00:21:637 (1,2,3,4) - imo for this vocal section it would be wiser to add additional movement try to change this pattern to leftright pattern with (1,2) making to the right and (3,4) to the left
00:36:740 (2) - like in the cup, you can probably get rid of this note for the sake of density management and to better emphasize the calmness of the part
00:39:526 - and 00:42:837 - should be notes just like 00:42:217 (3) - 00:38:906 (3) - as they are so similar
00:45:423 (2,3) - 00:47:078 (2,3) - 00:48:733 (2,3) - this dashes feels a bit out of place because vocals/sounds arent strong
00:48:733 (2,3) - this felt fine for the dash due to buildup
the rest are removed accordingly
00:53:913 (1) - why not use a similar slider as this 00:53:085 (1) since you have to tap walk this slider and thus making it a bit awkward to move
01:00:326 (3,4) - this dash is unimportant in my opinion as it doesn't have an impact compare to something at 01:01:154 (6,1)