Strawberry wrote:

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edit: 发现一点问题，06:13:218 - 这里再加一根x1.0的绿线~~刚才忘了讲，后面的slider都跑偏惹 xDD

来补上mod :3

[KayeSara]
00:12:193 (4) - add a whistle?? and add a finish on the (6), sounds good imo~:3
00:13:988 (3) - put whistle on the tail of slider for the slidertick of (1).
00:15:013 (1) - same as above for 00:16:039 (3) - 's slidertick
00:20:142 (3) - change clap to finish or just add finish on the tail of the slider? idk.. :p
00:24:757 (9) - add finish?
00:33:475 (1) - ^
00:41:167 (9) - ^
00:41:680 (1) - finish on the head?
00:46:808 (3,4) - how about add whitles? it's suitable
00:48:603 (4,5,6) - whistle (or add them on (5,6))
01:02:193 (3) - nc here? and add a finish on the start of the slider?
01:18:603 (1) - finish on the head?
01:31:936 (3) - i think the clap should be put on the end of slider rather than the start?


[raririn]
01:35:013 (4) - nc
01:43:218 (5) - add a nc here and ctrl+g? it's funny to play
01:55:526 (5) - nc here?
02:05:783 (1) - end at 02:07:321 - ? it's so closed to the next note that hard to notice
02:12:193 - ~02:13:475 - umm..idk..however i think you can remove this break for it is useless
02:21:936 (5) - add nc here
02:27:834 (4) - ^ that's reasonable
02:29:885 (4) - nc here rather than 02:30:398 (1) - ?...
02:35:783 - add a note?.. plays awkward..


[Sun Rainbow]
03:09:629 - add a note here? :3
03:15:654 (3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - 好坑爹
03:22:193 (5) - whistle
03:25:783 (12) - finish
03:36:295 (3) - 。。这个有点鬼畜。。球减点速，不然感觉很容易拉断啊 o
03:37:577 (1) - ^
03:58:090 (4) - change to default soft finish? the custom's is so weak that hard to hear anymore..
04:02:706 (3) - nc here?


[qq944364487]
overmapped.. idk how to mod :p


[x847606653]
好像还没加音效诶:3
06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - 怎么和日彩虹一样坑OAQ
06:28:347 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - ^
06:42:706 (1) - spacing.. a bit confused...


[Mei_coN]
06:56:808 (5) - move to x:100 y:304? flow better imo :3
07:15:526 (1) - touched HP bar
07:43:475 (5) - add a clap here?
07:51:424 (4) - set a clap on the tail?


[Nyan]
08:14:501 - add a circle after (5) to consistent as 08:16:552 (8) -
08:23:218 (3) - add a whistle on the end of slider? sounds better imo
08:24:244 (7) - if you changed above, also add whistle on the head of slider and (8)
08:33:475 (7) - nc here to consistent as 08:35:270 (1) -
09:06:295 (2,3,4,5,6) - awkward.. try this? --> http://puu.sh/1oWTJ


[Flask]
10:11:936 (1) - so closed to the next note.. how about end at 10:13:475 - ?


[______VOSE]
10:47:834 (2) - the nc should be set in here rather than 10:47:706 (1) -
10:55:013 (1) - nc?
11:01:167 (6) - ^
11:03:988 (4,7) - how about add nc on these circle? it's more clearly to read :3
11:09:372 (4) - nc
11:17:577 (6) - ^
11:19:629 (5) - ^


[Fionana]
这边好像也还没有下音效:3
11:25:783 (5) - nc here~
11:31:936 (5) - i would like to put a nc here :3
11:42:706 (3) - nc
11:43:731 (6) - if you followed above, also add a nc here
11:51:167 (5) - ^
12:19:629 (2) - ctrl+G? :p
12:21:167 (5) - i'd like to set a nc on here also
12:25:013 (6) - nc?


[Athena Tennos]
14:13:731 (8) - spacing?
14:34:501 - honestly i feel shortened it to end at 14:34:501 - is more suitable..
最喜欢这段:3

好图 ( >///<

Star Stream wrote:

From my queue~

[General]

1. Rename to 'Collab' or something like that
2. Consider adding name tags SB for the diff

[Collab]

1. 01:14:501 (1) - stack its body on 01:13:988 (4) - 's tail
2. 01:30:911 - clap
3. 01:32:449 - ^
4. 01:35:013 (4) - NC
5. 01:43:218 (5) - ^
6. 01:53:218 (7) - your combo doesn't make sense at all, start combo from here, not 01:54:244 (1) -
7. 02:05:013 (4,5) - ctrl+g for better movement
8. 02:30:783 (2) - unexpected 1/4 jump, reduce its distance
9. 02:33:860 (4) - ^
10. 02:35:142 (2) - ^
11. 02:43:731 (1,1) - i don't see why you NCed here, remove both or at least 02:44:116 (1) -
12. 02:45:783 (4) - not so good to see, stack on the slider's tail
13. 02:50:398 (2) - embrassing, no SV change or use at least 1.5x for here
14. 03:15:654 (3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4) - too hard to play unless the player is pro. if pro, even hard when the player play it with DT. don't separate them
15. 03:29:885 (3,4,5) - 1grid up to stack 4 on the slider
16. 03:31:936 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - no, it's too sharp, are you really making a 'Collab' diff or just your own part for you? don't break its diff spread
17. 03:32:962 (4) - NC
18. 03:36:295 (3) - 1.5x for here
19. 03:37:577 (1) - doesn't make sense at all, i'd add a 1/6 slider from 03:37:321 - to 03:37:577 - (yes, with 2 arrows) instead
20. 03:39:629 (5) - ctrl+g for better play
21. 03:47:577 (2,3) - seems you're just copying other members' style, idk, but that slider doesn't make sense, maybe find other ways
22. 04:04:757 (6) - NC
23. 04:10:911 - idk who mapped this part. but well, for the mapper, remap this part. you're breaking its diff spread, which means you're turning this map to unrankable
24. 05:44:116 (5) - 1grid right,down for better movement
25. 06:09:885 (7) - NC
26. 06:10:911 (15) - ^
27. 06:11:936 (23) - ^
28. 06:12:706 (1) - remove NC
29. 06:13:218 (1,2,3) - wrong beats, here's actually 1/6
30. 06:13:988 (4) - NC for downbeat, kiai start, mood change
31. 06:17:065 (8,1,2) - kinda hard patterns to hit, just 5 circles or slider - slider - circle plz
32. 06:19:116 (1) - really unexpected rhythm/distance change, NC at least
33. 06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - don't make me angry, delete
34. 06:25:270 (1,2,3) - same as 06:17:065 (8,1,2) -
35. 06:27:321 (3) - same as 06:19:116 (1) -
36. 06:28:347 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - same as 06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) -
37. 06:38:347 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - rhythms don't make sense at all, especially that 3/4 sliders, remap that notes
38. 06:46:039 - slider from here to 06:46:295 - (maybe 1/2 with an arrow)
39. 06:46:808 (2) - NC
40. 07:02:193 (9) - ^
41. 07:40:142 (2) - same as 06:13:988 (4) -
42. 07:59:629 (4) - NC for jump
43. 08:01:680 (3) - arrow is hidden by 08:00:654 (1) -
44. 08:27:321 (5) - NC
45. 08:47:834 (1) - NC for after spinner
46. 08:49:116 (6,7,8) - 1/6 beats for here
47. 09:21:680 (5) - NC
48. 10:06:808 (9) - 2nd arrow is hidden by 10:06:295 (7) -
49. 11:04:244 (5) - NC
50. 11:25:013 (2,3,4) - 1/6 beats for here
51. 11:44:244 (7) - NC
52. 11:48:347 (4) - ^
53. 12:51:295 (5) - delete
54. 13:40:654 (1,2) - embarassing, too far from center

Sorry but its quality makes me lazy and i don't see any rankability with this map
Good luck then

wantuole wrote:

[General]
ok
[LOOOOOOOOOOP]
00:47:834 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - 少量叠还可以 叠多了
01:00:142 (1,2,3,4,5) - ^ 推荐相同的ds
01:19:372 (2,3) - 像这个节奏
02:44:501 (1) - remove nc
03:09:373 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - 换个摆法
03:53:218 (1,2) -
04:08:988 (2) - 不推荐使用蓝线开头的slider
05:19:629 (1,2,3,1,2) - 蓝线不要nc
06:13:304 (5) - 突然用了1/6 感觉不适应 虽然曲子本身就有这个轨
06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) -
06:28:347 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 略鬼畜 拿你没办法
09:06:295 - 09:21:680 略平淡了 穿插点三连
11:07:321 (8) - nc
11:21:680 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - 4个1组nc
12:27:065 (1) - 叠好才对
14:19:115 (1,2,3,1,1,1,2,3,1) - 这个梗用多了 虽然也是这个节奏 还是不用的好

Sun Rainbow wrote:

00:20:142 (3,2) - 重叠
00:44:501 (4,6) - 分开
01:04:244 (1) - 形状改好看点
02:07:834 (1) - 这里开始忽然切换音效有点不习惯
02:16:552 (3,4,5,6,7) - 其实可以摆的更美的
02:44:501 (1) - 这里开始有点偷懒的成分呢
04:40:911 (2,4) - 重叠
04:50:399 (3,1) - 重叠
05:20:654 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - 前面切那么频繁
06:13:218 (4,5,6) - BUG？不是三联吗
06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - 有点难读图
暂时先这样

K i A i wrote:

wow.. 14 minutes..

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your bg is unrankable. change it's size its rankable~=w=

[LOOOOOOOOOOP]
01:51:936 (4) - 1 grid up
02:07:065 add circle is not bad
02:34:501 (1,2,3) - how about decrease these slider's distance? it is can make disarray to player.
04:11:424 (2,3) - how about make these sliders more roundly?
05:40:398 (7) - Ctrl + G?
06:13:218 (4,5) - hmm.. how about change to slider?
06:19:116 (1) - , 06:19:501 (2,3) - increase these note's distance (0.8 -> 1.0x)
06:20:142 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - decrease these note's distance (1.6 -> 1.3~1.4)
06:27:321 (1) - , 06:27:706 (2,3) - increase these note's distance (0.8 -> 1.0x)
06:28:347 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - decrease these note's distance (1.6 -> 1.3~1.4)
07:05:911 (4) - how about this? -> http://puu.sh/2afgw
07:35:013 (5,6) - how about make these slider's bending to offside?
07:59:629 (1) - add 'soft-hitwhistle20'
08:01:680 (3) - ^(at this slider's start)
08:03:731 (5,2) - ^
08:09:372 (2) - ^(at this slider's end)
08:49:116 (6,7) - hmm.. how about change to slider?
11:25:013 (2,3) - ah.. sorry.


that's all~
good luck!! + 1