I think 00:03:570 (3570|3,3570|0,3570|1) - shouldnt being arranged the same way as 00:03:153 (3153|1,3153|3,3153|0,3362|0,3362|1,3362|3) - because it does sound different (actually maybe you can make all 3 different but I think just the last one is ok)
00:05:758 (5758|1) - this is not really highlighting anything and there's nothing much going on in the song so you should keep it simple also missed a sound? 00:05:966
00:10:966 (10966|3,11070|3) - why are some of these are shields while some of 00:07:633 (7633|2,7737|3) - are not
00:21:174 (21174|3) - 00:22:841 (22841|0) - 00:23:049 (23049|0) - are very awkward like 00:21:174 (21174|3) - at first we thought. Oh it's for the vocal, then you ignore 00:21:383 00:21:591 but decided to emphasize nothing 00:22:424 (22424|0) -
00:23:570 (23570|2,23570|0,23570|3,23570|1) - the sound is not really strong at all it shouldn't be a quad, reduce it to a triple
missed a pretty important sound 00:33:674, remove 00:33:466 (33466|1) - cuz it doesnt mean anything