Akcent feat. Edward Maya - That's My Name‬ · forum‬

wcx19911123

Joined June 2010

wcx19911123 2012-03-21T17:49:10+00:00

hi

[General]
spinnerbonus.wav and spinnerspin.wav mustn't be 0kb , change them to the 44b files plz
enable "Display epilepsy warning" in taiko diff?
kiai time is different in each diff , I suggest make it the same in all diffs

[Easy]
I suggest HD-1 , AR+1
00:30:660 (1,2,3) - change to sldier plz , this is too hard to play as Easy diff
00:46:128 (2,3,4,1,2,3) - ^ , here is to 2 sldiers
01:20:816 (2) - ctrl+1 , 2 gird up
01:23:628 (1,2,3) - change to sldier , and I ignored same issues from now , plz check the same pattern yourself

[Normal]
00:33:003 (2,3) - chagne this to sldier , or this is too hard to play as a Normal diff
00:33:941 (6,1) - don't jump in Normal diff , at least don't jump too huge
00:45:660 (1,2) - same issue here
01:17:535 (5,6,7,8) - I suggest change to 2 sliders , or it is kinda hard to play
02:11:910 (1,2,3,4) - ^
02:16:831 (4,5,6,7) - ^

[Hard]
01:11:675 (6,7) - I don't know why jump here , don't fit the song at all.. and it play really odd to me
01:16:128 (7,1) - ^

[LoliFlan's Insane]
00:40:972 (2) - this slider's direction make it hard to read how many time it repeat.. change a direction?

that's all
good luck o.o

Aleks719

osu! Alumni

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Joined May 2010

Aleks719 2012-03-29T18:28:50+00:00

General

Firstly, turn off letterboxes. why? look:
Use same kiai time in LoliFlan's Insane please
~~no normal-whistles? i'll kill you~~ u.u~~i could show how awesome they can be in my diff, but too late~~,lol~

LoliFlan's Insane
00:33:941 (3,4,1) - purple circle very hard to read on purple part of bg.
01:04:410 (1) - add whistle
01:28:550 (2) - better replace nc from previous note to here
01:32:066 (5) - add nc
01:35:933 (3) - remove this note, it follows nothing
02:26:675 (1) - better make louder and add finish to the end

Hard
00:48:706 (1) - imo, rhythm will be better in this way:
(you have to replace spinner on 4/1 later and add some notes/sliders) :

01:20:347 (7) - better ctrl+r
01:21:285 (1) - and nope again. make it 1/1 shorter and try this (ofc hitsounds, as example, add finish to the spinner) :

01:33:706 (1) - spinner from nowhere and ends nowhere too, better remap it
01:40:738 (7) - add nc here like here : 01:48:238 (1) - ? and in all same place with long combos too
02:08:160 (1) - same about strange spinner
02:23:160 (1) - ^ no need to end it on special place. make end of spinner in correct place, don't break vocal

Normal
00:04:527 - useless section. remove
<here i grasped that tickrate2 would sound and look cool. these claps/double claps sound interesting for me>
00:49:410 (1) - strange spinner
02:02:066 (4) - unsymmetrical >, <
02:19:410 (10) - combo 10 is too high for normal diff
02:23:160 (1) - strange spinner (well,well for me ofc), i won't speak about it anymore

Easy
HP-1, AR+1 imo
maybe tickrate 2 too
nothing serious here, only too many copy-paste patterns.

HellDawn

1,035 posts

Joined April 2010

HellDawn 2012-03-31T15:08:56+00:00

Download: Akcent feat. Edward Maya - That's My Name (Barney Stinson) [HellDawn's Normal].osu

Good luck.

Lanttu

860 posts

Joined December 2008

Lanttu 2012-04-06T20:26:08+00:00

Storyboard
Add a bit more fade to beatmap.png and storyboard.png, it looks really stiff when they just suddenly appear like that.

[LoliFlan's Insane]
00:37:925 (1) - Maybe lower the second square by 3-4 grids? (fix the stacking also if you do this)
00:40:035 (1) - Like this? http://puu.sh/ofbA
01:03:472 (1,2,3,4,5) - Move these right so they don't overlap with the previous slider
01:32:066 (5) - New combo
01:36:050 (4,5) - Make these symmetrical, looks much better that way http://puu.sh/ofdW
02:12:613 (1) - Remove new combo

[Hard]
00:06:988 (7) - New combo
00:46:128 (2) - Move one grid left and down
01:13:785 (8) - New combo and remove the next new combo
01:19:410 (6,7) - This jump was a bit sudden to me, maybe make it a bit smaller?
01:40:738 (7) - New combo
01:58:785 (7) - New combo, 02:00:191 (1) - Remove new combo, 02:00:894 (9) - New combo, 02:01:597 (1) - Remove new combo
02:04:410 (7) - New combo, 02:04:878 (1) - Remove new combo and 02:06:519 (6) - new combo

[Normal]
00:22:456 - Change this timing section to soft hitsounds
00:36:285 (3) - Move this so that it doesn't overlap with the previous slider.
01:12:613 (2) - Why you didn't silence this slidertick when you did so with all other sliders in this part?
01:14:956 (4,5,6) - Move these 3 grids up
01:17:535 (5) - Maybe new combo?
01:56:206 - Change timing section to soft hitsounds
01:56:910 (1) - This would look much better centered. Try moving the whole combo to right.
02:25:035 - Soft hitsounds again

[Easy]
Same thing about soft hitsounds at silenced spinner ends.

That's all. :3

riffy

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Joined December 2010

riffy 2012-04-12T13:57:22+00:00

my too short message here
star~
rank it! faster! i love this song and map :3

Flanster

5,938 posts

Joined August 2010

Flanster 2012-04-19T20:08:52+00:00

-Bakari- wrote:
rank it! faster!

ertyukjh010

1,415 posts

Joined December 2009

ertyukjh010 2012-04-29T16:12:27+00:00

Hello,

[General]

It had a 0kb file. I don't sure but I remember it's unrank.

spinnerbonus.wav
spinnerspin.wav

It had a 2 .osb. Delete one and Full submit.

Akcent feat Edward Maya - That's My Name (Barney Stinson).osb
Akcent feat. Edward Maya - That's My Name (Barney Stinson).osb

Inconsistency Tags

Lolicore Flandre OnosakiHito HellDawn
Lolicore Flandre OnosakiHito HellDawn
Lolicore Flandre OnosakiHito HellDawn
Lolicore Flandre OnosakiHito
Lolicore Flandre OnosakiHito HellDawn

[Easy]

00:08:160 (1) - [Layout] Do not stack with different colors, new players can not adapt, it will lead to a new player confusion.
00:46:363 (3) - [rhythm] Some hard for new player. I think delete it better.
00:47:769 (2) - [rhythm] ^
01:23:863 (2) - [rhythm] ^
01:38:160 (1) - [Hitsound] Finish instead at beginner?
02:06:753 (3) - [Layout] Wrong distance.
02:11:910 - [Setting] Useless Inherited point
02:16:597 (2) - [Layout] Wrong distance. Why put 0.86x of distance
02:20:347 (2) - [Layout] Same problem with 00:08:160 (1)

[HellDawn's Normal]

00:19:410 (1) - [Layout] Asymmetric. You can see if you click a Ctrl+H. Move last point → 1 Grid. And add a point in the middle like this http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/303800. This can help you control your time but not break the symmetry.
00:23:628 (1,2,3) - [Layout] Why do not put these things in the middle??
00:50:347 (3) - [Layout] Don't good looking.
01:08:160 (1) - [Layout] Asymmetric. Use a Ctrl+H and put the point completely to symmetric. Last move a middle point.
01:10:035 (2,3,4) - [Layout] Wrong distane? Put it 0.84x of distance
01:23:160 (1) - [Layout] Same problem with 01:08:160 (1)
01:25:035 (3) - [rhythm] Add a reverse a delete the 01:25:738 (4). Because very hard for new player.
01:30:191 (4) - [Layout] No stack. because you make a stack when it's 1/1 beat like 00:09:566 (1) or 00:11:441 (4). It is difficult to judge is 1/1 or 1/2
~~01:35:816 (3) - Good job of symmetric :>~~
01:57:378 (1,2,3) - [Layout] Same with 00:23:628 (1,2,3)
02:08:628 (1) - [Layout] Same problem with 01:08:160 (1)

[Hard]

00:34:410 - [Setting] Overlap inherited point
00:41:558 (6) - [rhythm] Delete it fit the rhythm.
00:49:058 (2) - [rhythm] Move to 00:49:175
00:51:285 - [Setting] Useless inherited point
01:27:847 (4) - [Layout] Why make a worm here? Weird and don't fit the sound. Use straight line pls.
01:34:058 (2) - [rhythm] Move to 01:34:175
02:04:878 (1) - [Hitsound] Clap at beginner
02:05:816 (3) - [Hitsound] ^
02:06:753 (6) - [Hitsound] Clap
02:07:456 (1) - [rhythm] Move to 02:07:222 and instead.
02:07:925 () - [rhythm] Add note
02:22:808 (9) - [rhythm] Move to 02:22:925

[LoliFlan's Insane]

00:18:238 (6) - [Layout] Move a third point to X:300 Y:224 and stack with 00:17:300 (4) at beginner completely
00:18:941 (8) - [Layout] Stack 00:18:238 (6) at end completely
00:23:160 (1) - [Hitsound] Finish instead at beginner
00:38:160 (1) - [Hitsound] Finish at reverse
00:45:660 (2) - [Hitsound] Finish?
00:53:160 - [Setting] Useless inherited point
01:35:581 (1) - [rhythm] Follow the rhythm better: http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/303841
01:38:863 (1) - [Layout] I suggest Remove NC If there is no special reason.
01:39:800 (1) - [Layout] ^
01:40:738 (1) - [Layout] ^
01:43:433 (5) - [rhythm] I don't sure the rhythm but I think move to 01:43:316 will be more comfortable.
01:48:238 (1,2,3,4) - [Layout] Make it square? It's so easy. Copy 01:48:238 (1) and use a Ctrl+> 3 times

01:50:933 (2) - [rhythm] Same with 01:43:433 (5)
01:52:925 - [Setting] Useless inherited point
02:16:128 (1) - [Hitsound] Clap at end
Try to add more Clap to use this method:http://puu.sh/q20x

Good Luck~

star story

28 posts

Joined November 2010

star story 2012-04-30T03:36:11+00:00

LOL

Ch1ka

340 posts

Joined May 2010

Ch1ka 2012-04-30T11:28:59+00:00

Hi, Barney Stinson. It's M4M time! No, Ch1ka, no!

[General]
Hard and LoliFlan's Insane has Audio LeadIn 2, but other diffs hasn't.

Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
Add kiai in HellDawn's Normal: starts on 00:30:660; ends on 00:34:410.
Fix kiai time in LoliFlan's Insane, it's not similar with other diffs.

[Easy]
00:47:535 (1,2,3) - make it more symmetrical with 00:46:128 (2,3,4) -

[HellDawn's Normal]
Why so "withouthitsounds"?
(nazi) 00:10:035 (3) - not perfectly symmetrical.
00:24:566 (1) - ^
00:30:660 (1) - ^
00:43:785 (1) - ^
01:33:941 (1,2) - Wrong rhythm. Something like this?

[Hard]
Again, needs more hs.
01:18:706 (3,4,5) - Wrong spacing. Make (5) a bit closer to (4)

[LoliFlan's Insane]
Seems ok.

[Ono's Taiko Oni]
Seems ok.

That's all. Bye!

Kyshiro

Elite Mapper

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Joined January 2011

Kyshiro 2012-05-03T15:10:09+00:00

M4m as requested :3

LoliFlan's Insane:

00:04:175 (1) - At sliders like these it's not really really necessary, but try to keep the last waypoing in the center of the end note.(This would possibly make it look better too)
00:05:113 (3) - ^ Etc.
00:18:940 (8) - Put it exactly under the end of slider (6) (Turn off gridsnap if necessary)
00:27:847 (4,5,6,7,8) - Stream doesn't really look good, you can see (7) is a bit out, and the spacing is a bit varying(Maybe turn off gridsnap?)
00:29:253 (3) - Rotate by 10 degrees(CTRL+SHIFT+R) and put it at x288 y100
00:29:722 (4,5,6,7,8) - Awkward spacing again, varying from 0.75 to 0.82
(nazi)00:35:699 (7) - Put this at x388 y220 and (8) at x400 y256
00:37:339 (5) - 2 Grids to the left
00:40:035 (1) - Maybe it'd look nice to blanket this one over 00:39:566 (6)'s end?(And notice the ending of the slider like mentioned before)
(nazi)01:08:628 (3) - Put this at x120 y204
01:36:050 (4) - Such sliders should be symmetric, end point should be in the middle of the end point, and the middle waypoint should be exactly in the middle of the slider.
01:37:222 (5) - ^ (You can copy (4) for this one)
02:14:253 (2) - ^
02:17:535 (8) - ^ (Copy (2) )
02:22:456 (1,2) - ^

Nice diff, maybe add a little more spacing here and there to make it a bit harder.

Hard:

00:04:410 (1) - Not symmetric since the last waypoint isnt in the center of the circle
00:43:785 (1) - ^
01:08:160 (1,3) - ^
01:16:363 (1) - Looks fine, however it's not symmetric.
01:32:535 (5) - Touches the HP bar. Suggestion: Move 01:30:660 (1,2,3,4,5) - 4 or 5 grids down.
01:32:535 (5) - As blanket it looks ''almost'' fine, as standalone slider it's a bit messy.
01:35:347 (7) - Blanket this over (6)
01:38:160 (1) - Not symmetric
02:04:878 (1,2,3) - Center (2) in between (1,3) and make a (1,3) fit a bit more as a blanket.
02:13:785 (1) - Blanket over (9)
02:17:535 (1) - Not a perfect blanket(Also note the waypoints.)
02:21:285 (6) - ^

HellDawn's Normal:

00:19:410 (1) - Not 100% symmetric since the last waypoint isn't in the center of the end point (You may want to ignore this one, as the sliders looks fine, do remember this though)
00:30:660 (1) - ^
00:38:160 (1) - Click right mouse button twice on the last waypoint, as it's a white one and a red one on top of it, afterwards move it to x336 y256(You see this by hovering your mouse over the waypoint)
01:33:238 (5) - Move this one 2 grids up with tinygrid
01:45:660 (4,5) - Why did you make this twice? You should make 1 and copy it, so it's 100% the same
01:57:378 (1,2,3) - 2 grids right and 1 grid up with small grid

Easy:

00:23:160 (1) - Make this symmetric by putting the last waypoint in the center of the end point and the middle waypoint in the middle of the slider.
00:25:035 (2) - Copy (1) and press CTRL+H and CTRL+J to flip it, then relocate it.
00:33:941 (4,1) - 2 grids to the left so (1) goes throught the center of the slider(Make sure you correct the spacing in the next notes)
00:38:160 (1) - !Suggestion!: Make it so that the last half of the slider can form a blanket over (2)
01:31:128 (2,3) - Make 1 of these symmetric and copy it for the other one.
02:11:910 (1) - Not symmetric

Overall it's a nice mapset, needs some work on the sliders.

For any questions you may contact me in-game :3

~Kyshiro

LKs

3,119 posts

Joined August 2009

LKs 2012-05-05T05:40:08+00:00

From 【All requests posted here will be modded】 queue

[General]

Error: [Easy] 02:11:910 check this timing section (two at a point)
Error: [LoliFlan's Insane] 00:53:160 ^

[Easy]

red section: volume 50%
00:49:410 (1) - drag this break(light grey area) to 00:53:160

and make it stops at 01:06:285

[HellDawn's Normal]

01:28:785 (1,2,3) - spacing
01:32:535 (3,4,5) - use grid level 4 plz :3

[Hard]

00:49:410 (1) - drag this break(light grey area) to 00:53:160

and make it stops at 01:06:285
01:18:706 (3,4,5) - spacing
01:27:495 - I suspect this slider, this is not very obvious cause you used very tiny shake
no copy

[LoliFlan's Insane]

01:21:285 (2,4,1,2,3,4,5) - weird shape ):

As what you may get a feeling from my word, this map had no serious issues

GL

YTYuyu

osu! Alumni

4,149 posts

Joined January 2011

YTYuyu 2012-05-06T17:38:21+00:00

Alright let's see what I can find. mod requested in game.

Bold: Unrankable/must fix.
Red: You should fix it but it's up to you.
Italic: Suggestion. Feel free to ignore this if you don't like it.
Blue: Comment. Just putting this for fun

[General]
The lead in time is inconsistent. remember that it has to be the same for all diffs. i saw some of the diffs with a lead in time of 2000 and the other with a lead in time of 0.
how about a fade in for the part when it shows the beatmap creator, etc... i don't like how it suddenly appears from the right or left side. it'll make a nice effect during gameplay.

[Easy]
I think HP2 is better as it's easier for beginners. HP3 looks a bit too fast IMO.
00:30:660 (1) - the path would be hard for beginners judging by the direction, so move this up and make this a curved slider to flow properly and nicely to the next note.
00:41:910 (1) - move this to the left. the overlap on (3) looks bad during gameplay.
00:46:128 (2,3,4) - replace this for a 1/1 repeat slider. this looks too hard for beginners to hit.
00:47:535 (1,2,3) - ^
00:48:941 (5) - you should not stack notes on easy diffs. since the hitburst is covering this note, it'd be hard for beginners to know where the note is or when to hit this note.
01:10:503 (2,3) - move it here because it flows a lot nicer during gameplay. moving it there isnt smooth at all. it looks like it's taking a hard right from the slider.
01:23:628 (1,2,3) - same as 00:46:128.
01:27:378 (2,3,4) - ^
02:05:347 (2) - is there a way you can space this out because the overlap looks bad IMO.
02:18:472 (6) - i don't like how the hitburst covers this slider, so change the direction of this so that it doesn't happen.
02:20:347 (2) - Ctrl+J. the path would look a lot smoother if you do so.

[HellDawn's Normal]
00:14:019 - add a circle to follow the instrumental?
00:14:253 (1) - remove the repeat and move this 1 tick up. the repeat slider doesn't fit with this part IMO.
00:23:628 (1,2,3) - this would be hard for players to hit. remember that there's people who use the default skin and there's others who have the spinner-osu icon. in other words, move this somewhere else because it'd be hard for players to know where this note is.
00:24:566 (1) - you forgot a clap at the repeat arrow. add it to keep the consistency in claps.
00:45:191 (2) - ^
00:47:066 - same as above but a circle. add it to follow the snare and make it clap.
01:10:035 (2,3,4) - replace this for a repeat slider to make it easier for players. this would be hard for players because they might hit to too early or late.
01:17:535 (1,2,3) - ^
01:21:285 (3,4,5) - ^
01:40:738 (4) - add a repeat on this slider to follow the instrumental.
01:41:675 (5) - the repeats don't fit with this part, so remove all repeat and make this a 1/2 slider. same reason as above.
01:45:660 (4) - make this a NC because the instrumental changes.
01:48:472 (1) - remove the NC for this. the instrumental is still going for this.
01:57:378 (1,2,3) - same as 00:23:628.
02:11:910 (4) - this should be a NC because of new lyrics.
02:13:316 (1) - if you follow the suggestion above, remove the NC because the vocals are still going.

[Hard]
00:00:425 (1) - remove the spinner since easy and normal don't have it.
00:52:925 - move this break to 00:53:190 because the instrumental changes.
there's so many parts i personally don't like in this diff. i was expecting that this would be fun but i think this diff needs more work

[LoliFlan's Insane]
00:00:425 (1) - same as Hard.
00:34:410 (1) - maybe Ctrl+H to flow a lot smoother to the next note.
01:08:863 (4) - *nazi* make this curved slider symmetrical. it doesn't look nice during gameplay.
01:15:425 (7) - stack the end on (4). it's clearly visible for players to hit if you do this, and it'll be less confusing.
02:17:066 (6) - make this a custom clap. the default clap doesn't fit the song IMO.
02:17:535 (8) - add claps at the 1st repeat and at the end to keep the consistency.
02:25:972 (1) - same as 02:17:535.
pretty nice diff overall

I guess that's it. GL

Kurokami

osu! Alumni

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Joined February 2010

Kurokami 2012-05-07T04:32:46+00:00

hi~

General

Inconsistency in Kiai Times:
SPOILER
[Easy] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:23:160, ends on 00:26:910
Kiai #2: Starts on 00:30:660, ends on 00:34:410
Kiai #3: Starts on 00:38:160, ends on 00:53:160
Kiai #4: Starts on 02:11:910, ends on 02:25:035

[Hard] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:23:160, ends on 00:26:910
Kiai #2: Starts on 00:30:660, ends on 00:34:410
Kiai #3: Starts on 00:38:160, ends on 00:53:160
Kiai #4: Starts on 02:11:910, ends on 02:25:035

[HellDawn's Normal] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:23:160, ends on 00:34:410
Kiai #2: Starts on 00:38:160, ends on 00:53:160
Kiai #3: Starts on 02:11:910, ends on 02:25:035

[LoliFlan's Insane] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 00:23:160, ends on 00:26:910
Kiai #2: Starts on 00:30:660, ends on 00:34:410
Kiai #3: Starts on 00:37:925, ends on 00:53:160
Kiai #4: Starts on 02:11:675, ends on 02:26:675

[Ono's Taiko Oni] :
Kiai #1: Starts on 01:56:910, ends on 02:26:910
offset: 425
Unused timing point: 00:26:910

Easy

02:16:597 (2,3,4,5,6) - move them one grid to the right. 02:16:597 (2) - move this to x:292, y:256 and the following ones after this

HellDawn's Normal

01:10:738 (4) - x:328, y:80
01:30:191 (4) - x:168, y:328 looks better

Hard

0:37:925 (1) - x:204, y:132 for the stack
00:38:160 (2) - x:152, y:152
00:39:566 (7) - x:152, y:152, slider start
00:44:722 (2) - x:256, y:168
00:45:894 (1) - ^
01:35:347 (7) - this slider is not the best
02:05:581 (2) - x:184, y:248 if its purpose then just leave there

LoliFlan's Insane

00:57:378 (2) - not stacked completely
00:59:253 (2) - ^
02:20:347 (1) - x:172, y:108
02:24:097 (3) - not stacked
02:25:738 (4) - x:328, y:100

I hope I write down everything what I want. XD If you accept it, I want to do a ctb GD for this map. When I searched after your name in osu, I realized you did a Stereo Love too, I like that and this map too. :3 Star~

HellDawn

1,035 posts

Joined April 2010

HellDawn 2012-05-08T15:13:20+00:00

SPOILER

http://puu.sh/tCvq

Flanster

5,938 posts

Joined August 2010

Flanster 2012-05-15T18:42:58+00:00

Quick pointers from me :

There are 2 OSB files in the map folder, remove the unused one
spinnerbonus.wav is 0 bytes, replace it with a 44 bytes WAV file
spinnerspin.wav is 0 bytes, replace it with a 44 bytes WAV file
Inconsistency in AudioLeadIn:
[Easy] : 0
[Hard] : 2000
[HellDawn's Normal] : 0
[LoliFlan's Insane] : 2000
[Ono's Taiko Oni] : 0

NO KUDOS YOU CHICKEN.

Saturnalize

1,490 posts

Joined March 2011

Saturnalize 2012-06-04T16:48:12+00:00

I'll mod tommorow
All of my mod are gone because of new style of quick reply, I'm not used to use it.
Before, star~
And it seems you have a lot of untidy slider, perhaps visit this thread to make your slider better t/37194
===================================================================================
Let's go.

=General=
1. Delete Akcent feat Edward Maya - That's My Name (Barney Stinson).osb

=Easy=
1. 00:04:410 (1) - Symmetric slider is beautiful, you should fix this. http://puu.sh/yMWk
2. 00:07:222 (3) - Stacking is somehow ugly here, make a square pattern so this slider is more visible 00:08:160 (1) - so move to (440,252) http://puu.sh/yMXJ
3. 00:23:160 (1) - Move the second slider point to (256,8), creating a beautiful, symmetric slider.
4. 00:25:035 (2) - Copypasta from 00:23:160 (1), ctrl + j
5. 01:26:910 (1) - Stack this to 01:24:566 (4). Don't forget to move 01:27:378 (2,3,4,5) to make a constant spacing if you apply this.
6. 01:28:785 (6) - Symmetric pls. Perhaps change the slider shape? http://puu.sh/yN4t
7. 01:38:160 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - Copypasta from 00:04:410 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) , ctrl + j
8. 01:56:910 (1) - Fix this to make a neater slider > http://puu.sh/yTVE
9. 02:03:472 (6,1,2) - Stacking is nono. Perhaps do this to make a tidy pattern without stack? http://puu.sh/yTXc
10. 02:16:597 (2,3,4) - It overlap 02:18:472 (6) that makes ugly. ctrl+j, and fix the spacing will make this pattern nicer.

=HellDawn's Normal=
1. 00:30:660 (1) - Make this symmetric pls.
2. 00:36:285 (4) - Clap at the end of the slider?
3. 00:43:785 (1) - Symmetric! :O

184,220,43785,6,0,B|200:236|236:220|240:172|256:122|256:122|272:172|276:220|312:236|328:220,1,280,0|0

4. 00:47:066 (0) - Put hitcircle with clap somewhere to fill the awkward emptiness.
5. 00:50:347 (3) - Symmetric!

280,204,50347,2,0,B|320:204|348:308|408:308|420:268|408:228|348:228|320:332|280:332,1,280

6. 01:10:035 (2,3,4) - Fix this to make a nice, neat triangle shape, by using distance snap (and if really needed, turn off grid snap)
7. 01:21:285 (3,4,5) - ^
8. 01:32:535 (3,4,5) - ^
9. 01:57:378 (1,2,3) - Two grid small to the right, make this centered so it'll looks neater!
10. 02:02:535 (1) - Clap at the end of the slider?
11. 02:17:535 (1) - Copypasta from 00:43:785 (1)
12. 02:18:941 (0) - Add hitcircle with clap to fill the awkward emptiness.
13. 02:20:816 (0) - ^
14. 02:22:691 (6) - Clap at the beginning of slider?

=Hardish=
1. 00:31:363 (2,3) - One grid tiny up, make this symmetric with 00:30:660 (1) (notice the gap between red point and hitcircle)
2. 00:33:003 (3) - Rotate selection centre by 9 degrees to make this slider looks more blanket to 00:32:769 (2)
3. 00:41:441 (1,2,3,4,5) - Make this neater!
4. 00:44:956 (2) - Turn this to two stacking hitcircles anywhere but no overlap.
5. 01:10:035 (5,6) - This looks better, so you should fix this. http://puu.sh/yNxx
6. 01:12:613 (3) - Move this to (168,216) to make 01:12:847 (4) looks more blanket
7. 01:17:535 (5,6) - Copypasta from 01:10:035 (5,6)
8. 01:23:394 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Make this neater, I can help.

124,160,83394,5,0
96,88,83628,2,0,B|160:72|212:108|216:188|172:220,1,200,8|0
256,304,84331,1,0
332,208,84566,2,0,B|298:186|302:106|354:70|418:86,1,200,8|0
451,203,85386,1,0
331,207,85738,1,0

=Hard=
1. 00:32:066 (8) - One grid tiny up, make this symmetric with 00:31:128 (6,7) (notice the gap between red point and hitcircle)
2. 00:46:128 (2) - Symmetric, yes

312,236,46128,2,0,B|316:312|256:371|256:371|196:312|200:236,1,300,8|0

3. 01:13:316 (6) - One grid tiny to the right to make a nice curve triplet
4. 01:29:956 (3) - One grid tiny up to make a nice curve triplet
5. 01:32:535 (5) - Curve!

52,128,92535,2,0,B|32:84|56:40|88:16|140:36,2,150

6. 01:35:347 (7) - Another curve!

80,280,95347,2,0,B|56:224|80:176|128:152|160:168,1,150
136,164,95816,1,8

=LoliFlan's Insane=
1. 00:48:003 (2) - Clap?

=Ono's Taiko Oni=
Clean

Good luck :3

HellDawn

1,035 posts

Joined April 2010

HellDawn 2012-06-05T17:50:13+00:00

Loli Cjj wrote:
=HellDawn's Normal=
1. 00:30:660 (1) - Make this symmetric pls. already symmetric
2. 00:36:285 (4) - Clap at the end of the slider? ok
3. 00:43:785 (1) - Symmetric! :O ^
184,220,43785,6,0,B|200:236|236:220|240:172|256:122|256:122|272:172|276:220|312:236|328:220,1,280,0|0
4. 00:47:066 (0) - Put hitcircle with clap somewhere to fill the awkward emptiness. no
5. 00:50:347 (3) - Symmetric! ^
280,204,50347,2,0,B|320:204|348:308|408:308|420:268|408:228|348:228|320:332|280:332,1,280
6. 01:10:035 (2,3,4) - Fix this to make a nice, neat triangle shape, by using distance snap (and if really needed, turn off grid snap) k
7. 01:21:285 (3,4,5) - ^ k
8. 01:32:535 (3,4,5) - ^ k
9. 01:57:378 (1,2,3) - Two grid small to the right, make this centered so it'll looks neater! ok
10. 02:02:535 (1) - Clap at the end of the slider? no
11. 02:17:535 (1) - Copypasta from 00:43:785 (1) ^
12. 02:18:941 (0) - Add hitcircle with clap to fill the awkward emptiness. ^
13. 02:20:816 (0) - ^ ^
14. 02:22:691 (6) - Clap at the beginning of slider? ok

SPOILER

http://puu.sh/yYDE

wcx19911123

3,862 posts

Joined June 2010

wcx19911123 2012-06-08T15:28:51+00:00

hello

[General]

[Easy]
HD-1 and AR+1 is better imo
00:46:128 (2,3,4) - this is too hard to play as an Easy diff, change to repeat slider plz
00:47:535 (1,2,3) - ^
ok I ignored same suggestions from now on

[HellDawn's Normal]
00:23:160 - add newcombo here
01:16:831 (6) - I strongly suggest to change this one to 1/2 slider, or it's hard for newbies to read imo
01:18:941 (1,2) - wrong spacing here
01:40:738 (4,5,1) - I suggest not to use anti-jumps in a Normal diff, hard for newbies to read the rhyme
02:14:722 (4,5) - remove 5, or remove 6, or change them into a slider, or this is really too hard to play as a Normal diff o.o
02:29:019 - I suggest use soft hitsound here, sound better

[Hardish]
00:23:160 - add newcombo here
00:53:160 - why not drug break to here? feel much better when playing
01:36:050 - spinner start at here? sound better
02:11:910 - add newcombo here

[Hard]
01:27:847 (4) - it's not allowed to use a 0.5x speed slider with this kind of shape. plz change to a more readble slider, and use 0.75x speed here if you want to slow down, 0.5x is too suddenly to make ppl read it
01:35:347 - double notes here, delete the useless one plz

[LoliFlan's Insane]
no issues

[Overall]
this map still need many more works now

that's all

DJPop

osu! Alumni

3,549 posts

Here since the beginning

DJPop 2012-06-09T07:05:49+00:00

Kuroneko nopan

~General~
- Add muted soft-sliderslide.wav
- End the last spinners on the same position in every diffs
- SB "Beatmap by" should have the name who mapped that diff

~Easy~
- Set HP 1 or 2
00:22:456 - use S:C1 for this timing
01:56:206 - ^
02:16:128 (1) - move to 364:276 (spacing fix)

~HellDawn's Normal~
- Set HP 3
00:23:160 (1) - it's overlapped with slider, so move to 120:48
00:28:316 (5,1,2) - move to 48:200 (alignment fix)
01:28:316 (4) - move to 484:176 (alignment fix)
02:17:535 (1) - remove new combo
02:19:175 (2) - add new combo
02:20:347 (1) - remove new combo
02:21:285 (3) - add new combo
02:26:675 - use S:C1 for this timing

~Hardish~
00:27:613 (2) - Ctrl+R
00:28:316 (3) - move to 118:132 (spacing fixes)
00:30:191 (3) - move to 372:200
00:34:175 (5) - add new combo
00:45:660 (1) - move to 228:192 (spacing fixes)
00:45:894 (2) - move to 180:272
00:46:128 (3) - move to 276:272
01:08:863 (3) - don't use red dot, make it curve around note 4
01:09:566 (4) - move to 248:276
01:10:035 (5,6) - rotate each slider a bit, don't make the start and the end overlapped
01:12:144 (1,2,3) - move to 56:292
01:12:847 (4,5) - stack the end of sliders
01:17:066 (4) - move to 264:272
01:17:535 (5,6) - rotate each slider a bit, don't make the start and the end overlapped
01:25:972 (1) - remove new combo
01:26:910 (3) - add new combo
01:28:785 (1) - remove new combo
01:31:011 (4) - add new combo
01:32:535 (1) - remove new combo
01:39:800 (4) - move to 337:347
01:48:941 (6) - don't overlap with previous slider
02:01:831 (4,5) - use this pattern
02:12:613 (2) - rotate clockwise 30 degree and stack the end of slider with start of slider 1
02:24:097 (2) - Ctrl+R, better flow

~Hard~
00:07:925 (10) - add new combo
00:11:675 (8) - ^
00:11:910 (1) - remove new combo
00:13:316 (4) - remove this note
00:14:488 (1) - remove new combo
00:15:425 (4) - add new combo
00:34:527 - add timing with N:C2
00:50:113 (6) - move to 184:248
01:16:011 (8) - add new combo
01:16:363 (1) - remove new combo
01:19:175 (5) - move to 152:56
01:19:410 (6) - add new combo
01:23:628 (3) - use this pattern
01:41:675 (10) - add new combo
01:45:425 (8) - ^
01:45:660 (1) - remove new combo
01:47:066 (4) - remove this note
01:48:238 (1) - remove new combo
01:49:175 (4) - add new combo
02:05:581 (2) - move to 182:248
02:05:816 (3) - Ctrl+R
02:06:988 (7) - move to 244:28
02:07:222 (8) - move to 276:112
02:07:456 (1) - move to 360:76
02:22:456 (8) - add new combo
02:23:160 (1) - remove new combo

~LoliFlan's Insane~
02:17:535 (8) - add clap at 2nd note

Taiko plays well for me.

I probably recheck this map again, but first, you should take a few more mods.

ouranhshc

2,338 posts

Joined July 2009

ouranhshc 2012-06-09T18:19:35+00:00

Insane
00:32:300 (10) - new combo here instead of (1)
01:03:003 (3,1,2,3,4,5) - overlap, move (1,2,3,4,5) a grid or two to the right?

i'ma wait to mod the other diffs , because I don't know if DJPop's mod has actually been applied

Shulin

1,333 posts

Joined August 2009

Shulin 2012-06-10T16:10:16+00:00

[General]

sun.png is too big at 1000x1000. Resize to 800x600 or 640x480.

[Easy]

AR + 1 plays better.

00:30:660 (1,2) - Make these straight? Looks messy at this angle.
00:46:128 (2,3,4) - Make this 1/1. It's too similar to normal right now and it'd make it easier.
00:47:535 (1,2,3) - ^
00:49:410 (1) - End at 00:53:160 - the end sounds odd right now, and this is where you stop the kiai.
01:23:628 (1,2,3) - Make it 1/1? The squashed notes look bad.
01:27:378 (2,3,4) - ^
01:27:378 (2,3,4,5,6) - This plays and feels so cluttered, maybe rearrange this so there's less overlapping.
02:17:066 (3,4) - Ugly overlap, space out a little more.

The map could be a lot neater.

[HellDawn's Normal]

00:14:019 - I think a note here would be a better rhythm and more intuitive.
00:20:816 (2) - Delete and start 00:21:285 (1) - here instead?
00:53:160 - Map to here? This is where the kiai stops, strange to have it blank.
01:16:831 (6) - It's the only short 1/4 returning slider in the map. Remove? 1/2 returning slider would work.
01:42:847 (1,2) - 1/1 sounds bad, it sounds much better on 1/2. (01:42:613 - and 01:43:081 - )
01:43:785 (3) - Sounds better ending the return on 1/4 (01:44:136 - ) and
01:45:660 (1,2) - Better if you follow the synth here I think.
01:54:566 (2) - Delete and start 01:55:035 (1) - here instead?
02:18:941 - Note?
02:25:738 (2) - Clap the end?

Playing this map it seems you couldn't decide on a rhythm =|

[Hardish]

00:08:160 (3,4,5) - I recommend reducing the volume of those ticks.
00:15:660 (1,2) - ^
00:26:910 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - Too loud, I suggest keeping it 75% volume, maybe even lower.
00:43:550 (5) - Jump seems kind of random.
00:53:160 - Note + finish?
01:41:910 (1,2) - Reduce volume of ticks?
01:49:410 (1,2) - ^

[Hard]

00:19:410 (2,3) - Reduce volume of these ticks?
00:26:910 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - Volume too loud imo, keeping it 75% would be better.
00:34:410 (6,7) - ^ also new combo on 00:34:410 (6) -
00:52:925 - Note?
00:53:160 - ^ + finish
01:42:378 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Would sound much better if you followed the synth / song.
01:53:160 (2,3) - Reduce volume on these ticks?
02:00:660 - 75% volume would be better imo.
02:24:097 (7,8) - Spacing? Why the sudden 1/4 spacing change here?

Plays really similar to Hardish. This diff is much better though.

[LoliFlan's Insane]

00:31:714 (6,7,8,9) - Sounds better as soft hitsound at 45% volume.

Nice diff.

Did I repeat something? I probably did... this needs a bit more work imo.

Kokatsu

504 posts

Joined August 2011

Kokatsu 2012-06-12T19:30:26+00:00

M4M, as requested in #modreqs~

Remove Bookmarks from all diffs to make the .osz smaller?

Easy

00:19:410 (1) - Make this Spinner end at 00:22:222 since it's an easy..
00:23:160 (1,2) - the Sliders don't end on the same heigh as they start, resulting in overlapping, you can use the following code to fix this problem by using that shape for the first slider, then flipping it and add distance snap

120,104,23160,6,0,B|156:44|256:40|352:48|388:104,1,300,0|8

00:33:941 (4) - this one is a bit too close to the following slider IMO, would rearrange it like this:

00:41:910 (1,2) - I guess they are supposed to have that "spike" in the middle. I dislike the shape however, maybe make spike smooth?
00:48:003 (2,3) - overlap
01:53:160 (1) - end spinner at 01:55:972
02:03:472 (6,2) - dislike the overlap, but looks like there is no real way to fix that :/
02:26:675 (1) - start at 02:26:910

HellDawn's Normal

00:21:285 (1) - let it end on 00:22:222 or silence the ending please.
00:51:753 - 00:53:160 add Spinner here?
01:10:035 (2,3,4) - not sure about that type of rhythm, since it's a normal and you should stick to 1/2 snap. It's fine but I don't know..maybe it's a bit too difficult for a normal?

(same for following parts with same rhythm)
01:48:003 - add a note here? It really feels empty even for a normal. (If you do so, flip the following slider)

02:19:175 (2) - that one is really nasty IMO, you should add a note at 02:18:941 so that one doesn't get trapped in the "delayed" note.

Hard

00:04:410 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - this combo is too long for a hard map, NC it somewhere (maybe at 4 and 7?)
00:31:128 (6) - this slider is too close to (5) and (7), compared with the following one. Move up by 1grid
00:34:410 (6,7) - basically the same music going on but normal hitsounds on 7? Use normal samples at 00:37:925 and let the slider be soft~
00:46:128 (2) - hmm..more fitting would be something like this.. (find your own shape

)

01:17:535 (2) - again, try something different here..

01:19:410 (1,2) - this jump is bigger than others in the map, maybe reduce the distance by a bit? (1-2 grids up/down for both sliders would be fine~)
01:28:785 (6,7,1) - put them into a NC, since they follow an other rhythm than the notes around (makes it easier to read that there is something different..)

01:45:308 (7) - remove, doesn't really fit IMO
01:57:144 (2,3) - overlap looks nasty :c Rotate 2 by 20° and flip it for 3, then rearrange

02:03:472 (2,3,4,5) - i just get the feeling that this wants to be mapped as a 7note stream, maybe remove 2 and 3 and add 1tick reverse? (or vice versa)

02:04:878 (1) - if i see that right, you use different sliderpoints. copy 1 and flip/reverse selection to get 3
02:09:097 (3) - already mentioned above~
02:24:097 (7) - maybe silence the ending because atm it just breaks the vocal part

02:24:566 (8,1) - I'm not happy with that shape but unfortunately, I cannot think of a fitting similar shape..guess it will stay the way it is :<
02:25:972 (2,3,4,5,6) - urgh, you messed something up with the placement. rearrange to get a smooth circle-like thing D:

LoliFlan's Insane

00:04:175 (1) - do not place notes b4 the first red timing section! move red section to 00:02:535 (if i'm not completely wrong that should be 1stanza) and make sure this happens in EVERY diff..
00:41:675 (3,4,5) - looks nice but is a bad place to place these notes as it's hard to see wether the slider is the first note or not. putting 3 on the reverseending of the slider makes the part clearly readable
01:03:003 (3,1,2) - would be nice if 1 and 2 don't hit the slider

01:14:956 (4,7) - maybe let 7 end in 4?

01:25:269 (2,3,4) - why do you compress this stream? use same spaceing "as usual" pls..
01:28:550 (2,3) - 2 5grids left and 3 5grids right, so they won't overlap with 4
01:41:675 (1,2,3) - maybe try this?

01:45:425 (1) - the darked combocolour is harder to read, i would recommend to set NC to 2

Ono's Taiko Oni

Set Preferred Skin to User's Preference, since it's a Taiko D:
00:23:160 (1) - big don?
00:24:566 (2) - kat?
00:32:066 (3) - ^
00:40:269 - Maybe try something like this?

00:45:660 (1) - don?
01:10:503 - add don?
01:29:956 (1,2,1) - kkk?
01:41:675 (1,1,1) - kkd?
01:52:222 (6) - kat?
01:56:675 - maybe add timingsection with x1.1?
01:59:370 (1,1) - kk?
02:24:097 (1) - big kat?
02:25:269 (1,2) - small kat?
02:26:441 (1,2,1) - dk K?

Good luck~

Saten

Global Moderator

3,871 posts

Joined August 2010

Saten 2012-06-13T00:00:18+00:00

[LoliFlan]
I'd say, 20-25% vol is way too low imo D:
00:18:238 (6,8) - overlap/stack properly with the previous (4)
00:23:160 (1) - finish at the beginning
00:32:300 (10,1) - Swap NC
00:34:292 (4,1) - NC on (4) instead, kinda hard to see otherwise
00:36:050 (9,1) - Swap NC
00:52:925 (6,1) - ^
00:54:800 (5,1) - ^
00:56:675 (5,6,1) - NC on (5) instead
00:58:550 (7,8,1) - ^ on (7)
01:13:550 (6,1) - Swap NC
01:45:308 (8,1) - ^
02:26:675 (1) - increase this to 02:29:019 like the rest of the diffs

[Hard]
01:19:175 (5) - spacing error?
01:34:058 (2) - feels somewhat better if you move it to 01:34:175 . But if you want consistency, I guess you should leave it be
01:44:488 (5) - extend this to 01:44:956
01:45:191 (6,7) - move these 2 one tick ahead
02:25:269 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - at least 1,2x distance between (1) & (2)?

[Helldawn]
00:48:941 (1) - clap at the beginning
00:50:347 (3) - why not add a repeat here~
02:06:753 (2) - clap
02:18:941 (2) - clap
02:25:738 (2) - clap at the end

[Easy]
AR+1 (feels less crowdy imo)
00:48:941 (4) - abit too high perhaps

Shulin

1,333 posts

Joined August 2009

Shulin 2012-06-14T15:35:57+00:00

So I'm just gonna copy paste some of my suggestions from last time and added an additional reason in some parts. It'd be more helpful to future modders if you reply to mods.

[General]

sun.png is still too big.

[Easy]

AR + 1 plays better

00:30:660 (1) - This would look better if it was straight.
00:48:941 (4) - Maybe put this in the same position as 00:46:128 (2) - to make a pattern.
00:49:410 (1) - End at 00:53:160 - the end sounds odd right now, and this is where you stop the kiai. If not end the kiai earlier at 00:51:285 -
01:23:628 (1,2,3) - Make it 1/1? The squashed notes look bad. 1/1 also follows the rhythm you set for the whole map.
01:30:660 (1) - Spacing too far? Looks better if you keep the same spacing imo.
01:41:441 (4) - Ugly overlap with 01:40:972 (3) - in game. Move it up 1 or 2 grids to make it look better.

Map could still be neater, try and work on creating less overlaps and aligning notes properly. AR + 1 solves the problem to an extent but if you don't want to do that I'd work on tidying up the map.

[HellDawn's Normal]

See my previous mod post. Rhythm needs more work.

[Hard]

00:26:910 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3) - Volume too loud imo, keeping it 75% would be better. If not at least remove that finish it's just too loud.
00:34:410 (6) - New combo. Same thing as ^
00:52:925 - Note?
00:53:160 - ^ + finish. If not end the kiai earlier
01:15:660 (7) - New combo.
01:15:894 - Note? Since it's the rhythm you use in most of the map.
01:16:363 (1) - Remove new combo from here.
02:00:660 - 75% volume would be better.
02:11:441 (9,1) - Jump is kinda big compared to the rest of the map.
02:24:097 (7,8) - Spacing? Why the sudden 1/4 spacing change here? It makes no sense.

[LoliFlan's Insane]

00:31:714 (6,7,8,9) - Sounds better as soft hitsound at 45% volume.

I also agree with the previous modder that 20-25% volume is a bit too low on this diff but I guess it works okay.

I don't know why you asked for a recheck, you seem to have changed very little from the past mods and my opinion has stayed the same. I suggest re-reading some of the previous mod posts, there are some good suggestions you seem to have ignored

Flanster

5,938 posts

Joined August 2010

Flanster 2012-06-14T19:38:12+00:00

- Used Soft sounding on the section with 45% volume as said.
- sun.png scaled down to 800x600, applied to all difficulties

http://puu.sh/AWcU

HellDawn

1,035 posts

Joined April 2010

HellDawn 2012-06-15T19:25:58+00:00

Shulin wrote:
[HellDawn's Normal]

See my previous mod post. Rhythm needs more work.

I think red and blue line is nice rhytm for this music !

http://puu.sh/BzFr

OnosakiHito

osu!taiko Paragon

6,864 posts

Joined March 2010

OnosakiHito 2012-06-24T23:11:45+00:00

Kokatsu wrote:
Ono's Taiko Oni
Set Preferred Skin to User's Preference, since it's a Taiko D:
00:23:160 (1) - big don?
00:24:566 (2) - kat?
00:32:066 (3) - ^
00:40:269 - Maybe try something like this?

00:45:660 (1) - don?
01:10:503 - add don?
01:29:956 (1,2,1) - kkk?
01:41:675 (1,1,1) - kkd?
01:52:222 (6) - kat?
01:56:675 - maybe add timingsection with x1.1?
01:59:370 (1,1) - kk?
02:24:097 (1) - big kat?
02:25:269 (1,2) - small kat?
02:26:441 (1,2,1) - dk K?

Good luck~

Didn't saw this, was there anything changed? Because I don't want to press right now the update button.

happy30

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happy30 2012-07-09T08:45:24+00:00

[Easy]
00:19:410 (1) - end the spinner 1/2 earlier? (more recovery time)
01:53:160 (1) - ^
02:05:347 (2) - this overlap doesn't look good

[HellDawn's Normal]
00:23:160 (1) - add new combo?
01:16:831 (6) - this overlap doesn't look good
01:30:660 (5,1) - The rhythm here feels odd. maybe make the slider 1/4 shorter and add a note on 01:31:363 - ?
01:57:378 (1,2,3) - these appear too soon after the spinner

[LoliFlan's Insane]
01:59:956 (5,6,7) - maybe make the spacing here equal

edit: okay

Flanster

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Flanster 2012-07-09T17:22:03+00:00

someone will have pollo tonight

\=w=/

Barney Stinson

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Topic Starter

Barney Stinson 2012-07-09T17:26:10+00:00

YAHZ

Andrea

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Andrea 2012-07-10T13:13:27+00:00

[General]

You have 2 .osb files in your folder, please delete the unused one.

Disable the unused Audio Lead-In on all the difficulties.

[Easy]

AR is way too high right now, reduce it by 1 tick at least.

[Hard]

01:48:238 (1) - Remove new combo, since you didn't used it on the other part that was the same as this.

[Ono's Taiko Oni]

Increase OD by 1 tick.

[LoliFlan's Insane]

02:12:613 (1) - This new combo is not necessary.
02:25:972 (1) - ^

Only small fixes, let me know when you're ready.

Stefan

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Stefan 2012-07-10T13:21:28+00:00

This song is just win.

Barney Stinson

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Topic Starter

Barney Stinson 2012-07-10T13:22:31+00:00

ready :33