Lokamp wrote:

ParaPara
[General] this mode has strange breaks
00:27:039 (3,1) - remove the break between the slider and the beat and fill it with something (maybe a spinner...)
00:34:069 (4) - new combo
00:42:039 (7,1) - remove the break between these beats
00:53:034 (3,3) - start these sliders with whistle and end them with finish
01:20:009 - new beat on next slider's start
01:24:096 (1,2,3,4,5) - weird spacing... make 3rd, 4th and 5th beats further from each others
01:29:001 (2) - move it upper the purple beat
01:33:088 (3,1) - another irregular break... remove it, please.

ToraPara
[General] make the soft sounds a bit louder...
01:02:026 (1,2) - end them with claps
01:08:074 (1,2) - ^

DancePara
[General] like on ToraPara, rise the soft hitsounds's volume (or replace some soft finish with claps...)
00:05:050 (5) - new combo
00:08:074 (6) - ^

BeatPara
I don't see so much problems here!

MasterPara
Add sonds on this mode, the rest was O.K.

Some modes have beats on the sliders, the modes's lenght is not the same for all the modes, but this is funny to play. Have a star! ^^

ouranhshc wrote:

Overall - check alignment of circles in all diffs

ToraPara
00:30:639(3) - off screen
00:31:450(1) - off screen
01:23:342(3) - off screen

Samurai_X wrote:

[ParaPara]
Fine

[ToraPara]
01:13:020 (5,6) - Add a note on the white tick inbetween these Done

[DancePara]
00:30:063 (3) - Clap at end Done
00:32:026 (3) - ^ Done
00:33:088 (3) - ^ Done
00:38:074 (8) - ^ Done
00:45:023 (6) - ^ Done

[BeatPara]
01:14:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Redo this What's A Problem?

[MasterPara]
00:33:007 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Eh What's a problem?
00:36:051 (2,4,7) - Delete Done
01:08:074 (4) - ^ Done
01:21:072 (4) - ^ Done
01:21:092 (1) - Add Done
01:22:053 (4) - Delete Done
01:23:013 (6) - Add Done
01:23:034 (7) - Delete Done
01:33:007 (6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5) - Whistle spam Done

Leorda wrote:

Samurai_X wrote:

[BeatPara]
01:14:062 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10) - Redo this What's A Problem?

[MasterPara]
00:33:007 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Eh What's a problem?

Thanks for Mod and STAR!

alvisto wrote:

Fulfilling PM mod request

PARAPARA
00:33:047 (3) - Turn off distance snapping and align them properly so that the spacing looks not crippled.
00:55:077 (1) - This heart slider behind the previous slider is ugly, consider rearranging them xD
01:40:036 (5) - Turn off DS and manually space it

TORAPARA
00:50:091 (2) - Ugly slider, fix it ?

DANCEPARA
Fine

BEATPARA
Fine, but this diff is so much like Dancepara in terms of everything. xD

MASTERPARA
Sorry, I can't mod this, coz I really don't like this difficulty. Really sorry to be blunt and rude, but this difficulty's small circle size, random spacing, random combo here and there, random hitsound is not very appealing to me. xD

GENERAL
1. I think this map needs more creative map design and placement, there's technically nothing wrong with this map, but, from a player perspective, this map is not fun for me (I test-played it already). Sorry, no star for ya, coz I don't like it atm tbh and it's not yet ready for my star. Sorry if my words are rude or straightforward. xD

2. Video is seriously very weird, why is it horizontally flipped ?

Good luck. Please ask me to mod again if you ever decided to remap the whole thing, or change things drastically. xD

Shinxyn wrote:

I modded Marisa first, so this looked much better, though there are more mods here to contribute to that
Don't use Finish hitsound as you would use whistle or clap (a hitsound paced every few beats)
I think the kiai should start 1/2 beat earlier...

ParaPara-Okay, I know you used small (not tiny) grid, but these parts places annoyed me-
00:33:027 (2) - ... hold the Shift key and "move" this note a bit, then let go, it -should- center (assuming distance snap and grid snap is on)
01:40:016 (4) - ^
and
00:54:096 (2) - spacing
and can I ask you to remap 01:13:020 to 01:24:055? it makes no sense to me while listening to the music

ToraPara Please double check the whole map, I cannot tell why some of the combos start where they do...
Are you trying to match vocal? (most of the map is)

DancePara This was okayish, but still needs work
I almost thought I heard a clapping pace, but then, I didn't, add more claps please?
00:11:038 (4,5) - for looks, straighten this
00:37:032 (4,5) - ^
00:46:004 (1,2) - you were following vocal well, then suddenly you made a gap...?
There are parts where you used a row of 1/2 beats where the 1/4 beat was... it just sounds awkward (example 01:37:093 (1,2,3) - compared to 01:39:055 (1,2,3,4,5)

BeatPara I see no reason to turn slider tick to 4......!
Meh, you did better with [DancePara] in terms of following vocal or rhythm
this one should have more claps following what you already have
Like DancePara, you placed 1/2 where 1/4 was, but it doesn't matter too much for this one.. I guess...
hmm, I'm not concerned about nazi design for this diff right now...

? what happened to the MasterPara? did you delete?

Leorda wrote:

Thanks. But how to make a beatmap more creative?

FuukoLover wrote:

Fuuko's mod dekimashita!~ <3'

Argh. ;-;
The mp3 on this is so loud that I can barely manage to hear a single hitsound of a whistle. Please, lower the sound. ;-;
Sorry, I can't help you on this.
But when you lower it, call me and I will mod it properly and maybe star it. Catchy song.

arkiandruski wrote:

Alright, this map still needs a lot of work.

ParaPara

00:33:007 (1,2,3) - This rhythm isn't supported by the music. Space these at 3/4 beat and adjust spacing. Fixed
00:40:016 (4,5,6) - Try moving these back a half beat. Fixed
01:00:043 (4) - You need to prep this note (check my first post if you don't know what that means). No WAY!
01:34:028 (2,3) - Either move these notes farther away from the slider or closer to the other end. Fixed

ToraPara

01:07:053 (5,1) - I'd like another note on the beat between these two Added
01:08:074 (3) - Move this back a half beat and lengthen it Fixed
01:10:036 (5,6,7,8) - This rhythm doesn't seem to be supported by the music. Fixed
01:21:011 (1,2) - Like the last time, it's difficult to tell when these two notes are supposed to hit. What do you mean?
01:29:082 (1) - I do not like notes that happen right after spinners. I don't think the difficulty justifies it here. End the spinner where note 1 is now and remove note two. No Way....

DancePara

This looks much better than the previous two difficulties

00:46:065 (2) - It's not as important, since it is a higher difficulty map, but you might want to prep this note. No

BeatPara

The beginning is rather sparse. There are also some odd gaps throughout the map where I wonder why they have no notes. Also, I'm not sure about the 1/4 slider tick.

01:02:026 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Why doesn't this follow the rhythm? You do so later in the map. Fixed

Hope that helps. Good luck.

1. 00:27:802 ~ 00:29:892 - Weird stop =/ Idea: add a slider at 00:28:207 with one loop at 00:28:612, and end it at 00:29:018.
2. 00:42:396 ~ 00:44:423 - Another weird stop >_<
3. 00:59:018(2) - New Combo?
4. 01:27:396(1) - No New Combo here. Maybe on the previous note?

1. 01:00:639(5) - Sounds better at 01:00:437.
2. 01:09:558(4) - Sounds weird here =/ Please, make it at 01:09:356. If you do what I sayid, please add a note at 01:09:964, another one at 01:10:167, and delet the note at 01:10:369.
3. 01:14:018 ~ 01:15:234 - Strange silence here...

1. 00:43:612(3) - please, mirror this slider. The way that is now may be consufing, since it's impossible to know if this one have 1 or 2 loops.
2. 01:34:491(2) - A little bit far from the previous note. Make it closer, please.
3. 01:35:707(x) - Please, add a note here and one at 01:35:910. This silence is not really cool.

1. 00:06:721(2,3,4) - New Combo?

Hanyuu wrote:

i dont know what i should mod here i did not even start looking.. it may be technically ok. but it plays so weird for me in the harder difficulties. there are notes that should not be there in my opinion and in some parts notes are missing when there should be some... it plays very wrong to me and i allways have to look closely when playing. also you got a nice eurobeat and did not even map the song to the whole potential. you should spend some more time mapping this and make it alot harder but easier to play :s

DJPop wrote:

Go to song's folder and...
- Delete "Domino ~Domino Girl's Pop Mix~ - ParaGirl (Leorda).osb"
- Delete "Domino - ParaGirl ~Domino Girl's Pop Mix~ (Leorda).osb" <<< it has 2 spaces beetween Domino and -
- Delete "Domino - ParaGirl (Leorda).osb"

~ParaPara~
SliderTickRate:2
00:35:910 - not recommend to break here

~ToraPara~
SliderTickRate:2
00:23:054 (2) - move 1/4 right or delete it because it's so confused - -"

~DancePara~
00:11:099 (1) - hitclap at ending
00:14:001 (2) - hitclap
00:14:082 (4) - ^
00:34:069 (1) - hitfinish
01:41:018 (1) - ^

~BeatPara~
No major issues.


+Star

abalee wrote:

Sorry for the delay <.<

the no-video link is broken. full submit again may fix...

the spacing i point out are not very disturb while playing, but i suggest to fix them.

BeatPara:
01:36:31 (1,2) - spacing(AIMod can't find it lol)

DancePara:
01:08:95 (2,1) - same as above >.>

ToraPara:
00:31:45 (1) - at first i think this slider following vocal, but compare to other sliders in the similar part, i think it should end 1/4 beat later(next white line)
same in ParaPara... change it or not, as you like.

your map make me feel the 07's map style xD

starz

1. The spinner is @_@... so purple. It's hard to notice the spinner's approach circle sometimes. Maybe change it to something darker?
2. Go to "Setup -> Storyboarding -> Misc. toggles" and enable "Display storyboard in front of combo fire". Make sure to apply it on all difficulties.

1. Why is countdown enabled in this difficulty?
2. There's a general lack of hitsounds. Maybe you should add more.

Gens wrote:

[General]

1. The spinner is @_@... so purple. It's hard to notice the spinner's approach circle sometimes. Maybe change it to something darker?
2. Go to "Setup -> Storyboarding -> Misc. toggles" and enable "Display storyboard in front of combo fire". Make sure to apply it on all difficulties.

[ToraPara]

01:14:423 - Add a beat here? Just to be consistent with the previous patterns.
01:20:910 - Same.

[BeatPara]

1. Why is countdown enabled in this difficulty?
2. There's a general lack of hitsounds. Maybe you should add more.

~ ~ ~

Pretty nice work you did here. Have a well deserved star.

Yes wrote:

congrats on your first ranked map n_n

Cyclone wrote:

I added the spinner's BG and meter to the map. BATs, please don't overlook this anymore.