Lilac wrote:

Zekira~ Awesome fan-fic writing. Keep up the good work...

...Must resist urge to find...spelling errors...

find...spelling errors...

Zekira wrote:

find...spelling errors...

Please do, lol.

Zekira wrote:

Right now, all of the Niisens except Joubutsu aren't like themselves in the current timeline. How this happened is pre-story, which will be told by Joubutsu herself near the end.

Remember how I said that there will be some mystery letters that will also be discovered alongside the compass? It gives traces of the whole plot, but Ryougen will be utterly confused about them... until one of the Niisens was able to free himself and protect Ryougen. Judging from the fact that I already told you that Ryougen's companions will be those from Wii2, I think you already know who it is... though that probably means I'll have to introduce the Ura chapter before they start battling KiSai...

KiSai as a drunken master, huh...

EDIT: Wait a minute... Joubutsu's one eye is bandaged, and she's wearing a whole body robe... holy shit, what I'm thinking for the downfall plot might actually work...

crystalsuicune wrote:

Saitama?(Since she's also Hayasaitama…)
That's the only 2000 to appear in Wii2,right?Or is my memory messing
with me?
Oh wait,Saitama's kind-of a morality pet of KiSai,
and she's the only one who can make her brother snap out
of it…hmm,maybe it works.

crystalsuicune wrote:

Let's see if this design works.She has blue eyes cuz she's y'know..French.
IDK why I made her cover one of her eyes with bandages,maybe it's just for Rule of Cool..
unless you can turn it into something plot-related.

And now I need to draw a proper pic of Senpuu..

aquabluu wrote:

You know I kinda imagined Joubutsu holding a flute. You know.

Zekira wrote:

Prologue

Sitting in the backstage calmly waiting for (Not sure about this one) my turn, I stood up and went near the torches that were lit just to the side to warm myself up. Even though('for' might be better) a performer that has been performing for so long, stage fright is something that cannot be avoided. Even the most experienced (You made add 'of' but that's optional) performers face the problem of seeing a lot of people, most of them they don't actually know, afraid that they may screw up their performance and embarass themselves and everyone related to them. (I actually don't understand this, are you trying to say that "Performers face the problem of seeing a lot of people, however most of them don't actually know it?" Kinda confused, sorry. D:) Being a dancer is just one of those more difficult presentations to make (Make isn't really the right verb here... You could try "to perform" or just completely remove it.), and the fact that I'm a guy doesn't even help (I was thinking of "and the fact that I'm a guy makes it even more nerve-racking" Though, I could be wrong on that.. Gender stereotyping, guh.

But in truth, I've been wondering if this is really what I'm meant to be. I perform dances of fiery strength, giving the people morale and courage as different situations happen in their lives (Not that I have a problem with it...I just think if you give people morale and courage. It should be for situations which...require courage... Not just 'different situations'. But, I think I'm getting too nazi so.). With these dances however, I felt that I came to understand... or rather, misunderstand what strength really means. The village head Fuun once told us that your strength can be found once you are on destiny's path, that is, you are doing what you have truly been born for. I've seen this more clearly as time passed, with me repeatedly and repeatedly performing dances of fire to bring the light of the village, both literally and figuratively. Yet however, I began to think that this isn't what I am actually fated to do. Wonderful backstory.

Still standing near the lit torch, I noticed the curtain behind me unruffle (Firefox is saying that 'unruffle' is a grammatical error...I think it might be but I think it might not be as well.), hearing some of the crowd cheering as the curtain closed again. From the stage came another entity walking towards me. She was a bit taller than me, had light-brown eyes, and her ears are somehow cat-like, with some fluff just below them. She was wearing some sort of green robe with a yellow neckline and some sort of thick orange swimsuit, wearing nothing that covers her legs. This was her favorite outfit, and it fits very nicely with her dances too. Representing the dance of mystics, her dances usually tell a story with a premise of "what would heaven be like if it existed on this land." Her dance gives the people the power of optimism, temperance, and fortitude. This dancer is actually my younger sister, Tenyou, who performs the mystic dance of heaven.

"It was a big success, brother! I was able to pull it off!" she exclaimed to me while running towards me. She almost pushed me towards the torch though.

"...! Tenyou, stop being clumsy!" I answered in reply.

"Oh, sorry, I didn't know you were so near to the torch. What are you doing near it anyway?"

"...you haven't seen me do this before? I always do this just right before a performance. And I mean always. You just aren't observing well... no, wait, more like you aren't observing anything at all."

"Why, how rude! I'm not that much of a klutz, you know!"

"History says other wise, my dear sister."

"You also have to remember, I'm just growing up! You're much older than me!"

"I don't really care whether you're young or not, I just want to remind you of the consequences that may entail your actions, be they physical or spiritual, or however they may come."

"...I came running to you for a compliment and all I get is a lecture. Typical older sibling, huh."

"It's true that you've performed well today, howev~"

"But you weren't even watching!"

"...

Anyway, I'll see that new routine of yours maybe later, but right now, I have a dance to perform... I don't care if you're better than me. I'll just do this."

I walk towards the curtain, which was the only thing separating the backstage from the actual stage.

"Wait!" Tenyou exclaimed. "...whatever you do, why not try your best? Especially for this dance... it's what you've been made for anyway. And you know that everyone here admires you, most especially me." she continued.

"...what I've been made for...? Oh well. It's just a dance, anyway." I replied, before proceeding out.

"Good luck, Ryougen!" I heard her say this just before the curtains behind me unruffled. Even though admittedly I haven't been really close to her much, she still seems to care for me so much. Guess it really pays off to have a brother or sister (Fixed "siser" to "sister") beside you, huh. Great dialogue.

My name is Ryougen. I am the eldest (of my generation) of the family clan of dancers, the 'Mai' family. My ears resemble that of miniature dragon wings, but the entire inner side is attached to my head, so I cannot use them to fly. I am currently clothed in a fire red vest that has innate shoulder guards, and these shoulder guards serve as good mounting for my red cape, again nothing covering my legs. The bells behind my ears however, are one of my trademark accessories that seemed to have defined my appearance in the village. This is my favorite outfit, especially when performing my dances. Great.

I stand here in front of the stage once again just right after the village head introduced me. Surrounding him with flames for a minor 'magic act', he disappeared from the stage as the fire dispersed. (The two sentences didn't really join. Took me a while to figure out that 'him' was the 'village head'...but I'm usually slow at that so you could ignore me.) Actually, I perform one minor trick as an entrance every time (Fixed 'entrace' to 'entrance'. Also, it's 'every time' and not 'everytime'.), and it usually gets the crowd up on their feet all the time. Then I immediately proceeded with my 'ritual', that is, the dance I was going to perform. The different instruments started to play their slow initial melody, the guitar taking the instrumental's main sound, accompanied by a flute just right over it. I proceeded with my slow oriental dance here, which I myself do not know how to describe.

(author's note: ...because I don't know how to describe dances myself.)
(editor's note: Always try, Zekira. ^_^)

After the slow melody stopped for a while with the flute's fadeout, I paused appropriately. A few seconds after, I signalled (Ah, British spelling...Carry on!) my hand to initiate the fires behind the audience, prompting the stage assistants to turn the fire on. With the sudden start of the fire, all of the instruments did their initial beat, making for the entrance of my actual fiery act. My performances actually involve with me dancing around with the fire, sometimes it being my ally, sometimes it being my foe. I try my best to make my dances different every time, though my instrument choice always remains the same. It's kind of hard to keep up composing different music each time though. However, there is always one move that is common among every dance I have made, and comes just a bit after the start of the actual swift melody. People have called this (Kinda tempted to change it to 'People have coined it'...but I'm trailing off...again...) the Ryougen Beam, which I highly disapprove of the name, but what can I do? It's a favorite technique of mine. With a burst of my own soul energy, I create a spectacular display of red and blue fires crossing at a very rapid pace, creating a very fire-works like display. (You repeated 'create' twice... There's nothing wrong, it just sounds iffy.)This "Ryougen Beam" indicates the start of the actual full energy of the dance, even though the rapid melody has already started before it. The drums usually play rapidly with alternating sounds as this technique of mine begins and ends.

It's kind of difficult for me to see myself, thus it is probably biased when I describe my performance. (What? What is the context for you to be bias?) After my dance, the usual reaction of the crowd's applause (Changed "appluasing' to 'applause') was what I heard. In fact, I've heard this applause so many times, I'm kind of... getting bored by it. I'm not amused by it anymore. I walked to the backstage to find the others already fixing up (I think you mean 'packing up'). My dance has always been the one to go last; they always say that my dance is suited for the grand finalé, which made me wonder if I should take it as a compliment or not; (I changed this part. Tell me if you like it or not.) I just dance for the heck of it, you know.

"So you also tried out something new today, huh? Still, people notice the Ryougen Beam the most." Tenyou said to me.

"Well, I do need variation every time you know. (Variation is the spice of life, as people say...Ah well, carry on.) I'm pretty sure you're facing that problem too." I replied.

We fixed up (packed up?) everything as the audience proceeded to leave. But I must say that the most problematic aspect of cleaning up here are the minor oil spills that are used just for the fire exhibitions in my performances. Since it's my fault, I usually end up washing them. Me, being a fire being (Wow, repeating being twice. XD), I kind of have troubles handling water. I usually ending up overreacting to them whenever I come in contact with it. It's also usually a laugh for Tenyou to see; one of the village's greatest people, doing cleanup duty, down on his knees, scrubbing the floor because he made it wet. Yes I intentionally described it to sound a bit wrong (Uh-oh...Umm...If what I did made it not sound wrong, feel free to change it back.), because that's exactly what I look like here: wrong. I'm not supposed to be doing this kind of thing. I don't like cleaning up, and I don't think I'm supposed to, but they prompt (Prompt? Or forced?) me to do it anyway. The trash can usually just be burnt with the extra oil remaining, so litters isn't really a problem. Finally, after we were done, we closed up the stage as midnight slowly approached. Many woodfires were already unlit (There are better verbs. Try: extinguished or smothered. 'extinguished' is best.), making it a bit dark around the area to see, so I have to use my nevermelting candle (Never melting candle. XD) so that me and Tenyou could find the way back to our house.

You probably would've guessed it by now that this is just an outline of an ordinary day. But when Tenyou said the lines "what you've been made for", my mind suddenly had idea that I should get out of this ordinary day. At the moment, I'm really sleepy however, due to the restraints of living beings getting tired by this time. I end this ordinary day as usual with a slumber in my warm room. ('Ordinary' seems overused... Also, trying altering 'get out of this ordinary day'. I would recommend my favourite phrase of 'rebelling against conformity'...but I don't think it will work with this.

(This list might help you.

However, I think it's about time I change that, come tomorrow.

EDITOR'S LEGEND:

Bold - Addition
Strike - Subtraction
Green - Compliment
() - Editor notes.

Oh Geez. I need a break before I move on to Chapter 1. It felt like ages.

arien666 wrote:

aquabluu wrote:

You know I kinda imagined Joubutsu holding a flute. You know.

If the owner of fairy, It would :3
But whatever, I'm not good at thinking creative ;_;

Koibumi(Koine + Hatsune) needs skirt please ;_;



edit. Right, as I said about this WTF orz thing, I would suggest about you guys' donder fashion and else ;_;

No related with Zekira's plot

Zekira might tame Saitama monster as I know so he might wear some white skirts with seal of Donder

aqua might feel like ocean and sweet so he might wear some blue dress with handing water-colored drum-stick

crystal might be 573 fan also 765 fan so... *explode*

/me runs

This would be on the time after 3 years from your plot is end on.

Zekira wrote:

This would be on the time after 3 years from your plot is end on.

WAIT

My universe exists for longer than that D:

Can you at least do that in another parallel universe instead? Like, not directly connected to mine?

crystalsuicune wrote:

Well...I am kind of a fan of both BEMANI and Taiko...(A crossover between Pop'n and Taiko=Awesome)

@aqua Holding a flute..?Well,I kinda visualize her holding those ringed staffs Budhist monks use..
Flutes still work too :3

@Zekira So there is something behind Joubutsu's covered eye?Now I'm curious.
Besides,what do you think will be behind Joubutsu's bandages?
Personally I think Joubutsu's covered eye induces lunacy,just like a certain Reisen...
(also...I need a design for said eye too...Red Eyes Take Warning?Demonic eyes?Or even eyes similar to Hatena's?)

Etou wrote:

@arien666 そうですね〜、ワルルー様やドコン団に活躍してもらいたいカッ！？テレビアニメになったらすごいドン！

Umm... Waruru team and Dokon team would appear with great works? If there's TV-Anime, VERY GOOD da-don!

Tried drawing Joubutsu without her eye covered.

Zekira wrote:

Tried drawing Joubutsu without her eye covered.

Please don't. It's supposed to reveal another entity that totally doesn't resemble her at all.

...that indirectly means that your current drawing is very inaccurate.

In what I'm planning, Joubutsu is covering her eye because it's actually what makes her the Joubutsu we know; that bandage isn't just physically stuck there. That bandage only dismantles when something really, really special happens.

Oh, and just to clarify too, that covered eye is supposed to look like a normal eye too much like her left, just brown.

...I like your drawings, however, I must ask of you to refrain from drawing Joubutsu with her right eye revealed until the time that I reveal the truth behind that eye.

Zekira wrote:

The anticipation might be killing you though, so I'll give another hint.

Here. Play around with it however you want.

Rotated,colour-inverted (sorta) Senpuu-eye?Interesting.

Music Revolver

Also, how did you like my editing? Now that I go over it, it might have been a bit hard to understand.

Anyway, having only played one of the Taiko games. (2nd NDS one) My insight to the characters themselves is very limited... D:

crystalsuicune wrote:

@arken It's OK,there are records!!
http://www.ustream.tv/recorded/12258037
Hmm,Saitama's Hard notechart on MGG2 is based off Futsuu,amirite?
And taiko hitsounds!And Don-chan!AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

Also,rumours about MEGA and Zeami's new songs in MGG2:

MEGAが「Crowded space」
世阿弥が「ミュージック・リボルバー」

"Music Revolver"...?!Really,Tatsh.Really.I expected a better name.

crystalsuicune wrote:

@arken Any vids of Crowded Space and Music Revolver?

Zekira wrote:

HOLY SHIT IT'S RELEASED TODAY?

TIMEZONE WHERE THE FUCK ARE YOU, IMPORT THIS GAME GOD DAMN IT

At least you guys have Project Diva.

Zekira wrote:

The arcades probably aren't open yet (lol)? But it's already 9AM there...

Zekira wrote:

Holy crap, it's actually every one of them! A lot of the Dokon bots are missing...

Also, do I fail if I saw Don and Katsu last while looking at the pic?

aquabluu wrote:

And the 'widescreen' is 16:10 ratio. What happened to 16:9? GODDAMMIT.

Zekira wrote:

aquabluu wrote:

And the 'widescreen' is 16:10 ratio. What happened to 16:9? GODDAMMIT.

The latest monitors are apparently 16:10 now; I have no idea what prompted the jump from 16:9 to 16:10, but the 16:10 resolution is used mainly for computer displays, afaik

@crystal: think you can draw up Saitama within the next 5 days? I'm thinking of an early encounter here (Chapter 5)(

Zekira wrote:

Someone tell me what the fuck just happened here

http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm13360633

Taiko PSP 2 glitch?

Score: 510
Accuracy: 100%

EDIT: I tried it myself, and it freaking really works! WTF?

Zekira wrote:

Help, I can't find MGG video of Saitama2000

@Zekira A Rhythm Games Unity..?!!

Zekira wrote:

@Zekira A Rhythm Games Unity..?!!

Now that I think about it, I shit brix at the thought of this too.

Like, you know, the rhythm game authority (Konami's Bemani guys pretty much...) just suddenly decides to shell out their infinite money cheat and say to the companies that have made popular rhythm games "Collab, now" and we have all the awesomeness of all the rhythm games, together for the first time (and probably last, since this is an honestly HUGE project, both physically, economically, and socially), just to pull off a world record here for MOST AWESOME SHIT EVER

Also, what's Music Revolver's chibianthro supposed to be named?

Zekira wrote:

Also, take note that awesome rhythm games aren't only limited to Taiko + Bemani...

Zekira wrote:

Someone tell me what the fuck just happened here

http://www.nicovideo.jp/watch/sm13360633

Taiko PSP 2 glitch?

Score: 510
Accuracy: 100%

EDIT: I tried it myself, and it freaking really works! WTF?

Zekira wrote:

Seconded @Revolver

Also, take note that awesome rhythm games aren't only limited to Taiko + Bemani...

True dat,there's also DMT

True dat,there's also DMT

True dat,there's also DMT

True dat,there's also DMT

True dat,there's also DMT

transformed

"Wha....?Even y-you too,Saitama???"*hic*
"...Who are you?"
"C'mon,sister!It's me!Your bro!"
"You must be mistaken,I don't have a brother."
"FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU"

crystalsuicune wrote:

Simple design this time!
Hm,now how should KiSai's design look like?

Also,WTF is up with the forums OTL
And some people say that the hidden message of the recent official blog entry has
something to do with breaking universal rules and fighting the power

Universal rules.....that means it's a deep-rooted rule in taiko.....999 combo limit?
That means...OMGFIRSTPIEFFFFF

21:25 <jockeytiyan> : If only the goalies would just scream "GODHAND!" out loud and a giant fucking hand starts appearing
21:27 <jockeytiyan> : A GIANT FUCKING HAND

Zekira wrote:

I actually plan to make Red Zone some kind of the typical idle leader, though as a strong type and not the lazy type.

So that's two for IIDX. Since I'm pretty sure some of the songs replicate between BEMANI series, uh, how can I describe it... like, e.g.: out of 4 chars there can be 2 from DDR and 4 from IIDX or w/e

I'm actually kinda confused by how I'll be dealing with that at, since at the moment it's not my priority, lol

Zekira wrote:

@crystal: finally, lol...

【お詫び】太鼓の達人ぽ～たぶる２の追加ダウンロード楽曲「はやさいたま２０００」「夜桜謝肉祭」の２曲につきまして、配信を一時停止しておりましたが、現在は配信を再開しております。ご迷惑おかけしまして申し訳ございません。今後も何卒よろしくお願いいたしますドン。

crystalsuicune wrote:

@arken Hey,did you just say that you'll be adding us to that plot of yours?
Maybe we can think of things like special attacks and stuff 8D

arien666 wrote:

crystalsuicune wrote:

@arken Hey,did you just say that you'll be adding us to that plot of yours?
Maybe we can think of things like special attacks and stuff 8D

Yup, as jubeat matching system in Ensou mode :3
But as it's just not game but plot, I would make it alive <3

crystalsuicune wrote:

In that case...no Jubility system please.No just no.
(mainly because I can't figure out how it works)