00:04:556 (1,2) - Well, dunno if it's intentional or not but spacing between (1) and (2) is the only time where it's higher than 1.30x unlike other ones after.
I'd reduce it anyway to ensure that it's not too edgy with this AR, I've missed it a lot
00:06:108 (2,1) - (1) is different from (2) in term of music so please try another shape instead of doing the same once again, it makes expression worthless while you can do something more better (also would've make more sense for 00:07:143 (2) - since they are similar)
00:08:694 (1,1) - minor but 1.8x on spacing like this feels weird to hit, i'd nerf them to 1.6x, wont really change the difficulty because it's a slow part, would juste make it feels better
there is a lot of spacing like that and im lazy to point em all
(sometimes it's already 1.6x, so pls just make them all 1.6x)
00:26:281 (1,2) - Well, why suddenly make a rythm change there? It plays bad especially for (1) and (2) even if it's 1.00x it surprises me and I doubt players will walk it with this AR so would be better to do long slider as you've did before so that structure makes more sense
00:26:281 (1,2), 00:27:315 (1,2) - Subjective but could dash these for the high pitched beep instead of just a normal walk
00:30:418 (1,2,3,4) - Would turn it into 4 notes stream instead of 1/4 double jumps because it has literally no difference with 00:30:677 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - which are streams so taking acount of the melody that would make more sense
its a hdash there for a bit more emphasis on the strong lasting sound 00:30:418 (1) - , if not hdash it feels a bit underwhelming
00:33:005 (3,4) - Would add 1/1 hdash instead of dash because (4) has a finish and also it feels weird to have dash there because we feel that it's stronger (for music) but distance is reduced so
00:34:556 (1) - Wouldn't be better to start 1/4 there? It feels akward to have this 1/2 slider while density increase a lot and it'd make a better transition for 00:34:298 (4,1) - with a build-up like this because current 1/2 feels empty not gonna lie
00:34:556 (1) - Don't really see why you couldn't make this a 3/4 slider, vocal seems quite suited for it
00:44:061 (4,5) - I'm not against introducing those triangles antiflow but could you at least nerf distance between (4) and (5) because right now it's really painful...
That makes antiflow from 00:44:189 (6,7,8,1) - too hard to catch because of the distance change plus it shouldn't be increased that much (for 4 and 5) because it has nothing strong and tone is the same as others so would really equalize it
00:51:625 (1,2) - It feels really annoying especially because you're increasing by 0.20x distance, it might be nothing but we really feel it because of the antiflow and it's really far at the border of right screen.
I'd suggest you to reduce it to 2.00x and make it more comfortable otherwise it's really harsh to hit it properly
01:04:815 (5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - I would personally just shorten these distances a little bit so there's at least some kind of contrast from the kicks and the toms otherwise it feels a tad overdone
01:07:660 (1,2) - Could reduce spacing between (1) and (2) it's not that hard but it's somehow edgy so I'd make it like 01:11:798 (1,2) - with 1.10x distance to ensure walk and not be surprised by it
01:20:074 (1,2,3) - To be honest flow there is really annoying because of the cross-screen jump catching 01:20:591 (2,3) - is really impossible, it's more or less doable but really confusing because of that wiggle so eventually turn in on other side or try something else but try to make it comfortable
01:20:591 (2) - Could slider this like what you did for 01:20:074 (1) especially seeing as its a more powerful sound
01:21:108 (1) 01:37:660 (1) - coming from the wiggle is quite int imo tbh, jus do straight like previous 01:20:074 (1) - will prob hav to adjus wiggle in order to keep following hdash [if u decide to keep]
01:22:660 (1,2,3,4,5) - it's kinda uncomfy to hit wiggles right after 01:22:143 (1,2,3,4,5) would like to reverse them like this https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/18721791/f195
01:38:694 (1,2) - Would be better as a 3/4 for consistency with how you've emphasised this starting sound, otherwise 01:38:824 (2) has no strong sound in the song to back it up
01:45:742 (6,8) - i get that those are more spaced than 01:45:483 (2,4) - because the sound is slightly stronger, but i'd still move them a little to the left, feels too much rn
01:48:781 (5,6) - Why is there even an antiflow there, it's really annoying there and break all of your structure so better to do regular 1/4 jumps like other ones
01:51:108 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Emphasis is kind of obnoxious here cause the vocals are 3/4 so using 4 note patterns doesn't really reflect it too much, would be cooler to have 3 note just for this small segment it'll also deliver more varied movement and patterning
02:08:436 (1,2) - Would be better to do second wiggle on other side because having both with same way make the reading hard so would change
02:21:108 (5,1) - Might be an oversight but should have 1/2 hdash there like all other ones for transition, walk is not enough and feels wrong
02:31:970 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - It feels really forced, won't do that there especially for those "stream parts" it's literally too harsh and annoying for this section either REDUCE distances or kill it
02:33:522 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - wtf is this diffspike, it do not make any sense at all to me
plus the section right after is clearly more intense but the map somehow get easier with normal tapdashes
nerf 02:33:522 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - with less antiflow
02:35:591 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - I'm sorry but this is not correct, spamming same pattern for straight 10 seconds feels effortless and doesn't make any sense for your structure especially for transition such as 02:36:496 (9,1) - 02:38:565 (9,1) - 02:40:634 (9,1) - which are differents so why doing same patterns again and again...
Be more creative with some 1/4 patterns (flowy or not) and try to vary because otherwise it's just useless
this part fits the song perfectly tbh
doing something else just doesnt fit, the strongest finishes are antiflow double hdashes while the weaker ones are flow double hdashes
its a part thats all about getting into the rhythm of the pattern and holding consistency, think it fits superbly
in this section 02:41:798 (1,2) - 02:43:285
I think you shoud only do chains with the starting measures that contain finishers for better contrast and expression, otherwise these 02:37:660 (1,2) - 02:39:729 (1,2) - 02:41:798 (1,2) - also seems a bit overdone
02:42:832 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - Well, that's too weird would at least change 02:42:832 (1,2,3,4) - by making it classic hyperchain (note in middle, then left, then middle, then right) to arrange current pattern because it plays too strange right now, feels really forced on left side while intensity should be normally increased there so
02:43:350 (1,2) - while I understand the intention to make it more simpler into the entrance for 02:43:867 (1) - it seems to me that the slidertail and the circle are being too left out despite they standing out imo, especially the finisher on the tail.
maybe doing 3 circles and adjusting instead of slider-circle would work more?
02:43:737 (2) - i made this hyper between both maybe its better idk
i really dont wanna change 02:43:350 (1) - tho
02:43:737 (2) - 1/4 would be nice as there is a faint violin kind of sound, would give a more challenging motion to the wiggle part
02:47:487 (1,2) - Would avoid those 1/4 sliders, it breaks your structure and doesn't follow melody at all would've been better as a wiggle to be fair
02:51:108 (1,2,3,4,5) - Just curious but why didn't you make this part of the 1/4 wiggle part as well? The drums are still pursuing on the 1/4s so to me having this sparse segment
Would also accentuate the challenging aspect of this kiai with the wiggles, you could at least just add some more calmer wiggles instead that don't require much in terms of movement
03:00:160 (1) - Making this either a more spaced dash wiggle or a hyper wiggle would be sick cause having the same distancing as the low toms with 02:59:901 (1) feels kind of underwhelming and seeing what you've done with contrast and emphasis previously I think it could work out nicely
03:13:350 (1,2,3,4,5) - This looks bad, first of all this double wiggle in same way feels weird but having those hyperchain forced on the left with such a low distance between (1) and (2) doesn't make sense at all since it's just the same, better to sacrifice it and do different pattern with a bigger distance
03:14:643 (2,1) - Why having an antiflow wiggle for vocal which is supposed to be "chill" would really suggest to make it flowy so that it's more pleasant too catch, doesn't need to be that hard
03:37:660 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Please make at least them tapdashable with some hdash to add a nice contrast with your walk section, that would make sense for difference in melody instead of having walk once again and we will feel the difference considering they are stronger than previously
same thing for patterns after in music like 03:45:936 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - etc, won't point all but you got it
i agree with natusko, rn it just feels like some strong sounds are not mapped
(also btw the whole part do not plays fine at all, spacing between doubles feels too low to be walked and not high enough to be tapdashed, so i guess you want the player to randomly dash to reposition itself, which imo is a bad pattern design)
chains here doesnt seem to properly follow anything tbh, and if they are, ure very probably trying to cover it by the guitar which it doesnt seem to be properly landing? it just seems emphasizing nothing and occasionaly falling correctly on the guitar, quite overdone
this in comparison is totally more acceptable 04:37:660 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - cuz of the drums
talked on disc a bit with secre ctrl c
still have issue guitars that dont properly land + theres a section inbetween without guitar or any notable drum,this:
04:31:453 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5,6) - section without guitar/or drum intesntiy increas yet still uses consectiv chains
also these
04:27:315 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2) -
04:35:591 (7,8,9,10,11,12,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4) -
arent they quite literally the same song-wise why are they so apart from each other, musically this part is just copy-pasted with the second half just having an extra instrumental layer added
the cymbal-like u can hear every white tick
regarding the overdone guitars thing, for me the chains only seems to work if he would do it as doubles like he did for 04:27:315 (1,2,3) - 04:27:962 (5,6,1) - 04:28:737 (7,8,1) - 04:29:384 (1,2,3) -
04:36:626 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - and 04:28:350 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - nerf to the previous 04:35:979 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - and 04:27:703 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - spacing of this pattern? nothing about the song changes at all. you can have a slight emphasis increase but not this major
04:53:177 (1,2) - Could reduce a bit so that hdash after between (3) and (1) doesn't feel tight to hit
04:56:281 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:00:418 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:04:556 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:08:693 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:12:832 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:16:969 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - 05:21:108 (1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,4,5) - nice contrast between vocal /non-vocal