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Yellow Zebra - Hana no iro wa ~Flowering Light~

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SamiPale
766 posts
Joined October 2009
SamiPale
As your request~

[General]
if you don't use SB,delete .osb file and do a full submission
make sure all green lines(timing section)are on ticks

[Normal]
00:38:474(7) - No,this slider is better that return on red tick
01:17:663(T) - useless timing section ,delete it
01:47:663(7) - No,this slider is better that return on red tick


[Hard]
ehh...i heard some place hitsound a lot and some place no hitsound....perhaps needs to recheck adjust hitsound balanced

here's some new combo mainly mods
SPOILER
00:10:366(6) - spacing
00:14:960(1) - remove new combo
00:16:041(4) - new combo
00:37:393(9) - new combo
00:38:203(1) - remove new combo
00:40:636(1) - remove new combo
00:41:717(5) - new combo
00:47:122(1) - remove new combo
00:47:933(2) - new combo
01:11:852(6,7) - spacing(this place you used 0.8x Distance spacing but (3,4,5)use 0.9x)
01:38:203(10) - new combo?
01:38:474(1) - remove new combo?
01:50:366(1) - remove new combo
01:50:906(3) - new combo
01:57:122(1) - new combo?
02:21:176(7) - new combo
02:21:717(1) - remove new combo
02:51:447(9) - new combo
02:52:257(1) - remove new combo
02:53:609(4) - new combo
02:53:879(1) - remove new combo
03:38:474(5) - newcombo?

star for nice song and map~

EDIT:
SPOILER
もしわからなかったら。。私のヘタ日本語でmodしてもいいです :o
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pieguyn
2,020 posts
Joined May 2009
pieguyn
Normal:

-The spacing on this is rather strange at points (sometimes it's too far, sometimes it's too close, and such, and it doesn't seem intentional). Try going through it with distance snap and fixing up the spacing a bit...
-Almost all your timing sections are on top of existing notes. As such, whenever said timing section has a change in volume, the note it's on top of will either have the first or second volume depending on when you hit the note. Go through it and move these timing sections to 1/4 before the beat they're on top of.

01:01:176 (1) - Start the Kiai here and add a finish
01:11:987 (3) - Align this (and (4)) with (2)
01:17:933 - End the Kiai here
02:01:447 (1) - Align with (6)
02:10:366 (1) - Start the Kiai here and put a finish on this note
02:10:906 (2) - Remove finish
02:27:663 - End the Kiai here
03:19:555 (1) - Start the Kiai here and put a finish on this note
03:20:095 (2) - Remove finish

Hard:

-The spacing on this is also rather strange. Go through it with distance snap and fix the spacing. There are some things such as 02:56:852 (1,2,3,4) and 03:36:852 (1,2,3), though, that I think fit with the song, but make sure the minor spacing differences (the ones throughout almost all of the beatmap) are fixed.
-The max score is 11 million. This map seems easy enough to FC, so you'll probably have to reduce it by a bit.
-Same timing section problem as normal

00:24:420 (9) - Replace this with a spinner, and end the spinner at 00:26:041?
01:01:176 (1) - Add finish
01:01:717 (3) - Remove finish
01:11:852 (6) - As it is, this is almost impossible to see. D:
01:14:149 (1) - Unstack it? It seems odd having it stacked...
02:10:366 (1) - Start kiai here, add finish
02:10:906 (3) - Remove finish
02:23:879 (2,3,4,5,6) - Unstack (5) and (6)
02:27:663 - End the kiai here
03:13:609 (2) - Align with (1)
03:19:555 (1) - Start kiai here, add finish
03:20:095 (3) - Remove finish
03:37:933 (4) - New combo

Nice work so far. *star* Make sure you fix that spacing though!
Leorda
4,416 posts
Joined June 2009
Leorda
KONNICHIWA

[File]
Your bg (sakuya.jpg) is almost to 1024x768, you need to resize it to 1024x768

[Normal]
00:12:528 (5,1) - Too far between these two
00:16:852 (6,1) - ^

[Hard]
02:16:582 (10) - Don't stack with 8
02:54:420 (4) - Don't stack with 2

Not bad
SU-TA
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
samipale pieguy1372 and Leorda
thanks mod.

all fixed.

norma and hard spacing fixed?

hard overalldiff 1up

and background size change redownload plz XD

Leorda>>KONNICHIWA :)



all thanks star :)
Astom
1,588 posts
Joined October 2008
Astom
In red maybe important, In blue suggestions

[General]
-Use same kiai time in Normal and Hard
-both dif have distance problems, run AIMod and fix them
-TOUHOUE ESCALATION - Hana no iro ha ~Flowering Light~ (Frill).osb Erase this file, u don't use it

[hard]
- -1 Overall Diff.(More easy)
-this dif is insane not hard, 4,96 stars, if u don't reduce OD or increase circle size, change the name

I don't like much hard dif, but still StaR
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill

Astom wrote:

In red maybe important, In blue suggestions

[General]
-Use same kiai time in Normal and Hard
-both dif have distance problems, run AIMod and fix them
-TOUHOUE ESCALATION - Hana no iro ha ~Flowering Light~ (Frill).osb Erase this file, u don't use it

[hard]
- -1 Overall Diff.(More easy)
-this dif is insane not hard, 4,96 stars, if u don't reduce OD or increase circle size, change the name

I don't like much hard dif, but still StaR



all fixed.
change the name Insane

thanks mod and star.


me too.
DeFiLeR
2 posts
Joined July 2009
DeFiLeR
つstar
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
thx ^^
TTTTTTTTTTTT
1,116 posts
Joined August 2009
TTTTTTTTTTTT
Normal
00:29:825(5) - add a finish hitsound and ruduce volume
01:39:555(x) - add a note?
02:26:041(5) - move one gird down
02:46:582(4) - move one gird down
03:33:609(2) - move one gird left

Insane
01:57:122(1) - make symmetry

star~
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
Thanks H-boy.

fixed.

01:39:555(x) - Note was added.
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
Place timing section before the note.

~Normal~
01:01:176 (1,2,3) - move up 1 grid (Lv3)
01:14:420 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - move down 1 grid (Lv3) ?
02:16:852 (4,5,6,7) - move left 1 grid (Lv3)
02:44:960 (1,2,3) - move up 1 grid (Lv3)
02:51:447 (3,4,5) - move down 1 grid (Lv3)

~Insane~
00:34:149 (2,3) - wrong spacing
00:38:474 (3) - move right 1 grid (Lv3)
00:41:717 (1) - make it aligned with 2-3 ?
00:52:257 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - move left 1 grid (Lv3)
01:58:203 (2) - unrankable, it's completely hidden
02:44:960 (1) - move up 1 grid (Lv3)
03:02:798 (3,4,5) - ^
03:03:879 (6) - move up 2 grids (Lv3
03:10:906 (1) - move up & right 1 grid (Lv3)
03:11:176 (2,3) - move right 1 grid (Lv3)
03:22:528 (3,4,5) - wrong spacings
03:29:555 (5,6) - move up 1 grid (Lv3)


+Star
Derekku
COOL DUDE
7,270 posts
Joined March 2009
Derekku
[General]
*Offset: 9,274 seems to be better. *Was only getting 1/2ms off after testing Insane twice)

[Normal]
Beautiful~

[Insane]
01:57:112 (1,2) - I like it, but it's unrankable (2 is practically invisible).
03:20:636 - Did you place a second kiai fountain here on purpose or did you just forget to keep kiai on the previous inherited section? Either way, make both difficulties consistent with kiai. :P

Fix those few things and I'll pubble this. :)
Derekku
COOL DUDE
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Joined March 2009
Derekku
I love it <3

Pubbled!
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
all fixed.

thanks DJPop and Drekku Chan.


pubble~ :)
Thanks!
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Aenna
724 posts
Joined March 2009
Aenna
フォルダの中の.osbは不要です
消してフルでアップしなおしてください
Tagsに"Yellow Zebra"を追加してください

[Insane]
東方系の難易度名はLunaticが多いようです
Frillさんの自由ですがLunaticの方がしっくりくるかもしれません

00:26:571 (1) - 音量を変える際にtiming lineとサークルは被せちゃだめです timing lineを1つ手前の青や赤などに置いてください
01:07:922 (2) - 上と同じ内容です
01:09:814 (1) - このtiming lineは不要です 消してください
01:11:814 (4) - Remove note?
01:11:976 (6) - New combo
01:12:246 (1) - Remove new combo
02:05:219 (4) - (00:26:571)と同じです
02:07:111 (3) - 上と同じ内容です
02:11:436 (6) - 上と同じで、ここにnew combo?
02:18:192 (4) - 上と同じです
02:19:003 (1) - 上と同じです
02:22:111 (6) - Remove note??
02:27:652 (x) - ここにサークルを追加 Soft finishがいいかも??(多分)
02:48:192 (6) - (00:26:571)と同じです
02:49:274 (1) - 上と同じです
02:53:598 (1) - 上と同じです
02:56:841 (1,3,1) - 上と同じです
03:10:084 (4) - 上と同じです
03:14:138 (3) - 上と同じです
03:15:490 (2) - 上と同じです
03:15:625 (3) - Remove note??
03:19:544 (1) - ここみたいに、kiaiを入れたいけど音量が変わるから手前に...って時は

こんな風に手前に音量のための線、サークル上にkiaiのための線、と入れればokです
03:19:814 (2) - (00:26:571)と同じです
03:20:084 (3) - ここのhit soundがスライダーの中間にしか入っていませんが故意的でしょうか？
もし始点か終点に入れてたと思った！などでしたら修正してください
03:28:192 (1) - (00:26:571)と同じです なぜkiaiが終わってるのでしょうか?? :(
03:35:490 (1) - (00:26:571)と同じです
03:37:246 (2,2) - 上と同じです

[Normal]
HP Drain 1up?

こちらも言いたいことはInsaneとほぼ同じです
音量を変える時はサークルとかぶさらないように修正してください
01:13:868 (8) - Remove note??
01:14:138 (x) - Add note??
01:40:184 (1) - スライダーの終点が1 grid 上にいってます 1 grid 下では？
02:47:652 (5) - New combo
03:28192 (1) - Insaneといいたい事は同じです

所々ずれてるっぽいスライダーはgrid snapをoffにして配置したのかな :(

いい譜面だと思います
頑張ってください～☆
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
thx Cyborg

fixed.


grid snapは外した覚えないです。
ただのミスです。sorry :(
Nakagawa-Kanon
Featured Artist
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Joined March 2009
Nakagawa-Kanon
offset:9,285

[Normal]
01:56:841 (1) - spacing check plz
01:39:544 (6) - △


[Lunatic]
01:44:690 (3) - 1 grid down
02:25:771 (3) -
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
thx. dksslqj

fixed.
xierbaliti
osu! Alumni
1,009 posts
Joined August 2008
xierbaliti
-General-
I saw many random hitsounds in this map,and there're no claps in clap place.Yes,soft-clap did't fit this song.But you can use a custom clap.

-Normal-
Seems good :)

-Lunatic-
00:17:933 (1) - add finish？
01:01:841~01:17:933 (9) - Volume 65%~75% this part?
02:26:041 (5) - 1 grid up

*star*
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
Thanks xierbaliti

fixed.
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
Title name Change

NEW
Sai Hua is ~Flowering Light~

REDOWNLOAD PLZ :?
Shulin
1,189 posts
Joined August 2009
Shulin
General:

-- Are you sure the title is correct? "Hana no iro ha" seems more correct.
-- Offset 9275 worked much better for me.
-- Move to "Pending Beatmaps" (seems complete to me, unless you are mapping another difficulty?)
-- Add "ZUN" to tags.

Normal:

Good.

Lunatic:

01:40:761 (3) - Move forward to the red tick? (Shorten the slider if you do this)
02:56:302 (3,4,5) - I think this one is better as a regular stack.
03:00:491 (3) - Move forward to the white tick? (Shorten slider if you do this)

Only suggestions. Nice map.
~ Star
Derekku
COOL DUDE
7,270 posts
Joined March 2009
Derekku
Popping this for now until the name is ascertained and it's back in Pending. o-o;;

Gimmie a call on irc or PM me for repubble.
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
sorry :(

all fixed :


and

Title Name Change

REDOWNLOAD PLZ XD
Shulin
1,189 posts
Joined August 2009
Shulin
You forgot to move it back to pending beatmaps :D

(No kudos for this lol)
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
sorry XD

fixed

Thanks! :)
Derekku
COOL DUDE
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Derekku
Repubbled, I suppose. :S
Frill
514 posts
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Topic Starter
Frill
sorry XD

thanks :)
Cyril Scarlet
osu! Alumni
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Cyril Scarlet

Cyborg wrote:

SPOILER
フォルダの中の.osbは不要です
消してフルでアップしなおしてください
Tagsに"Yellow Zebra"を追加してください

[Insane]
東方系の難易度名はLunaticが多いようです
Frillさんの自由ですがLunaticの方がしっくりくるかもしれません

00:26:571 (1) - 音量を変える際にtiming lineとサークルは被せちゃだめです timing lineを1つ手前の青や赤などに置いてください
01:07:922 (2) - 上と同じ内容です
01:09:814 (1) - このtiming lineは不要です 消してください
01:11:814 (4) - Remove note?
01:11:976 (6) - New combo
01:12:246 (1) - Remove new combo
02:05:219 (4) - (00:26:571)と同じです
02:07:111 (3) - 上と同じ内容です
02:11:436 (6) - 上と同じで、ここにnew combo?
02:18:192 (4) - 上と同じです
02:19:003 (1) - 上と同じです
02:22:111 (6) - Remove note??
02:27:652 (x) - ここにサークルを追加 Soft finishがいいかも??(多分)
02:48:192 (6) - (00:26:571)と同じです
02:49:274 (1) - 上と同じです
02:53:598 (1) - 上と同じです
02:56:841 (1,3,1) - 上と同じです
03:10:084 (4) - 上と同じです
03:14:138 (3) - 上と同じです
03:15:490 (2) - 上と同じです
03:15:625 (3) - Remove note??
03:19:544 (1) - ここみたいに、kiaiを入れたいけど音量が変わるから手前に...って時は

こんな風に手前に音量のための線、サークル上にkiaiのための線、と入れればokです
03:19:814 (2) - (00:26:571)と同じです
03:20:084 (3) - ここのhit soundがスライダーの中間にしか入っていませんが故意的でしょうか？
もし始点か終点に入れてたと思った！などでしたら修正してください
03:28:192 (1) - (00:26:571)と同じです なぜkiaiが終わってるのでしょうか?? :(
03:35:490 (1) - (00:26:571)と同じです
03:37:246 (2,2) - 上と同じです

[Normal]
HP Drain 1up?

こちらも言いたいことはInsaneとほぼ同じです
音量を変える時はサークルとかぶさらないように修正してください
01:13:868 (8) - Remove note??
01:14:138 (x) - Add note??
01:40:184 (1) - スライダーの終点が1 grid 上にいってます 1 grid 下では？
02:47:652 (5) - New combo
03:28192 (1) - Insaneといいたい事は同じです

所々ずれてるっぽいスライダーはgrid snapをoffにして配置したのかな :(

いい譜面だと思います
頑張ってください～☆


藤宮さんばっか聞いてたから　これがぜぶらって気づかなかったｗ
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
うっちーさんと藤宮さんは
違うサークルで歌いに行ったりしてる時ありますからね :)
WyndII
777 posts
Joined October 2008
WyndII
Konnichiwa Frill!

Hana no iro ha ~Flowering Light~

[General]
This song is catchy XD

[Lunatic]
Like AIMod said, no problems were found in this map! XD


[Normal]
Same. XD

<3
Good luck~
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
Konnichiwa :)

Thx~
Lizbeth
osu! Alumni
1,731 posts
Joined August 2008
Lizbeth
sorry for the delay >///<

White combo color is kinda hard to see imo

Lunatic
01:14:680 - this timing section inst doing anything, am i wrong? delete it if s not affecting the map
remember to place inherited timing section with volume change before the notes, never on top.
pretty nice diff =) but you could add a few more jumps to it, to make it more dynamic.

Normal
all good =)

Star + kudos star cuz the map doesn't have to much errors =)
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
thanks mod~ :)



Lizbeth wrote:

White combo color is kinda hard to see imo
oh sry :o

new combo color Yellow
Is this safe?

fixed~
Lybydose
osu! Alumni
2,024 posts
Joined January 2009
Lybydose
Artist should be Yellow Zebra. Touhou ESCALATION is the name of the album, not the artist.
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
fixed.
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
Artist Name chaned

redownload plz
thepianist
544 posts
Joined March 2009
thepianist
Random mod hehe. Feel free to ignore any of my suggestions.

[Overall]
Remove TOUHOU ESCALATION and change to just touhou. Move the "Escalation" into tags.
Combo colors can be darker. With kiai they're a bit blinding. D:

[Normal]
00:09:274 (1) - Add a whistle in the start?
00:11:977 (4) - No whistle?
00:13:599 (1) - Finish?
00:14:680 (3,4) - Whistle?
...
00:33:058 (3,4) - Whistle?
00:35:220 (1) - Finish?
...Iono I think in some parts the first, third, and fourth white ticks having a whistle would be nice. Or a bit of consistency at least.
00:58:193 (1) - ^
01:10:896 (2) - Whistle? Or remove whistle on 01:06:572 (2)? Since its also on 01:15:761 (3)...
Et cetera in similar sections
02:56:842 (5,6,7,8) - Perhaps move it so it looks nicer than just a stack?
03:31:437 (7,8,9,10) - ^

[Lunatic]
00:24:410 (1) - Finish?
00:58:193 (1) - ^ (As with most spinners)
01:57:112 (1) - Perhaps move the center anchor point so it is a bit more symmetrical

Great map! ^^ *star
Frill
514 posts
Joined March 2010
Topic Starter
Frill
thanks mod.

fixed

but

thepianist wrote:

02:56:842 (5,6,7,8) - Perhaps move it so it looks nicer than just a stack?
03:31:437 (7,8,9,10) - ^
The action that I took has decreased the number of stack.

you think this?


Thanks~
thepianist
544 posts
Joined March 2009
thepianist

Frill wrote:

thanks mod.

fixed

but

thepianist wrote:

02:56:842 (5,6,7,8) - Perhaps move it so it looks nicer than just a stack?
03:31:437 (7,8,9,10) - ^
The action that I took has decreased the number of stack.

you think this?


Thanks~
The way you have it now is fine, but if you like the original rhythm, I was thinking something similar to
SPOILER
But looking cleaner.

But it's up to you. ^^
(Don't kudos this post)
Frill
514 posts
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Topic Starter
Frill
Thank you for the proposal.
However, because this difficulty is Normal, it tries by this style.

Thanks mod.
minyeob
osu! Alumni
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minyeob
Umm first, what's the name? I can't get it from internet sites :x
Maybe 花の色は？
If I right, this song's name should be changed to "Hana no Iro wa ~Flowering Light~"

Anyway mmm good work.
Frill
514 posts
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Topic Starter
Frill
fixed

thx~^-^
abalee
osu! Alumni
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abalee
Lunatic:
00:32:788 (9,1) - Spacing.

Should be all fine after the fix.
Frill
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Topic Starter
Frill
fixed~
abalee
osu! Alumni
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abalee
got a little late.
Ephemeral
Inland Empire
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Joined April 2009
Ephemeral
Mp3 is a 96kbps transcode and is thus of too low quality to be reasonably presentable in a ranked map.

Will attempt to find you a better one, but feel free to attempt to find a better one yourself in the meantime.
Ephemeral
Inland Empire
3,945 posts
Joined April 2009
Ephemeral
Found a new mp3 for you. You may also want to update the beatmap's title with the proper capitalization as well.

Timing update is required:
BPM: 111
Offset: 366

http://www.mediafire.com/?uygyodezyyx

abalee: feel free to restore the bubble once he's updated the song with the new mp3 and timing - i may not be available for a while to restore this one myself
Frill
514 posts
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Topic Starter
Frill
thanks XD

fixed

redownload plz~
abalee
osu! Alumni
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abalee
mp3 changed? o.O
offset looks good. rebubbled.
Andrea
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Andrea
Little IRC Modding, removed Yellow Zebra from the tags because it's already the artist of the song.

Ranked~
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