Agent Spin Here wrote:

Your storyboard is painful. PLEASE get rid of it. Isn't kiai good enough?
Why are there 2 normals? I think you should change difficulty names to:
'Senson's Standing on Snow'
'Ultimate's Walking on Snow'
'x3ns0r's Jogging on Snow'
'naruti's Running on Snow'

Senon's Normal
This is bad.
Claps are underused. When there is a clap in the music, put on one the note. I have done it every other clap in the beginning. I just removed some and fixed one.
00:19:28 - Is there meant to be a break here or something? ...there was a break there.
00:29:28 (4) - Remove one reverse? Sure
00:44:16 - Note here? Done
00:47:33 (1) - New combo Done
00:47:57 (2) - Start this 1/2 later No. It'd be so typical and boring.
00:49:52 (3) - ^ ^
00:53:43 (5) - ^ ^
00:56:60 (3) - 1/2 earlier Done
01:06:35 (1) - Remove the reverse and make the path 3/4 longer Done
01:35:62 (1) - New combo Sure
01:38:30 - Note here. Done
02:20:99 (9) - New combo Done
02:21:72 - Uh, what. lolwut who remove my breaks
02:34:65 (1,1,1) - Remove new combos. '1,2,3,4' in lyrics should have those numbers on the hitcircles :3 kay done
02:40:01 (5,6,7) - No 1/4 plz ;_; ????? triplet? I removed a note anyways.
02:53:91 (1) - New combo Done
02:54:65 - Note here to make it flow. Done
02:57:82 (5) - Kinda confusing, feels like it's going to reverse much less than it does. fixd

[Senbon]
Hi Senbon~
00:18:55 (5) - Add a break after this? done
or fill it up with something
00:34:40 (7,8) - Spacing is a bit weird here fixd (5) was too close
00:41:96 (9) - Add a clap on the 2nd repeat. done, but can't be single. :\
00:45:13 (3) - Remove clap done
00:45:38 (4) - Add clap at beginning of slider? I like the whistle..
02:21:47 (11) - Add a break after this? done
02:51:23 (9) - Add finish at the end done, but can't be single :\
02:58:79 (6) - Move this up a little? dunno what that is now since the other mod xP

Doomsday93 wrote:

nice map. that SB did a StrangeProgram on me though and made me miss in Running on Snow D:.

star'd

naruti wrote:

should i give a kudosu for that 0_o

Yes wrote:

standing on snow.
00:10:01 (6) - add clap at 00:10:25 Ok, ok.. I'll put these in before someone else complains.
00:13:67 (1) - ^ at 00:14:16 Done
00:12:21 (2) - clap Done
00:25:86 (7) - clap? Done
00:27:82 (2) - clap beginning of slider Done
00:29:28 (4) - clap at 00:29:77 Done
01:43:18 (3) - i think it would sound nice if you extend this to 01:43:67 Done
02:49:77 (4) - [nazi] allign with end of sliderrr? One of the ugly sliders.
02:59:04 (9) - too far? ^

naruti wrote:

Senbon wrote:

hey nooo it's graveyarded

JUst wait til my pc is fixed ^^ then its ungraveyarded

RemmyX25 wrote:

Revived

thx

Symbolic wrote:

[Running On Snow]

Make difficultyname Running on Snow so that "on" isn't capitallized (same as the other diffs).
fixed
02:54:40 (2,3) - Remove this jump, it doesn't fit, you could fix it by replacing 3 with 4.done
02:58:06 (5,1) - Jump doesn't fit, fix it.done
02:58:55 (2,3) - ^done


Why do x3ns0r's difficulty and Senbon's difficulty don't have the same sprite-image on the end as Ultimate's and naruti's?
euhm ultimate??
Very nice map and song,thank you
Starred *

ykcarrot wrote:

[General]
Set a preview time at every diffs.

[Senbon]
00:45:38 (5) - why include whistle?
01:38:06 (1) - no hard jump plz
02:40:01 (5,6,7) - these are a little bit close each other
02:53:91 (5) - spacing

[Ultimate]
Don't put audio timing point right on note. If player click it fast, it makes weird sound.

[x3ns0r]
01:06:23 - This timing point. Move to 01:02:69 ~ 01:05:37 in this section.
It will help to remove pulse effect. This is Kiai time tip.
02:05:13 - ^ same suggestion.
02:16:35 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1) - I suggest more separated gadually increasing volume.

SPOILER

136233,-100,4,1,0,75,0,0
136721,-100,4,1,0,80,0,0
137209,-100,4,1,0,85,0,0
137696,-100,4,1,0,90,0,0
138184,-100,4,1,0,95,0,0
138672,-100,4,1,0,100,0,0

Other 2 diffs are seems good for me.
Nice song and maps!
star ^^

Azure_Kyte wrote:

The preview point is the point in each diff where the music starts when you select it. You know when you choose a beatmap from the song select screen and it usually starts playing at a certain point in the song? That's what the preview time does. I think it also determines the preview played on the website, as well.

So find a point in the song which would fit well and go to Timing (the program menu one, not the editor one) > Set Current position as preview. Save and repeat the process with the other difficulties.

ykcarrot wrote:

[General]
Set a preview time at every diffs.

[Senbon]
00:45:38 (5) - why include whistle? i dunno... i remove it then.
01:38:06 (1) - no hard jump plz fixed
02:40:01 (5,6,7) - these are a little bit close each other fixed
02:53:91 (5) - spacing fixed

Senbon wrote:

ykcarrot wrote:

[General]
Set a preview time at every diffs.

[Senbon]
00:45:38 (5) - why include whistle? i dunno... i remove it then.
01:38:06 (1) - no hard jump plz fixed
02:40:01 (5,6,7) - these are a little bit close each other fixed
02:53:91 (5) - spacing fixed

I'm kinda annoyed by some of the double claps I have and some that can't be there 'cause of the ugly doubles.. I dunno how to get rid of it because it selects two repeats instead of one all the time.

I also fixed more hitsounds~!

[General]

If you can add any tags if possible? o.o

[Yes Sleeps on Snow]

00:44:16 (1) - IMO, kind of bland without hit sounds and such many repeats. Maybe cut down by two repeats and fill in?
01:18:79 (3) - Clap on end?
01:20:25 (4) - ^

nice <3

Kytoxid wrote:

[Yes Sleeps on Snow] (man, that's gotta suck)< LOL

SPOILER

00:58:55 (1) - I'd adjust this a bit to line up with 2.
01:42:45 (1,2,3,4) - Inconsistent spacing.

It's pretty good, in general just watch out for the 1/1 note spacing (sometimes it's 1 grid, sometimes 2, but it's not that big of a deal, as long as it's consistent within a phrase/combo/stream/whatever).

[Senbon's Standing on Snow] (nice boots?)<they are realy warm

SPOILER

00:12:69 - Consider adding a note here.
00:34:40 (7,8) - Move 7 one grid right, 8 one grid up.
00:54:65 (6,7,8,9,1) - Horizontal spacing is slightly smaller than vertical spacing.
01:19:52 (5,6) - Too close.
01:23:43 (1,2,3) - Spacing.
01:25:62 (6,7,8) - ^
01:51:47 (8) - New combo for consistency.
02:11:23 (6,7) - I'd consider moving these down and left a bit to make an equilateral triangle across 5,6,7.
02:18:06 (5) - Move down a bit to line up with 3?
02:34:16 (1) - Any reason for this timing section?

Same comment for Yes sleeping (must be really cold) applies here.

[Ultimate's Walking on Snow]

SPOILER

01:06:35 (1) - Move this timing section ahead by 1/4 or so in case the player hits the note early.
01:40:25 (6) - Endpoint up by 1 grid to line up with 7?
02:34:16 (1,2,3,4,1) - Move the timing sections earlier.

I liked this beatmap a lot. Very smooth-feeling. Awesome.i like this map 2

[x3ns0r's Jogging on Snow]

SPOILER

00:21:23 (1) - Fine in editor, weird in play mode.
00:44:89 (4,5) - Line up endpoints?
01:20:50 (6,7,8) - Unrankable.
01:38:79 (3,4) - Spacing throws you off a bit.
02:00:01 (10) - Up 1 grid.
02:05:13 (1) - Timing section needs to be earlier.
02:13:42 (1,1) - ^
02:16:35 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - Too many claps, I think.

(felt pretty awesome too, this one):)

[Running on Snow] (oh no, we don't know who's running on snow! Everyone panic)
Who is running 0_o that guy must be realy stupid to run on snow 0_o

00:13:67 (4) - 1 grid right for symmetry with 3.fixed
00:30:98 (1) - 1 grid left to line up with 12?fixed
00:44:89 (4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1) - Move the timing sections earlier.fixed
00:47:08 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Alignment's a bit weird.fixed
00:58:54 (1,2,3,4) - 2,3 significantly closer than others.fixed
01:10:25 (14) - 1 grid down.fixed
01:18:06 (2) - 1 grid right.fixed
01:42:20 (1,2,3,4) - Realign a bit.fixed
02:12:69 (3) - Move the timing section.fixed
02:43:18 (4) - 1 grid right.fixed
03:01:23 (5,6) - 1 grid left.fixed
03:03:42 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - Timing sections.fixed
03:06:11 (3) - 1 grid right.fixed

Nice song overall, starred.

fartownik wrote:

The offset in Yes' and Senbon's difficulty (16) is different than in x3ns0r's, Ultimate's and naruti's (14).
I also noticed tags in x3ns0r's difficulty, "Jordan Sparks" (?), why "Jordan" and why only on x3ns0r's?
I got NOthing to do with that 0_o

[Senbon's]

SPOILER

00:25:038 (5) - 1 tick up (spacing)
00:55:013 (8,9) - 1 tick right (spacing)
00:55:038 (9,1) - Swap new combo
01:25:062 (6) - New combo
01:28:030 (5) - Delete new combo

[Ultimate's]

SPOILER

02:08:055 (1,1) - Swap new combo

[x3ns0r's]

SPOILER

This difficulty sounds weird. Try to fix it following my notices.
00:10:050 (1) - Delete clap
00:12:020 (2,3,4,5) - Add clap
00:31:023 (2) - ^
00:32:069 (4) - ^
00:34:064 (8) - ^
00:36:059 (2) - ^
00:38:006 (4) - ^
00:38:794 (1) - ^
00:39:028 (3) - ^
00:40:050 (6) - ^
00:41:047 (1) - ^
00:42:020 (4) - ^
00:42:069 (5) - ^
00:44:089 (4) - Finish
00:45:037 (5) - ^
00:45:086 (6) - ^ (all of repeats)
00:47:033 (2) - Clap
00:48:006 (4) - Clap
00:58:006 (1) - Delete new combo
01:16:084 (9) - Finish
01:20:025 (5) - New combo.
01:31:047 (3) - Finish
01:31:096 (4) - ^
01:32:045 (5) - ^
01:32:094 (6) - ^ (on all repeats, delete the clap between)
01:59:028 (7) - 1 tick down, 1 tick right
01:59:052 (8) - 1 tick down
02:16:035 - The normal hitsounds type should beggin here and make louder by the next circles
02:19:003 (1) - End on 02:20:501
02:41:047 (3,4,5,6) - What's the point of this repeats?
02:45:086 (6) - 1 tick up, 1 tick left
02:46:011 (7) - ^
03:02:094 (5) - Expand this slider to 03:04:892. Finish on the end
03:05:379 - Copy the previous slider and paste it beggin here

You've made me tired.

[naruti's]

SPOILER

Finally... I hear whistles
00:11:477 - Only a suggestion: you could add a circle here. It sounds better
00:15:379 - ^
00:54:040 (11) - Add a repeat with clap.
01:37:033 (8,1) - Swap new combo.

all fixed those extra notes are cool
Uhh, nice song. Good job guyz. ~Starry. Also my longest modding About 1 hour.

Kytoxid wrote:

[Senbon's Standing on Snow] (nice boots?)

00:12:69 - Consider adding a note here. Done
00:34:40 (7,8) - Move 7 one grid right, 8 one grid up. Done
00:54:65 (6,7,8,9,1) - Horizontal spacing is slightly smaller than vertical spacing. Fixed
01:19:52 (5,6) - Too close. Fixed
01:23:43 (1,2,3) - Spacing. ???
01:25:62 (6,7,8) - ^ Fixed, I guess...
01:51:47 (8) - New combo for consistency. Done
02:11:23 (6,7) - I'd consider moving these down and left a bit to make an equilateral triangle across 5,6,7. Fixed
02:18:06 (5) - Move down a bit to line up with 3? Done
02:34:16 (1) - Any reason for this timing section? I dunno.. removed it

Same comment for Yes sleeping (must be really cold) applies here.

fartownik wrote:

The offset in Yes' and Senbon's difficulty (16) is different than in x3ns0r's, Ultimate's and naruti's (14).
I also noticed tags in x3ns0r's difficulty, "Jordan Sparks" (?), why "Jordan" and why only on x3ns0r's?

[Senbon's]

SPOILER

00:25:038 (5) - 1 tick up (spacing) why
00:55:013 (8,9) - 1 tick right (spacing) already done
00:55:038 (9,1) - Swap new combo Done
01:25:062 (6) - New combo done
01:28:030 (5) - Delete new combo done

Xgor wrote:

[Overall]

[Senbon's Standing on Snow]

02:47:033 (6) - I suggest that you make the slider one white tick lower and then add notes at 02:47:033 and 02:47:033. What? I'd be removing the whole slider then. I did something else

Lissette wrote:

Hi

Senbon's Standing on Snow
00:31:047 (2,3) - wrong spacing Done
01:19:052 (5,6) - ^ ^

Xgor wrote:

[Overall]
The SB lookt kinda odd but it's ok although i would love if you could make a snow SB snow eh...
if i can find a jordin sparks with snow or something i stil like the current 1

[Running on Snow ]

I don't like the whistles i this diff but it's ok otherwise...
i like them so i leave them there <3

[Senbon's Standing on Snow]

SPOILER

02:47:033 (6) - I suggest that you make the slider one white tick lower and then add notes at 02:47:033 and 02:47:033.

[ Ultimate's Walking on Snow]


[ x3ns0r's Jogging on Snow ]

SPOILER

01:39:052 (4) - This slider is impossible to predict.....
02:40:098 (2,3,4,5,6) - LAAAMME......

[Yes Sleeps on Snow ]


Pretty good map so a star for you
*star*

Lissette wrote:

Hi
hello
Senbon's Standing on Snow

SPOILER

00:31:047 (2,3) - wrong spacing
01:19:052 (5,6) - ^

Ultimate's Walking on Snow

SPOILER

00:21:047 - add note?

x3ns0r's Jogging on Snow

SPOILER

02:54:064 (7,8,9) - this is a bit confusing

Running on Snow
01:29:028 (11) - move the start point half beat later, and add note here 01:29:028 (just like the others parts ^^)fixed
02:20:001 (12) - move half beat later and remove one repeatFixed
02:30:050 (1) - i like what you did with the volume here ^^ Glad some1 notices and likes it

Star I dont see it T_T

Thank you for your mod lissette
you pinpointed the problems and give a solution Thank you for that

naruti wrote:

For Lazy Ultimate XD hell yeah
Symbolic:

SPOILER

[Ultimate's Walking on Snow]
01:35:86 (5) - New combo.
01:51:47 (6) - ^
02:08:06 (7) - ^
02:08:55 (1) - Remove new combo.

Ykcarrot:

SPOILER

[Ultimate]
Don't put audio timing point right on note. If player click it fast, it makes weird sound. I know, just something I had to learn

Kytoxid:

SPOILER

[Ultimate's Walking on Snow]
01:06:35 (1) - Move this timing section ahead by 1/4 or so in case the player hits the note early. jup
01:40:25 (6) - Endpoint up by 1 grid to line up with 7? no no
02:34:16 (1,2,3,4,1) - Move the timing sections earlier. Ok i know already

fartownik:

SPOILER

[Ultimate's]
02:08:055 (1,1) - Swap new combo

Lissette:

SPOILER

Ultimate's Walking on Snow
00:21:047 - add note? why?

could you please make a
Beatmap BY yes like this 1 below =D

SPOILER

ATTACH[Beatmap By Naruti.jpg]

Good luck XD

Leorda wrote:

[Senbon's Standing on Snow]
00:14:645 (2) - Allign with 1 (end of slider)
00:39:767 (4) - Allign with 3[/color] no... i just pulled up (4) so it looks better
00:55:864 (3) - Make parallel
00:57:084 (6) - ^[/color] done..
01:00:498 (1) - Offscreen Slider.... fixed
01:16:108 (2) - Allign with 1
01:37:084 (3) - Allign with 2[/color] no
01:47:328 (1) - Offscreen Slider.... done


Not bad. STAR

1. (nazi) 00:37:020 (5) - Move one grid level down. (Grid level 3 / Most Precise)
2. 01:29:027 (11) - Clap (?)
3. 01:31:023 (2) - ^

1. (nazi) 00:10:049 (1,2,3) - Move one grid level to the right (Grid level 3 / Most Precise)
2. (nazi) 00:30:001 (9,10) - Move both one grid level down.
3. 01:16:084 (9,1) - Stack this good please, looks weird now.
4. 01:19:052 (4,1) - Same here.

1. Sexy <3

1. 00:16:010 (1) - Clap (?)

1. Sexy <3

Gladi wrote:

- Running on Snow.

1. (nazi) 00:37:020 (5) - Move one grid level down. (Grid level 3 / Most Precise)
2. 01:29:027 (11) - Clap (?)
3. 01:31:023 (2) - ^

FIxed


Starred~

0_o wrote:

Senbon's
Running
-Feels nicer with 1 less overall difficultyFIxed
-Some of the whistles irked me, especially at the beginningFIxed
-01:33:303 (x) - I was expecting a beat here, maybe add one?no
01:42:450 (2) - Clap?FIxed
02:05:376 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6) - Could you make this a nicer square?i hope you like this
03:06:352 (4) - No big deal, but this is a little too close to 3

Nice mapset, let me know when you made the changes!