Cloudchaser wrote:

I hope you rank this ): i'll love if you do

1. 01:41:256 (3,5) - Stack these.
2. 02:12:074 (8) - Star this slider 1/4 later, and end where it currently does.
3. 02:38:983 (3,4,5) - you should move these back 1/4 as well, and change the length of the (5) slider
4. 04:35:983 (5,2) - more stuff you could stack to make it look better
5. 05:26:347 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,6,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3,4,5,1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - for this whole section, you should use the soft sampleset instead of normal.
6. 06:23:801 (1,2,3,4,5) - No clue what you are planning here. I don't even hear any 1/8 in the music.
7. 07:11:529 (2) - not sure why you are starting on the blue tick here. might as well just make a circle at the sliders end.

AIBat v3.1 wrote:

Snapping
01:25:618 (1) - Unsnapped circle.
06:24:074 (2) - Unsnapped slider (end).
06:24:801 (5) - Unsnapped slider (end).

aonkub555 wrote:

Hi~ i'm from my m4m queue

gerenal
http://puu.sh/5ATIY.jpg must fix in all case
you must work about hitsound , please use it
( Thank ,forget it when I change the offset)
queen diff

01:35:246 use grid snap , not fit horizontal with 01:35:064 yetfix

01:46:519 (7,8,9,10,11,1,2,1,2,1,2,1,2) i think the pattern in duration this still not flow enough , let's try improve it~ (should edit in save as new diff suppose you don't like it)Thank, I will consider later
01:47:428 switch with 01:47:609 (2) and then move 1 to 330l61 for stack
01:47:609 move to 224l352change this but not your suggest
01:47:791 -^ 143l79change this but not your suggest
01:47:973 -^ 384l224change this but not your suggest
01:48:155 -^ 64l288change this but not your suggest
01:48:337 -^ 288l79change this but not your suggest
01:48:519 -^ 480l352change this but not your suggest
01:48:700 -^ 168l370change this but not your suggest

01:52:155 (6) move to 104l323 for pattern look pretty betterThank, I will consider later
01:59:700 (2,3) use grid snap fix
02:07:791 (3) tail slider not stack with 02:07:973 (1)fix
02:45:246 (4) not stack yet no change sorry
02:45:428 (6) -^no change sorry
02:49:602 (2) use grid snap , not fit yet fix
02:54:337 (2) -^fix
02:55:064 (4) -^fix
02:55:428 (5,6) -^fix
02:59:246 (2) -^no change sorry
03:02:155 (2) -^no change sorry
03:05:064 (2) -^no change sorry
03:15:246 (2) move to x446 for fit vertical with 03:14:700 (3)fix
03:15:428 (3) -^fix
03:55:700 (4,5) move to 74l116 for stackfix
03:57:155 (5,6) -^ Sorry I don't know what you say
03:58:609 (5,6) -^Sorry I don't know what you say
04:00:064 (5,6) -^Sorry I don't know what you say
04:47:428 (3) move to y146 for fit horizontal with 04:47:064 (2)fix
06:35:973 -^ move to y288this is Y:288 now
06:52:155 (2) not stck yetfix
07:03:064 (4) -^fix
07:37:519 (1) -^fix
07:38:337 (2) not stack at tail sliderfix
07:38:700 (3) -^fix
07:39:064(4) -^fix

that's all sorry i can mod just one diff, your song is so long~
very good pattern
ugh.. very sleepy , good luck~

Kenterz9 wrote:

Hey, M4M from my queue ~

[Fairy]
01:47:428 (7) - It should ends on a white line change this but not your suggest
02:11:700 (8) - Distance Snap (or it should start on a white line ^w^) fix
02:13:428 (2) - This circle goes a little bit in the slider so it's uglyfix
02:13:609 (3) - ^fix
02:20:519 (7) - Maybe better around x:28 y:60change this but not your suggest
02:49:973 (1) - Ends on white linefix
02:50:519 (2,1,2,1,2) - ^fix
02:58:700 - For this part, don't forget to follow the background music a little bit, not only the vocal, because it's quite boring =/ Thank, I will consider later
03:07:428 - Here must starts the Kiai Time no change sorry
06:47:064 - ^ no change sorry
03:16:155 (3) - Ends on white line cause it's ugly to hearfix
03:19:791 (3) - ^fix
03:36:064 (7) - ^change this but not your suggest
03:17:609 (2) - Try something else please xDfix
04:04:155 (1) - Ends on a white lineI wrong timing ,changed
04:34:246 (1) - Try another paternfix
06:13:609 (1) - It should ends on a white line xD fix
06:17:973 (1,1) - ^fix
06:27:791 (1,2,3) - Try that : (and try something else for the slider =3)fix

SPOILER

06:32:519 (2) - Should ends somewhere elsefix
07:04:973 (3) - Must be placed at 07:05:064 fix
07:13:156 (3,4) - Weirdfix
07:33:609 - IMO I think Kiai time should starts hereSorry ,I don't know any difference
07:53:973 (1) - It may be x0.5 fix
08:17:246 (8) - ^fix
07:55:428 (1,2,3,4) - Too much hitsoundsfix

IMO I think your mapping isn't adapted for approval maps or something else (normal, it's your 1st map ^w^)
So I think you should try to make your mapping better =p

Thanks =3

tutuhaha wrote:

这张图目前不能达到app的标准，Draining Time要大于6分钟
[Fairy]
01:47:428 (7) - 尾部unsnap fix
02:50:337 (x) - 我深深的觉得这种地方是有note的 fix
02:50:882 (x) - ^fix
02:51:246 (x) - ^fix
02:51:791 (x) - ^fix
02:52:337 (x) - ^fix
02:52:700 (x) - ^fix
02:53:246 (x) - ^fix
02:53:791 (x) - ^fix
02:54:155 (x) - ^fix
02:55:609 (x) - ^抱歉 不改
然后我大致全部看了一遍你的这个diff
都是新人一定会犯的错误
①梗太少 <非常對(繼續研究新梗)
②节奏缺失or节奏过多 節奏應該沒問題?
③应该梗太少所以无脑放1/4节奏 部份正確~?
就用Queen这个diff来说一下
[Queen]
01:26:428 (3) - deletefix
01:26:791 (6) - delete 抱歉 不改
01:28:337 (4,1) - 太远小量調整~
01:30:064 (2) - deletefix
01:30:973 (x) - add note 抱歉 不改
01:31:882 (5) - deletefix
01:32:609 (4) - delete 抱歉 不改
01:33:155 (x) - add note 可以和前面的节奏呼应一下 抱歉 不改
01:34:428 (2) - deletefix
01:34:791 (5) - deletefix
01:34:973 (6) - delete抱歉 不改
这一段的这种节奏你就是因为梗太少而导致节奏过多
下面来说一下这样的节奏可以搞出什么梗
我个人在看到你这张图后，发现你居然没有用我最喜欢的那种梗(σ｀′)σ！
slider接note再接slider在你这张图里面基本没出现过 (應該有 在後面 記憶中有2次)
01:27:973 (2,3,4) - 这个梗也在你这张图里面好像就只出现过一次？(這是帶過... 梗在一張圖用多幾次比較好? 下次試試~)
其实这个梗也可以用在01:26:700 (x) - 这个地方=O=!?

01:28:337 (4,1) - 这个地方我说太远是因为4这个slider是往下走的在节奏不明显的地方突然往上并且大跳而且后面1-2的间距和4-1的间距完全不成正比，这个基本上是unrank的 fix
01:28:882 (4) - 这块在删完note后可以这样放嗯~ 非常值得參考

01:29:609 (3) - 这块同上^因为节奏基本相同嗯~ 非常值得參考
app的map普遍对梗的要求要比rankmap要高，一般来说mapper会选择让某首歌app的原因一是因为歌太长，原因二事appmap对梗的要求更宽松，有些在rankmap里不能实现的梗可以在appmap中得到很好的发挥，目前你这张图几乎用的全是重复梗，不好好动脑子和去别的appmap里采集灵感的话会让你这张图缺少可玩性在整MAP的時間 想到什麼就堆什麼... 都花了4個星期 現在在重整這些梗~
01:38:700 (7) - 像是这种地方你完全可以这么做 07:11:519 (2,3,4) - 這梗應該可以? fix
【8和9是重叠的】
01:39:428 (1,2,3,4) - 这个地方你用心听就可以听出来这里的1和2的rhythm比3和4更powerful一点，所以1到2的间距比3到4的间距大这个follow才对我聽了幾次也是3到4比較強... 我的問題? 嘗試一下~

这个文件是我大概做了十几秒的一个diff
主要是为了体现一下这个梗的运用和另一个方面
我希望你能听出来01:25:609 (1) - 这个点和01:37:246 (5) - 这个点虽然有着相同的节奏但是力度表现的不同
前面我用的是间距1.5x后面我用的是2.0x
其实要是再往更深层度递进的话后面那个应该要用绿线加速
http://puu.sh/5Bj16.osu >尋找開啟方法中....

不过说实话要是想做好这个歌首先最好学习下绿线加速的运用方式
现在我只能说最好多去找app的map看看，就算看也会有提升的

这个两个diff相比之下我倒是觉得Fairy的节奏更清晰
先说这么多

tutuhaha wrote:

那个连接右键点储存
然后放到游戏的文件里面
或者新建一个diff
然后把里面的内容复制进去就行了._.
嘛要是还是不会在我online的时候可以在游戏里找我
加油❤

sheela901 wrote:

[Fairy]
01:46:519 (2) - Move to {x:440 y:312}. No change but thank your idea~
01:46:882 (4) - Move to {x:180 y:348}. No change but thank your idea~
01:47:064 (5) - Move to {x:52 y:308}. No change but thank your idea~
01:47:246 (6) - Move to {x:124 y:188}.No change but thank your idea~
*The suggestions on top are changes that'll make the spacing consistent

01:47:973 - Add a circle at {x:432 y:104}. change but not your suggest
02:00:519 (1) - Remove this circle. Sorry, no change
02:14:700 (2,3) - Make them less curvy.Sorry, no change See the Picture in bottom
02:16:246 (2) - Move it to {x:440 y:184}, so 02:16:155 (1,2,3) should have a right curve.FIX
02:18:700 (2,3,4,5,6,7) - Make them all similar slider, with a rotation. Try to paste this code in the .osu file (contact me if you don't know how to):Thank, I will consider it later

SPOILER

420,307,138337,6,0,P|392:335|359:349,1,74.9999952316285
152,348,138700,2,0,P|118:333|92:307,1,74.9999952316285
92,76,139064,2,0,P|118:50|152:35,1,74.9999952316285
359,35,139428,2,0,P|393:50|419:76,1,74.9999952316285
395,336,139791,2,0,P|362:358|327:365,1,74.9999952316285
124,326,140154,2,0,P|93:304|73:273,1,74.9999952316285
116,47,140518,6,0,P|147:26|183:18,1,74.9999952316285

02:39:973 (1) - Perfectly stack under to 02:39:609 (7) , and make it curvy. FIX
02:42:337 (2) - Make a perfect stack to 02:41:791 (3) . FIX
02:49:973 (1,2,3,1,2,3,1,2,3) - Make them less curvy with variety of straight sliders.Thank ,I will change it later
02:55:882 (1) - Backward the spinner to one tick. FIX
03:13:246 (1) - Add a new combo, since a kiai time starts here. kiai time had been start here, the NC no change .Sorry
04:01:428 (2) - Make a perfect stack to 03:59:428 (1) . Sorry, no change
05:41:246 (5) - Shorten the slider to 05:41:428 . Sorry, no change
07:36:155 (4) - I'm not sure, but the slider doesn't look the same as 07:35:064 (1,2,3) .FIX

[Queen]
01:38:700 (7,8,9) - Maybe replace this pattern as a repeat slider, or circles. I will consider it later
01:43:336 (4) - Line it up with 01:43:154 (2) , and 01:43:427 (5) with 01:43:063 (1) . Sorry no change
02:03:064 (3,4) - Rotate them by -10° FIX

Good Luck with the map.

• 01:33:625 (5) - move to (219,300) for symmetry with (4)
  01:33:989 (7) - move to (153,162) for symmetry with (2)
  01:34:171 (8) - move to (179,87) for symmetry with (1)
  01:37:080 (4) - move to (269,287) for symmetry with (2)
  01:56:898 (4) - overlap. maybe it is look like better~
  02:00:535 (1) - why used NC?
  02:20:171 (6) - distance is so strange
  02:32:898 (2,3) - place farther. maybe it is good for playing
  02:35:625 (5) - move to (380,267) for symmetry with (3)
  02:35:807 (6) - move to (442,159) for symmetry with (2)
  02:35:989 (7) - move to (472,38) for symmetry with (1)
  02:44:716 (3,6) - remove that it overlaps lightly
  03:09:989 (2,2) - overlap. it looks ugly D:
  04:05:262 (4) - more bent.
  04:12:898 (1) ~ 04:15:444 (8) - a little bored ;w;
  04:30:171 (3,1) - overlap. maybe it is good for playing
  04:45:625 (3) - NC this slider, to show that its different because its slowed
  05:32:171 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - there is only a very straight pattern.. but not bad >w<
  05:39:807 (3,4) - jump?
  06:25:262 (2,4) - accurate blanket
  07:34:625 (1) - start on 07:34:535 for follow vocal
  07:49:989 (1,2,3,4) - blanket. maybe it is better to playing
  07:57:262 (1,2,3,4) - ^
  08:03:080 (1) ~ 08:05:625 (8) - accurate overlap
  08:17:262 (8) - NC this slider, to show that its different because its slowed
  
  Nice song~
  Good luck :3

[ Raphael ] wrote:

From my queue~ M4M request!

[Fairy]

• 01:33:625 (5) - move to (219,300) for symmetry with (4) fixed
  01:33:989 (7) - move to (153,162) for symmetry with (2)fixed
  01:34:171 (8) - move to (179,87) for symmetry with (1)fixed
  01:37:080 (4) - move to (269,287) for symmetry with (2)fixed
  01:56:898 (4) - overlap. maybe it is look like betterfixed
  02:00:535 (1) - why used NC?easily to distinguish
  02:20:171 (6) - distance is so strangefixed
  02:32:898 (2,3) - place farther. maybe it is good for playingno change ,Sorry
  02:35:625 (5) - move to (380,267) for symmetry with (3)fixed
  02:35:807 (6) - move to (442,159) for symmetry with (2)fixed
  02:35:989 (7) - move to (472,38) for symmetry with (1)fixed
  02:44:716 (3,6) - remove that it overlaps lightlyfixed
  03:09:989 (2,2) - overlap. it looks ugly D:fixed
  04:05:262 (4) - more bent.fixed
  04:12:898 (1) ~ 04:15:444 (8) - a little bored ;w;I will consider it, thank
  04:30:171 (3,1) - overlap. maybe it is good for playingchange but not you suggest, Sorry
  04:45:625 (3) - NC this slider, to show that its different because its slowed no change ,Sorry
  05:32:171 (1,2,3,1,2,3,4) - there is only a very straight pattern.. but not bad >w< this is refrain~
  05:39:807 (3,4) - jump?fixed
  06:25:262 (2,4) - accurate blanketfixed
  07:34:625 (1) - start on 07:34:535 for follow vocalkeep ,you can listen detail~
  07:49:989 (1,2,3,4) - blanket. maybe it is better to playingfixed
  07:57:262 (1,2,3,4) - ^no change ,Sorry
  08:03:080 (1) ~ 08:05:625 (8) - accurate overlapfixed
  08:17:262 (8) - NC this slider, to show that its different because its slowed fixed
  
  Nice song~
  Good luck :3

zengdaen wrote:

两个难度的区分度太低了，一个人做两个几乎一样的难度是没有意义的，fairy的物件虽然少一点但是打起来几乎一样，降低fairy的AR和OD改改排版弄成一般insane，当然也可以考虑改变排版的风格，你有16分钟的梗我无话可说梗已經所餘無幾了,在考慮是否可以取消fairy

05:13:807 - 这里开始可以考虑用亮一点的颜色，其实灰色的亮度很高，更符合歌曲……觉得麻烦就算了，无关紧要的东西其實我對色彩的調整技巧不高 所以之後才問問別人~

注意某些地方滑条和滑条tick的声音，可能你希望换掉甚至消音，尤其是fairy的05:28:535 (4) - fixed

全程使用默认的音效肯定是不好的……音效包↓↓↓，几乎给每个人发一遍真郁闷

http://pan.baidu.com/s/1nFExf <在研究中~~~

这个曲子肯定要用一堆绿线加减速……这个……只能说……咪啪……

排版的风格应该贴近曲子……比如fairy的03:30:171 (1) - ，你要直要扭要折都可以，一个大角度弧真的很土我之後會再改改

音效和音量都太夸张，至少对我来说&……

Lia04103 wrote:

加油

• 
  01:38:807 这里没有鼓点 可是你用的滑条 而且滑条结尾声音还很大 节奏不对 感觉不如换成和前面一样的一个单点加上三联 或者别的类似节奏
  01:43:079 (1,2,3,4,5) - 你仔细听 这五个音明显不一样 你这么五连的节奏听着很奇怪 可以变成一个滑条加三个单点 然后滑条尾部音量调小比较符合这个节奏
  01:50:262 (5,6,7,8,9) - 你这里节奏也下的不对 01:50:262 (5) - 这里没音 01:50:444 还有01:50:626 这里也没音 而红线有音你漏了 然后01:50:716这里开始是三联 你这个节奏是哪里来的 01:51:080 这里也明显漏音
  01:53:807 (6) - 感觉平行没做好 试着把弧度做的小一点
  01:59:353 这里没音 节奏莫名其妙 这里是很正常的二分拍节奏啊 就是一般的红白线 01:59:080 (1,2,3) - 这些用蓝线的都是击穿节奏。。。很违和
  02:02:353 (1,2,3,4) - 这里前面三个可以这么用 因为听音乐可以感觉他们是一组 但是第四个感觉就是为了这个梗硬凑的 建议改掉
  02:11:444 (5,6) - 你要是想做的是app的话 唯一难度这里建议跟鼓点 做成四个一组的连打 3组再加02:12:080这里的一个 一共13连打 四个四个错开位置的那种 因为app图一般都跟鼓点 没有鼓点才会跟vocal 而且你之前基本也都是跟的鼓点 这里这么明显的连打节奏你突然放弃了跟vocal 不合适
  02:13:898 (4) - 这里也没音 不过这里可以自己加节奏 感觉还不错~
  02:14:716 (2,3,4,1) - 这四个也不对 第一个和后面三个明显不一样 你想做四个一组节奏 应该是从02:15:080 这里到 02:16:171这里 四个滑条才对 仔细听音乐
  02:17:171 (2) - 建议删掉 然后把1和滑条开头重叠 来强调这两个音 并且加上音效（先说节奏 音效后面再仔细说）
  02:18:353 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 像这种 你应该加上绿线给滑条加速 两个两个一组 滑条速度越来越快
  02:41:262 漏音
  02:42:716 (4) - 这个明显和前面的7个不是一组啊
  02:53:989 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这几个超级无聊啊 又没变速 又慢节奏 明明那么丰富的鼓点为啥要这么下节奏 就算这么下节奏也要用高速滑条才行 要不然完全体现不出来歌曲感觉
  03:07:626这里是个三联啊 为啥只下一个蓝线note？ 莫名其妙的感觉
  03:13:535 (1,1,1) - ^ 这里你实在不想用三联 可以再他们三个前面的红线加一个note 变成2连 这样也是很不错的节奏
  然后就是第一部分kiai了 没明白高潮怎么设置的 感觉地方完全不对啊 liai应该从这里开始 03:07:444
  然后一个很大的问题就是感觉你的高潮部分完全和之前没差别 甚至节奏还不如前面的多 kiai部分各种鼓点全部被无视了 单纯的追的vocal。。。完全不是app应该有的做法 我发现你增加了滑条速度和note间距 但是节奏太稀疏了实在是硬伤

kamisamaaa wrote:

我的mod~
[节奏部分]

• 
  01:38:807 这里没有鼓点 可是你用的滑条 而且滑条结尾声音还很大 节奏不对 感觉不如换成和前面一样的一个单点加上三联 或者别的类似节奏 keep
  01:43:079 (1,2,3,4,5) - 你仔细听 这五个音明显不一样 你这么五连的节奏听着很奇怪 可以变成一个滑条加三个单点 然后滑条尾部音量调小比较符合这个节奏之後再考慮一下如何改
  01:50:262 (5,6,7,8,9) - keep你这里节奏也下的不对 01:50:262 (5) - 这里没音對 這裡是沒音 放的是虛拍子 01:50:444 还有01:50:626 这里也没音這裡是歌手si音的完結位 而红线有音你漏了 然后01:50:716这里开始是三联 你这个节奏是哪里来的 01:51:080 这里也明显漏音這個要考慮一下
  01:53:807 (6) - 感觉平行没做好 试着把弧度做的小一点fixed
  01:59:353 这里没音 节奏莫名其妙 这里是很正常的二分拍节奏啊 就是一般的红白线 01:59:080 (1,2,3) - 这些用蓝线的都是击穿节奏。。。很违和將會改 但要考慮
  02:02:353 (1,2,3,4) - 这里前面三个可以这么用 因为听音乐可以感觉他们是一组 但是第四个感觉就是为了这个梗硬凑的 建议改掉 keep
  02:11:444 (5,6) - 你要是想做的是app的话 唯一难度这里建议跟鼓点 做成四个一组的连打 3组再加02:12:080这里的一个 一共13连打 四个四个错开位置的那种 因为app图一般都跟鼓点 没有鼓点才会跟vocal 而且你之前基本也都是跟的鼓点 这里这么明显的连打节奏你突然放弃了跟vocal 不合适 keep 這裡是遞高音度 才設計成這樣
  02:13:898 (4) - 这里也没音 不过这里可以自己加节奏 感觉还不错~
  02:14:716 (2,3,4,1) - 这四个也不对 第一个和后面三个明显不一样 你想做四个一组节奏 应该是从02:15:080 这里到 02:16:171这里 四个滑条才对 仔细听音乐再考慮
  02:17:171 (2) - 建议删掉 然后把1和滑条开头重叠 来强调这两个音 并且加上音效（先说节奏 音效后面再仔细说）keep
  02:18:353 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 像这种 你应该加上绿线给滑条加速 两个两个一组 滑条速度越来越快 再研究
  02:41:262 漏音keep 這不是漏音 前面是重音
  02:42:716 (4) - 这个明显和前面的7个不是一组啊 再考慮
  02:53:989 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - 这几个超级无聊啊 又没变速 又慢节奏 明明那么丰富的鼓点为啥要这么下节奏 就算这么下节奏也要用高速滑条才行 要不然完全体现不出来歌曲感觉再考慮
  03:07:626这里是个三联啊 为啥只下一个蓝线note？ 莫名其妙的感觉keep
  03:13:535 (1,1,1) - ^ 这里你实在不想用三联 可以再他们三个前面的红线加一个note 变成2连 这样也是很不错的节奏
  然后就是第一部分kiai了 没明白高潮怎么设置的 感觉地方完全不对啊 liai应该从这里开始 03:07:444 kiai是一首歌的高潮點 個人認為是合理
  然后一个很大的问题就是感觉你的高潮部分完全和之前没差别 甚至节奏还不如前面的多 kiai部分各种鼓点全部被无视了 单纯的追的vocal。。。完全不是app应该有的做法 我发现你增加了滑条速度和note间距 但是节奏太稀疏了实在是硬伤
  (app不代表只是難 代表只是長及能夠用點有特色的梗 及製時需要注意到其耐玩性,節奏感)

[音效]
01:48:898 (1,2) - 这两个开头可以加上finish 类似的地方都是
02:32:535 (1,1) - ^
[摆放]
02:33:262 (2,3) - 建议ctrl+g 用反向梗 因为音乐这两个比较重 反向梗能启动到强调作用 同样地方很多 不一一举例
02:33:989 (5,1,2) - 你这里节奏突然变了 建议摆放三角或者别的比较特殊的位置 比较让人明白这里变节奏了 并且从02:33:989 (5) - 这里开始NC
02:32:535 (1,1) - 这里的NC啥情况？fixed
02:43:807 (1,2) - 建议吧方向换一下 因为第二个往返的箭头遮挡3的开头 不好把握开始时间


我看到第一个kiai结束 感觉先说这么多问题就足够了 如果你采纳应该会有很大的修改 之后等你改完可以帮你继续mod
先不说音效和摆放 我先看的节奏 发现下节奏问题很严重额 app只有唯一难度 所以难度不能简单 节奏上漏音错音应该是不允许的 除非有意识的空拍 并且空拍用的很好才行。 还有就是跟鼓点而不是跟歌声！！你大量的跟了歌声放弃了鼓点 节奏肯定会出很多问题。
其次就是音乐表现力不行 感觉你很多地方光考虑使用这个梗 而没有考虑和音乐是不是合适 是不是配合的 我感觉你需要更加仔细听歌曲 然后根据特点来下节奏
音效基本为0 之后再说 节奏下对才能好下音效
还有就是整体问题 你在做timing的时候就应该考虑 哪里要用快节奏 哪里用慢节奏 具体SV啊 DS啊大概是什么 这样设计好了 作图才能够段落分明 不会说是kiai和别的地方感觉都是一个样子
先说这么多 有设么问题PM找我或者游戏里面抓我都可以~
加油吧~

Meramipop wrote:

跳的太远手冷打不动..

前面那一段有些连打间距比较小的建议改大一点 比如02:08:898 (1,2,3,4) - 02:11:080 (1,2,3,4) - 原來調錯速.. 其實5連打是想0.5x 3連打是0.8x 效果遲點再試~
感觉再加些连打比较好啊
04:25:375 - 这一段20%的音量太低了啊, 听不出有音效了keep
05:24:741 - 5%太低了這段太大聲不好.. 這好改做10%吧..
好鬼畜啊..
07:42:353 (1,4) - 没放到正中间。。我不是想放在中間喔>_<
08:11:080 (1,4) - ^我不是想放在中間喔>_<

嘛.. 鬼畜的可以 美观上还需要加强些..

打不动啊;w;

1. please add tag 'Izuki Yui'. Izuki Yui is 伊月ゆい. i suggest roma tag.
2. remove tag 'Gothic' please. already title name. so, not need this.
3. if, you not use SB, remove timinng>Design>Widescreen supprot check.
4. if, you not use SB, remove osb. file.

1. I don't know your Combo pettern. please unity. so, very not beautiful.
2. please add more hitsounds. example, 01:25:989 (3), 01:26:716 (5) - add clap, so, you can pettern hit sound. also, you can find custom hitsound, about this song fit.
3. 01:37:262 (1) - add soft or normal finish. you choose like.
4. 01:54:171 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - please all note move (4) x:256. so, (4) middle is beautiful seems.
5. 01:59:807 (4) - slider is weird sound. circle only better. and please add finish Soft or Normal.
6. 02:17:989 (5) - add finish soft or normal.
7. 02:20:898 (10) - ^
8. 02:38:171 (2) - slider end.
9. 02:43:444 (3) - ^
10. 02:45:626 (7) - 1/2 slider fit sound.
11. 02:49:989 (1) - add finish slider head soft or normal.
12. 02:55:807 (6) - ^
13. 03:07:444 (4) - add NC. 03:07:716 (1) - remove NC.
14. 03:08:171 (3) - why this only whistle? not unity now. more add whistle or remove this better.
15. 03:13:262 - why start kiai time this? very not fit. i think 03:07:444.
16. 03:19:080 (3) - add finish soft or normal.
17. 03:42:353 (1) - circle better... very not fit sound.
19. 03:42:716 (1) - start spinner 03:42:444 is better. also, end time is same.
20. 03:53:989 (1) - add finish slider head. soft or normal.
21. 04:05:626 (1) - ^
22. 04:11:444 (3) - ^
23. 04:28:535 (3) - ^
24. 04:34:716 (1) - ^
25. 04:40:535 (1) - ^
26. 04:45:626 (4) - ^ slider end. also, this slider idk rankable now.
27. 04:49:262 (6) - add finish soft or normal.
28. 05:13:989 (1) ~ 05:45:807 (4) - you can add some whsitle. so, piano sound fit. desolate now.
29. 06:00:535 (1) - add normal finish fit.
30. 06:17:989 (1) - add finish slider head. soft or normal.
31. 06:47:080 (4) - ^
32. 06:52:898 - kiai time again... you should 06:47:080 better.
33. 06:58:716 (3) - add finish slider head
34. 07:10:353 (1) - ^ slider head
35. 07:16:171 (1) - ^
36. 07:21:989 (1) - circle better sound.
37. 07:22:080 - why not add start spinner? not unity.
38. 07:39:444 (1) - add finish slider head.
39. 07:44:535 (5) - ^ slider head.
40. 07:45:262 (7) - ^
41. 07:51:080 (1) - ^ slider head.
42. 08:02:716 (2) - ^
43. 08:07:080 (1,1,1,1,3) - ^
44. 08:14:353 (6) - ^ slider head.
45. 08:20:171 (1) - circle better.
46. 08:20:262 - spinner start better.

P o M u T a wrote:

hey M4M
[General]

1. please add tag 'Izuki Yui'. Izuki Yui is 伊月ゆい. i suggest roma tag.
2. remove tag 'Gothic' please. already title name. so, not need this.
3. if, you not use SB, remove timinng>Design>Widescreen supprot check.
4. if, you not use SB, remove osb. file.

[Queen]

1. I don't know your Combo pettern. please unity. so, very not beautiful.
2. please add more hitsounds. example, 01:25:989 (3), 01:26:716 (5) - add clap, so, you can pettern hit sound. also, you can find custom hitsound, about this song fit.
3. 01:37:262 (1) - add soft or normal finish. you choose like.fixed
4. 01:54:171 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - please all note move (4) x:256. so, (4) middle is beautiful seems.fixed
5. 01:59:807 (4) - slider is weird sound. circle only better. and please add finish Soft or Normal.fixed
6. 02:17:989 (5) - add finish soft or normal.fixed
7. 02:20:898 (10) - ^fixed
8. 02:38:171 (2) - slider end.Keep
9. 02:43:444 (3) - ^Keep
10. 02:45:626 (7) - 1/2 slider fit sound.agree. I will l consider it
11. 02:49:989 (1) - add finish slider head soft or normal.fixed
12. 02:55:807 (6) - ^fixed
13. 03:07:444 (4) - add NC. 03:07:716 (1) - remove NC.fixed
14. 03:08:171 (3) - why this only whistle? not unity now. more add whistle or remove this better.fixed
15. 03:13:262 - why start kiai time this? very not fit. i think 03:07:444. I will l consider it
16. 03:19:080 (3) - add finish soft or normal.This is normal yet.
17. 03:42:353 (1) - circle better... very not fit sound.
18. You are well ,but I want to keep it sorry...
19. 03:42:716 (1) - start spinner 03:42:444 is better. also, end time is same.some change~
20. 03:53:989 (1) - add finish slider head. soft or normal.fixed
21. 04:05:626 (1) - ^Keep
22. 04:11:444 (3) - ^Keep
23. 04:28:535 (3) - ^fixed
24. 04:34:716 (1) - ^Keep
25. 04:40:535 (1) - ^fixed
26. 04:45:626 (4) - ^ slider end. also, this slider idk rankable now.I will check it~
27. 04:49:262 (6) - add finish soft or normal.fixed
28. 05:13:989 (1) ~ 05:45:807 (4) - you can add some whsitle. so, piano sound fit. desolate now.fixed
29. 06:00:535 (1) - add normal finish fit.fixed
30. 06:17:989 (1) - add finish slider head. soft or normal.fixed
31. 06:47:080 (4) - ^fixed
32. 06:52:898 - kiai time again... you should 06:47:080 better. I will l consider it
33. 06:58:716 (3) - add finish slider headfixed
34. 07:10:353 (1) - ^ slider headfixed
35. 07:16:171 (1) - ^some change~
36. 07:21:989 (1) - circle better sound.You are well ,but I want to keep it sorry...
37. 07:22:080 - why not add start spinner? not unity. I will l consider it
38. 07:39:444 (1) - add finish slider head.fixed
39. 07:44:535 (5) - ^ slider head.fixed
40. 07:45:262 (7) - ^fixed
41. 07:51:080 (1) - ^ slider head.fixed
42. 08:02:716 (2) - ^ slider head.fixed
43. 08:07:080 (1,1,1,1,3) - ^slider head.fixed
44. 08:14:353 (6) - ^ slider head.fixed
45. 08:20:171 (1) - circle better.You are well ,but I want to keep it sorry...
46. 08:20:262 - spinner start better.some change~

good luck!

Meramipop wrote:

对了, 把 Das Feenreich 加进tags里, 这个是妖精帝国的英文名

这贴no kd

wcx19911123 wrote:

我觉得那个slider还是不太合适
hold slider给这首歌用虽然可以，但是整个diff只有那一个地方用了，显得很突兀，与其他part不太合
我建议要用的话就多用点那种slider，或者完全不用。整张图就一个地方用还是不太好

Melt wrote:

其实要细说的话除了某些小问题以外问题都不大，但是我感觉就前面你re的这一段来说的话，基本上图的整体走向都是围绕中心点在做，基本没有“我做一堆小跳在左上角”、“这一个梗可以摆在靠右一点”这种想法，当然这可能和图的难度有关系，但是就我个人而言的话还是感觉不太好，再加上你re的那段的节奏基本都摆在红白线上，而且没有足够的梗来支持，就导致整体有点单调。可能player打完你一张图了，回头来想却不记得你这图有什么内容，打个比方，比较热的app图，像之前RLC的大蘑菇和星爷的黑天使，几pc下来总会给你留下几个印象深刻的地方，我觉得你的图现在你还差点这种东西。
大概就这样o.o，加油~

• 
  Placement

1. 01:51:807 (4) - NC
2. 02:00:535 (1) - how about sticking to 01:59:807 (3) -
3. 02:09:262 (2) - Why did you use speed up here? I think speed up is inappropriate here
4. 02:12:171 (7) - NC
5. 02:17:989 (6) - NC
6. 02:38:353 (11) - NC here 02:38:535 (1) - delete NC here
7. 02:43:807 (1) - Ctrl+G? this is 1/6 slider, so you should put face to face
8. 02:44:171 (3) - If you accepted the former one, you should change it
   
   SPOILER

   
   Rhythm
9. 01:26:626 - How about adding note here? BGM has drumbeat. For myself, adding note here is appropriate.
10. 01:27:535 - ^
11. 01:28:444 - ^
12. 01:29:171 - ^
13. 01:30:080 - Just suggestion. Add note here or 01:29:989 (4) - Change here to slope slider
14. 01:25:626 - to 01:35:716 - You might change the stream here. The reason why BGM has 16 beats kick Drum. So you can change all to stream.
15. 01:35:807 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Sorry... It maybe overmap issue... I couldn't hear any sound... Slope slider is inappropriate
16. 01:54:716 (6,7,1) - Overmapped here. 01:54:716 (6) - just change to slider here
17. 02:03:807 (1,2,3) - Overmapped. You should delete02:03:898 (2) -
18. 02:09:626 (3) - Overmapped... You should change here to singletap
19. 02:17:626 - add note here. I heard kick drum sound here.
20. 02:33:989 (5,1,2) - try like under pic
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 02:36:171 - add note
22. 02:41:262 - add note
23. 02:54:353 (3,4,5,6,7) - same as02:33:989 (5,1,2)
24. 03:06:898 (1,2,3) - overmapped issue. You should change singletap
25. 03:09:625 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - overmapped issue. you should delete note 03:09:716 (2,5) -
26. 03:12:716 - add note
    Hitsound
27. 01:35:807 - to01:48:807 - IMO, you should use normal-hitnormal on downbeat. This makes me uneasy due to inappropriate using.
    

SPOILER

Alternative wrote:

Hi. your in-game request
Sorry for late.

open

Let's start!
to 03:17:807 -

[Queen]

• 
  Placement

1. 01:51:807 (4) - NC
2. 02:00:535 (1) - how about sticking to 01:59:807 (3) -
3. 02:09:262 (2) - Why did you use speed up here? I think speed up is inappropriate here
4. 02:12:171 (7) - NC
5. 02:17:989 (6) - NC
6. 02:38:353 (11) - NC here 02:38:535 (1) - delete NC here
7. 02:43:807 (1) - Ctrl+G? this is 1/6 slider, so you should put face to face
8. 02:44:171 (3) - If you accepted the former one, you should change it
   
   SPOILER

   
   Rhythm
9. 01:26:626 - How about adding note here? BGM has drumbeat. For myself, adding note here is appropriate.
10. 01:27:535 - ^
11. 01:28:444 - ^
12. 01:29:171 - ^
13. 01:30:080 - Just suggestion. Add note here or 01:29:989 (4) - Change here to slope slider
14. 01:25:626 - to 01:35:716 - You might change the stream here. The reason why BGM has 16 beats kick Drum. So you can change all to stream.
15. 01:35:807 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Sorry... It maybe overmap issue... I couldn't hear any sound... Slope slider is inappropriate
16. 01:54:716 (6,7,1) - Overmapped here. 01:54:716 (6) - just change to slider here
17. 02:03:807 (1,2,3) - Overmapped. You should delete02:03:898 (2) -
18. 02:09:626 (3) - Overmapped... You should change here to singletap
19. 02:17:626 - add note here. I heard kick drum sound here.
20. 02:33:989 (5,1,2) - try like under pic
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 02:36:171 - add note
22. 02:41:262 - add note
23. 02:54:353 (3,4,5,6,7) - same as02:33:989 (5,1,2)
24. 03:06:898 (1,2,3) - overmapped issue. You should change singletap
25. 03:09:625 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - overmapped issue. you should delete note 03:09:716 (2,5) -
26. 03:12:716 - add note
    Hitsound
27. 01:35:807 - to01:48:807 - IMO, you should use normal-hitnormal on downbeat. This makes me uneasy due to inappropriate using.

OK done.
About mapping.
IMO, 02:03:807 (1,2,3) - this form is always become overmap issue.
If BGM had no especially sound, stream which starts on white line must not use stream.

And, about NC
You might use NC on a bar like under pic

SPOILER

Just like this.
Sorry for my lazy mod

Alternative wrote:

Hi. your in-game request
Sorry for late.

Let's start!
to 03:17:807 -

[Queen]

• 
  Placement

1. 01:51:807 (4) - NC
2. 02:00:535 (1) - how about sticking to 01:59:807 (3) -
3. 02:09:262 (2) - Why did you use speed up here? I think speed up is inappropriate here
4. 02:12:171 (7) - NC
5. 02:17:989 (6) - NC
6. 02:38:353 (11) - NC here 02:38:535 (1) - delete NC here
7. 02:43:807 (1) - Ctrl+G? this is 1/6 slider, so you should put face to face keep
8. 02:44:171 (3) - If you accepted the former one, you should change it keep
   
   SPOILER

   
   Rhythm
9. 01:26:626 - How about adding note here? BGM has drumbeat. For myself, adding note here is appropriate.some change~
10. 01:27:535 - ^ keep
11. 01:28:444 - ^ keep
12. 01:29:171 - ^ keep
13. 01:30:080 - Just suggestion. Add note here or 01:29:989 (4) - Change here to slope slider
14. 01:25:626 - to 01:35:716 - You might change the stream here. The reason why BGM has 16 beats kick Drum. So you can change all to stream. sorry not understand
15. 01:35:807 (1,2,3,4,1,2) - Sorry... It maybe overmap issue... I couldn't hear any sound... Slope slider is inappropriate keep
16. 01:54:716 (6,7,1) - Overmapped here. 01:54:716 (6) - just change to slider here some change~
17. 02:03:807 (1,2,3) - Overmapped. You should delete02:03:898 (2) - keep
18. 02:09:626 (3) - Overmapped... You should change here to singletap
19. 02:17:626 - add note here. I heard kick drum sound here.
20. 02:33:989 (5,1,2) - try like under picthat so good, but I would to keep it
    
    SPOILER

    
21. 02:36:171 - add note keep
22. 02:41:262 - add note keep
23. 02:54:353 (3,4,5,6,7) - same as02:33:989 (5,1,2) this is not same as rhythm. keep
24. 03:06:898 (1,2,3) - overmapped issue. You should change singletap I will consider for it
25. 03:09:625 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - overmapped issue. you should delete note 03:09:716 (2,5) - I will consider for it
26. 03:12:716 - add note
    Hitsound
27. 01:35:807 - to01:48:807 - IMO, you should use normal-hitnormal on downbeat. This makes me uneasy due to inappropriate using.

OK done.
About mapping.
IMO, 02:03:807 (1,2,3) - this form is always become overmap issue.
If BGM had no especially sound, stream which starts on white line must not use stream.

And, about NC
You might use NC on a bar like under pic

SPOILER

Just like this.
Sorry for my lazy mod