Clinozoisite

00:26:040 (26040|2,26212|3,26383|4,26555|6) - mh.. bit of a nitpick but you usually change flow when there's a stronger piano note, but arent these supposed to cover the same lanes as 00:25:355 (25355|1,25526|2,25697|3,25869|5) - ?
it's easy to get around it
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19025925/2d55

00:27:583 - miss a piano on col 5

00:28:955 - 00:34:269 - ... Lets see here 这个部分有许多地方没有钢琴声音，我知道目前是为了结构考虑采用相似的结构，但是我认为有必要根据音乐加以区分：

00:44:726 (44726|4) - Confused about short LN using here 。如果我理解的没错的话，00:44:726 (44726|4) - 这里不应该有面条。00:44:812 (44812|2,45155|4) - 这里应该是面条。 // 00:46:869 (46869|6,46955|5) - 这两个LN的长度应该相反。check all this part if so

00:47:212 - does this one need to be doubled like you did before 00:44:469 (44469|5,44469|4) - , now it's different like 00:43:097 - which had a pretty obv. lower sound or beat sound, Cuz thing like this 00:44:212 (44212|3,44297|6,44383|2,44469|5) - is a completed beat group, so 00:46:955 (46955|3,47040|2,47126|5,47212|2) - those should be as well.

00:47:297 (47297|1) - this synth is so strong compared to the others.. might be better to make it 3/4 long to emphasize its strength

00:50:555 (50555|6,50640|3) - i dont really understand why these are 1/8 lns when there's nothing particular underneath.. i cant think of anything they might be following
and also why isnt 00:50:983 (50983|2) - a 1/8 ln too? there's the same tick that youve mapped at 00:50:726 (50726|4,50812|2,50897|3) -

00:50:726 - I think this sound is same as 00:50:897 - so maybe double is enough? two jacks are also ok but seems too hard // 00:56:212 - as well

00:51:212 - I think the burst start on 00:51:212 - so how about

didn't figure out why this LN 00:51:212 (51212|3) - started from 00:51:212 - , and also then dump-like thing for that 00:51:212 (51212|3,51240|4,51269|6,51326|2,51355|4) -

00:51:412 (51412|5,51412|6,51412|1,51412|0) - think these need more impact because of the prominent growl underneath. it feels really empty to leave it as a quad imo, but i'd probably implement some very fast grace to emphasize mentioned growl, up to you

00:53:640 - pattern suggestion to follow the swoosh a bit better!
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19025934/c38c
the longer the releases the stronger the sound. i think it works pretty well
also the first two notes in the sequence are 3/16 long to differentiate them from 00:53:812 (53812|0,53897|4,53983|2,54069|3) - etc

01:00:540 - this grace sound can be more denser if you want, not 1/8 seems kinda late cuz that grace sound actually didn't have anysound on 1/8, can be mapped 1/16 early ig

01:00:840 (60840|2,60840|1,60840|0) - for intensity, maybe that's a good idea to make this doubled not tripled, it can distinguish with the tripled with 01:00:669 - beat and keep the consistency with similar melody part that doubled 01:00:755 -

01:01:183 (61183|1,61183|3) - double but 01:01:355 - quad 我觉得chordsize反了。从强度上来说后面一个明显比前面一个弱很多。01:01:955 - same and check all

01:01:697 - it's cool that this part is a similar like prev. with one left shift, but the beat 01:01:440 (61440|0,61526|3) - and 01:02:126 (62126|6,62212|2,62297|4) - are different,
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I think it's necessary to make difference between 01:01:612 (61612|5,61612|6,62297|4,62297|5) - them

01:03:583 - 4×1/8？

01:06:926 (66926|0) - note sure you should change this LN started from 01:06:883 - or not cuz your other thing for background 咻的一声,01:07:569 (67569|6,67612|5,67655|4,67697|2,67740|3,67783|4) -
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even you might just ignored that LN which at col [8] (cuz can't place) on purpose but this snap also can be mapped by col [1] with a lengthening, but that will kinda break the consistency with 01:07:440 (67440|3,67526|1,68126|2,68212|0) - so how you think

01:06:926 - I think the music is quiet here and also hears like an echo of 01:06:497 - this beat. so I prefer use similar structure

btw 01:07:012 (67012|3,67055|4,67097|5) - this is OK cuz the sound is longer

01:08:640 - Different from 01:07:955 - 01:06:583 - so you can

it's a cool pattern for wub wub sound 01:11:983 (71983|2,71983|6,71983|5,71983|4,72026|1,72069|0,72069|3,72155|4,72197|5,72197|2,72240|6,72283|3,72283|1,72326|0,72369|5,72412|4,72412|1,72455|2,72497|3,72497|6,72583|4) - here, but I saw your dump thing just missed a snap at 01:12:112 - even I know you make those LN 01:12:069 (72069|3,72283|3) - on purpose for the central symmetry, but that actually missed a 1/8 snap (clearly you dump this part with 1/8), i don't really care when there had a doubled inside when doing dump/visual part but at least we should have a completed one single full dump like 01:11:983 (71983|2,72026|1,72069|0,72155|4,72197|5,72240|6,72283|1,72326|0,72369|5,72412|4,72455|2,72497|3) -

01:12:755 -
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01:13:312 (73312|3) - 理解可能是为了形状，但是01:13:355 - 这里才是很明显的音出现的位置

01:13:440 (73440|0,73440|5,73462|1,73505|4,73547|3,73569|2) - i think this cluster of notes 手感不太符合音乐，推荐重排一下 ; maybe avoid placing notes between 01:13:526 and 01:13:697

01:14:297 - more match-music ver

01:19:783 - try sth to more match the music

01:23:426 (83426|0) - didn't get the reason why this one placed on 1/8 line

01:24:155 - I think this sound is long so may use LN better ?

01:24:326 (84326|0,84369|1,84412|2,84455|3) - from here I think the dump is a bit overused,somewhere like here are so quiet imo
01:26:040 (86040|0,86040|5,86083|3) -
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should be simplify

01:25:612 (85612|4,85612|3) - maybe here you can do https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19025938/5da9 to keep following the neurofunk-ish growls like you did in the whole section

01:28:440 - beautiful design but seems miss this main kick here 01:28:783 - so perfer redesign one

01:28:526 - 01:31:312 - are you missed those sound at 1/8 on purpose? But for other dump thing like 01:34:055 - you caught again, I suggest you just make them with a completely single 1/8 at least.

01:29:212 (89212|5,89255|2,89297|1) - 01:31:955 (91955|6,91997|5,92040|4) - 01:32:640 (92640|0,92683|1,92726|2) - these small burst shouldnt exist cuz no sound here imo . check echo parts

01:30:840 - jack structure is better cuz drums

01:31:097 - double for kick ? 01:30:840 - tbh I think this beat is clear . all on 1/4 is fine ?

01:31:183 (91183|6,91183|2,91183|0,91183|1,91226|5,91269|4,91269|3,91355|0,91397|1,91397|6) - i think these deserve to be WAY denser/simply different in patterning compared to 01:28:440 (88440|0,88440|4,88440|5,88440|6,88483|1,88526|2,88526|3) - given how intense and violent the melody is

01:35:726 - I think its 1/8 thins ? is this intention ?

01:36:326 - how about this

01:40:869 (100869|5,100912|4) - pretty sure that 1/6 snap

01:53:983 (113983|2,114069|2) - 这里相比前面重复的段落明显更难了，是故意的吗

01:56:555 - 2+2+2+2 is enough？but a small one

01:58:526 - 按照你的逻辑，这里应该有一个1/4 LN

02:05:469 (125469|5,125512|0,125555|6) - I don't think there had the prev. sound anymore even I knew you did this on perfect OX thing but.... 他确实没有声音了...

02:27:583 - 02:28:783 - I think its too hard this small part 可以保留jack的结构但是需要降低密度

02:27:583 - add one note at col4 feels good here

02:36:112 (156112|3) - think this 1/8 can be removed there's nothing it really follows tbh

02:38:040 - pattern suggestion to follow the growls a bit better since you've ignored a really prominent part
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19025948/3721

02:40:697 (160697|3,160783|2,160869|3,160955|2,160997|3,161126|2,161212|3,161297|2,161383|3,161469|2,161555|3,161640|2,161726|3,161812|2,161897|3,161983|2,162069|3,162155|2) - this continuous trilly motion on the spacebar is really jarring you might want to shuffle stuff around a bit to give a breather

02:50:640 (170640|2,170662|5,170705|4,170726|6) - didn't figure this out why doubled 1/16 grace same time, and I think need a doubled at end if you like 02:50:640 (170640|2,170662|5,170705|4,170726|6) - cuz there had a beat

03:30:883 - pretty sure here had a sound like 03:30:840 (210840|1) - , those should be a part 03:30:840 (210840|1,210926|5,210969|4,211012|3,211097|0) - so kinda confused about the grace/dump thing 03:30:862 (210862|2,210905|0) - making the actually sound 03:30:883 - missing

03:31:183 (211183|1,211226|2,211269|3) - 1/12 would fit for the super quick burst
https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/19025952/737b

conneted to #4184051/11150562
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然而后后面的地方你又按照这个snap写对了03:41:812 (221812|4,221855|6,221897|5,221940|4,221983|3,222069|4) - 所以有点混乱
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03:47:297 (227297|6,227297|2,227340|0,227383|1,227383|4,227426|2,227469|6,227469|3,227469|5,227555|2) -镜像again 但是声音和结构有点点区别，这个和前面一条是一样的建议

03:51:069 - to 03:56:212 -
after I checke this whole part, didn't get why you make them 03:52:869 (232869|6) - 03:53:555 (233555|0) - LNed not rice, cuz from the part, it's all LN+note, even you wanna emphasize this 03:52:869 (232869|2,232869|6) - then you should do similar like 03:51:497 (231497|4,231497|2) - cuz they are similar sound, but for better visual, I think just make them ln+note

03:53:469 - 根据音乐，需要一些变化

03:56:212 (236212|2,236255|4,236297|1,236340|3,236383|5,236426|2,236469|4) - coooool pattern but don't quite fit the music, even the snap are totally right, this is what I feel, the sound and structure (not mean the pattern) I think you can do something here

04:08:812 - 04:10:183 - you missed them on purpose? But for me I think that sound pretty obv.

04:10:355 - Also this part has some problem of LN length and chordsize for example
04:10:355 (250355|4) - should be longer and 04:10:526 - should reduce the chordsize 04:10:612 - should add chordsize

04:12:240 - should be doubled in my view like 04:11:469 (251469|2,251469|4,251555|1,251555|3) - , and not to mention that;s even louder, I feel col [12] will be better

04:46:697 - 1/7 snap

04:46:759 (286759|5,286808|3,286808|6,286857|1,286857|4,286906|2) - maybe 1/8? cuz after I play it with 1/7 line, sound get delayed obv. so prebably won't start from 1/7

04:48:412 (288412|3) - should be 1/4 LN ?

04:49:783 - 1/5 snap