
14. 00:31:915 (2,3,4) - Swap whistles, 00:31:915 (2) - has a higher tune than 00:32:052 (3,4) -
15. 00:40:172 (4) - Clap here to make consistency with 00:39:346 (1,2) -
16. 00:40:447 (5,1) - Swap clap, 00:40:447 - has a drum beat
17. 00:40:860 (2) - Add a clap here sounds better
18. 00:41:273 (4) - You forgot clap&whistle here
19. 00:41:548 (1) - Add a clap here?
20. 00:41:961 (2) - Also here
21. 00:42:374 (4) - And here. It makes sence and follow the drum beat
22. 00:42:649 (1) - Another clap here?
23. 00:43:062 (2) - Okay, I'd like to suggest you to whistle here so your whistles can be consistent in x--x--x-x form
24. 00:43:337 (3) - Same as obove, also I think you can clap here? It sounds really nice
25. 00:43:612 (4,1) - Swap clap?
26. 00:44:163 (2) - Clap instead of whistle? You put less whistles in this part and the followings, I guess you just need to put a whistle at 00:43:750 - and other places like this, that's enough. So clap here will be better imo
27. 00:44:988 (1) - Clap here?
28. 00:46:089 (1) - Add a clap to make consistency with 00:46:502 (2) -
29. 00:46:915 (3) - Swap clap
30. 00:47:190 (1) - 00:47:603 (1) - 00:48:016 (1) - I think they should have same hitsounds, change them all to clap&finish (I think add whistle here will be quite noisy, but you can add it if you like)
31. 01:08:383 (3,5,1) - I think you can whistle these, it sounds nice
32. 02:29:163 - You can add a whistle here to make consistency with 02:29:300 (4) -
33. 02:41:410 - Change to Addition: Soft, whistle only
34. 02:44:713 - Same as above
35. 02:56:823 (1) - You forgot to finish here
36. 04:07:970 (4,7) - I felt empty here, try Addition: Soft, whistle only
37. 04:55:172 (2) - it is better to swap whistle (whistle at slider end), so it could follow the piano better

1. 00:15:263 (1) - 00:15:539 (2) - Ctrl+G them may be better?
2. 00:18:153 (5) - *nazi* can be blanketed better
3. 00:18:841 (2,3) - move them a little away?
4. 00:48:291 (1) - NC here for downbeat
5. 00:52:695 (1) - *nazi* blanket
6. 01:09:896 (8) - I don't like the shape of this this slider, it's quite odd

1. 01:20:906 (9) - I know you follow the bass district here, so you should break this into a circle and an 1/2 slider since there is a bass at 01:21:043 -
2. 01:42:924 (8) - Break this into a circle and an 1/2 slider too? Drum hits at 01:43:062 -
3. 03:08:107 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Change like this, white lines need hit
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1. 03:48:429 (4) - Swap clap (Only clap at the beginning of the slider)
2. 03:51:731 (4) - Same as above
3. 03:53:933 (4) - A clap is needed here

1. 01:12:098 (8) - Ctrl+G for a better flow
2. 03:53:107 (1) - Make a blanket like this?
   SPOILER

   

RandomEffect wrote:

From my queue~

[Jealousy]

chenwu

1. 01:17:190 (3,4) - align in a straight line for better flow fixed
2. 01:25:172 (8,9) - ^ ^
3. 01:53:245 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - cool!
4. 01:55:172 (5,1,2,3,4) - the follwoing is better to suit to back music ここはピアノの音をとってるのでno change
   

OniJAM wrote:

1. Red - Unrankable issue, you must fixed
2. Purple - Highly recommended, consider to use it
3. Black - Suggestion, feel free to fixed or not
4. Gray - Presonal preference

[ Jealousy - chenwu's part]
Rhythm

1. 01:20:906 (9) - I know you follow the bass district here, so you should break this into a circle and an 1/2 slider since there is a bass at 01:21:043 - ok
2. 01:42:924 (8) - Break this into a circle and an 1/2 slider too? Drum hits at 01:43:062 - ^
3. 03:08:107 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Change like this, white lines need hit 钢琴音是4+3+3所以咱不太想改
   SPOILER

   

Hitsounds

1. 03:48:429 (4) - Swap clap (Only clap at the beginning of the slider)
2. 03:51:731 (4) - Same as above
3. 03:53:933 (4) - A clap is needed here
   咱把第一个长滑条(03:47:328 (4) )拆开了补上个clap

Placement

1. 01:12:098 (8) - Ctrl+G for a better flow ok
2. 03:53:107 (1) - Make a blanket like this? ok
   SPOILER

   

OniJAM wrote:

1. Red - Unrankable issue, you must fixed
2. Purple - Highly recommended, consider to use it
3. Black - Suggestion, feel free to fixed or not
4. Gray - Presonal preference

[General]

1. Fine

[ Jealousy - sjoy's part]
Rhythm

1. 00:16:640 (2,3,4) - If you change like this, it will be better to hit
   SPOILER

   
   changed
2. 00:30:745 (2) - Resnap to 00:30:768 - fixed
3. 00:31:020 (4) - Resnap to 00:31:043 - fixed
4. 02:03:497 (2) - overmapped, plz remove
5. 02:21:663 (4) - overmapped, plz remove
6. 02:51:112 (3) - overmapped, plz remove
7. 02:53:314 (4) - overmapped, plz remove偶尔OVERMAP一个3连感觉没啥关系
8. 04:12:580 (4) - Resnap to 04:12:603 - fixed
9. 04:12:855 (6) - Resnap to 04:12:878 - fixed
10. 04:41:961 (2) - Here is some 1/3 drum beats, please replace this slider with one 1/3 slider with a repeat like thisok
11. 04:42:787 (1,2) - Same as abovehere follow the bass
12. 04:51:594 (1,2) - Same as above

fixed
Hitsounds

1. 00:02:603 (5,6) - I think you can whistle these to follow the pianook
2. 00:03:979 (4) - The tone of piano is quite high here, I highly suggest you to put a whistle hereok
3. 00:04:529 (2) - As you put a whistle at 00:02:328 (3) - , I think you should put one here toofixed forgot
4. 00:04:942 (5) - If you added whistle at 00:02:740 (6) - , don't forget to add another hereok
5. 00:09:484 - Add a clap here since you always put a clap at 4th white line?fixed
6. 00:10:034 (1) - I know there is no piano here, but I wouldn't feel that empty if you add a whistle hereok
7. 00:11:135 (2) - Add a whistle here to follow the piano? it sounds really niceok
8. 00:11:548 (5) - Same as abovefixed
9. 00:16:777 - whistle here and remove whistle at 00:16:915 - , so it fits the pianofixed
10. 00:18:704 (1) - Remove this whistle please, and...
11. 00:19:254 - here, so that the higher tunes can be performed better
12. 00:26:961 (4) - Put a whistle here to make consistency with 00:26:823 (3) - ?ok
13. 00:29:163 (5) - Whistle here to follow the pianook
14. 00:31:915 (2,3,4) - Swap whistles, 00:31:915 (2) - has a higher tune than 00:32:052 (3,4) -
15. 00:40:172 (4) - Clap here to make consistency with 00:39:346 (1,2) -
16. 00:40:447 (5,1) - Swap clap, 00:40:447 - has a drum beatok
17. 00:40:860 (2) - Add a clap here sounds betterok
18. 00:41:273 (4) - You forgot clap&whistle here
19. 00:41:548 (1) - Add a clap here? ok
20. 00:41:961 (2) - Also hereok
21. 00:42:374 (4) - And here. It makes sence and follow the drum beatok
22. 00:42:649 (1) - Another clap here?ok
23. 00:43:062 (2) - Okay, I'd like to suggest you to whistle here so your whistles can be consistent in x--x--x-x formok
24. 00:43:337 (3) - Same as obove, also I think you can clap here? It sounds really niceok
25. 00:43:612 (4,1) - Swap clap?ok
26. 00:44:163 (2) - Clap instead of whistle? You put less whistles in this part and the followings, I guess you just need to put a whistle okat 00:43:750 - and other places like this, that's enough. So clap here will be better imo
27. 00:44:988 (1) - Clap here?ok
28. 00:46:089 (1) - Add a clap to make consistency with 00:46:502 (2) -
29. 00:46:915 (3) - Swap clap
30. 00:47:190 (1) - 00:47:603 (1) - 00:48:016 (1) - I think they should have same hitsounds, change them all to clap&finish (I think add whistle here will be quite noisy, but you can add it if you like)fixed
31. 01:08:383 (3,5,1) - I think you can whistle these, it sounds nice
32. 02:29:163 - You can add a whistle here to make consistency with 02:29:300 (4) -
33. 02:41:410 - Change to Addition: Soft, whistle onlyI want to keep 24lcap
34. 02:44:713 - Same as above ^
35. 02:56:823 (1) - You forgot to finish herefixed
36. 04:07:970 (4,7) - I felt empty here, try Addition: Soft, whistle onlychanged
37. 04:55:172 (2) - it is better to swap whistle (whistle at slider end), so it could follow the piano better

Placement

1. 00:15:263 (1) - 00:15:539 (2) - Ctrl+G them may be better?我觉得没啥区别
2. 00:18:153 (5) - *nazi* can be blanketed better
3. 00:18:841 (2,3) - move them a little away?
4. 00:48:291 (1) - NC here for downbeatfixed
5. 00:52:695 (1) - *nazi* blanket ok
6. 01:09:896 (8) - I don't like the shape of this this slider, it's quite odd想到再说

That's all. Good luck on getting it approved!

RandomEffect wrote:

From my queue~

[Jealousy]
sjoy

1. 00:00:952 (1,2,3,1) - I prefer the deffrent spacing from 00:01:777 (1,2) -
2. 00:02:878 (7) - it is better to avoid revese slider at this part, imo. how about this?
   
3. 00:22:695 (4,5) - change the positions?
4. 00:25:860 (4) - straight slider is better, imofixed
5. 02:11:824 (1) - x:186 y:150 fixed
6. 02:34:392 (4,5,6,1) - not good flow, imo
7. 02:37:007 (5) - rightward slider is better
8. 04:05:630 (2) - Ctrl+G
9. 04:35:631 (3,4) - how about adding soft-hitwhistle like 04:35:081 (1,2) -ok
10. 04:48:980 (4) - x:368 y:173

fixed
you're the elite mapper of Dark PHOENiX! thanks
~Good Luck~

Setsurei wrote:

M4M

all of them are beat suggestions, feel free to ignore if you find my suggestions are sucks
[General]
name should be Marathon?
[sjoy]
02:04:530 (3,4) - switch position, slider-hitcircle [color=#FF0000]why switch there are different tone in 02:04:529 02:04:667
02:42:786 (1) - change to hitcirclewhy? there are a long bass sounds
04:00:263 (3) - change to 1/1 slider (delete 04:00:401 (4,5) - )just follow the bass
04:00:676 - add note ^
04:34:805 (6) - move to 04:34:942 - (delete 04:35:081 (1) - ) why?
04:34:805 - add note
[chenwu]
01:13:612 - there's a note here, replace the long slider to a shorter is better (1/2 slider 01:13:612 - 01:13:750 - )
01:14:025 - 01:14:575 - wrong combination, should be hitcircle-slider-slider, following piano's start note
01:15:814 - same as 01:13:612 -
01:16:227 - 01:16:777 - same as 01:14:025 - 01:14:575 -
01:17:190 - change to 1/1 slider (delete 01:17:328 - )
01:18:979 - change to 1/2 slider (delete 01:19:117 - )
01:20:218 - change to 1/1 slider (delete 01:20:493 - )
01:20:906 - move to 01:21:043 - and then reduce the length from 1/1 slider to 1/2 slider
01:22:282 (6) - change to hitcircle, add hitcircle here too 01:22:419 -
01:22:970 - delete? seems overmapped
01:24:208 (5) - delete, and add hitcircle or 1/2 slider here 01:24:346 -
01:24:484 - move to 01:24:621 - (delete 01:24:896 (7) - )
01:25:172 (8) - delete?
01:26:410 (5,6) - switch position, hitcircle-slider
01:55:309 (1,2,3) - move them to 01:55:447 - 01:55:722 - 01:55:997 - (delete 01:56:135 (4) - )
01:57:374 (4) - change to hitcircle
01:57:511 - add 1/2 slider (delete 01:57:649 (1) - )
01:58:474 (7,8) - change to 1/2 slider
01:58:750 (1,2) - change to 1/1 slider
02:00:676 (5) - change to 1/2 slider
03:09:071 (3,1,2) - change to 1/1 slider
03:46:640 (1) - change to 1/1 slider (delete 03:46:915 (2) - )
in the 2rd part there are 2different piano sounds in it .I just follow the crowded sounds but the rhythm you point out is another piano sounds .It's sparse rhythm. I don't follow it ,because it's too easy to play.And I won't follow these rhythems at the same time .
sorry for ignore your mods
anyway thanks for your modding
I hope you can understand
that's all, good luck![/color]

Laurier wrote:

mod4mod

General
un-check Enable countdown

fixed


Jealousy
HP+1
please don't be easily for app map.the BPM is so high .I think 6 is enough hard

00:01:777 (1,2) - swap this new combo . new sound pattern is start at here 00:01:915 (2) - also you use good pattern at later ok00:04:117 (1) -
00:10:034 (1,2,3,4,5) - how about this flow ? http://puu.sh/8BlRg.jpgok
00:11:961 (1,2,3) - dont fit with BGM you shoul use 1/3 rhythm fixed
00:13:887 (4) - same as above this rhythm is 1/4 like this http://puu.sh/8Bm2d.jpgbut there is 1/3 rhythm I heard
00:32:603 (5) - remove NC ok
00:44:163 (2) - make better blanket ? http://puu.sh/8Bm5M.jpgok
01:06:731 (3) - add reverse and spinner's start at 01:07:075 - ok
01:13:612 - you should follow this sound.
01:15:676 (6) - same as above. those sound is must important of this part.
01:20:218 - ^
01:22:419 - ^
01:24:621 - ^
remap this part
01:53:383 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - those stack pattern is looks good :3
03:02:328 (3) - move to x260y231 ? now too near by next note. you can make more better jumpchanged
04:08:383 (7) - change to slider ? it is better to non stop on this part. http://puu.sh/8Bmrd.jpgok
04:09:621 - add note
04:44:438 (3,4,5,6) - how about this jump ? :3 http://puu.sh/8BmAa.jpga bit hard
05:16:433 - 05:16:502 - add notes. please keep stream at here. changed

that's it

smallboat wrote:

Hi.sjoy.random mod. 順便試個新格式

1. Red words: Should be fixed.
2. Blue words : Highly recommended suggestion.
3. Black words : In my opinion.

[General]

1. Nothing.

Diff check part : Placement / Rhythm / Hitsound

[Jealousy]

Placement

1. 00:01:777 (4,1) - 一聽這邊就能做個jump怎麼沒跳[/color]。
2. 00:37:144 (5) - 這裡也有個跳點。[/color]
3. 04:21:594 (4) - 或許尾端能疊好 叠好就不整齐了123
4. 04:55:722 (4) - 感覺有點太擠了，疊到04:54:071 (3) 好了也能有flow。好

Rhythm

1. 03:25:722 (1,2,1,2) - 我覺得還是跟后面吉他聲比較好，前面都跟了，這邊放連打感覺破壞節奏。
2. 04:34:254 (2) - 移到04:34:346 跟吉他聲，是想1都能跟了這應該也可以跟。
3. 04:51:594 (1,2,3,4) - 同03:25:722.

1/3不想改，破坏了特色
Hitsound

1. 03:35:493 (3) - 建議加個finish做淡出有個很好的漸變效果。
2. 04:17:465 (1) - 是不是忘了加finish没忘记
3. 04:39:346 (1) - ^ ^
4. 05:16:364 (7) - 也是尾端忘了加finish[/color]

[Other]

1. GL,前面好多mod挑不出什麼了，射一星吧。

• 
  I find this name kinda unoriginal since it's already in the title, try to have something different!

1. 00:18:704 (1,2,3,5) - You could space them a bit more so that you'll avoid these tiny overlaps..
2. 00:20:355 (3) - This doesn't actually follow any 1/3 rhythm as the previous slider did, so you better get rid of this one. Here's what I'd do instead:
   SPOILER

   
3. 00:20:768 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I feel this stream should be spaced more, it emphasize the music more and you can also create a cool blanket
4. 00:28:337 (7,1) - I feel like you should swap new combos here, even if there are on different patterns
5. 00:42:649 (1) - A blanket would be great here
6. 01:09:828 - You could also add a beat on this tick (this fits really great if you actually space the stream before a bit more). Oh, and also add a new combo on 01:09:896 (8) - to emphasize the sound.
7. 01:11:823 (7) - Shouldn't a new combo be here instead of 01:12:374 (1) - ? The main sound starts here..
8. 01:29:438 (7,8) - Try to replace them with a single slider, it follows the music better and also avoid that weird overlap with 01:29:025 (5) -
9. 01:44:163 (7) - Again, new combo should be here. If you apply that, be sure to fix these patterns in order to emphasize the two different parts with proper spacing changes
10. 02:04:392 (2) - x:380 y:316 for a better triangle
11. 02:09:071 (2,5) - What about a blanket here?
12. 02:11:823 (1) - Shouldn't this be splitted in circle + 1/2 slider? Listen the music carefully and you'll realize how it's better in this way
13. 02:48:291 (1,2,3,4,6,7,8) - I would avoid such bad
14. 02:55:997 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - To be honest, this doesn't look pretty at all, you may want to make a linear or curved stream without any spacing variation?
15. 02:57:098 (1,2,3) - This is a great pattern, but it would play even better if these sliders were spaced more in order to have a smoother flow in such a wonderful build-up (same on 03:14:713 (1,2,3) - )
16. 03:26:823 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Again, try to avoid such spacing changes since they are only making the stream look bad here
17. 03:28:750 (5) - This should fit better if stacked on the next slider since they basically are the same melody and also remove all these new combos
18. 04:52:419 (4) - This should have the same distance of the other objects in the combo, then you can make a jump without any problem
19. 05:14:851 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - Streams could be curved in a better way here

Leader wrote:

[Jealousy]

• 
  I find this name kinda unoriginal since it's already in the title, try to have something different!
  change diff into Envies

1. 00:18:704 (1,2,3,5) - You could space them a bit more so that you'll avoid these tiny overlaps..fixed
2. 00:20:355 (3) - This doesn't actually follow any 1/3 rhythm as the previous slider did, so you better get rid of this one. Here's what I'd do instead:
   SPOILER

   
   ok changed
3. 00:20:768 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I feel this stream should be spaced more, it emphasize the music more and you can also create a cool blanket changed
4. 00:28:337 (7,1) - I feel like you should swap new combos here, even if there are on different patterns ok
5. 00:42:649 (1) - A blanket would be great here ok
6. 01:09:828 - You could also add a beat on this tick (this fits really great if you actually space the stream before a bit more). Oh, and also add a new combo on 01:09:896 (8) - to emphasize the sound. only changed the color.I think space is ok for me and 01:09:828 I don't hear the drum beat .So I don't want add it
7. 01:11:823 (7) - Shouldn't a new combo be here instead of 01:12:374 (1) - ? The main sound starts here..fixed
8. 01:29:438 (7,8) - Try to replace them with a single slider, it follows the music better and also avoid that weird overlap with 01:29:025 (5) - fixed
9. 01:44:163 (7) - Again, new combo should be here. If you apply that, be sure to fix these patterns in order to emphasize the two different parts with proper spacing changes Why NC here?I used NC on big white tickl
10. 02:04:392 (2) - x:380 y:316 for a better triangle ok
11. 02:09:071 (2,5) - What about a blanket here? ok
12. 02:11:823 (1) - Shouldn't this be splitted in circle + 1/2 slider? Listen the music carefully and you'll realize how it's better in this way
    fixed
13. 02:48:291 (1,2,3,4,6,7,8) - I would avoid such bad changed
14. 02:55:997 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - To be honest, this doesn't look pretty at all, you may want to make a linear or curved stream without any spacing variation? changed a little .just for fun to play
15. 02:57:098 (1,2,3) - This is a great pattern, but it would play even better if these sliders were spaced more in order to have a smoother flow in such a wonderful build-up (same on 03:14:713 (1,2,3) - )In fact I don't know how to change it ;w;
16. 03:26:823 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Again, try to avoid such spacing changes since they are only making the stream look bad here
    fixed
17. 03:28:750 (5) - This should fit better if stacked on the next slider since they basically are the same melody and also remove all these new comboschanged a little
18. 04:52:419 (4) - This should have the same distance of the other objects in the combo, then you can make a jump without any problemfixed
19. 05:14:851 (2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - Streams could be curved in a better way hereok

That's all, call me back once you've fixed

1. We renamed the difficulty to Envy, previously Envies.
2. Both sjoy and I agree that AR9.3 improved the readability of the map and is more suited to the BPM of the song so it was increased by 0.3.
3. Several hitsound changes and some minor fixes to a pattern or two which can be found in the log.

SPOILER

01:41 Trust: sjoy!!
01:41 Trust: can we do testplay/irc soon?
02:11 sjoy: ok! now I'm back
02:12 Trust:
02:12 Trust: i'm going to play 1 map quickly so I can be warmed up
02:12 sjoy: ok
02:17 Trust: alright, lets give this a shot
02:18 Trust: im a noob a streams just a heads up lol
02:18 sjoy: no much streams lol
02:24 Trust: really fun
02:24 sjoy: should I change ar for reading easily?
02:25 Trust: hmm
02:25 Trust: can i try 9.5 quick?
02:25 sjoy: because of it's 218 bpm. I m not sure about it
02:25 Trust: i agree that raising the AR would be benficial
02:25 Trust: beneficial*
02:26 sjoy: 9,3?9,5?
02:26 Trust: i'll give 9.5 a shot
02:26 sjoy: ok
02:26 Trust: see how it plays
02:32 Trust: pretty good
02:33 sjoy: I see
02:33 Trust: definitely made some patterns easier to follow
02:33 Trust: like 01:33:429 (6,7,8,9,10,11) -
02:33 Trust: felt really nice with 9.5
02:33 Trust: and others like it
02:34 Trust: one more run, i'd like to try 9.3, i think it would be ideal
02:34 sjoy: is it rankable ?0.0
02:35 Trust: well, i don't believe theres a rule against it
02:35 Trust: actually one sec, i'll confirm
02:36 Trust: its rankable lol
02:37 sjoy: lol ok
02:37 Trust: yeah that would be weird if they gave us decimal ar and didn't let us rank maps with it ><
02:37 Trust: alright lets try
02:38 sjoy: maybe it's 1st AR9.3 ranked map lol
02:43 sjoy: it seems that this is the best score with ar9.3 lol
02:43 Trust: yes this was good
02:43 Trust: ar9.3 it is?
02:45 sjoy: btw.Can you change the title color into green? lol I know BAT can do it
02:45 Trust: yeah sure
02:49 Trust: hmm first time doin this, not sure i got it correctly
02:49 Trust: so we'll save that for later
02:49 Trust: ~
02:50 Trust: lol
02:50 sjoy: lol
02:50 Trust: remind me when we're finished
02:50 sjoy: ok
02:50 Trust: alright so, quick question about the difficulty name
02:50 Trust: any reason to name it Envies rather than just Envy?
02:51 sjoy: hmmm ok.
02:51 Trust:
02:52 Trust: i was curious because the last diff name was Jealousy and not Jealousies lol
02:52 sjoy: it's an uncountable noun ?;w;
02:52 sjoy: sorry my bad english ;w;
02:53 Trust: english is lame, i wish i could speak other languages
02:54 Trust: hmm this note isn't covering anything in the music 01:18:016 (6) -
02:55 Trust: maybe change to a 1/1 here? 01:17:878 (5,6,7) -
02:55 sjoy: that sounds good
02:58 Trust: clap on the tail~ 02:54:346 (4) -
02:58 sjoy: fixed
03:01 Trust: this slider isn't offscreen but its going to heavily overlap the hit error box for players that use it 04:10:860 (1) -
03:02 Trust: maybe move up a few grids if you can
03:02 sjoy: ok
03:03 Trust: ahh no sliderbody whistles for these? 02:57:098 (1,2,3) -
03:04 Trust: would sound nice like it did here 04:22:970 (1,1,1) -
03:04 sjoy: yeah added it
03:06 Trust: hmm not really a big deal but maybe space these 0.8x ds 05:02:259 (4,5) -
03:07 Trust: would be consistent with other 1/3 triples
03:07 sjoy: ok
03:08 Trust: oh oops, its 1/4, anyway
03:08 Trust: moving on lol
03:09 sjoy: 05:02:328 (5) - stack with 05:01:364 (1) - tail
03:09 Trust: thats fine, if that was your intention I would keep it
03:11 Trust: i think this should be a clap instead of a whistle 05:11:961 (5) -
03:12 Trust: here too? 05:12:236 (7) -
03:13 sjoy: ok fine for me
03:13 Trust:
03:14 Trust: there was 1 mean note that gave me a lot of trouble in the playtest and I can't seem to find it :<
03:15 sjoy: I try to guess it.
03:15 Trust: ahh i found it lol
03:15 Trust: 02:06:318 (7) -
03:16 Trust: this one is actually kinda hard to predict under the fast ar, and a bit troll on hidden I would think
03:16 Trust: at least I found~
03:17 sjoy: hmmm u r right changed it
03:18 sjoy: for 02:06:318 (7,1) - I want to set a jump
03:18 Trust: mm yeah a jump would be good there
03:19 sjoy: http://puu.sh/9AbPS/90c2aa15f1.jpg changed it
03:21 Trust: looks good
03:22 Trust: hmm not much else to say
03:22 Trust: i think the testplays speak for themselves, the map is really nice and lots of fun too
03:23 sjoy: Why your mods are always for me????Finally I know it why you can become a BAT lol
03:23 Trust: Huh?!!? lol
03:24 Trust: ok the colour thing
03:24 sjoy: I have seen your other mods .Most of people almost fixed all lol.It's amazing
03:25 Trust: ohh
03:25 Trust: thanks
03:26 sjoy: respect mappers .best mods lol
03:27 Trust:
03:28 Trust: you wanted green right?
03:28 sjoy: yeah
03:28 sjoy: because of the title
03:31 sjoy: I think change title color is cool. but no one like doing it ..orz
03:32 Trust: mm i like title colour change, but yeah i think people maybe just forget about it
03:33 Trust: ok i figured out what i was doing wrong lol
03:34 Trust: do you want both artist and title the same colour or maybe one lighter than the other?
03:36 sjoy: ummm both changed it
03:37 Trust: ok have a look
03:38 sjoy: should I update before?
03:38 Trust: its an online thing so it should stay
03:39 Trust: you can go ahead and update
03:40 sjoy: ok done~
03:40 sjoy: fine for me thanks ~