KayeSara wrote:

谢谢ying和rrr的mod！
fix！

Leorda wrote:

Hi there

[Storyboard]
SB\White.jpg - White BG should end at 04:19:385 for preventing of long wait SB
SB\lyric-e1.png - Why there lots of hiragana in this lyric SB? Try to split up according to vocal. Like 03:16:185 should be "Arinomamade" only, 03:22:585 should be "irarerunara" only, etc.
SB\lyric-e3.png - ^
//I will fix the white BG after SB all finished~ About the lyrics...Feel a bit lazy to fix them =。=|||

[One Sheep]
01:41:785 (2) - Add whistle at tail slider? //Fixed~
03:51:385 (4) - The tail slider is touch the HP Bar//Fixed~


That's all I got, sorry// ioi Why sorry...

Banana wrote:

哦哦 歌に形はないけれど的击打判定用到现在可以换了 XD //是小手心里的啦XD

general

无

羊*3

(1pc ss还以为咱变厉害了，居然是od4- -) //哭了居然能随手SS..T T

00:42:585 (5) - 这个跳落在一个原来没有音的地方 有点奇怪//嘛,试了下如果删掉的话中间就空了3个1/2,听着好奇怪啊/.\
01:25:785 (3) - 这个前面的跳感觉有点大 因为音调稍微有一点变化这样？//这里真不想改,但是我减小了间距o o
01:33:585 (5,6,7) - 排列上的建议//OK~~
02:33:585 (5) - 嘛 这个间距有点.. 总之就是我同学test时候看成前面一个白线的note了，放到x:64 y:16那边？//......看了半天没看懂ioi
02:45:785 (2,3,4) - 这种时间不同的stack也是有点坑.建议单独把(4)拿出来//嘛 我觉得还好吧? 再有人提的话我就改
03:27:785 (3) - 尾巴whistle？//No~

羊

嘛 没找出什么东西

1. AR-1?
2. 00:01:785 (1) - 感覺彎有點多..要不要彎少一點...撲...這真的是小nazi呢=3=
3. 00:43:385 (5) - 排這樣吧~ http://osu.ppy.sh/ss/321434
4. 03:21:785 (5) - 我覺得這slider有些醜~ 換個形狀吧~~
5. 03:36:185 (1) - ^
6. 03:56:985 (2,3) - 不太喜歡這樣排呢@w@ 在(2)加個折返
7. 04:00:185 (6,7) - ^

1. AR-1?
2. 00:46:585 (5) - 別排直線嘛:3 試試微彎?? +w+
3. 01:19:385 (1) - 音量漸增~~ <一隻綿羊>有用這當然要不要也用@@"~~
4. 01:45:785 (5) - finish吧
5. 01:47:385 - ^
6. 02:20:985 (3) - 這個slider的形狀用成跟02:24:185 (3)一樣吧~~
7. 03:13:785 (1) - ~ 03:16:985 (1) - 音量漸增唄:3

1. AR-1? (哈哈我覺得這首用6就足夠了呢~)
2. 00:35:785 (3) - 改成疊在尾巴??
3. 01:45:785 (4) - finish
4. 03:13:785 (1) - 音量漸增吧~ 很不錯的!
5. 03:23:385 (1,2) - 往左移一格?? 這樣03:23:185 (8) - 好像就有在中間了~~?? 小nazi阿我真是Orz..

1. The third offset feels a bit iffy, I think the third offset should be on 81775. If you still not sure try asking other MAT/BAT for more confirmation

2. those wrote:

   I have this song romanized as "Yoru ga Akeru yo", with a space between "ru" and "yo". Do some research, see which one fits best.

   those bring up a good point here, I look through wikipedia, google, and youtube, every romanized version of the title is just like those said above. I'm not an expert on Japanese so you may want to directly confirm it with Japanese people
3. There are some unused images on the SB but because this is still WIP I suspect you're going to use it later. I'll just saying so you won't forget about them
4. "ryo" as source? I've never heard any anime or show with that as the title. It's the name of the composer so please put it on the tags not on the source
5. There are still some parts of the SB that the SB load goes above 5, here are some of them
   03:39:885 ~ 03:40:885 -
   03:42:685 ~ 03:43:685 -
   04:07:885 ~ 04:08:085 - This on is in the end so it's ok to ignore it
   Make sure to fix it before you submit this map to pending

1. I will think of One Sheep as Normal diff, because the rhythm on the intro is very complicated for an easy diff
2. 00:04:385 (2,3) - The spacing make these 2 notes to be too close. I suggest to use more simpler rhythm like this
   
3. 00:11:785 (3) - This should be remove as there's nothing in the song that can correspondent to the object (only 00:10:785 (2) is enough to cover the guitar)
4. 01:21:385 - Remove this timing section. The 60% volume make the spinner sound to be too loud, 50% is enough as the peak volume for the spinner
5. 01:14:185 (2) - I suggest to use 3/2 slider here to follow the guitar some thing like this
   
6. 02:57:885 (1) - This spinner will give better effect if you start it on 02:57:485 along with the singer voice (you have to remove 1 repeat from 02:56:985 (5) if you do this)
7. 03:01:185 - I think you should remove this break and also the one on 03:10:785 because it's too short, and the letter box doesn't appear very good especially in 03:10:785 (well I personally don't like short break so you can ignore me if you like them)

1. I have to say that the 2/1 whistle pattern on 00:01:785 (1) ~ 00:40:585 (5) doesn't sound very good. I won't blame you because the intro doesn't have any fixed beat to follow. But try to reduce some of the whistle and try to put whistle following the guitar instead. For example on 00:04:585 (5) remove the whistle on the beginning then put one on the repeat, this will at least make the object follow the hitsound
2. 01:19:385 (1) - I suggest to use the timing section with gradually increase volume as the other 2 diff
3. 01:46:585 (1) - Finish at the end?
4. This is a nice diff but if I have to complain it seems that after the first kiai the rhythm become a simple 1/1 beat with the occasionally 1/2 beat. There's nothing wrong with it it just feels weird for me and again, I can blame you because the song it self is quite simple except for the intro, but I still suggest you to at least add some more notes on the second kiai if you can, don't force yourself if you can't think of a good place to add more notes

1. 01:21:385 - Remove this timing section. The 60% volume make the spinner sound to be too loud, 50% is enough as the peak volume for the spinner
2. 02:57:885 (1) - This spinner will give better effect if you start it on 02:57:485 along with the singer voice (you have to remove 02:57:785 (1) if you do this)
3. 03:01:185 - I think you should remove this break and also the one on 03:10:785 because it's too short, and the letter box doesn't appear very good especially in 03:10:785 (well I personally don't like short break so you can ignore me if you like them)
4. I personally don't like the jump on the intro because the intro is very soft so it shouldn't use any jump, but please don't be worry because it's only my preference. There's nothing wrong if you want to use jump :3

Sallad4ever wrote:

[Two Sheep]

1. I have to say that the 2/1 whistle pattern on 00:01:785 (1) ~ 00:40:585 (5) doesn't sound very good. I won't blame you because the intro doesn't have any fixed beat to follow. But try to reduce some of the whistle and try to put whistle following the guitar instead. For example on 00:04:585 (5) remove the whistle on the beginning then put one on the repeat, this will at least make the object follow the hitsound
   keep here, feel it's fine.
2. 01:19:385 (1) - I suggest to use the timing section with gradually increase volume as the other 2 diff Sure
3. 01:46:585 (1) - Finish at the end?Sure
4. This is a nice diff but if I have to complain it seems that after the first kiai the rhythm become a simple 1/1 beat with the occasionally 1/2 beat. There's nothing wrong with it it just feels weird for me and again, I can blame you because the song it self is quite simple except for the intro, but I still suggest you to at least add some more notes on the second kiai if you can, don't force yourself if you can't think of a good place to add more notes
   I have try, but a little weird if I have add somewhere. Just like feel a little fast.

wcx19911123 wrote:

[Two Sheep]
00:42:985 (4,5,6) - 可以往右下挪点，不然playing的时候碰到了 Change a way
01:46:585 (1) - 建议用0.75x速，0.5x有点太突然了 ok

JoJo wrote:

>coming bat
Move this to graveyard, thanks

1. As I told you before. I would -5 on second offset. It sounds much better to me. Don't forget to adjust the storyboard and green lines after change.
2. Probably add a silent spinner spin?

1. Difficulty setting
   (I suggest the difficulty setting for better gameplay.)
   
   1. How about HP and OD+1 to fit the AR and the whole difficulty setting?
2. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:57:585 (4,5) - I felt awkward when I was playing this. Actually, there is no any music to support it. I would remove the slider and then add a note at 00:58:185 - . It will look and play better after adding it.
   2. 03:26:585 (5) - I would add a new combo here because this chain of combo is longer than others, so a new combo here for consistency.
3. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 01:33:085 (1) - I think a whistle here is much better then a finish. A whistle fits the music very much.
   2. 02:24:185 (1) - ^Same

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:02:985 (2,3) - I am wondering these notes are supported by what? I can't listen anything (drum sounds/vocal/instrument) to support it. I would remove these notes and rearrange the spacing if I were you.
   2. 00:09:385 (2,3) - ^and 複製黏貼不自重...
   3. 00:15:785 (2,3) - ^
   4. 00:23:385 (1) - I would add a new combo here because of the length of combo and seems a new stanza of music is started.
   5. 01:46:585 (1) - (Design) I would change a slider shape if I were you. I had seen that you just curved the slider in most of the places. I think change this slider shape would be much better. How about like this:
      
      Recommendation

      

      104,196,106585,6,0,B|142:144|116:64|116:64|156:96|192:71,1,209.999993741512,8|2

   6. 02:25:785 (6) - Add a new combo here to fit with music?
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:49:785 (4) - How about removing the whistle at the end of the slider and then add a whistle on the beginning of (5)- ? And remove the whistle at the end of (5)-
   2. 01:19:385 (1) - I would change to 5% volume at the end of the spinner. It sounds quite noisy for now.
   3. 01:21:785 ~ 01:47:385 - Seems that you are missing some clap sounds. Please add it back if possible.It can make this difficulty more diversified.
   4. 02:22:585 (1) - Remove the clap at the end of the slider and then add a finish on it? A finish sounds much better here.
   5. 02:24:985 (4) - Remove clap here? It doesn't fit the music.
   6. 02:25:785 (x) - I would say back to S1 here. S1 clap fits the music much better imo.
   7. 02:51:385 (x) - And then change to S2 here? S1 whistle sounds weird here. I would say S2 is the best choice and you should lower the volume for this calm part.
   8. 03:16:985 - 04:07:785 - Same as 01:21:785 ~ 01:47:385 -
   9. 03:39:385 (1) - How about adding a finish at the end of the slider?

1. Beatmap design/suggestion
   (These are totally suggestion only,you can ignore them if you disagree.)
   
   1. 00:08:585 (5) - How about changing the slider shape to this? It looks much better to me and more smooth.
      
      
   2. 00:17:185 (1,2,3,4) - Ahh...This inconsistent spacing makes me cry...I would use distance snap to snap it again if I were you.
   3. 00:35:185 (2,3) - In aesthetics, this is not a good arrangemnt but well, you decide to change it or not.
   4. 00:36:185 (4,5,6,7,1) - Awkward jump and can't see a reason that it is needed, so probably remove it or shorten the distance?
   5. 00:58:585 (1,2,3,4,1) - Unperfected pentagon. There is a "Create Polygon Circles" function. You can make good use of this and then use "scale" function to increase the spacing.
   6. 01:00:785 (2) - Please stack the end of the slider to the beginning of (1)- properly?
   7. 01:08:185 (1,2,3,4,1) - Same as 00:58:585-
   8. 02:28:985 (1) - It would be nice if you could make the spacing consistent with 02:28:385 (7,8,9) -
   9. 03:07:385 - 6~~shits (lol
   10. 03:25:785 (8,9,1) - I would say this pattern doesn't fit the music here. I would recommend changing to another patterns.
   11. 03:45:785 (1,2,3) - ^Same.
2. Hitsound
   (These are totally my thought only,it base on my taste,feel free to ignore them)
   
   1. 00:47:385 (1) - Add a whistle at the beginning of the slider and remove the whistle at the end of the slider?
   2. 01:15:388 (1) - lol why increase the volume here?
   3. 02:23:985 (4) - I would like to remove the clap and then use a whistle instead of it if I were you.
   4. 02:51:385 - Hum..40% volume here?