Thoughtcrime

00:02:557 - 00:04:957 - 00:07:357 - since you follow the guitar with 00:00:307 (1,2,3,4) - etc, feels more natural if you add notes there

Beat is on 00:04:507 - it is unlike the off-beat the rest are

00:12:307 (57,58,59) - for consistency with the section, i think you should change it to dkd like you did in 00:21:907 -

00:13:807 (71,72,73,74) - can be more accurate with the guitar and the drum if you make it k d k k

00:18:457 - this triplet should be in 00:18:757 - for drums, try to move there and change it to kkd

00:28:432 (192) - consider remove that note, the long patterns should start in 00:28:507 - to be in accordance with the drums

00:28:507 - 01:40:507 - kkddkkk (reverse colour) for first pattern plays more nicely since its surrounded by dons. for second pattern could do something that ends on kat, like ddddkkk but optional

00:29:032 - 01:41:032 - add note for drum similar like what you did at 00:48:232 - ?

00:29:107 - from this section i think you make something similar i said in #3986552
try to follow the vocal and the drums addind more notes.
add notes here for example: 00:29:857 -, 00:31:957 -, 00:34:357 - , 00:35:707 - , etc.

00:42:607 - add k for snare similar like 00:35:407 - , 3/2 break feels off

00:42:607 - can add note here to keep flow

00:46:057 - k ride 00:46:357 - d kick add for drum? you omitted some drums earlier to emphasize vocal, but there is no vocal here and its like a filler section for the drum so i think it feels better to follow everything in top diff

same for 01:58:057 - 01:58:357 -

00:48:307 -
in this section feels a bit undermapped in some spots that sounds the drums very noticeable
try to add more notes in 00:50:632 - , 00:51:007 -, etc. following a similar sequence like 00:49:057 (312,313,314,315,316,317,318,319) -

00:50:107 (322) - you kept the offbeat of 00:48:757 - so 00:50:107 should be empty

00:50:107 - 00:52:507 - shift 1/2 later for vocal emphasis?

00:55:807 or 00:55:507 - any of these feel more like finisher parts compared to 00:57:907 (368) - tbh

01:08:707 -
02:20:707 -
these drum fills could have been mapped more closely, which means increasing the density at the part where the drums pick up. you did something similar in 03:36:307 and i'd say it is something worthy of being highlighted

01:19:357 - note here? similar to other kiais

01:19:507 (536) -
02:31:507 (1043) -
03:48:307 (228) -

The accompaniment still serves the function of a chorus. Therefore, the sudden drop in density here gives an unnatural impression.

At the very least, it would be better to have this level of density.
Example (1st Chorus)
01:19:807 - add k, 01:19:957 - add k, 01:20:257 - add d, 01:20:557 - add d

01:19:507 - I don't see much sense in this sv, it would be much better if you keep the same sv value until 01:20:707 -

01:20:707 - could shift this sv line to 01:20:857 - , looks cleaner to have the finisher on the same speed as the previous notes imo
same for 02:32:707 - 03:49:507 -

01:41:107 - section here needs a buff, id recommend improvising some 1/4s to help bump up the density to contrast with the section after

01:47:107 - if you map this, then map 01:49:507 - if not map neither of them?

01:58:657 (811) - shift to 01:58:357 - where snare is vs nothing in song

this section of the song 02:07:507 - repeat the same structure like 00:55:507 - , with the difference there are more instrumental and drums in 02:09:307 -
i would suggest make a similar structure for consistency (you can vary with the notes to follow the vocal) and try to follow the drums in 02:09:307 -

02:11:107 - dont sv the barline and only the notes after

02:11:407 (894) - remove this finisher? not representing anything

02:11:407 - 03:28:207 - really subjective but i think it would be cool if you did a sv transisition with x0.95 -> x1.00 -> x1.05 -> x1.10

02:30:157 - 03:46:957 - add notes to be consistent with 01:18:157 - , with 1/1 break these feel noticebly sparser then 1st kiai

02:45:607 - note for vocal?

02:53:107 - can probably shift this sv forward to be a bit more readable

03:00:307 (1) - spinner here feels out of place when there really isn't anything it builds on and there isn't anything for it to lead up to or is need for any anticipation. Either map it out or leave it blank

03:06:307 - add a 0.6x sv for the barlines?
same idea for these 03:25:507 -

03:09:907 - ~ 03:19:507 -

the 1/3 doublets like 03:10:407 (6,7) - or 03:12:807 (16,17) - feel like they were improvised, but really the first note there is no apparent sound to follow, generating a strange sensation that you are playing something that doesn't sound.
If you listen very clearly the sounds are in these spots 03:11:007 - 03:12:207 - 03:13:407 - 03:13:707 - .
Try to follow the drum better here by listening slowly to the song and you will get it.

03:13:407 - etc feel u could add notes on the drums

03:24:307 - can we avoid this sv jump its kinda weird

03:24:307 - add break here?

03:25:507 - for effect can lower these barlines to like 0.75x then jump up here 03:28:207 -

03:28:207 - higher volume like 60%~80% since the vocals are still pretty loud? (louder than the break)

03:36:457 - maybe have a 3-3-7 instead of a 3-5-5 pattern instead? current rhythm feels a bit unsatisfying in relation to both vocals and drums

03:48:457 - can add note here to give contrast to other kiai endings since the drum is slightly diff