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Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size)

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fartownik
2,189 posts
Joined December 2008
fartownik
Set a preview point. Timing -> Set current position as preview point (the same value on every difficulty)

[Easy]

Circle size: Large?

00:06:817 (7,8) - Spacing.
00:14:411 - The same as in [Normal].
00:33:399 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - Why no claps here?
00:43:272 (5,6) - This is unrankable (*at least in an Easy difficulty).
01:03:019 (7,1) - Spacing.
01:13:652 (5,6) - The same as before. Unrankable stuff.


[Normal]

00:14:411 - Add a spinner started from 00:14:411 and ended on 00:15:930? Or map this part, in Hard there's no break here. Try to keep the consistency of breaks the same on all difficulties.
00:22:006 (1,2) - Spacing.
00:31:880 (3) - Stack this slider properly.
01:12:133 (3) - Following the rhythm and previous new-combos pattern, add a new combo here.
01:20:867 (4) - Move this slider 1/1 forward and add a note here 01:20:867? It'll make this pattern similar to this 01:16:690 (1,2,3,4,5).


[Hard]

I miss soft-whistles here. I think they'd fit.

[00:15:930] - Missed note here. Add a circle with soft-finish hitsound.
00:53:905 (5) - Stuff like this is unrankable. Please move this slider somewhere else.
01:09:570 (2,3,4) - A suggestion: delete these notes? Sounds far better.

cool already, +star
if you can't understant something, just pm me, I'll explain you in polish
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@fartownik
Thank you. Fixed that.
Teara
osu! Alumni
814 posts
Joined June 2009
Teara
Hi!

In general, its good, here is some minor issues I found.

Easy I wont mod, since it goes against all my rules for easy maps. Stacks/hidden notes etc.

[Normal]
00:24:285 (2) - New Combo
01:09:095 (3,1) - Not sure if this is allowed in a normal :o

[Hard]
00:14:791 (1) - Remove new Combo
00:15:171 (1) - Remove new Combo
00:15:551 (1) - Remove new Combo
00:20:298 (6,1) - Spacing :/

+Star
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Teara
Thanks, fixed.
Kubu
555 posts
Joined August 2008
Kubu
Star ~~'
DJPop
osu! Alumni
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Here since the beginning
DJPop
Insane



Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@DJPop
Thank you for awesome diff!
DJPop
osu! Alumni
3,549 posts
Here since the beginning
DJPop
If everything is ready, you should move this map to pending.
spartianka
4 posts
Joined April 2009
spartianka
Star ^.^
Beuchi
osu! Alumni
2,288 posts
Joined February 2009
Beuchi
Hi hi!! :)

Here are some suggestions for your map, you don't have to change them if you don't agree with me :P
Let's go!!

~All diffs~
- Add DJPop on Tags on all diffs.
- Delete the .osb file and Full Submit next time.

~Easy~
00:02:260 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Fix spacing. Compare the spacing of (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) with (7,8).

~Normal~
00:03:779 (1) - Fix spacing, don't make jumps on easier diffs >.<
00:38:715 (1,2,3,4) - Same as above... :/
00:42:513 (2) - Fix spacing.

~Hard~
00:16:120 (1,2,3,4,5) - Fix spacing here, (4,5) are a bit closer~

~DJPop's Insane~
Nothing here.

Nice map~ *star*
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Beuchi-chan
Hi hi!! :)
Fixed that.
Card N'FoRcE
osu! Alumni
4,058 posts
Here since the beginning
Card N'FoRcE
- General: (Considerations and things you need to check/fix for the whole map)
  • Hitsounds are really loud. Please turn their volume down by about two ticks (this does not affect DJpop's. It actually has the correct volume and i noticed at the end xD).
    Offset is early to me. Please add +10ms and remember to resnap all notes!
-Easy:
  • .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
    Fine.
- Normal:
  • .Suggestions: (Fixing this should make gameplay/aesthetics a bit better)
    01:24:665 (1) - i think removing this one is better :P
- Hard:
  • .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
    00:53:525 (4,5) - not stacked correctly :( To fix, place them again where the (3) ends: the editor will allign them automatically.
- DJpop's Insane:
  • .Opinions: (Just some thoughts, I'd personally like if you follow them)
    Nice grid lv1 mapping xD
    LOLwhat Slider Velocity 1,92
Well, i don't find any major problems here.
I think you need to get a bit more experience for hitsounds though, but that's something you'll improve by mapping more :P
Florek
1 post
Joined July 2009
Florek
Star ;3
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Card N'FoRcE
Fixed.
Now offset is: 741.
xierbaliti
osu! Alumni
1,009 posts
Joined August 2008
xierbaliti
Very good map :3

Some suggestion on irc, and:

Normal
HP-1?


*star*
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@xierbaliti
Thank you! Fixed.
WubWoofWolf
Former osu! Champion: 2017
112 posts
Joined September 2008
WubWoofWolf
:3
lxy
108 posts
Joined March 2009
lxy
GINTAMA~~ 8-)
nice map
Sure
4,220 posts
Joined February 2009
Sure
Add some finish sounds at chorus would be better. :D


[Easy]
00:07:196 (8) - spacing. I suggest stack it to 00:06:816 (7).
00:58:462 (1) - finish
01:04:538 (1) - ^
01:10:614 (1) - finish at start of slider
01:13:652 (5) - 1 grid up
01:16:690 (1) - finish at start of slider

BTW there are too many stacked notes. Beginner can't read them well.
But don't mind it highly. I think it is practice for read stack. XD


[Normal]
00:58:462 (1) - finish
01:04:538 (1) - ^
01:10:614 (1) - finish at start of slider
01:16:690 (1) - finish


[Hard]
00:58:462 (1) - finish
01:04:538 (1) - finish at start of slider
01:10:614 (1) - finish
01:16:690 (1) - finish


[DJPop]
Fine~


Good luck to your 1st map. ;)
EEeee
1,026 posts
Joined July 2008
EEeee
Easy
00:07:196 (8) - fixed spacing, or add new combo to the previous note to fix this

Normal
Looks great

Hard
Looks great, just a few suggestions ^^ just one suggestion :P
00:08:335 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4) - flip all of these vertically

DJPop's Insane
01:15:171 (1,2) - add finishes?
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@ykcarrot
Thanks. Yep, it's better with this finish hitsounds ^^

@EEeee
Thanks for mod and for info on IRC :P
DJPop
osu! Alumni
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DJPop

EEeee wrote:

DJPop's Insane
01:15:171 (1,2) - add finishes?
Remove them, klubek :|
EEeee
1,026 posts
Joined July 2008
EEeee

DJPop wrote:

EEeee wrote:

DJPop's Insane
01:15:171 (1,2) - add finishes?
Remove them, klubek :|
lol, was a suggestion :P and was @DJpop
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@DJPop
Ops, sorry. I didn't tell you. :?
Fixed~
ShaggoN
689 posts
Joined September 2008
ShaggoN
Blue: Sugestion. Not necessary, but should take good effects.
Green: Notification or cosmetic thing. May, but don't have to be fixed.
Orange: Should be fixed.
Red: Have to be fixed.

[General]
I'm not sure about offset. I always got few miliseconds late.

[Easy]
  1. Maybe set stack leniency to zero. Stack doesn't look cool on this stage.
[Normal]
  1. Stack leniency to 4.
[Hard]
Cool.

[DJPop's Insane]
Cool.

Starrr'd :D
DJPop
osu! Alumni
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DJPop
Fixed.


Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@ShaggoN
Fixed.
DJPop
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DJPop
There was a bug again, fixed - -"


Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@DJPop
Uploaded.
H1ko
367 posts
Joined December 2008
H1ko
nice map 8-)
abalee
osu! Alumni
1,994 posts
Joined June 2008
abalee
DJPop's
01:28:945 (1) - should this spinner end in white tick? :/
DJPop
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DJPop

abalee wrote:

DJPop's
01:28:945 (1) - should this spinner end in white tick? :/
Yes :oops:


Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
Uploaded.
Eirene
577 posts
Joined December 2008
Eirene
irc modding
star :3
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Eirene
Thank you, added more hitsounds.

Also, added some new background images ;)
Doomsday
Featured Artist
1,961 posts
Joined July 2008
Doomsday
Alright then~

Blue = design/minor issues. you do not have to change these if you don't want to.
Orange = moderate issues. it would be best if you change these.
Red = major issues. you need to change these

  1. I was a little wary about the BPM, but it seems fine. offset looks good
  2. Remove "anime" from the tags? Since Anime will be added as the genre, it doesn't need to be in the tags as well.
[EASY]

Looks good

[NORMAL]

Couldn't see nothing wrong, so this passes

[HARD]

I don't really like how you made the spacing at parts like 00:58:471 smaller than the rest of the map, but Its acceptable I guess. Nothing else irked me here.

[DJPOP'S INSANE]

00:58:471 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Personally, i think it would be better if you left this little bit at 1x BPM. It feels weird that it goes slower at the chorus here, and then suddenly speeds up.
01:28:946 (1) - This spinner still doesn't end on the white tick :?

A pretty solid mapset here. One thing I would suggest is that in your next map, you should try experimenting with the layout of beats a bit more. in this, nearly all of the beats are al on right-angles of each other, and all in straight lines. The sliders shapes are good, but the beat placement is a bit dull. By making more interesting-looking patterns into your maps, it can make a map so much better.

Starred
DJPop
osu! Alumni
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DJPop

Doomsday93 wrote:

[DJPOP'S INSANE]

00:58:471 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Personally, i think it would be better if you left this little bit at 1x BPM. It feels weird that it goes slower at the chorus here, and then suddenly speeds up.
Fixed.
01:28:946 (1) - This spinner still doesn't end on the white tick :?
osu! won't let me do that :<
Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Doomsday93
Thanks.

Uploaded.
Kecco
908 posts
Joined September 2009
Kecco
•Overall•
What do you think about changing combo colours?

•Hard•
00:59:990 (1,2,3,4) - 1 grid up? (lv3)

•Normal•
00:50:876 (5) - Bad for a Normal diff, place it elsewhere?

•Easy•
00:05:306 (5) - New combo.
01:01:509 (5) - ^
01:07:585 (5) - ^
01:19:737 (3) - ^

DjPop's diff is good for me.

+Star~
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@Kecco
Thank you.

Kecco wrote:

•Overall•
What do you think about changing combo colours?
No, it's fine with default.

•Hard•
00:59:990 (1,2,3,4) - 1 grid up? (lv3)
Is good, test map in this part.
Uploaded.
nazenaze
62 posts
Joined December 2008
nazenaze
pretty good mapset, but I'll second what dooms already said - try experimenting with beats placement bit more :p
now almost whole beatmap is in straight lines, try to curve stuff a little and add some jumps next time :)
thr1ve
80 posts
Joined December 2008
thr1ve
Cool map :) I like Easy and Normal the most. Hard is a bit boring.

+star
Lunah_old
Lunah_old
Hi klubek

General
Set custom hitcircle colours, default colours with 2 red is so confusing (Song Setup > Colours)
01:10:623 (1) - Start KIA time only here? (00:58:471 (1) - so remove here)

Easy
Why 1/6 BSD (?)

Normal
Fine ~

Hard
00:16:129 (1) - - Remove new combo
00:15:939 (1) - 00:16:129 (1) - Why this different spacing to 00:16:129 (1,2,3,4,5)
00:59:990 (1,2) - 1 grid up (?)
01:09:484 (1) - Remove new combo
01:09:863 (2) - New combo here (or new combo here 01:09:104 (3) are both good)
01:15:180 (1) - Remove new combo
01:22:395 (2) - Add a beat with finish here (?)
C'mon! more fantasy! :3

Starr**
Andrea
Beatmap Nominator
16,650 posts
Joined August 2008
Andrea
Look at the LoweH's modding before fix this one.

[Overall]

Use the same stack leniency on all the difficulties. I'll suggest you to use the stack leniency of DJPop's Insane.

[Difficulties]

[Hard]

00:58:471 (1) ~ 01:03:028 (1) - The spacing here it's weird, can you use the same spacing here as well? It would be much better.
01:06:066 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - ^
01:13:661 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - ^
01:16:699 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,4,1) - ^

Not bad for a first map ^_^
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
@LoweH
Fixed.

LoweH wrote:

01:10:623 (1) - Start KIA time only here? (00:58:471 (1) - so remove here)
Nope, it's better start on 00:58:471.

@osuplayer111
Thank you, all fixed~
Andrea
Beatmap Nominator
16,650 posts
Joined August 2008
Andrea
Now all looks fine, except one little thing.

I can't get background on Easy, fix it.

EDIT: Bubbled~
Gens
osu! Alumni
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Joined August 2008
Gens
Use offset 2,272.

Everything else seems to be fine though...
DJPop
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DJPop
Fixed.


Download: Monobright - Anata Magic (TV Size) (klubek) [DJPop's Insane].osu
klubek
62 posts
Joined May 2009
Topic Starter
klubek
Fixed, Offset now: 754

Uploaded.
Gens
osu! Alumni
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Gens
Oh, of course, you can't use offset 2,272 for the inherited timing section. It's fine...

Rebubbled.
abalee
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