1. Another (5 stars, 373 notes)
2. eLtXXx's Hyper (4,86 stars, 238 notes)
3. Normal (3,23 stars, 114 notes)

1. 00:03:345 (4) - ...no need to use a slider with angle that sharp imo, try something like this instead:
   

   313,342,3345,2,0,P|284:344|255:357|255:357|227:344|193:344,1,120,0|2,0:0|0:2,0:0:0

2. 00:13:745 (4,5,1) - Try this angle perhaps? Flows cuter imo if (5) is slightly curved~
   
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3. 00:14:145 (5) - Clap on slider's start here (perhaps with lowered volume)? There's a clap on the song o.o
4. 00:16:345 (4,5) - Here, would be better imo to place (4) lower so it'll carry the flow from (3), then arrange (5) so it forms a triangle:
   
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5. 00:22:545 (3,4) - ...if you placed (2) higher you can get a pattern with neat 120° rotation actually, plus this way (4) will be greatly stacked to (1)'s start (:
   
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6. 00:24:145 (1) - If you do above, you can simply make this elbowing (4) :3
7. 00:32:145 (5,6) - Tilt them a bit to give more variation? It won't hurt~
   
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8. 00:33:745 (1,2,3,4) - Err, why don't you make these four as a diamond instead xD
9. 00:36:945 (1) - To emphasize the SB more, end this spinner on 00:38:750, then:
10. 00:39:345 (x), 00:39:745 (x), 00:40:145 (x) - Add three 1/1 notes here? (you can use a slight jump here if you want, don't worry - it fits if it's done correctly (: )
11. 00:53:545 (2,4,5) - Umm, why clap? I'd much prefer if clap is only used on (1) and (3), emphasizing the bass beats more (this applies to next parts like this)
12. 00:58:745 (1) - Make this slider horizontal (facing right) instead to give a lot of flow to (2)?
13. 01:03:145 (2,3) - At this point you can trick the distance snap a bit actually, I know (1) has four repeats but it's much better if you preserve symmetry instead without following spacing - it's more beautiful plus it won't be hard to catch at all~
    
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14. 01:14:545 (2) - Put in ~x:177 y:236 to deliver more flow among (1,2,3) here?
15. 01:22:745 (x) - Use a 1/2 slider here instead and delete 01:22:945 (4)? Feels kinda weird having the rhythm discontinued...
16. 01:24:945 (1) - Actually this is something you can consider here (feel free to modify the slider though, I'm just making it fast and not really tidy ._.)
    
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    456,164,84945,6,4,P|404:100|287:140|291:239|291:239|295:340|176:372|119:288,2,480

17. 01:31:945 (1) - To give more flow I'd not start it parallel, but like this instead:
    
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18. 01:34:545 (3,4,5) - Arrange in an arc instead? (2,3,4) will form a triangle + it flows more superior compared with your current back-and-forth:
    
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1. 00:03:345 (1) - CTRL+G for circular movement here?
2. 00:05:745 (3) - Remove clap on slider's start? Also I don't think it's a good idea to copy-paste the shape from (2) directly, at least you can apply some jumps/rotations though:
   
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3. 00:07:345 (3,4,5,6) - I see these four are exponentially having a bigger distance in y-axis, why not having it jumpier in x-axis as well xD
   
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4. 00:12:745 (4) - Perhaps place it lower to form an arc, then
5. 00:13:745 (1,2,3) - Create symmetry with previous pattern here? It fits the break very much~
   
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6. 00:14:945 (1) - If you changed above don't forget to rearrange this though, stack it under 00:13:745 (1) should be fine already
7. 00:15:345 (2,3,4) - Umm, spacing inconsistency here? o.o
8. 00:17:445 (3,4,5) - Your current (5) looks very forced imo, perhaps try slider fans like this:
   
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9. 00:18:545 (1) - If you do above suggestion, don't forget to move this downward though (so it didn't overjump), perhaps you can flip this as well like this:
   

   188,320,18545,6,0,P|256:364|324:316,1,170,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0

10. 00:22:745 (5,6) - Actually I'm quite worried about how this slider will look in play mode (due to stacking's nature)... I prefer to move (4) to ~x:151 y:171 and unstack these two like this (arranging the next (7,8) won't be hard~) :
    
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11. 00:36:745 (9,1) - Move (9) to ~x:200 y:50 and (1) to ~x:280 y:23 to make symmetry between (8,9,1)?
12. 00:38:545 (1,2,3) - For the pattern before the break, I really recommend to use pattern with 120° rotation though (you can stack (2)'s end beneath the previous (3)!) like this xD
    
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13. 00:51:345 (1) - Remove that 25% volume inherit section? Umm idk why you used it, it's not that audible imo...
14. 00:53:345 (1,3) - Err, why you stopped the clap here? There is a VERY audible clap from the song, I don't think you should stop the clapping o.o
15. 00:55:545 (1,2,3) - Again, why don't you just aim for center symmetry here ((1) in ~x:334 y:317, (2) in ~x:256 y:352, and adjust (3) from (1))... Much neater this way (:
16. 00:58:995 - Try this slider shape though, flows much better compared to standard curve:
    

    280,116,59345,2,0,P|239:115|206:88|206:88|152:88,1,127.5

17. 01:04:745 (1,2) - Start (2) in 01:04:945, therefore making it a triple? It doesn't feel really right when you start (2) on the blue tick (the song's emphasize is mostly on white tick though) - beware of how the stacking will look in play mode though
18. 01:17:745 (3,4,5,6) - Umm, with some practice you can make a good square without dist. snap/grid snap on actually :3
    

    64,168,77745,1,0,0:0:0
    45,280,77945,1,0,0:0:0
    158,297,78145,1,0,0:0:0
    176,184,78345,1,0,0:0:0

19. 01:25:545 (4,5,6) - Try to tilt these three while retaining the straight line pattern, then
20. 01:26:145 (7) - Place a bit higher than (6)'s end to carry on more flow from (6), due to (6)'s shape? Like this:
    
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21. 01:29:545 (1) - The delay you're creating on 01:29:445 doesn't sound really good actually (due to the bass continues there) - I suggest to either add a note there or start this slider on 01:29:745 + add two extra circles to create a triple (again, your emphasizement doesn't feel really right currently ._.)
22. 01:37:745 (1,2,3,4) - You're forcing (1) way too far to the left orz, the arc shouldn't be in the angle this extreme >_<
    

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    105,351,97945,1,0,0:0:0
    184,384,98145,1,0,0:0:0
    268,376,98345,1,0,0:0:0

1. 00:01:745 (1) - Put in ~y:12, so it'll fit the storyboard more ('the light source') xD
2. 00:05:745 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Umm, I experimented around here and found this manual stacking triple looks cute~
   
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3. 00:11:345 (1,2,3,4) - Hmm, try to make the diamond better (so it'll look more patterned) here?
   
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4. 00:11:745 (2) - On slider's start, Addition: Soft + add whistle
5. 00:15:145 (2) - imo it'll be a lot fancier if you put this more to the left (~x:166 y:168) so they won't form a really straight line
6. 00:20:945 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Select all in editor, then move to ~x:88 y:44 so 00:21:945 (6) can be stacked to your previous (4)? No further spacing change needed though~
7. 00:24:745 (2) - Umm idk if you're going to like it, but due to stacking's nature I suggest to move this either a bit (~7 coordinate) higher or lower to form a manual stacking here (so the symmetry won't be ruined while playing xD)
8. 00:36:945 (1,2) - Err, I don't really recommend clap on both slider's start here... I'd stay to standard 2/1 clapping here (use clap only on (2)'s end) OR if put claps on (1)'s start and (2)'s end if you want to be innovative :3
9. 00:37:745 (1,2), 00:38:545 (1,2) - Same as above
10. 00:51:345 (1) - Sampleset or Addition: Soft + add whistle? xD
11. 00:54:545 (1,2,3) - Umm, for me an arc looks more majestic here~
    

    2,20,54545,5,0,0:0:0
    30,105,54745,1,0,0:0:0
    116,130,54945,1,0,0:0:0

12. 00:56:345 (1) - Err, delete this? (it doesn't follow anything from the music and feels like *somewhat* overmapped imo) - therefore you can arrange the following notes in symmetry like this though (:
    
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13. 00:59:945 (3,4) - Umm, no need to stack (3) under (2) imo >_< - just move (3) to current (4)'s position and (4) to ~x:209 y:134 for a moving manual stack~
14. 01:13:745 (1,2,3,4,5) - I REALLY recommend manual stacking vertically here though, looks weird in play mode ._.
15. 01:17:145 (2) - Create back-to-back slider with (7) here perhaps...
    
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16. 01:17:845 (3,4,...) - ...and then magic happens xD
    
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17. 01:24:545 (8) - imo would be nice if you can put this in ~x:256 y:158 to sustain your next symmetry pattern, not a must though :3
18. 01:25:745 (3,4) - I don't think copypasting directly from (1,2)'s shape really work well here, I'd play around with some rotation here for better flow:
    
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19. 01:34:945 (2) - Move to ~y:72 to avoid clustering with (7,8)?
20. 01:36:145 (1,2,3) - Again, I recommend manual-stacking here to keep symmetry in play mode (:
21. 01:41:345 (4,5,6) - Same as above (and it works really beautiful here actually xD)

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 S,0,1745,2145,1,1.1
 F,0,2145,2545,1,0
 S,0,2145,2545,1,1.1

Mosti07 wrote:

Really nice beatmap D

Lolicore Flandre wrote:

Its weird but she chose it this way *shrugs* Rank gogogo!

Lolicore Flandre wrote:

Theres no way im not modding this

[Normal]

01:22:744 (4) - This plays weird, for me it doesn't really fit in to the rhythm at all, plus this is a normal. <---Hm not think, now it more playable, what if I put note only on white tick, It can cofused~
00:37:744 - uuh whats this timing point for? 5% volume is barely noticable Oh~ I feel what It no need here~
01:28:544 (1) - put a NC on the spinner? <--- Yep >.< I fixed it later~

[eLtXXx's Hyper]
00:16:144 (1) - flip horizontally? <--- looks good for me now~

I got a suggestion for a better end.
01:42:544 - First off place a timing point here and set sliderspeed at 0.50x
01:43:544 - Put another timing point here and set the sliderspeed to 1.00x
After that save and paste this code in the .osu file

192,76,102544,6,0,P|220:160|292:180,1,170
276,96,103544,2,0,P|360:96,1,85
380,96,103844,1,0,0:0:0
396,96,103944,1,0,0:0:0
412,96,104044,1,0,0:0:0
428,96,104144,1,4,0:0:0

hope you like it <--- No, I don't like it ;w; I don't want change speed here bcz It really can confused, and I don't like change speed in my maps~

[Another]
01:18:044 (5,6) - bet lots of people will break on this streamjump <--- If you will be look it in testplay It looks better, what if I put this note in spacing~

I think I might settle for ranking this myself.