Yay approved~
00:21:853 (2,3,4,5) - You can go for a polygon shape here
00:22:186 (4,1) - Blanket fix
00:23:103 (3,1) - ^
00:23:519 (2,1) - ^
00:24:103 (1) - Actually I'd rather you have a long slow slider here than a spinner, because it doesn't really fit IMO
00:27:686 (3,1) - You can align them to form a straight line
00:28:520 (1) - ^
00:28:186 (2,3,1,2,3) - I'd rather you turn this into 2 triangles, because there is a strong vocal on 00:28:686 -
00:32:353 (3,3) - Blanket fix
00:33:853 (3,4,1) - Try to equalize the distance between 3-4 and 4-1
00:38:186 (1,2,1,2) - Would suggest stack, or shift further apart, because it seems rather lopsided when playing
00:42:519 (3) - Suggest you add a note here to complete the triangle and that there's a strong beat~
00:55:019 (3,4) - Suggest you change this into a 1/2 slider than a doublet since there is a beat on the red line and it feels better
01:18:353 (3,3) - Blanket?
01:19:686 (5,6,7,8,1) - Not sure if these streams seem too tight, but I suggest you expand them a little more~ (There are a few more)
01:23:019 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,1) - Completely doesn't fit the rhythm of the song, suggest change entirely ><
01:28:019 (1,2,3,4,5) - You can try for a more regular star
01:38:686 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - You can go for a polygon-like shape, this looks very lopsided and ugly. At least try turning on DS to match them
01:47:519 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - This could seem confusing, you may want to shift them apart more
01:53:353 (1,2,3,4,5) - You can try a polygon (suggested pentagon/hexagon)
02:05:353 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Whistle can get very annoying
02:18:686 (1) - The flow here would make more sense if you ctrl g this
03:07:353 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11) - No point for such a rhythm
03:12:853 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Same issue with the shifting
03:23:519 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - ^
03:41:853 (2,3,4,5,1) - You can try a star here
03:49:686 (2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Suggest you actually map to the drum instead of having such a random rhythm
03:55:519 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Same issue with the shifting
03:58:686 (1,5) - Blanket?
04:01:519 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Try hexagon?
04:04:019 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13) - Map to drum here instead
04:06:186 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2) - Same issue with the shifting
04:11:353 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,10,11,12,13,14,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Map to drum!
04:19:686 (1) - Personally I think this may be too fast x.x
04:28:519 (2,3,4,5,6) - Try for a polygon?
04:50:686 (1) - I don't think a spinner fits nicely here
04:52:019 (1) - Please do start mapping from this part
04:53:353 (5) - NC here
04:53:686 (1) - Remove NC here, that's how the regular NC works
04:53:686 (1,2) - 1/2 slider + doublet
05:06:519 (2) - Don't really understand why you're leaving this empty, you should map it!
05:15:019 (2,3) - 1/2 slider + doublet
That's it I think. Overall, I think you shouldn't map a map to be hard, it defeats the purpose of having fun, especially when it doesn't exactly go well with the music. Also, I spot a lot of linearly curved sliders like 02:25:686 (2) - 02:29:353 (1) - 02:37:853 (4) - which can become very boring. Try to incorporate more curved sliders like 02:52:686 (3) - 02:56:686 (3) - 04:49:353 (1) - . Please to map to the rhythm and not to anything else that you think 'works' ~
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