Apollyon

00:05:410 (5410|2) - would be better if it started at 00:05:331 -

• this note at 00:38:252 (38252|1) - should be charted like 00:33:199 (33199|1) -/ 00:35:726 (35726|1) - , the sound it's equal but charted in a different way

• 00:38:568 here in my opinion you should crop this ln 00:37:936 (37936|0) - and then add another lnotes like you did before, because it's clearly possible to hear a variation in the melody, maybe here at 00:39:199 too

-here at 00:41:094 where there is distorted audio in my opinion you should chart something (at least 1 lnote that start from 00:41:094 to 00:42:199 in the 3* column) or (maybe something like i mini dump ? idk honestly ignore this last bracket)

same thing at 03:05:631 ( here it's more relevant )

00:44:015 (44015|0,44015|1,44094|2,44094|1,44173|3,44173|2) - sounds keep being the same and nothing is either rising or descending so this stair feels pretty unnecessary and inconsistent

00:47:094 (47094|1,47094|2) - this is really strong and i would add a note on col 4, to make it even consistent with the rest of the high pitched synths. since there r more instances like that i would look through the section better

00:51:870 (51870|1) - clearly there arent any sounds there, remove this note

00:53:410 - -> 00:57:199 -
this section doesnt fit the melody at all to me; with so many bursts in the background you could have continued mapping something similar to 00:48:357 - and make it fairly harder and also more physically demanding;
this isnt the only issues because the quads are also unnecessary due to being barely stronger than a kick itself and weaker than the snares, so i would suggest remapping this

• i suggest you to move this two notes 00:54:515 (54515|1,54752|1) - by one 1/8 grid, like you did for example at 00:51:081 (51081|3) - there's a micro-roll in the rhythm that you should consider following

same thing at 00:56:647 (56647|2) -

00:59:094 - deserves a higher snapped roll, that looks pretty reductive imo

01:01:620 - -> 01:02:015 - no point in making it flow the same way as the bursts before because there's a totally different sound if you listen correctly

01:20:608 (80608|2) - this is unnecessary, the tick sound hasnt got any relevant burst for this note to be used there

02:02:283 (122283|1,122283|2) - / 02:03:832 (123832|3,123832|1) - etc.
instead of using doubles on blue lines for the really weak melody we can hear at a slower speed, you could try gracing before the double on the red line to follow what you probably wanted to like this:

to make it work, the double on 1/8 should adapt to the placement of the double above.

02:45:965 - 02:56:631; i feel like the jack patterns could be a little more diverse as the song introduces a fluctuating synth sound. Except for maybe iterations like 02:47:631 - 02:48:631. As for those parts i have some concerns of making the same type of patterns on different sounds, usually you'd want to map sounds that are more prominent and louder, again just a suggestion

02:53:298 (173298|3,173381|3,173464|3,173548|3,173631|3) - this is absolutely unnecessary due to the intensity of what youre following. the sound is way too weak to have such emphasization reserved, would only follow the really noticeable synth with the usual 3 note anchor

• 03:20:142 (200142|2) - in section like these dont chart one single ln, do something funnier to play like [ https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1100856741052293142/1100856803467739156/example.png ]

i'll explain here the grid i used to obtain this pattern :
from 03:20:142 to 03:20:342 (1/12)
from 03:20:408 to 03:20:808 (1/6)
from 03:20:897 to 03:21:164 (1/9 -> 0.5/4.5)
from 03:21:242 to 03:21:742 (1/4)
from 03:21:856 to 03:22:199 (1/7 -> 0.5/3.5)
03:22:342 and 03:22:542.

do something similar things at like 03:25:342 and 03:16:142

• this ln 03:34:142 (214142|3) - it's too early in my opinion, the sound start at 03:34:742

03:49:200 (229200|1,229289|1) - sounds are far too different to be stacked under the same column, would rather if you ctrl+h the 1/8 grace

03:50:568 (230568|2) - move this to col 1 for consistency with 03:47:612 (227612|3,227656|1,227700|3,227744|1) - ?

03:51:918 (231918|3,231953|2,231989|1) - these notes arent following anything, and if its only to keep continuity for the burst i would totally avoid it
also applies to the other instance

03:52:730 (232730|0,232774|0) - cant really get why you forced a 340 bpm minijack right here while all of the bursts like this are simply graces, this is an issue not only for consistency sake but also because its unreasonable to play with full accuracy

03:53:259 (233259|2,233303|3,233347|2) - two hand trill would be better for consistency

• those two notes at 03:58:509 (238509|0,238642|0) - are unsnapped, the sound of 03:58:509 (238509|0) - start at 03:58:465 and then the other one should be moved at 03:58:597

• 04:02:436 and 04:02:700 should be charted as doublets (they're like 04:02:171 / 04:01:906), and then idk if this sound should be pitched with two notes, let me point out it anyway

same thing 04:08:436 for the first suggestion

04:11:789 - 04:14:965; felt really odd playing through this quiet section, almost as if the mapper was forced to map these distinct sounds? I suggest removing/nerfing some of the notes here cause it can be strange on how it plays considering that not much volume is happening here

idk about this but i'll point out anyway

• 04:14:965 (254965|0,254965|1,255230|1,255230|0,255494|0,255494|1) - do something like
  [ https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/1100856741052293142/1100861223005868042/example2.png ] they're a little bit weird to hear without this small change.

same thing for 04:17:435 / 04:17:788 / 04:18:318 / 04:19:200 / ...

04:25:247 (265247|2,265247|3,265273|1,265326|0) - somehow this arrangement stands out than the other ones which used 1/12th (assuming), however with the grace here, the 2nd note is placed in 04:25:326, instead of 04:25:299 where it should be. Unless there is some intention or reason to this that i dont know.

04:29:195 (269195|3,269195|2,269231|1,269231|0) - change this arrangement into something else, since it was previously used for a chord grace in this section

04:53:553 - just a suggestion, but you can definitely fit in an extra note in one of these snaps to make a double. Feels really odd hearing a loud hardcore kick in this section without an extra note to add into the intensity of this part

Some other timestamps with a similar suggestion: 04:53:834, 04:54:115, 04:54:397, 04:54:772, 04:55:053, etc.

04:57:022 (297022|3,297022|1,297115|2) - just realized there are a few arrangements like this with snaps that are not snapped correctly, (the hardcore kick is mapped as one LN, but a double on some ghost sound?), again, unless there is some intention behind this

05:01:334 first column overlapped rice not inside LN

05:18:022 - 05:19:522; i feel like there is no reason to map white sounds, while i do hear some distinct beat behind it, the volume of it is too low that i dont think it should be mapped like this. I suggest just putting an LN from 05:18:022 to 05:19:522, or start anywhere from 05:17:272

05:28:522 - If u want to overmap stuff, its best to not do it in a slow/quiet part, its basically mapping white noise, and the player itself would just be hitting notes that has no sound representative. Remove these 2 notes in 05:28:553 (328553|2,328584|0) - based on what im hearing, there is just no sound there to support them. Again, unless If theres some other intention to this that im not getting

05:40:522 - HANS ZIMMER TYPE BEAT?!?!?

05:43:322 - -> 05:44:572 - /05:49:722 - -> 05:50:922 - and similar:
i do find that a reasonable progression in difficulty due to the synth getting more intense but what i do not like about this is that the jump in difficulty is too high:

1. the minijack usage in super high bpm streams feels really off by not being actually in sync with the synth;
2. it materially plays really weirdly;
   from that, i would suggest using more technical but still not so dense streams because the melody itself does not demand such a spike.

05:44:555 (344555|1) - i think this note should be better in 05:44:588, based from what im hearing
Same as 05:44:822 (344822|0,344855|1) - except put 05:44:822 (344822|0) - in 05:44:788

05:52:322 (352322|1,352322|0) - what is this hand doing here..?
Well, unlike this one 05:52:922 (352922|2,352922|1) - with an obvious change of chord sound

06:02:122 - wouldn't hurt to put a chord here like the other ones?

06:05:422 (365422|3,365455|2,365488|1,365522|2,365555|1,365588|0) - this sound is really overmapped and creates now an unjustified spike

06:10:722 - this could definitely be changed into some other kind of arrangement, like a grace/LN grace for example, instead of just a plain hand here

06:11:322 (371322|0,371388|0) - i do not really get whats that for, would remove it

06:25:322 - This part looks cool, but i feel like in the first few seconds, it could be nerfed a bit. Because starting from 06:26:922 the bass sound gradually gets intense, and thats where i think those very dense speedjacks can be placed.
For instance, in 06:25:455 (385455|2,385455|3,385588|1,385588|0) - can be changed into just a singular note, whether it could still be a jack pattern or not depends on the mapper. Then in 06:26:922 would be those hands stacked with a jack pattern. And repeat in 06:28:522

• this note 07:41:270 (461270|2,461270|1) - have the same pitch of 07:41:179 (461179|0,461179|3,461179|1) - ?

• 07:42:261 (462261|0,462261|3) - remove at least 1 note, this is a ghost note so you should give it less consideration than where it's possible to hear a percussion
  ( same thing at 07:42:711 (462711|3,462711|2) - / 07:42:891 (462891|1,462891|0) - )

07:41:270 (461270|1,461270|2) - triple for this evident snare would fit better imo

• i suggest you to add 1 note at 08:09:558 (489558|2,489648|1) - / 08:10:008 (490008|1) - the percussion here are more powerful than the single notes of this section

08:54:998 (534998|2) - remove hand cause no difference in sound compared to 08:54:792 ?

08:56:860 (536860|2,536860|1) - i would unjack these honestly, it creates a spike in the spike tbh and the sound isnt even adapt to be stacked with what u followed before

08:57:378 (537378|3,537429|3) - unnecessary minijack again, no sounds are similar enough to be stacked

09:42:892 - -> 09:43:203 - this is not a 1/4 i'm sure, but since a 1/8 would result super uncomfortable considering that there's a long hold i would use a rolly 1/6 pattern going rightwards

10:04:156 (604156|0,604222|0) - i would avoid this, use a high snap roll instead, like on 1/12. be careful if any minijacks come out

10:04:456 (604456|1,604522|1) - be careful here too, an easy fix would be removing 10:04:456 (604456|1) -

10:13:761 (613761|1,613777|3,613792|2) - this section hasnt got any relevant minijacks except this one, i would do something like this to prevent it:

10:45:753 theres a very clear sound here that uses the 1/3 snap, Assuming these graces are to represent the synth's, but when stacked on top of another pattern and trying to intertwine it, it makes this sort of broken stream pattern which this loses resemblance of the previous iteration that is jacks in 10:40:420. unless there is some intention to this

11:06:517 (666517|2) - why is this the only rice ion this section?

• i dont get why you didnt charted the notes at 11:58:248 / 11:58:448 / 12:01:444 / 12:01:638

12:53:891 (773891|1,773966|1) - this isnt necessary at all, no sounds i can hear have to be stacked like this. would simply move the last note of the minijack to col 4 and shorten also 12:53:816 (773816|0) - by 1/4