Aitakatta Sora

00:00:690 (1) - sv

00:03:137 (5) - i really dislike the rhythm here where u ignore a major piano sound on 00:03:137 (5) - + higher sv for no reason

00:03:137 (5) - vocal trật lất, 1/6 hoặc cắt cu (00:03:200)

00:30:135 (3) - i would make this 3/4

00:46:460 (2,3,4) - your idea was better executed 00:49:460 (2,3,4) - here. i would try to make 00:46:460 (2,3,4) - less uncomfortable and more flowy like your other pattern

00:51:522 (4,5) - 1/2 slider here would work better?

00:59:585 (1) - you never use a slider like this (red anchor 1/2) for this part, it feels very random. would replace with one of the sliders you do generally use in this verse.

01:04:085 (1,2,3,4,5) - this should be changed to emphasize the rise of the vocal

01:05:866 (4,6,7,8) - there r no sounds on these

01:55:085 (1) - i think this is a little much for a slider. the downbeats in this section were mainly just straight sliders (01:49:085 (1) - ) i would just be consistent here

01:56:960 (1,2) - avoid the overlap here? since the music are building up and you trying to built up the momentum here too, but overlapped circles like this ruins it. spaced them would be much better (just use small ds)

02:05:397 (6) - nerf the jump here since you make big jumps for drums 02:04:835 (3,4,5) - for these circles and then you tried to emphasize the vocal 02:05:397 (6) - it feels unnatrual and forced. at least wait for another downbeat if you wanna switched to emphasize the vocal.

02:06:335 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - i really like these

02:08:585 (1,2,3,4) - the vocal emphasis or vowel stress is at (1,3) no at (2) so there's no point to put jumps on (2), maybe try this pattern? https://i.imgur.com/CRdovPj.png

02:25:272 (2) - nitpicky but nerf the spacing here? https://i.imgur.com/f1zpkO3.png since if you tried to emphasize the drum, especially snare drum at 02:25:460 (3) - i prefer make this (2) - object have small ds. the current place of this object is much harder to click than the jumps for 02:25:272 (2,3) - since 02:24:897 (1,2,1,2) - there's a triplet before (2) - object. you could nerf the triplet by using 1/4 reverse slider if you wanna stick with current pattern

your 1-2s are also always really clean 02:28:085 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) -

02:34:460 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - why big jumps from the start since the strong snare start at 02:35:585 (1,2,3,4) - the drum sound isnt strong as 02:28:085 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - so why put big jumps to begin with here 02:34:460 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - i strongly suggest to nerf the jumps for better build up. try this one https://i.imgur.com/ppv2n8I.png so the jumps gradually raised up for each circles

02:36:335 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - i would also bump this spacing up a bit

02:37:085 (1) - i'd put this on the blue tick 02:36:991 and just make 02:36:897 (7) - a circle because 02:37:085 (1) - shouldnt be active cuz its during the vocal and no instruments are backing it

02:46:817 (1,1,2) - u r so cringe

02:49:817 (1,2,1,2) - overlap circles again? it kills the momentum of build up towards next downbeat. the guitar sound are strong here to so there's no reason to overlapped them

02:53:585 (1) - you give this section a lot of spacing, generally more than you do even in the verses (i.e 02:59:397 (6,1) - VS 01:02:397 (5,1) - ) even if it does gradually increase intensity it is still less intense than the verses

03:12:147 (4) - give this a lot more spacnig emphasis

03:34:085 (1,2,3) - bad rhythm choice

03:38:210 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - the music is getting more intense here with the guitars but you decreased the jumps here, it just doesnt make any sense to me. for this whole section (especially 1-2's jumps part) perhaps you could decreased the jumps 03:35:585 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) - and gradually raised the jumps if you wanna keep the current jumps at 03:38:210 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - for better spread on this section with chorus section. i feel the jumps here are more densier than on kiais tbh. or you could just 03:38:210 (1,2,1,2,1,2,1) - raised the jumps here

03:44:585 (2) - unsnapped

04:04:460 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - i'd make this flow a lot better as that was your main idea for most of the kiais https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/18899025/6538 i would refer to this screenshot

04:52:835 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - feels very underemphasize the strong snare sounds here. a mere stream doesnt give much emphasize towards the drum imo, perhaps you could gradually raise up the sv for each circles, especially for 04:53:022 (3,4,5,6,7,8) - since the drums getting stronger here like this https://i.imgur.com/oEq3RWt.png, or maybe add some 1/4 sliders or burst like this https://i.imgur.com/FiMDS1E.png