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Tanaka Rie - Ningyo Hime

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Glass
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Glass
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on March-07-10 at 1:09:11 AM

Artist: Tanaka Rie
Title: Ningyo Hime
Source: Chobits
Tags: jpop j-pop
BPM: 79
Filesize: 6058kb
Play Time: 03:32
Difficulties Available:
  1. Breezing (1.2 stars, 153 notes)
  2. Dreaming (3.98 stars, 334 notes)
  3. Relaxing (2.38 stars, 202 notes)
Download: Tanaka Rie - Ningyo Hime
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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My first beatmap.

March-05:
Minor fixings(Thanks to osuplayer111)
Bubbled by osuplayer111

March-03:
Fixed some note placements, break times(Thanks to Lissette)

Feb-27:
Remapped [Relaxing] with 1.2x Distancer and level 3 grid
Added another kiai, fixed spacings.(Thanks to VanMoNky)
Fixed sliders, offset, hitsounds and added a custom slider sound.(Thanks to Teara)
Proto-bubbled by Teara

Feb-26:
Got rid of the .osb and resubmitted
Remapped [Dreaming] with 1.0x Distancer and level 3 grid
Fixed spacings, added some notes here and there, slider symmetries, changed some patterns (Thanks to samipale, Kytoxid and Leorda)

Feb-25:
Fixed some more spacing and hitsound issues (Thanks to kino77, Beuchi-chan and Armin)

Feb-24:
Finished [Dreaming]
Sending this to 'pending'
Fixed more mistakes (Thanks to Breeze, orioncomet, gdeath and Arusha Shuna)
Fixed offset (Thanks to xxheroxx)

Feb-23:
New level [Dreaming] in progress
Fixed a bunch of spacing mistakes

Feb-22:
Finished [Breezing]
Added hitsounds
Corrected some spacing inconsistencies and other mistakes(Thanks to Card N'FoRcE)

Feb-18:
Changed [Instrumental] to [Breezing]

Feb-16:
Started [Instrumental]

Feb-15:
Started and finished the first difficulty [Relaxing]
Fixed timing(Thanks to Kytoxid)
Made a Background
Last edited by Glass , edited 75 times in total.
Card N'FoRcE
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Here since the beginning
Card N'FoRcE
Hi.

- General:
  • Not so bad for a first timer. Timing seems ok.
    You may consider adding a preview time.
    01:04:328 - KIAI should start here, instead of 01:03:758
    02:20:277 - KIAI should start here, instead of 02:19:750
- Breezing:
  • .Opinions:
    You may consider decreasing HP drain a bit, more than "Normal" seems too hard for a Easy difficulty.
    There are some little spacing inconstistencies here and there, but they are mostly readable anyway. You can consider fixing them up a bit. Also, look on "Suggestions" for most important ones: try making them look better :P
    .Suggestions:
    00:22:556 (1) - I really don't think this spacing is a problem, because i think it's readable, but you can do something like this:

    00:33:948 (6) - try making it more between 00:33:189 (5) and 00:34:708 (1) to make it look better
    00:40:024 (2,3) - same as above, with 00:39:265 (1) and 00:41:543 (4)
    00:49:898 (3) - move it farther from 00:49:138 (2) -
    01:14:961 (1) - this one is really bad loking... >.<; move it closer to 01:14:201 (3)
    01:22:176 (2) - this one ends on blue tick and doesn't sound good. I suggest making this end at 01:24:834, then make the spinner start at 01:25:594.
    01:52:176 (2) - feels too close from 01:50:657 (1)
    02:07:366 (3,1) - misreadable for a 1/1 spacing, (3) and (1) should be closer a bit more
    02:24:834 (1) - same as 00:22:556 (1):

    02:49:00-02:58:00 - this break feel really out of place
    .Errors/Mistakes:
    02:34:708 (2) - oh no, you have to fix this one, move it farther
- Relaxing:
  • .Opinions:
    Same thing as Breezing, some spacing inconsistencies et cetera
    .Suggestions:
    00:20:088 (4) - move a bit to the right.
    00:43:062 (1,2,3) - same as 00:22:556 (1) in "Breezing", but flipped vertically.
    01:06:986 (5) - move down a bit; 01:07:936 (6,7) - move down a bit and press CTRL+H
    01:08:885 (8) - new combo
    01:22:176 (4) - should end on white or red tick
    01:28:632 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - random spacing?
    01:38:885 (1) - remove new combo, 01:39:265 (2) - add new combo
    01:40:404 (1) - remove new combo, 01:40:784 (2) - add new combo
    01:43:442 (1) - remove new combo, 01:43:822 (2) - add new combo, 01:44:961 (1) - remove new combo
    01:46:480 (1) - remove new combo, 01:46:860 (2) - add new combo
    02:13:822 (1) - should end on white or red tick
    02:38:126 (4) - new combo?
    .Errors/Mistakes:
    00:14:961 (4) - new combo or move 00:14:012 (3) to have a fair spacing.
    00:23:126 (3,4,5) - no, it's unreadable. it's like 00:14:961 (4), but you can't use a new combo this time. Try moving 00:24:075 (4) to the left
    00:29:391 (4,5,6) - again... It's a shame you tried to use this pattern to make something different and you didn't succeed at doing that, because it's really unreadable D: You have to fix and make a regular spacing or try something else , I'm sorry >.<
    I'm not pointing this out these kind of spacing anymore, search them and try to fix every of them.
I think it's almost everything for now.
Please fix these, then ask other people to have a look.

Glass
Topic Starter
Glass
Hi :) Didn't expect anyone to check this thread so early =o

Firstly thanks for all these suggestions, my spacings really were horribly unconsistent now that you pointed them out xD Maybe I should've use distance snap from the start :|

I've done most of the fixes:

Card N'FoRcE wrote:

- General:
  • You may consider adding a preview time. Yup I was considering doing that eventually ^^, it's not the most important part so I'll leave that for later on
    01:04:328 - KIAI should start here, instead of 01:03:758 Done
    02:20:277 - KIAI should start here, instead of 02:19:750 Done
- Breezing:
  • .Opinions:
    You may consider decreasing HP drain a bit, more than "Normal" seems too hard for a Easy difficulty. Decreased by 2 ticks
    .Suggestions:
    00:22:556 (1) - I really don't think this spacing is a problem, because i think it's readable, but you can do something like

    00:33:948 (6) - try making it more between 00:33:189 (5) and 00:34:708 (1) to make it look better Moved
    00:40:024 (2,3) - same as above, with 00:39:265 (1) and 00:41:543 (4) Moved
    00:49:898 (3) - move it farther from 00:49:138 (2) - Moved
    01:14:961 (1) - this one is really bad loking... >.<; move it closer to 01:14:201 (3) Moved it right below
    01:22:176 (2) - this one ends on blue tick and doesn't sound good. I suggest making this end at 01:24:834, then make the spinner start at 01:25:594. Hmm I'll see about this later
    01:52:176 (2) - feels too close from 01:50:657 (1) Moved
    02:07:366 (3,1) - misreadable for a 1/1 spacing, (3) and (1) should be closer a bit more Moved
    02:24:834 (1) - same as 00:22:556 (1)
    Moved it like this:
    02:49:00-02:58:00 - this break feel really out of place Added notes to that part
    .Errors/Mistakes:
    02:34:708 (2) - oh no, you have to fix this one, move it farther Moved
- Relaxing:
  • .Opinions:
    Same thing as Breezing, some spacing inconsistencies et cetera
    .Suggestions:
    00:20:088 (4) - move a bit to the right. Stacked 00:20:088 (4) right at the end of the 00:19:328 (3)
    00:43:062 (1,2,3) - same as 00:22:556 (1) in "Breezing", but flipped vertically. I don't see the problem here ><
    01:06:986 (5) - move down a bit; 01:07:936 (6,7) - move down a bit and press CTRL+H Moved and flipped
    01:08:885 (8) - new combo Oops forgot this =x
    01:22:176 (4) - should end on white or red tick Making it end on red tick
    01:28:632 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12) - random spacing? I messed up that pattern :[ ,I'll redo something else
    01:38:885 (1) - remove new combo, 01:39:265 (2) - add new combo
    01:40:404 (1) - remove new combo, 01:40:784 (2) - add new combo
    01:43:442 (1) - remove new combo, 01:43:822 (2) - add new combo, 01:44:961 (1) - remove new combo
    01:46:480 (1) - remove new combo, 01:46:860 (2) - add new combo
    02:13:822 (1) - should end on white or red tick Made it end on red tick
    02:38:126 (4) - new combo? Done
    .Errors/Mistakes:
    00:14:961 (4) - new combo or move 00:14:012 (3) to have a fair spacing. Made it a new combo
    00:23:126 (3,4,5) - no, it's unreadable. it's like 00:14:961 (4), but you can't use a new combo this time. Try moving 00:24:075 (4) to the left Merged a note with the slider
    00:29:391 (4,5,6) - again... It's a shame you tried to use this pattern to make something different and you didn't succeed at doing that, because it's really unreadable D: You have to fix and make a regular spacing or try something else , I'm sorry >.< Fixed
That was really helpful =], thanks again!

Zairin_old
16 posts
Joined October 2009
Zairin_old
[Dreaming] difficulty was fun. Here's a star! ^^

i think the spacing inconsistencies are fixed.
Breeze
osu! Alumni
4,949 posts
Joined March 2009
Breeze
[General]
  1. Please delete osb.file since it's not used
[Breezing] lol Saw my name
  1. 00:25:594 (4) - a little spacing wrong
  2. 00:27:872 (2,3,4) - Oh, this one must fix :/ it's obvious spacing wrong
  3. 01:27:872 (1) - spinner ends here better imo
  4. 02:11:164 (2) - a little spacing wrong
[Relaxing]
  1. 00:46:480 (5), 00:46:670 (6) - Remove clap, add clap at 00:45:341 (4)
  2. 00:50:657 (4) - remove clap
  3. 00:57:872 (4) - spacing wrong
  4. 01:03:948 (1) - minor spacing wrong
  5. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here
  6. 01:08:885 (1) - ^
  7. 01:10:974 (3) - ^
  8. 01:41:923 (4,5) - ^
  9. 01:44:961 (2) - spacing changed, so please new combo. Or changed these (2,3,4,5,6) spacing back to normal
  10. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here
  11. 02:57:493 (1) - spinner ends here
[Dreaming]
  1. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here
  2. 01:44:961 (2) - minor spacing wrong
  3. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here
  4. 03:20:657 (6) - remove finish
good job on first map
star
orioncomet
osu! Alumni
2,684 posts
Joined May 2009
orioncomet
[General]
- delete the .osb file, and full submit
- delete "Tanaka Rie Ningyo Hime" out of your TAG because It's already on Artist and Title
- BG Colour: Black
- make sure your TAG all the diffs are the same

[Breezing]
01:01:290 (3) - spacing?
01:24:834 (1) - end thid spinner at 01:27:872 and try sound finish
03:20:657 (6) - end this silder at 03:22:556
03:32:429 (1) - sound finish

[Relaxing]
00:29:391 (4) - remove clap at last silder
00:32:809 (6) - new combo?
01:03:948 (1) - replace clap with finish at bigin of silder
01:33:189 (7) - new combo?
02:19:898 (3) - sound finish at begin silder and maybe new combo?
02:34:708 (5) - new combo?
02:41:164 (3) - at last silder replace clap with finish
02:55:974 (1) - end this spiner at 02:57:872
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish

[Dreaming]
01:24:834 (5) - new combo?
01:25:214 (6) - end this silder at 01:27:113 and try sound finish at last silder
02:05:467 (6) - new combo?
02:08:126 (1) - remove new combo
02:41:164 (1) - try sound finish
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish

nice song ~ starr ~
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass
Thanks ^^ I'll fix all when I come back from class XD
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass

Breeze wrote:

[General]
  1. Please delete osb.file since it's not used Fixed
[Breezing] lol Saw my name
  1. 00:25:594 (4) - a little spacing wrong Fixed
  2. 00:27:872 (2,3,4) - Oh, this one must fix :/ it's obvious spacing wrong Fixed
  3. 01:27:872 (1) - spinner ends here better imo Fixed
  4. 02:11:164 (2) - a little spacing wrong Fixed
[Relaxing]
  1. 00:46:480 (5), 00:46:670 (6) - Remove clap, add clap at 00:45:341 (4) Fixed
  2. 00:50:657 (4) - remove clap Fixed
  3. 00:57:872 (4) - spacing wrong Fixed
  4. 01:03:948 (1) - minor spacing wrong Fixed
  5. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here Fixed
  6. 01:08:885 (1) - ^ Fixed
  7. 01:10:974 (3) - ^ Fixed
  8. 01:41:923 (4,5) - ^ Fixed
  9. 01:44:961 (2) - spacing changed, so please new combo. Or changed these (2,3,4,5,6) spacing back to normal Fixed
  10. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here Fixed
  11. 02:57:493 (1) - spinner ends here Fixed
[Dreaming]
  1. 01:04:328 - KIAI starts here Fixed
  2. 01:44:961 (2) - minor spacing wrong Fixed
  3. 02:20:277 - KIAI starts here Fixed
  4. 03:20:657 (6) - remove finish Fixed
good job on first map
star


orioncomet wrote:

[General]
- delete the .osb file, and full submit Fixed
- delete "Tanaka Rie Ningyo Hime" out of your TAG because It's already on Artist and Title Fixed
- BG Colour: Black Fixed
- make sure your TAG all the diffs are the same Fixed

[Breezing]
01:01:290 (3) - spacing? Fixed
01:24:834 (1) - end thid spinner at 01:27:872 and try sound finish Fixed spinner end, I think the finish sounds a little weird though xD
03:20:657 (6) - end this silder at 03:22:556 Fixed
03:32:429 (1) - sound finish Hmmm I think whistle sounds better here o.o

[Relaxing]
00:29:391 (4) - remove clap at last silder Fixed
00:32:809 (6) - new combo? Fixed
01:03:948 (1) - replace clap with finish at bigin of silder Fixed
01:33:189 (7) - new combo? Fixed
02:19:898 (3) - sound finish at begin silder and maybe new combo? Fixed
02:34:708 (5) - new combo? Fixed
02:41:164 (3) - at last silder replace clap with finish Fixed
02:55:974 (1) - end this spiner at 02:57:872 Fixed
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315 Fixed
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391 Fixed
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish I still think whistle is better XD finish is a bit loud o.o

[Dreaming]
01:24:834 (5) - new combo? Fixed
01:25:214 (6) - end this silder at 01:27:113 and try sound finish at last silder Sounds good, fixed
02:05:467 (6) - new combo? Fixed
02:08:126 (1) - remove new combo Fixed
02:41:164 (1) - try sound finish Fixed
03:20:847 (1) - end this spiner at 03:23:315 Fixed
03:26:923 (1) - end this spiner at 03:29:391 Fixed
03:32:999 (1) - try sound finish Sounds loud ><

nice song ~ starr ~
Thank you for the help, kudos for both of you! ^^
gdeath
1,598 posts
Joined May 2009
gdeath
[Breezing]
00:51:417 (1) - make spacing larger.the same spacing with 00:49:138 (2,3)
01:22:176 (2) - make the slider 1/4 later
02:23:695 (3,4) - replace two circles with the slider and make it start on 02:23:695 and end on 02:24:075
03:17:619 (4) - make the same spacing with 03:16:859 (2,3)
03:17:619 (4,5,6) - ^

[Relaxing]
make the slidertick decrease to 1.0
eg:00:20:088 (4) - you'll frequently sound "dadada''.Sound bad

00:45:341 (4,5,6) - spacing is different
01:06:607 (4,5) - make spacing larger.
02:58:632 (2,4) - remove clap
03:10:784 (2,4) - ^
03:16:860 (2) - ^
03:20:277 (5) - remove clap and add whistle
03:32:429 (2,3) - ^

[Dreaming]
00:16:860 (7) - make spacing larger
02:22:746 (5,6,7,8) - make the same spacing with 02:22:556 (4,5)

Star
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass

gdeath wrote:

[Breezing]
00:51:417 (1) - make spacing larger.the same spacing with 00:49:138 (2,3) Fixed
01:22:176 (2) - make the slider 1/4 later Do you mean make it end 1/4 later or start 1/4 later?
02:23:695 (3,4) - replace two circles with the slider and make it start on 02:23:695 and end on 02:24:075 Fixed
03:17:619 (4) - make the same spacing with 03:16:859 (2,3) Fixed
03:17:619 (4,5,6) - ^ Fixed

[Relaxing]
make the slidertick decrease to 1.0
eg:00:20:088 (4) - you'll frequently sound "dadada''.Sound bad Fixed

00:45:341 (4,5,6) - spacing is different Fixed
01:06:607 (4,5) - make spacing larger. Fixed
02:58:632 (2,4) - remove clap Fixed
03:10:784 (2,4) - ^ Fixed
03:16:860 (2) - ^ Fixed
03:20:277 (5) - remove clap and add whistle Fixed
03:32:429 (2,3) - ^ Fixed

[Dreaming]
00:16:860 (7) - make spacing larger Fixed
02:22:746 (5,6,7,8) - make the same spacing with 02:22:556 (4,5) Fixed

Star
Thank you :)
gdeath
1,598 posts
Joined May 2009
gdeath
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass
Okay done.

Reuploaded again~
Diasios
3,966 posts
Joined August 2008
Diasios
Offset: 12685

The mp3 you are using is a bit longer than the part which is mapped. Consider cropping it to reduce filesize.
Also, you should try to make the spacing more linear: it isn't wrong (becouse is intuitive) but keep "Distance Snap" active.
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass

xxheroxx wrote:

Offset: 12685

The mp3 you are using is a bit longer than the part which is mapped. Consider cropping it to reduce filesize.
Also, you should try to make the spacing more linear: it isn't wrong (becouse is intuitive) but keep "Distance Snap" active.
Yeah I realized the last ~10 seconds could've been cropped off, but the file size is only about 6MB so I thought to just leave it be xD and yeah I'll remember to use Distance Snap more often :)

Is that the most accurate offset? because nobody mentioned anything wrong about my current offset =x
Arusha Shuna
1,793 posts
Joined August 2009
Arusha Shuna
Request Accepted

General
Isn't the spacing a little bit too small for the harder diffs?
Breezing
00:20:277 (4) - follow dist. snap
02:02:809 (3) - symmetry?
03:14:961 (5,6) - move 1 grid right
Relaxing
fine... i think
Dreaming
01:21:037 (1,2,3) - spacing
02:05:277 (10) - try to make the slider shape symmetry
02:58:252 (1,2,3) - spacing
01:52:936 (4) - move down 1 grid
02:07:366 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,4,5) - spacing is different from default spacing throughout the song
02:22:556 (4,5) - spacing feels a bit odd

Not bad~~ STAR!
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass
This map has been deleted on the request of its creator. It is no longer available.
Diasios
3,966 posts
Joined August 2008
Diasios

Glasslake wrote:

xxheroxx wrote:

Offset: 12685
Is that the most accurate offset?
Indeed :D
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass
Okay ^^

I'll try self-modding until someone else accepts my mod request =x
kino77
909 posts
Joined March 2009
kino77
Nice one for the first map~

[General]
Add some tags?

[Breezing]
Turn down the HP drain rate 1 tick or 2?

[Relaxing]
00:14:963 (1) - Remove new combo?
00:24:457 (4) - Stack with 5?
00:27:685 (2) - Stack with 1?The spacing change among 1,2,3 is too small to notice...
00:29:393 (4,5) - Spacing?
01:05:469 (2) - Stack with 3?
I suggestion stack mostly 1/4 spacing note like 00:24:647 (5,6),make them like 00:19:330 (3,4)~
01:07:938 (7) - End here red tick?
01:12:684 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:14:963 (4,1) - Switch new combo?
01:43:064 (5) - Add clap here?
01:52:938 (4) - Remove clap?
01:54:457 (6) - ^
01:56:545 (3) - Put it right under 2?
02:04:710 (8,9) - Remove clap?
02:21:419 (1) - Remove new combo?
02:21:419 (1) ~ 03:17:241 (3) - Too many clap round here make it too noisy,try hitsound pattern?

[Dreaming]
Turn volume down to lv.5 from start to 00:55:216 (5)?
01:05:469 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:05:659 (2,3) - Spacing?
01:14:963 (7,1) - Switch new combo?
01:24:836 (1) - Remove new combo?
01:49:900 (9) - Switch new combo?
02:19:900 (3) - End here white tick?
02:27:115 (1) - Remove new combo?

Have a star~
Glass
Topic Starter
Glass

kino77 wrote:

Nice one for the first map~

[General]
Add some tags? Fixed

[Breezing]
Turn down the HP drain rate 1 tick or 2? Decreased by 1

[Relaxing]
00:14:963 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
00:24:457 (4) - Stack with 5? Fixed
00:27:685 (2) - Stack with 1?The spacing change among 1,2,3 is too small to notice... Fixed
00:29:393 (4,5) - Spacing? Fixed
01:05:469 (2) - Stack with 3? Fixed
I suggestion stack mostly 1/4 spacing note like 00:24:647 (5,6),make them like 00:19:330 (3,4)~ Will do :)
01:07:938 (7) - End here red tick? Fixed
01:12:684 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:14:963 (4,1) - Switch new combo? Fixed
01:43:064 (5) - Add clap here? Fixed
01:52:938 (4) - Remove clap? Fixed
01:54:457 (6) - ^ Fixed
01:56:545 (3) - Put it right under 2? Fixed
02:04:710 (8,9) - Remove clap? Fixed
02:21:419 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
02:21:419 (1) ~ 03:17:241 (3) - Too many clap round here make it too noisy,try hitsound pattern? Changed some claps with whistles

[Dreaming]
Turn volume down to lv.5 from start to 00:55:216 (5)? Done
01:05:469 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:05:659 (2,3) - Spacing? Fixed
01:14:963 (7,1) - Switch new combo? Fixed
01:24:836 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed
01:49:900 (9) - Switch new combo? Hmm I think the combo should end on that since it's on a long tick(heavier beat)
02:19:900 (3) - End here white tick? Fixed
02:27:115 (1) - Remove new combo? Fixed

Have a star~
Thank you :)
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