Saten wrote:

[Crazy]
01:15:603 (1,2,3) - end-start slider-stacking doesn't seem like a good idea here imo. You can try moving them like this i made it even better, thank you for the input!

SPOILER

01:27:661 (1,2,3,4) - could you increase the spacing here? It feels a bit crowded right now sure thing
01:29:279 (2,3,4) - same here same here
01:41:191 (1) - a bit overkill but ok. lol i love it
01:49:132 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - it would play more natural if it went forth and back the whole section here so much better
02:05:308 (1) - remove the finish on start and add in on the end instead removed on start, but didn't add on end
02:34:426 (1) - change the finish to a whistle instead done
02:53:544 - start the kiai on 02:53:838 - instead. done
03:02:956 (1,2) - use finish on the second slider instead it sounds bad to me, changed in another way
03:17:073 (1) - whistle instead of clap, sound better imo done

[Easy]
01:12:367 (2,1,2) - this doesn't really look that great. You could try swap places with 01:14:132 (2,3) - great
02:08:837 (2,1,2) - same as above ofc
02:53:544 (1) - finish on the repeat instead i'm not really convinced but i suck at hitsounding, then ok

bigfrog wrote:

Hi~here's your ticket

Easy
- 00:12:367(1,2) - i suggest to let red point in the middle of slider,prominent rhythm that was the intention, but the pattern would be awful
- 01:12:367(2) - slide to 01:12:956 done
- 01:39:426(5) - slide down i made it better
- 02:25:308(3,1) - try to symmetry? done, it's very nice

- 02:37:073(1,2,3) - change to get flow nah it's ok

- 02:40:603(3) - 408|184 to make nicer shape with (1,2,4) and fix distance done
- 03:10:014(1) - 172|288 to symmetry 03:07:661(1) and make this slider horizontal line done
- 03:17:073(1,3) - parallel corrected shape

Good Luck ^^

luxoDeh wrote:

Hi! mod from my queue

EASY

00:59:426 (1) - non sono sicuro che i 4 repeat vadano bene x l'easy.
01:06:485 (1) - ^
Ho visto altre Easy in cui ci sono slider con doppio repeat, non penso sia un problema

CRAZY

seems fine Excellent

GL!

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    [Rakuen's Normal]
    
    
    
    • Rhythm

      1. 00:12:367 (1,2) - Blanket is not well
         00:18:544 (4,1) - Blanket.
         00:24:720 (2,3) - overlap
         00:28:544 (1,2,3) - I don't think this overlap idea is good in normal diff.
         00:33:544 (1,3) - overlap
         00:34:720 (3,1,2) - the same as 00:33:544 (1,3)
         00:48:838 (3) - not beautiful.
         00:50:014 - add a note.
         01:17:073 (7) - not beautiful.
      
      overlap is too more,I think normal diff shouldnt have this overlap.
      
      
      
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      [meiikyuu's Hard]
      
      
      • Rhythm

        1. 00:12:808 (2,4) - Maybe the slider 4 should blanket slider 2
           00:35:750 - imo,I think this place should add a note,bacause according to the song,this place is consistent.I know you want to use a black note in this place,however,I think it not fit this music.
           01:14:573 (4) - not beautiful /.\
           01:31:485 (7) - NC
           03:16:779 (6,1) - ec
        
        
        
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      • advice
        If I were you,I'll add the normal-hitnormal sound in every white line on kiai.
        
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        [Crazy]
        
        First,I think the clap sound is abused very much.To bo honest,I don't mod this when I heard the clap sound in my ear /.\,it's too load.
        
        Second,I said that I dont mod your diff that I can't pass it in my rule.sorry.
        but I want to say,your partten is not fit this music.
        
        
        
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• Rhythm

  1. 00:12:808 (2,4) - Maybe the slider 4 should blanket slider 2
     00:35:750 - imo,I think this place should add a note,bacause according to the song,this place is consistent.I know you want to use a black note in this place,however,I think it not fit this music.
     01:14:573 (4) - not beautiful /.\
     01:31:485 (7) - NC
     03:16:779 (6,1) - ec
  
  
  
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• advice
  If I were you,I'll add the normal-hitnormal sound in every white line on kiai.
  
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  [Crazy]
  
  First,I think the clap sound is abused very much.To bo honest,I don't mod this when I heard the clap sound in my ear /.\,it's too load.
  
  Second,I said that I dont mod your diff that I can't pass it in my rule.sorry.
  but I want to say,your partten is not fit this music.
  
  
  

Rotte wrote:

[Easy]

• Rhythm

1. None.
   
   
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2. I don't think 13 clap is fit in this music. What?

Sephibro wrote:

Rotte wrote:

[Easy]

• Rhythm

1. None.
   
   
   Sound Effect
   
   
2. I don't think 13 clap is fit in this music. What?

Using both list and notice in an improper way makes your post impossible to quote.
Slightly reduced hitsound volume on Crazy diff btw, thank you!

Rotte wrote:

13 clap is add clap in big white line and the tired short white line.
24 clap is add clap in the second short white line and the forth short white line.
:>

1. Kiais between your diffs are inconsistent. It's okay to have different kiais in GUEST diffs. But not in your own diffs! Check kiai #3, please! screenshot from AiBat
2. It's better to use 1024x768, it's the recommended size. BG of the recommended size will fit with almost every display. So, yeah, I've got a 1024x768 BG for you!
3. Your colours are pretty boring. It's blue, blue, blue and one more colour. Doesn't looks interesting, imo. So, give a chance to my colours!
   
   Colours!

   
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 174,208,194
   Combo2 : 211,192,207
   Combo3 : 186,188,169
   Combo4 : 219,185,185

1. 00:30:014 (4,5) - try to use an 1/1 slider here instead. It'll help you to emphasize the beat on 00:30:308 - which shouldn't be ignored, imo.
2. 00:39:426 (5) - nazi - tail of the slider is too close to the circle. Beginners may mistakenly ignore the reverse-arrow. Try to make your flow a bit more intuitive and move this tail somewhere else, please! an example
3. 00:59:426 (1) - man, this slider bugs me a lot. try to avoid using double-repeat sliders here. THis slider is short and players can't notice the second reverse-arrow in time. It's simply unplayable for them!
   Note: 01:06:485 (1) - 01:55:897 (1) - 02:02:955 (1) - pretty much the same.
4. 01:25:897 (5) - try to replace this circle with an 1/1 slider, so you'll map the beat on 01:26:191. It'll help you to follow vocals better!
   Note: disagree? Remove the circle from 01:24:426 - to keep consistency!
5. 01:36:779 - feels like a circle is missing here. It'll help you to follow both vocals and music closer!
6. 02:24:132 (1,2) - after the break it may be a little bit hard for beginners to catch the rhythm, try to replace them with a 2/1 slider.So, you'll make your map more playble!
7. 02:33:544 - c'moooon, don't ignore the vocals here! Long empty spaces are confusing for beginners, too! Try to place a 1/1 slider with a repeat, it'll fit with the vocals perfectly! example
8. 02:57:073 (1) - tbh, I'd remove this new combo. It doesn't really fit with your pattern and sounds kinda off vocals. Try to remove it.
   Note: if you don't feel like removing the NC, try to move this new combo to 02:55:897 (3) - it'll fit here better, I think.
9. 03:06:485 (4,2) - it's all about your flow - (2) is too close to (4), so players may hit it without clicking (1). Flow in the easiest diff should be very, very intuitive! Think about poor beginners
10. 03:11:191 (2,1) - blargh, nazi again - I'm not sure about such stacks. Get more opinions about this pattern, it may confuse beginners!
11. 03:18:838 (3) - inazi - it'd be a great idea to make it symmetrical with (1). creativity at its best
    
    Not bad, but I'd work on the flow a little bit more! Anyway, that's a nice diff!

1. AR6 and OD/HP 4 are a bit unbalanced. Try HP Drain 5, it'll make your diff balanced and will fit with the settings.
2. 00:31:191 (1) - try to use ctrl+g for this slider, it'll make you flow a bit smoother, I think.
3. 00:42:220 (2,3,4,1,2) - feel too hard for a [Normal]. Normal players are unable to read so many stacks with AR6 + BPM is pretty high, so it's too stressful and hard :<
4. 00:58:838 (4) - well, such sliders are hardly readable for players. I'd recommend you to avoid them for Easy/Normal diffs, because 2nd reverse-arrow appears too suddenly and kinda breaks the flow.
   Note: 01:55:308 (5) - same here.
5. 01:13:250 (1,3,4,5) - I wouldn't say that such patterns are readable for a [Normal] diff. Try to avoid such overlaps, it will bug players a lot!
   Note: 02:54:426 (3,4,5,6,1) - same here. Ask more people for their pinions, please!
6. 01:25:603 - try to map this part, long empty parts are boring! You can make it much more interesting for players! Go ahead and show us that you're a creative person!
7. 02:28:838 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - hittin 9 circles in a row with perfect timing on such BPM is really hard, you know. Try to add some sliders, to make this pattern more playable!
8. 02:50:603 (5) - I feel like you've missed a new combo here. Try to add it, it fits with your patterns better + it looks really, really amazing.
9. 03:19:132 (1) - rage generator. Players don't expect a circle here, miss it, and get A-rank. Try to avoid such things, players don't like it and it is too unexpected for a [Noemal] diff!
   
   Try to make it easier and neater! This is one of the hardest [Normal]s I've ever seen!

1. Even the [Crazy] diff has two breaks, + the song is fast and tiring for players. Consider adding one more break, please!
2. 00:12:808 (2,4) - well, call me nazi, but you could make a cute blanket here. It's just a little think, but I'm sure that players would appreciate it!
3. 00:30:014 (1,2,3,4) - I've expcted here an antijump-pattern like you did it with 00:26:485 (1,2,3). Antijumps here fit and make this pattern really awesome. You should use them more!
4. 00:57:956 (4) - feels much harder than your regular jumps. Try to make it a bit easier, please!
5. 01:26:632 - I wouldn't ignore this tricky sound. Players will be happy to hear it mapped, try to map it!
6. 02:01:044 (2) - nazi - one of those cute-blanket-sliders. You could make a blanket-slider here, it'll look much better, try it!
7. 02:44:132 (1) - try to replace them with two circles. So, it'll perfectly reflect vocals. If I'm not mistaken, we can hear "one~two~three" in the vocals
   
   Good job, the diff is pretty cool!

1. 00:12:367 (2) - just a little suggestion, try to place a new combo here. It sounds really different from what we hear on the first circle.
2. 00:44:279 - the beat here sounds tricky and ineteresting, as a mapper, I wouldn't ignore it. A specially, on the Insane diff!
3. 01:08:470 - 01:08:617 - sounds overmapped. It's important to add some streams to make a diff more interesting for players, but ry to do it somewhere else, where 1/4s will actually fit! :<
4. 01:11:191 (1,2,3) - interesting thing, I like how it plays and it's readable. Good idea <3
5. 01:36:338 - 01:36:632 - there's no any beats, so having ends of the sliders here is a little bit strange. Try to replace 01:36:191 (1,2) - with circles, it'll fit much better, imo!
6. 01:41:191 (1) - is this speedup really needed here? I wouldn't say so. :< Try to get more opinions or avoid SV-changes here, please!
7. 01:44:720 (3) - personally, I think that it breaks your pattern. Please, please use Ctrl+G on this! It'll flow smoother!
8. 01:55:308 (4) - NC here to emphasize spacing changes! Warn us about jumps and emphasize vocals, place a new combo here!
   Note: 02:51:485 (5) - kinda the same.
9. 02:33:544 - if you've mapped this part in easy, do the same here. I'd really like to see this vocals mapped, it sounds really great here <3
10. 03:18:838 (2) - doesn't looks readable. Yes, it's a cute effect, but it makes the slider unreadable. I'm strongly recommend you to make it more readable!
    
    Well, I like the diff. Last slider kinda disappointed me, but don't worry, it's still a nice diff!

-Bakari- wrote:

[General]

1. Kiais between your diffs are inconsistent. It's okay to have different kiais in GUEST diffs. But not in your own diffs! Check kiai #3, please! screenshot from AiBat forgot to fix it on Easy when i fixed on Crazy, done!
2. It's better to use 1024x768, it's the recommended size. BG of the recommended size will fit with almost every display. So, yeah, I've got a 1024x768 BG for you! Changed, thank you
3. Your colours are pretty boring. It's blue, blue, blue and one more colour. Doesn't looks interesting, imo. So, give a chance to my colours! you deserve 100 bonus kd for this - I'll definitely use yours
   
   Colours!

   
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 174,208,194
   Combo2 : 211,192,207
   Combo3 : 186,188,169
   Combo4 : 219,185,185

[Easy]

1. 00:30:014 (4,5) - try to use an 1/1 slider here instead. It'll help you to emphasize the beat on 00:30:308 - which shouldn't be ignored, imo. done
2. 00:39:426 (5) - nazi - tail of the slider is too close to the circle. Beginners may mistakenly ignore the reverse-arrow. Try to make your flow a bit more intuitive and move this tail somewhere else, please! an example you're right, i made it clearer
3. 00:59:426 (1) - man, this slider bugs me a lot. try to avoid using double-repeat sliders here. THis slider is short and players can't notice the second reverse-arrow in time. It's simply unplayable for them!
   Note: 01:06:485 (1) - 01:55:897 (1) - 02:02:955 (1) - pretty much the same. Fixed all, i saw them on another easy so i thought they were ok, but the cleaner it is the better it is
4. 01:25:897 (5) - try to replace this circle with an 1/1 slider, so you'll map the beat on 01:26:191. It'll help you to follow vocals better! fixed, added one more circle there instead of making it a 1/1 slider
   Note: disagree? Remove the circle from 01:24:426 - to keep consistency!
5. 01:36:779 - feels like a circle is missing here. It'll help you to follow both vocals and music closer! definitely yes, thank you!
6. 02:24:132 (1,2) - after the break it may be a little bit hard for beginners to catch the rhythm, try to replace them with a 2/1 slider.So, you'll make your map more playble! awesome, fixed!
7. 02:33:544 - c'moooon, don't ignore the vocals here! Long empty spaces are confusing for beginners, too! Try to place a 1/1 slider with a repeat, it'll fit with the vocals perfectly! example That's an almost spoken part and mapping it would be forced. Moreover, i think that it increases the climax to the kiai part
8. 02:57:073 (1) - tbh, I'd remove this new combo. It doesn't really fit with your pattern and sounds kinda off vocals. Try to remove it. yes that was a useless NC that i forgot to fix after making some changes to surrounding patterns
   Note: if you don't feel like removing the NC, try to move this new combo to 02:55:897 (3) - it'll fit here better, I think.
9. 03:06:485 (4,2) - it's all about your flow - (2) is too close to (4), so players may hit it without clicking (1). Flow in the easiest diff should be very, very intuitive! Think about poor beginners poor beginners now have a really cute curved slider that flows perfectly to (1)
10. 03:11:191 (2,1) - blargh, nazi again - I'm not sure about such stacks. Get more opinions about this pattern, it may confuse beginners! i made a friend of mine who had started playing one or two weeks before try this map, and she had no problems with these - i guess they're fine
11. 03:18:838 (3) - inazi - it'd be a great idea to make it symmetrical with (1). creativity at its best the music here has a "gran finale", this slider fits better than a mirrored one imo
    
    Not bad, but I'd work on the flow a little bit more! Anyway, that's a nice diff!

[Crazy]

1. 00:12:367 (2) - just a little suggestion, try to place a new combo here. It sounds really different from what we hear on the first circle. you have no idea how many times i moved this NC on and off i promise this time it's the last one!
2. 00:44:279 - the beat here sounds tricky and ineteresting, as a mapper, I wouldn't ignore it. A specially, on the Insane diff! I don't know if i'll change this one, but you put some ideas on my mind. I hope I get the inspiration to convert them into some cool patterns so I can add a beat there too
3. 01:08:470 - 01:08:617 - sounds overmapped. It's important to add some streams to make a diff more interesting for players, but ry to do it somewhere else, where 1/4s will actually fit! :< actually i feel this stream perfect, not because it clearly follows something in the music but because it's very intuitive to play and it exalts at its best the climax to 01:08:838 (1) - take for example Flower's Tsukasa - Visions: i think these are the best streams ever made on any existing map, even if there's nothing in the music they actually snap on. They are there to ADD something awesome to the music and they do it perfectly!
4. 01:11:191 (1,2,3) - interesting thing, I like how it plays and it's readable. Good idea <3 thank you <3
5. 01:36:338 - 01:36:632 - there's no any beats, so having ends of the sliders here is a little bit strange. Try to replace 01:36:191 (1,2) - with circles, it'll fit much better, imo! i'm sorry to replace these because i loved that sv change but yes, circle antijumps feel awesome!
6. 01:41:191 (1) - is this speedup really needed here? I wouldn't say so. :< Try to get more opinions or avoid SV-changes here, please! I don't know, i can't find anything cooler than this one. And it actually plays fine too, because it's half the speed of the previous horizontal jump. If i get some inspiration i'll change it for sure!
7. 01:44:720 (3) - personally, I think that it breaks your pattern. Please, please use Ctrl+G on this! It'll flow smoother! Awesome! done
8. 01:55:308 (4) - NC here to emphasize spacing changes! Warn us about jumps and emphasize vocals, place a new combo here!
   Note: 02:51:485 (5) - kinda the same. Both added
9. 02:33:544 - if you've mapped this part in easy, do the same here. I'd really like to see this vocals mapped, it sounds really great here <3 same as easy
10. 03:18:838 (2) - doesn't looks readable. Yes, it's a cute effect, but it makes the slider unreadable. I'm strongly recommend you to make it more readable! ç_ç it was so awesome, i loved it more than a son. It played and fit perfectly with the song, but i guess it's time to say farewell. No slider could ever be better than that one
    
    Well, I like the diff. Last slider kinda disappointed me, but don't worry, it's still a nice diff!

Pretty nice,don't give up and get this map ranked!

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Best of luck!

-Bakari- wrote:

Yo, thank you for waiting. Hope the mod worths it

[General]

1. Kiais between your diffs are inconsistent. It's okay to have different kiais in GUEST diffs. But not in your own diffs! Check kiai #3, please! screenshot from AiBat
2. It's better to use 1024x768, it's the recommended size. BG of the recommended size will fit with almost every display. So, yeah, I've got a 1024x768 BG for you!
3. Your colours are pretty boring. It's blue, blue, blue and one more colour. Doesn't looks interesting, imo. So, give a chance to my colours!
   
   Colours!

   
   

   [Colours]
   Combo1 : 174,208,194
   Combo2 : 211,192,207
   Combo3 : 186,188,169
   Combo4 : 219,185,185

[Normal]

1. AR6 and OD/HP 4 are a bit unbalanced. Try HP Drain 5, it'll make your diff balanced and will fit with the settings.
2. 00:31:191 (1) - try to use ctrl+g for this slider, it'll make you flow a bit smoother, I think.
3. 00:42:220 (2,3,4,1,2) - feel too hard for a [Normal]. Normal players are unable to read so many stacks with AR6 + BPM is pretty high, so it's too stressful and hard :<
4. 00:58:838 (4) - well, such sliders are hardly readable for players. I'd recommend you to avoid them for Easy/Normal diffs, because 2nd reverse-arrow appears too suddenly and kinda breaks the flow.
   Note: 01:55:308 (5) - same here.
5. 01:13:250 (1,3,4,5) - I wouldn't say that such patterns are readable for a [Normal] diff. Try to avoid such overlaps, it will bug players a lot!
   Note: 02:54:426 (3,4,5,6,1) - same here. Ask more people for their pinions, please!
6. 01:25:603 - try to map this part, long empty parts are boring! You can make it much more interesting for players! Go ahead and show us that you're a creative person!
7. 02:28:838 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - hittin 9 circles in a row with perfect timing on such BPM is really hard, you know. Try to add some sliders, to make this pattern more playable!
8. 02:50:603 (5) - I feel like you've missed a new combo here. Try to add it, it fits with your patterns better + it looks really, really amazing.
9. 03:19:132 (1) - rage generator. Players don't expect a circle here, miss it, and get A-rank. Try to avoid such things, players don't like it and it is too unexpected for a [Noemal] diff!
   
   Try to make it easier and neater! This is one of the hardest [Normal]s I've ever seen!
   
   Fixed all...I think :3
   
   Will try to look around the diff T.T

Pretty nice,don't give up and get this map ranked!

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Best of luck!

MetalJo wrote:

Mod from Queue~

Sorry for beiing late, but I didn't have that much time for modding. Sorry
Desperate already mod it, so this is just a quick scan.

[notice][General]
I'd like you to stop the Kiai time from 2:53:544 until 2:53:838. It's already like this on Easy and Crazy diffs
How about adding some cutsom hitsounds (not the ones from the normal) If somebody suggests me some custom hitsound i'll probably accept them, I didn't look for them because i'm bad with hitsounds

[Easy]
00:34:720 (5) - Finish Fixed

[Crazy]

00:25:308 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Make the distances regularely, don't like how this patterns looks like They are ok as they are
00:30:014 (1,2,3,4) - How about placing these like a sqaure instead of a rectangular? Done
00:41:044 (2,3,4,5,6,7,1,2,3,4,5,6) - These notes fit with the music but I don't think they are fitting to the fell of the music at this point.
01:01:191 (3) - I don't like the look and placement of this slider. uhm...sorry about that
01:06:485 (1) - Finish Done
01:09:720 (4) - Finish (End) Done
01:10:897 (4) - Finish Placed this on the following downbeat
01:12:367 (3) - ^ No
01:15:014 (5) - Finish (Start) No
01:41:191 (1) - Weird fast slider
02:05:308 (1) - Finish (End) Done
02:37:073 (1) - Finish Done

MetalJo wrote:

Mod from Queue~

Sorry for beiing late, but I didn't have that much time for modding. Sorry
Desperate already mod it, so this is just a quick scan.

[General]
I'd like you to stop the Kiai time from 2:53:544 until 2:53:838.
How about adding some cutsom hitsounds (not the ones from the normal)

[Rakuen's Normal]

I don't like the custom hitsounds. Other than that it looks ok. Custom hitsounds??? I think there's no any...Will check it.

Awesome diff

I hope this helps and good luck :3

Nightcore Princess G wrote:

Crazy
00:21:191 (3) - convert into three notes i really like the idea but i don't think it's good with this pattern
00:49:279 (2) - move to (76,116) and get better flow
00:58:544 (3) - rotate by 15° clockwise Changed and moved
and 00:58:250 (2) - rotate by 10° anticlockwise Same
01:36:780 (10) - nc and continue to have nc at 01:37:073 (1) - yep it's much nicer
01:48:250 (3) - convert into three notes same here, it doesn't fit well with the pattern
02:34:279 (7) - why note add a dash slider with a higher speed here? what's a dash slider?
02:57:956 (5,6,7,8) - more spacing and set a nc at 5 AWESOME I LIKE IT

Like this

What a graceful map,lol Thank you!

Easy
03:17:073 (1,2,3) - use a spinner instead easy players usually hate spinners
I can`t find out other problems that should be mentioned

Andrea wrote:

Okay, that was fast.

mintong89 wrote:

....wow!

Edit: btw I thought Source should not be Vocaloid.

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gokugohan12468 wrote:

Gratz!!! for your first Ranked Map!

Byakugan249 wrote:

mintong89 wrote:

....wow!

Edit: btw I thought Source should not be Vocaloid.

ahh he's right o.o. Vocaloid must be in the tags according to the rules, so move "Vocaloid Eight" to the tags.

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unranking this because of that reason. scores won't be wiped and i can re-rank this once it's fixed.