This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on miércoles, 08 de diciembre de 2010 at 04:15:31 p.m.

Artist: FictionJunction YUUKA
Title: Hitomi no Kakera
Source: MADLAX
BPM: 95
Filesize: 4079kb
Play Time: 00:33
Difficulties Available:

1. Easy (2,97 stars, 29 notes)
2. Hard (4,2 stars, 356 notes)
3. Insane (4,66 stars, 101 notes)

Download: FictionJunction YUUKA - Hitomi no Kakera
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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(04/08/10) start to re-map this thing!
(^) changed title song and mp3
(^) changed bg
(05/08/10) hard diff 65%
(^) hitsound added
(07/08/10) hard finished ready to further modding =)
(^) start to WIP for Easy Diff
(08/08/10) start to WIP for Insane Diff
(15/08/10) bumped to prevent goes to graveyard

Reperawin wrote:

Modding by PM Request:

[General]
The storyboard is basic but good.

[Is this an OWNAGE!!??]
Rename to Normal or Hard. Done!
Use a bigger circle size. Done
01:23:169 (1) - Erase that spinner, it looks bad there. Done, you have right, I didn't like that spinner there XD
01:51:753 (10) - Add a New Combo here. Done

The map is really good for a first map. Idk if deserves a star at this stage, but still i'm giving it.

Thanks for the mod kudosu yay yay!

[Overall]

i think bpm is wrong.. you must find someone who can take you correct offset
and bpm (sorry, i not good in timing).

[Hard]

01:01:534 (3,4) - spacing.
01:24:591 (1,2) - put that not in 01:25:065 (red tick 14).
01:32:645 (8) - put that in 01:32:803 (red tick 14).
02:01:702 (6) - put that in 02:01:860 (red tick 14) and spinner in 02:02:018 (blue tick 14).
02:12:914 (5) - do that like in screenshot.
02:15:441 (4) - new combo.
02:16:073 (6) - ^
02:23:021 (3) - ^
02:25:548 (10) - ^

good luck and star~

[DBF] wrote:

[Overall]

i think bpm is wrong.. you must find someone who can take you correct offset
and bpm (sorry, i not good in timing).
I don't hear any bpm change in the whole song

[Hard]

01:01:534 (3,4) - spacing. I think this notes looks good without "distance snap"
01:24:591 (1,2) - put that not in 01:25:065 (red tick 14). Done, but what "red tick 14" means? xD
01:32:645 (8) - put that in 01:32:803 (red tick 14). Done, ^
02:01:702 (6) - put that in 02:01:860 (red tick 14) and spinner in 02:02:018 (blue tick 14). Done!
02:12:914 (5) - do that like in screenshot. Done, it looks great that part
02:15:441 (4) - new combo. Done.
02:16:073 (6) - ^ Done
02:23:021 (3) - ^ Done
02:25:548 (10) - ^ Done~

good luck and star~

Thanks for the modding and kudosu for you

[General / All Difficulty]
- BPM: 97.200
- Offset: 10,666
- Delete the "," from your tag

--- Note that you NEED to re-check all of your objects, don't forgot to resnap all note and recalculate silder lenghts

Call me back when you're done with them

orioncomet wrote:

[General / All Difficulty]
- BPM: 97.200 Done
- Offset: 10,666 Done, now the song make sense
- Delete the "," from your tag Done

--- Note that you NEED to re-check all of your objects, don't forgot to resnap all note and recalculate silder lenghts Done! All notes was re-checked

Call me back when you're done with them

Thanks~

This is your first map, right?
One thing I think you should do is look at the Mapping Techniques forum, pick a pattern with a high rating (such as Triangle beats) and try to think of places in your map where that technique might look good.

Right now, a lot of your notes are in straight lines, so mixing those up with other patterns would add variety.

good luck getting it ranked!

(I think the timing's wrong because there are a lot of blue-tick notes. I think it's hard to mod things where the timing is wrong, so I can't really do modding here, sorry )

[Relax]
The only hitsounds I hear are normal and finish, maybe add whistle in some places?
00:34:431 (1,2) - These two notes are too close together
There are a lot of notes like this with weird, short spacing ._.;

00:35:203 (2) - this slider should end on the white tick, but unfortunately osu! has a bug that makes it hard to do that :p
you need to use 1/8th snap and then you can make it end on the white tick

I know you've been awaiting this, so here we go

-----General-----
Artist: FictionJunction YUUKA O
Title: Hitomi no Kakera (Instrumental) O
Source: MADLAX O
Tags: madlax fictionjunction yuuka X (Theese tags already exist in your source and artist, they arent needed)
Skin: ---N/A---
SB: Included X (You can reduce some unnecesary transparencies on your current SB objects)
BG: Yes O
Mp3: 64 kbps X (Your mp3 is too low quality, needs a better one)

-------Hard--------
BPM: 95.0 O
Offset: 10714 ? (Feels odd)
Slider speed: 1.7 O (sounds ok for a hard)
Timing sections:
00:35:16 - 0.5x BPM X Feels unnecessary and unintuitive imo.
00:37:37 - 1x BPM X If you delete the previous one, this one is unnecesary.
00:41:03 - 1x BPM Kiai O
01:01:69 - 0.5x BPM Kiai X This one feels unintuitive.
01:04:06 - 1x BPM O Kiai ends here so yeah.
01:44:10 - 1x BPM Kiai O
02:06:292 - ? I think Kiai should end here.
02:14:78 - 1x BPM Kiai X This timing section is doing nothing, kill it.
02:17:02 0.5x BPM Kiai X No no no, this 1/2 BPM is unintuitive.
02:17:96 1x BPM Kiai X If you delete the 1/2 BPM this one isnt needed.
02:30:31 1x BPM X If you delete that kiai, this timing section isnt needed.
02:34:59 0.5x BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section.
02:35:83 1x BPM X If you delete the last timing section, this one is unnecessary.
02:37:24 0.5 BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section.
02:39:01 1x BPM X If you delete the last one, this one's unnecessary, and if you dont, your applying a BPM change in the middle of a slider.
02:44:65 2x BPM X Killer slider... dont do this please.
02:45:13 0.5 BPM X This BPM jump is too big, make this 1x unless you delete the previous section, then delete it.
02:49:55 1x BPM X Useless timing section (there arent notes between here and the next one anyways)
03:07:43 1x BPM Kiai X Kiai should start exactly on the note.
03:27:22 1x BPM O
03:18:29 0.5x BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section.
03:29:34 1x BPM X Unnecessary if you remove the previous one

01:25:713 (3) - Spacing error
01:26:503 (5) - Spacing error
01:37:871 (1,1) - Kind of close to the spinner.
01:48:924 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Uneven spacing
02:19:240 (4) - Spacing error.
02:33:135 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing errors.
02:42:292 (4) - Spacing error.
02:44:503 (4) - New combo
02:45:135 (6) - This could pretty much be a spinner.
03:08:503 (3) - Spacing error.
03:10:082 (7) - New combo, also spacing error.
03:10:924 (10) - Spacing error.
03:12:292 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Uneven spacing.
03:20:608 (10) - Spacing error.
03:22:398 (1) - Anti-Jump

---Overall----
Lots of unintuitive BPM changes and spacing errors that need to be fixed, distance snap isnt always right, try to use a Lv 3 grid if you think it can help you snap your notes better, Lv 2 grid tends to cause some spacing errors if you dont know how to use it. Good Luck!~

Sakura301 wrote:

I know you've been awaiting this, so here we go

-----General-----
Artist: FictionJunction YUUKA O
Title: Hitomi no Kakera (Instrumental) O
Source: MADLAX O
Tags: madlax fictionjunction yuuka X (Theese tags already exist in your source and artist, they arent needed) Done
Skin: ---N/A---
SB: Included X (You can reduce some unnecesary transparencies on your current SB objects) I haven't found those unnecesary transparencies o_o
BG: Yes O
Mp3: 64 kbps X (Your mp3 is too low quality, needs a better one) Ok, The original audio was 320kbps, size is 11 MB. I'll try recompress the original to 128kbps, less than 5 MB

-------Hard--------
BPM: 95.0 O
Offset: 10714 ? (Feels odd) It's an approximate value, I didn't know the offset exactly
Slider speed: 1.7 O (sounds ok for a hard)
Timing sections:
00:35:16 - 0.5x BPM X Feels unnecessary and unintuitive imo. this allows move slider slowly o,o
00:37:37 - 1x BPM X If you delete the previous one, this one is unnecesary. done, this is unnecesary really
00:41:03 - 1x BPM Kiai O
01:01:69 - 0.5x BPM Kiai X This one feels unintuitive. this allows move slider slowly
01:04:06 - 1x BPM O Kiai ends here so yeah.
01:44:10 - 1x BPM Kiai O
02:06:292 - ? I think Kiai should end here. Done
02:14:78 - 1x BPM Kiai X This timing section is doing nothing, kill it. Done
02:17:02 0.5x BPM Kiai X No no no, this 1/2 BPM is unintuitive. Done
02:17:96 1x BPM Kiai X If you delete the 1/2 BPM this one isnt needed. Done
02:30:31 1x BPM X If you delete that kiai, this timing section isnt needed. Done
02:34:59 0.5x BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section. This allows move the slider slowly
02:35:83 1x BPM X If you delete the last timing section, this one is unnecessary.
02:37:24 0.5 BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section. Idem xD
02:39:01 1x BPM X If you delete the last one, this one's unnecessary, and if you dont, your applying a BPM change in the middle of a slider.
02:44:65 2x BPM X Killer slider... dont do this please. lol, I thought that it was nice <3 but ok
02:45:13 0.5 BPM X This BPM jump is too big, make this 1x unless you delete the previous section, then delete it. I have deleted teh killer slider and I replaced the next slider by a nice winkle <3
02:49:55 1x BPM X Useless timing section (there arent notes between here and the next one anyways) Done
03:07:43 1x BPM Kiai X Kiai should start exactly on the note. Done
03:27:22 1x BPM O
03:18:29 0.5x BPM X Unintuitive 1/2 BPM section. the slider slowly~ xD
03:29:34 1x BPM X Unnecessary if you remove the previous one

01:25:713 (3) - Spacing error Done
01:26:503 (5) - Spacing error Done
01:37:871 (1,1) - Kind of close to the spinner. Eh? Deleted.
01:48:924 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - Uneven spacing Done
02:19:240 (4) - Spacing error. Done
02:33:135 (1,2,3,4,5) - Spacing errors. Done
02:42:292 (4) - Spacing error. Done
02:44:503 (4) - New combo Done
02:45:135 (6) - This could pretty much be a spinner. Eh?
03:08:503 (3) - Spacing error. Done
03:10:082 (7) - New combo, also spacing error. Done
03:10:924 (10) - Spacing error. Done
03:12:292 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - Uneven spacing. Done
03:20:608 (10) - Spacing error. Done
03:22:398 (1) - Anti-Jump Uh? xD

---Overall----
Lots of unintuitive BPM changes and spacing errors that need to be fixed, distance snap isnt always right, try to use a Lv 3 grid if you think it can help you snap your notes better, Lv 2 grid tends to cause some spacing errors if you dont know how to use it. Good Luck!~

most bpm changes was the sliders, I like it. xD Anyways, a huge mod and a huge kudosu <3

Thanks~

I'm talking about the slow / fast sliders being unintuitive, its not good to make a 1/2 or 2x BPM just for 1 slider, 1/2 or 2x BPMs are sections where the song tells you "this is gonna be slow paced" plus with the current multiplier restriction for BPMs 2x and 1/2 are kind of too exagerated, when they are unintuitive the player tends to overshoot the slider ball, or the slider ball overshoots the player and then combo break, then sad face.

If you wanna keep em you should SB a warning for each, since there isnt anything in the song that tells you those sliders are gonna be slow.

Also about the other stuff:

"This could pretty much be a spinner" not only the song, but also this slider is way too long and can be replaced with a spinner, you use a 1/2 section and EVEN THEN the slider is long, you should kill that slider and replace with a spinner that starts and ends on the same place.

"Anti-Jump" It's not considered a spacing error because of a new combo, but the note is too close to the other and is clearly visible so a player will tend to hit it too soon instead of waiting.

Also dont kudosu this post

Sakura301 wrote:

"This could pretty much be a spinner" not only the song, but also this slider is way too long and can be replaced with a spinner, you use a 1/2 section and EVEN THEN the slider is long, you should kill that slider and replace with a spinner that starts and ends on the same place.

Nah, that part it is too short to put an spinner, lol

Sakura301 wrote:

"Anti-Jump" It's not considered a spacing error because of a new combo, but the note is too close to the other and is clearly visible so a player will tend to hit it too soon instead of waiting.

Yeah, now it is fixed.

star~