76,140,72421,2,0,B|76:52|200:12|256:76,1,233.999995815754

No_Gu wrote:

request from my queue
I tried to find original source.It is Summer☆Syrup.you can add * as ☆.So the source is Summer*Syrup.
Tag C80. yurika(ユリカ) → another singer for this album thx
No preview time point? i forgot to add it >.<
[Normal]
01:03:990 (4) - a little close to 3 .use grid 4 to fix it ok
01:17:323 (1) - finish at the beginning ok
01:54:186 (3) - remove clap at the beginning nope
02:16:931 (1,2,3,4) - a little overlap.try to fix this hmm.. suspend

[hard]
00:22:519 (6) - move to 00:22:323 no
01:12:421 (4) - this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/227711 also don't forget to fix spacing cool ;D

76,140,72421,2,0,B|76:52|200:12|256:76,1,233.999995815754

01:53:402 (7) - NC no
I really don't like using change slider speed to map:p

Orz really feel noisy because you use 70% normal hitsound..Try to use soft or turn down the volume..I think 50% is enough hmm.. i don't think it's noisy.. but ok, reduced to 60%
A cute song.but you use many straight sliders..It doesn't matter.But if you change to curving sliders.the mapset will be much cuter :3 well, respect my mapping style plz ;D

You have a big improvement on your mapping skill.So a star for your progress \o/

• [Hard]

1. Approach Rate +1
2. 00:26:343 - Add a hitcircle here
3. 00:35:754 - ^
4. 01:53:402 (7) - Add NC
5. 02:43:990 (5) - ^

1. remove "," in the tags...

1. looks fine, no problems

1. 00:20:853 (1) - move it to (416,188) looks better
2. 00:42:029 (8) - http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot172-1.jpg ?
3. 00:47:519 (1,2) - this ? http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot173-4.jpg
4. 01:15:754 (5,6,7) - this ? http://up.ppy.sh/files/screenshot174.jpg
5. 01:29:872 (1) - move middle point to (216,132) looks better imo
6. 02:43:990 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - why only jump here in the map... = =

[General]

• 
  fine~

[Normal]

• 
  Circle size -1?
  00:58:500 (1) - note comes after spin very fast, you should fix
  01:33:794 (2) - spacing
  02:23:205 (1) - ^ same as above

[Hard]

• 
  00:51:441 (3) - add clap tail
  01:03:598 (5) - remove finish
  01:03:990 (7) - ^
  01:04:088 (8) - add clap?
  01:15:951 (5) - spacing
  02:06:735 (7,8,9,10) - imo this better
  
  SPOILER

  
  02:31:931 (8) - add clap?

1. 00:31:049 (2) - Reverse?
2. 00:40:460 (2,3,4) - Maybe replace with a slider?
3. 00:42:029 (6,7,8) - ^
4. 01:11:049 (1,2,1) - Make it better>.< How about This? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228587
   

   64,224,111049,2,0,B|64:288,2,60,0|0|8

5. 01:29:872 (1) - Like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228599 (I changed the shape a little><)
   

   256,312,129872,2,0,B|336:272|392:272,1,120,0|8

6. 02:00:460 (3,4,5) - Changed to slider?
7. 02:46:735 (2) - DS is large>_> it's difficult for beginners

1. HR+1 & OD+1?
2. 00:45:951 (1) - Stack on 00:45:166 (7)
3. 00:46:343 (2,3) - DS is too small...
4. 01:06:343 (5,6,7,8) - Ugly>_>...... Try this!! http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228614
   

   412,308,66343,2,0,B|304:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   100,308,66735,2,0,B|208:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   412,176,67127,2,0,B|300:144,1,116.999997907877
   100,176,67519,2,0,B|212:144,1,116.999997907877

5. 01:25:166 (1) - Move to [X:220 Y:112]
6. 01:54:186 - Clap
7. 01:54:284 (5) - Remove Clap
8. 02:06:735 (7) - Clap
9. 02:06:833 (8) - Remove Clap
10. 02:23:598 (2,3) - Move to [X:300 Y:196]
11. 02:24:383 (5,6) - Move to [X:136 Y:132]
12. 02:52:813 - Add a note
13. 02:59:088 - ^

12BARRY21 wrote:

M4M~

[Normal]

1. 00:31:049 (2) - Reverse?
2. 00:40:460 (2,3,4) - Maybe replace with a slider?
3. 00:42:029 (6,7,8) - ^
4. 01:11:049 (1,2,1) - Make it better>.< How about This? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228587
   

   64,224,111049,2,0,B|64:288,2,60,0|0|8

5. 01:29:872 (1) - Like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228599 (I changed the shape a little><)
   

   256,312,129872,2,0,B|336:272|392:272,1,120,0|8

6. 02:00:460 (3,4,5) - Changed to slider?
7. 02:46:735 (2) - DS is large>_> it's difficult for beginners

[Hard]

1. HR+1 & OD+1?
2. 00:45:951 (1) - Stack on 00:45:166 (7)
3. 00:46:343 (2,3) - DS is too small...
4. 01:06:343 (5,6,7,8) - Ugly>_>...... Try this!! http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228614
   

   412,308,66343,2,0,B|304:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   100,308,66735,2,0,B|208:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   412,176,67127,2,0,B|300:144,1,116.999997907877
   100,176,67519,2,0,B|212:144,1,116.999997907877

5. 01:25:166 (1) - Move to [X:220 Y:112]
6. 01:54:186 - Clap
7. 01:54:284 (5) - Remove Clap
8. 02:06:735 (7) - Clap
9. 02:06:833 (8) - Remove Clap
10. 02:23:598 (2,3) - Move to [X:300 Y:196]
11. 02:24:383 (5,6) - Move to [X:136 Y:132]
12. 02:52:813 - Add a note
13. 02:59:088 - ^

That's all~ Good Luck!!~

-Lennox- wrote:

12BARRY21 wrote:

M4M~

[Normal]

1. 00:31:049 (2) - Reverse?
2. 00:40:460 (2,3,4) - Maybe replace with a slider?
3. 00:42:029 (6,7,8) - ^
4. 01:11:049 (1,2,1) - Make it better>.< How about This? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228587
   

   64,224,111049,2,0,B|64:288,2,60,0|0|8

5. 01:29:872 (1) - Like this? http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228599 (I changed the shape a little><)
   

   256,312,129872,2,0,B|336:272|392:272,1,120,0|8

6. 02:00:460 (3,4,5) - Changed to slider?
7. 02:46:735 (2) - DS is large>_> it's difficult for beginners

[Hard]

1. HR+1 & OD+1?
2. 00:45:951 (1) - Stack on 00:45:166 (7)
3. 00:46:343 (2,3) - DS is too small...
4. 01:06:343 (5,6,7,8) - Ugly>_>...... Try this!! http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/228614
   

   412,308,66343,2,0,B|304:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   100,308,66735,2,0,B|208:244,1,116.999997907877,4|0
   412,176,67127,2,0,B|300:144,1,116.999997907877
   100,176,67519,2,0,B|212:144,1,116.999997907877

5. 01:25:166 (1) - Move to [X:220 Y:112]
6. 01:54:186 - Clap
7. 01:54:284 (5) - Remove Clap
8. 02:06:735 (7) - Clap
9. 02:06:833 (8) - Remove Clap
10. 02:23:598 (2,3) - Move to [X:300 Y:196]
11. 02:24:383 (5,6) - Move to [X:136 Y:132]
12. 02:52:813 - Add a note
13. 02:59:088 - ^

That's all~ Good Luck!!~

This is a kind of mod i really hate. You just say things without giving a reason why. "Its ugly.. do this!" "looks bad, do this!" This IS NOT a real mod. You should help him/she, give him/she a reason why he have to change this and that. Stop doing these mods

kanpakyin wrote:

Modder at least have a try to mod/improve your map.Change or not is depend on you.However you should give a kuds for the effort of modder.

Larto wrote:

Even if you don't follow the modder's advice, did you not follow it because of your personal choice only, and not because the modding seemed pointless to you?

-Lennox- wrote:

This is a kind of mod i really hate. You just say things without giving a reason why. "Its ugly.. do this!" "looks bad, do this!" This IS NOT a real mod. You should help him/she, give him/she a reason why he have to change this and that. Stop doing these mods

Kiddo-Kun wrote:

-Lennox- wrote:

This is a kind of mod i really hate. You just say things without giving a reason why. "Its ugly.. do this!" "looks bad, do this!" This IS NOT a real mod. You should help him/she, give him/she a reason why he have to change this and that. Stop doing these mods

*Sigh*. I don't agree with you here. Looking at the mod, they are all simple suggestions. They don't require long paragraphs describing why it is necessary for you to follow through with the suggestion simply because the reason should be obvious. It either makes your map look better or sound better. Would you rather he writes out a novel for everything he find wrong and describes how your map is terrible without it?
Also, 12BARRY21, don't apologize. Your mod is well constructed and there is evidence of effort put into it, good job. Hope you can improve in the future.

1. I believe your offset is 10ms early. So please decrease the offset by 10ms (-10ms). Don't forget to resnap all timing section and the note
2. Why are you repeating artist name in tag? Please remove it

1. 00:31:049 (2) - If i look into this pattern, i think this slider is more toward right side and not balanced. Please move this slider 1 grid left to balanced the pattern.
2. How about adding a finish rythim at this note that i said? It seems good imo.
   
   1. 00:47:519 (1) -
   2. 00:49:088 (1) -
   3. 00:50:656 (1) - At the startpoint
   4. 00:52:225 (1) - ^
   5. 00:53:794 (1) -
3. 01:10:460 - How about adding a note here? I think the rythim fits there. Just stack it below 01:10:264 (3) -
4. 02:14:578 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,1,2) - Adding a finish rythim above to rythim is good too ^^

1. AR -1. AR 8 is for insane diff or above. I know there are jump in this map, but this is make a huge gap between normal and hard.
2. 01:28:107 (5) - This one is not stacked properly.
3. 02:33:990 (4) - What with this sudden jump? Orz, too surprising and not consistent. Your previous note doesn't consist jumps like these.

-Lennox- wrote:

This is a kind of mod i really hate. You just say things without giving a reason why. "Its ugly.. do this!" "looks bad, do this!" This IS NOT a real mod. You should help him/she, give him/she a reason why he have to change this and that. Stop doing these mods

S h i o n wrote:

just ugly

1. Tags"C80. yurika" remove the dot from the Tags.
   
2. offest -5 imo

歌い手花たんがオリジナル曲を歌うときに使っている名前である

Leorda wrote:

Annyeonghaseyo

General
* Your offset 10ms earlier

LKs wrote:

Sorry, Leorda, I have to pick out your miss on timing check. It's obvious that the old offest was too late(8304?) for the song, and it's even worse now(8308).

The offest should be 8297, I can assure.

Sorry, Star Stream, I don't intend to pop your bubble. But just you know why, timing is super significant thing to a map, that's a must to revise it.

You may gather more ppl here to check your offest if you can't make a decision.

And in the end, good luck to the map.