Ringo Uri no Utakata Shoujo

00:31:152 (2) - could slant this up a bit cuz there's no vocal on this so less movement would be good to emphasize that

01:03:539 (5,1) - this spacing seems like you missed how big it was, its larger than any 1/2 dash in the rest of the map by atleast .2-.3x (even the ones in the kiais) and larger than the ones around it by ~.4x, would suggest nerfing this real quick

01:06:587 (5,1) - disini bisa ditambahin hyperdash biar konsisten sama 00:58:062 (5,1) -

01:10:850 (4,5) - would be better if these are mapped in 1/2, they are currently overmapped and it doesn't fit nicely with the calm part

01:57:208 (2) - think this vocal could use some more emphasis might be a good idea to make it 2 hypers to give the kiai section some harder patterns

02:09:996 (1,2,3) - missing hs on these objects, you can add some drum-hitclaps

02:10:196 (2,3,4) - ini seharusnya hyperdash nya tuh dari 2 -> 3, soalnya si vocal letaknya di 02:10:263 -

3 bisa digeser aja ke x:207~

02:13:993 (1) - ini lebih baik dijadiin 2 slider yang berbeda aja, mulai dari 02:14:526 - tuh vocal nya masih jalan, sayang kalau dijadiin slidertail, juga biar bisa nambahin hyperdash ke 02:15:058 - nantinya

02:25:716 (5) - missing nc

02:31:111 (5) - this should be moved to 02:31:177 to properly follow the music

02:31:444 (7) - think this could be hyper the sound is quite distinct from (6)

02:31:710 (9) - would remove reverse and focus more on the vocal at 02:31:843 by moving slider on white tick there

02:36:106 (4,1) - disini bisa ditambahin hyperdash buat ngasih empasis ke transisi instrument baru, kayak di 02:27:581 (4,1) -

02:40:103 (3) - mungkin ini bisa di geser ke x:343 an, disini vocalnya kedengeran pitch-up gitu jadi rasanya kurang kuat kalau tanpa hyperdash

02:41:968 (6) - ini mending dijadiin 1/2 slider aja, biar suara instrument di 02:42:101 - bisa ke cover juga, juga biar bisa nambahin hyperdash ke 02:42:234 - nantinya

02:45:431 - 02:45:964 bisa di bagusin lgi bagian sini, ada ketukan cukup kedengaran tpi kga di map

02:45:431 (4,5,6) - 02:46:497 (2,3) - I feel like such consecutive hypers aren't the best choice for the build-up part, you can just use dashes for them

02:51:959 (2) - personal preference doang, bagian sini di hyperin

02:58:752 (1,2) - ini penempatan empasis nya rada keliru, harusnya menuju ke 02:59:019 -

coba penempatan nya dituker, jadi kayak gini :

03:03:282 (4,1) - ini mesti ditambahin hyperdash, kedengeran ada suara cymbal tapi empasis nya cuma walkable jadi kerasa kurang kuat

slider yang 03:03:282 (4) - dibikin vertikal aja posisi nya

03:07:278 (3,4,5,6) - (5),(6) sound less intense because there's a noticeable sound underlying at 03:07:278 (3,4) - so maybe remove hyper for (5),(6) to emphasize that

03:11:540 (3,4) - add hyper for vocal emphasis

03:15:803 (4,5,6,7,1) - kurang punchy menurut gw mungkin bisa dibuat kayak gini
opsional btw
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19407890/88c1

03:15:803 (3,4,5,6) - no noticeable sound on 03:15:870 03:16:136 03:16:270 suggest removal

03:20:466 (4) - use 1.41x like the other dashes?

03:25:394 (3) - ini mending dijadiin 1/2 slider aja, kedengeran ada suara instrumen di red tick, juga biar bisa nambahin hyperdash ke 03:25:661 - nantinya

03:27:259 (3) - would add hyper here since the vocal's pitch is pretty high

03:29:124 - 03:29:524 sama kyk #4683250

03:30:723 (4) - mungkin ini lebih bagus kalo posisinya dibikin vertikal biar jadi hdash ke objek selanjutnya

terus juga 03:30:989 (5) - mungkin bisa di buff jadiin hyperchain, biar konsisten sama part sebelumnya di 02:13:726 (4,5) -

03:35:252 (2) - would look more clean if you adjust the slider like the pic

03:45:912 - 03:46:711 1/4 slidernya keknya ga perlu, jadi overkill bgt padahal sisanya patternnya fine fine aja meskipun ketukannya sama. contphnya di sini 03:52:306 - 03:53:105

03:47:506 (4) - ini lebih baik dibikin 1/1 slider + objek baru di 03:47:907 - , kerasa rada off kalau ngeskip suara drum di 03:47:773 -

rada kurang enak juga dimaininnya ini slider panjang soalnya mesti teken dash ditengah tengah karna kepanjangan sv nya

03:57:102 (3) - this can be just a 1/2 slider, no need to be 3/4 extended slider

04:04:292 (1) - coba pindahin ke x:460~ biar bisa generate hdash untuk kasih empasis buat cymbal nya

04:04:295 (3) - can nc after 2 long sliders i think to not get too big combo

04:26:672 (1) - ini penggunaan spinner nya rada bikin anti klimaks buat suara build-up nya, semestinya ada objek terakhir di 04:26:672 - , baru dtambahin spinner nya mulai dari 04:26:805 -

04:26:676 (1) - I think this spinner should end 1/4 or 3/4 of a beat sooner so you can add a circle at 04:28:807 (make sure it doesn't create a spinner trap)

04:29:073 (1) - 04:43:194 (8) bagian sini lebih bagus kalau setiap dia ganti nada vokalnya jadi jauh spacing nya dikit. mayoritas spacingnya 0.5x / 1.02x meskipun ada nada yg tinggi juga sama jaraknya jadi kurang kerasa perbedaannya

04:30:672 (7) - change this to 1/2 to cover the small vocal sound on the red tick?

04:32:803 (8,1) - 04:33:869 (4,5) - 04:37:066 (8,1) - 04:41:329 (8,1) - 04:42:395 (4,5) - hdash on all of these for higher vocals

04:35:468 (2,3,4) - would consider placing like the pic for the better flow

04:43:727 - could add a 20% volume line here for the very quietly vocal

04:44:793 (7) - bisa ditambahin NC disini untuk bersihin catcher nya sebelum spinner

05:00:245 (1,2) - 05:01:311 (1) - could ramp these up to fully horizontal for the very intense part here
if u do so change 05:01:577 (2,3,4,5,6,1) - to something like this

05:06:639 (2) - bisa diubah jadi 1/2 slider aja biar bisa ngasih hyperdash ke vocal pitch tinggi di 05:06:905 (3) -

05:09:836 - I think a hard jump would fit well here, similar to what you did at 02:12:927 and 03:30:190 but harder because the key is higher

05:18:761 - 05:19:427
05:21:958 - 05:22:358
05:24:756 - 05:25:822
05:26:355 - 05:27:154
05:27:953 - 05:28:752
05:31:150 - 05:31:950

bagian ini sama seperti masalah" sebelumnya

05:29:818 (6) - 05:30:085 (7) bagian nih hyper aja biar sesuai sama yang lain

05:36:345 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - ini pergerakan kiri-kanan nya kebanyakan, kerasa kurang mempresentasikan drum nya dengan baik

coba untuk 05:36:478 (2,3) - dan 05:37:277 (5,6) - dijadiin satu 1/2 slider yang posisinya vertikal, biar bikin movement si catcher nya ngikutin suara drum

05:36:745 (3,4,5) - I would decrease the spacing to 1.42x (128 pixels) or lower, considering the song is getting more and more silent