1. Hard (4.55 stars, 365 notes)
2. Normal (2.98 stars, 275 notes)

Maya-kira wrote:

Goodbye osu, I had a really good time here >w</

1. 02:44:066 - The SB Load went over 5x here until 03:16:066... Maybe you should really reduce it.

1. ...Wait. HP3 and OD3? Even as the easiest diff of this mapset, a setting like this is still too easy. Use HP4 and OD4; the SD will only increase to 3.16, anyway, assuming you're not changing anything other than these two.
2. 01:49:566 (3,4,5) - I personally think this pattern fits more to the song. (The rhythm of the objects themselves [aka using those two 1/2 sliders with the same rhythm but with different position/shaping] is also suggested for 00:53:566 (2,3,4); I wasn't aware of that one until I checked them back. Isn't really needed for 01:57:566 (3,4,1), though.)
   

   188,220,109566,2,0,B|261:233,1,73.1999977661134
   196,100,110316,6,0,B|269:113,1,73.1999977661134

3. 02:12:066 - Add another spinner (8/1) here? It... just feels weird to not have another one here after 02:04:191 (1), where the music sounds really similar. Don't forget to add a break after the spinner if you're really doing this. (This also reduces the difficulty's SD, somehow.)

1. ...Maybe this is the right time to use CS4. The patterns look and play more awesome with them, similar to your Snow Crystal. I'm really against CS4 for Ververg, but I oppose the usage of CS5 here.
2. 02:12:066 - Same as Normal.
3. 02:44:066 (1) - ...I'm not recommending to map something off-grid, actually. Up to you though, although this and 02:45:316 (2) can be arranged a bit to avoid off-grid mapping.
4. 03:02:566 (1) - The end of this slider touches the HP bar, but since it can be 300'd, I guess you don't really care about this.

Hinsvar wrote:

Random mod is random.

*Bolded = Unrankable or strongly suggested; red = Highly suggested or questionable (still weaker than the bolded ones); black = Minor suggestions/rants; blue = Notes/advices to avoid/fix repeated problems.

>General

1. 02:44:066 - The SB Load went over 5x here until 03:16:066... Maybe you should really reduce it. xD xD

>Normal

1. ...Wait. HP3 and OD3? Even as the easiest diff of this mapset, a setting like this is still too easy. Use HP4 and OD4; the SD will only increase to 3.16, anyway, assuming you're not changing anything other than these two. Ververg uses this diff setting orz ._. But done
2. 01:49:566 (3,4,5) - I personally think this pattern fits more to the song. (The rhythm of the objects themselves [aka using those two 1/2 sliders with the same rhythm but with different position/shaping] is also suggested for 00:53:566 (2,3,4); I wasn't aware of that one until I checked them back. Isn't really needed for 01:57:566 (3,4,1), though.)
   

   188,220,109566,2,0,B|261:233,1,73.1999977661134
   196,100,110316,6,0,B|269:113,1,73.1999977661134

   I prefer my current one orz (because other choruses use this rhythm)
3. 02:12:066 - Add another spinner (8/1) here? It... just feels weird to not have another one here after 02:04:191 (1), where the music sounds really similar. Don't forget to add a break after the spinner if you're really doing this. (This also reduces the difficulty's SD, somehow.) Yep

>Hard

1. ...Maybe this is the right time to use CS4. The patterns look and play more awesome with them, similar to your Snow Crystal. I'm really against CS4 for Ververg, but I oppose the usage of CS5 here. Err, no, this is intended for CS5 xD
2. 02:12:066 - Same as Normal. Yep
3. 02:44:066 (1) - ...I'm not recommending to map something off-grid, actually. Up to you though, although this and 02:45:316 (2) can be arranged a bit to avoid off-grid mapping. I love this slider's angle orz >_<
4. 03:02:566 (1) - The end of this slider touches the HP bar, but since it can be 300'd, I guess you don't really care about this. (:

...I can't really find anything, so yeah

Good luck on the way

286,157,40816,1,0
176,103,41316,2,0,B|149:116|116:108,1,61,0|8
38,201,42066,5,0
100,305,42566,2,0,B|150:261|215:281,1,122,8|0

200,348,198066,6,0,B|184:293|194:243|270:221|325:209|368:168|400:100|357:29|276:33|257:51|257:51|238:33|156:20|117:101|136:172|181:199|248:221|318:244|333:292|314:353,1,878.39997319336,4|0

Teru21 wrote:

Hi XD
As u requested xD
Maya <3 my teacher <33

[Normal]
00:12:066 (1) - http://puu.sh/1biKO ? xD Oh, it's intentional (:
00:32:191 (1) - how bout the spinner start 00:32:316 ? I think the spinner is starting to fast xD Already tried, it didn't work because of low BPM ._.
00:40:816 (2,3,1,2) - how bout http://puu.sh/1bj2R Yep

286,157,40816,1,0
176,103,41316,2,0,B|149:116|116:108,1,61,0|8
38,201,42066,5,0
100,305,42566,2,0,B|150:261|215:281,1,122,8|0

01:35:066 (2) - move to 01:34:816 and add circle 01:35:316 . to make the rhythm constant xD It's constant with first chorus already, actually (:
03:07:316 (3) - add 1 reverse to follow the vocal xD Again, it's intentional to follow the first and second chorus' rhythm :3
03:18:066 (1) - kaka... kenapa lovenya bengkok sebelah... ;A; Self-repaired orz xD

200,348,198066,6,0,B|184:293|194:243|270:221|325:209|368:168|400:100|357:29|276:33|257:51|257:51|238:33|156:20|117:101|136:172|181:199|248:221|318:244|333:292|314:353,1,878.39997319336,4|0

[Hard]
00:05:316 (2,5,6) - haha.. xD (5) not well shaped with (2,6) how about (5) using 5 dots instead of 4? it'll look more beautiful xD I prefer two waypoints... Redesigned this slider though (:
03:29:066 (2,1,2) - I think the 03:29:066 (2) not in middle of 03:30:066 (1,2) o.o?

O.O thatssss alll xDDDDDDD

a sweet song and sweet SB xD Teehee xD

I never knew that Niva can be this romantic *runs

WVS wrote:

for m4m~
sial, susah banget di mod, udah bagus ini ;_;~

[Normal]

02:27:066 (2) - kayanya disini enakan pakai Finish deh.. ok, Finish + Clap :3
itu aja ;_;

[Hard]

Pattern2 kaya 01:31:566 (1,2) - itu kayaknya bagusnya diganti slider aja de soalnya kadang suka dapet 100 kalo circle :v jadi intinya buat bikin jadi 'agak' playable.. imo Err, mending dua circle sih imo, soalnya lebih dapat feelnya :3
02:53:316 (3) - ctrl+r? lebih nyaman di mata dan di gameplay imo @_@ Oh, itu sengaja~
03:24:066 (1) - holy shit awsum xD

i think thats all since this map is already pretty neat, cool, romantic, and awesome! niva so romantic~ (:

ugh gabisa banyak-banyak, udah terlalu bagus ;_;

rrtyui wrote:

m4m~

[Normal]

none

[Hard]

03:02:566 (1) - This slider looks forced to me. you use here? Yep

new slider

256,200,182566,6,0,B|232:144|256:95|256:95|284:44|256:-8,1,215.999993408203,10|0

03:18:066 (1) - normal-finish on only first 1 points? Yep (forgot to use C1 here orz ._.)

Really perfect mapset ;_;

EDIT: 03:32:128 - Spinner add?(both normal and hard) Uhm, I want to show the SB here orz :3

Flower wrote:

irc req~
note: mostly the mods below are suggestions.
unrankable

SPOILER

ok... the girl in the kiai looks so funny...
sb load at last kiai is constantly over 5. consider slightly reduce the size of yellowspace.jpg (better convert to png cause png has better quality). if you think too time-consuming then ignorethis. Reduced yellowspace.jpg's filesize by 50kb (png gives higher filesize actually xD) - about SB load, already tried to reduce the scale code but it didn't work...

[Normal]
00:05:066 (2,2,2,2) - better use S rather than N:C1. Oh, it's for the bass' sound
00:19:566 (3,4) - volume 45. both add clap. Yep
00:35:566 (1,1) - better stack? It's intentional xD
00:37:316 - add whistle?
00:41:316 - ^
00:45:316 - ^
00:49:316 - ^ I didn't added whistle because I want to follow Hard's hitsounding~
01:06:566 (1) - overlapped by the HP bar Made this lower
01:25:066 (2) - ^ Uhm, can't do much with this...
01:31:566 (1,1) - better stack? It's intentional xD
02:33:566 (3) - overlapped by the HP bar Moved lower to ~y:22

[Hard]
00:12:066 (1) - out range :\ It's fine actually, I made the following (2) stack better though~
01:05:566 (8) - shorten and end at 01:05:941 ? add note at 01:06:066 Err, the rhythm is quite weird orz...
01:35:566 (7) - out range Changed into two circles
02:21:941 - there should be a note here.
02:23:941 - ^ These two is intentional...
02:31:691 - ^ Yep
02:44:066 (1) - out range It's not in play mode actually xD
03:00:066 (1) - extend to 03:00:441 , or add a note here
03:13:566 (8) - shorten and end at 03:13:941 ? add note at 03:14:066 For these two I prefer my current rhythm though, it's simpler imo (:

Uhm, actually notes overlapping HP bar aren't unrankable, also notes off the grid is also rankable as long it's not off-screen in play mode (play mode supports 640x480 grids while editor is 512x384 (: )

1. 01:43:066 (3) - Move to x:168 y:272 maybe, it looks nice with 01:39:066 (3) (/what) than stack it with (1) (it was because I think stack are not fit in Normal diff ._.) but you need to move 01:38:566 (2) to x:53 y:310 due spacing
2. 03:08:066 (1) - Ctrl+J it? I think this way will give 'path' or I don't know how to say it ._. but
   SPOILER

   
   
   yeah, something like this
3. 02:24:628 (2,3) - Maybe it's just my ears, but the rhythm feels more precise if it placed on yellow line with 1/16 snap ._.
   SPOILER

   
4. 02:32:097 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - ^
5. 02:40:097 (1,2,3) - ^ hmm new offset? lol anyway sorry I think this is nazi D:

1. I couldn't find any o.o

Matoryoshika wrote:

first time m4m with BAT orz

Don't expect too much from me

[Normal]

1. 01:43:066 (3) - Move to x:168 y:272 maybe, it looks nice with 01:39:066 (3) (/what) than stack it with (1) (it was because I think stack are not fit in Normal diff ._.) but you need to move 01:38:566 (2) to x:53 y:310 due spacing I moved (2) lower instead~
2. 03:08:066 (1) - Ctrl+J it? I think this way will give 'path' or I don't know how to say it ._. but
   SPOILER

   
   
   yeah, something like this
   ok ok :3
3. 02:24:628 (2,3) - Maybe it's just my ears, but the rhythm feels more precise if it placed on yellow line with 1/16 snap ._.
   SPOILER

   
4. 02:32:097 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - ^
5. 02:40:097 (1,2,3) - ^ hmm new offset? lol anyway sorry I think this is nazi D: Uhm, no need for 1/16 I think xD

[Hard]

1. I couldn't find any o.o

Pertama kali main ini map kirain SB nya ribet ternyata simpel

good luck niv /o/

R e v i v e wrote:

M4M as your request xD

General

- Add "Jugoya Kuraishisu" in your tag. Yep

Normal

00:32:066 (1) - I think only finish it sound look better I think whistle there sounds sweet >_<
00:37:316 (3) - Add whistle at the end ? (For guitar sound)
00:38:566 (2,3) - Maybe use this pattern ?

SPOILER

00:41:316 (3) - Add whistle at the end (Same above reason)
00:42:566 (2,3) - make like pattern above. Oh, it's intentional~
00:45:316 (3) - Add whistle at the end
01:33:566 (4) - Add whistle
01:37:316 (3) - Add whistle at the end All whistles fixed (:
02:20:941 (3,3) - Not sure this rhythm, I think these sliders end at blue tick? It's intentional, I fixed slider symmetry though~
02:51:316 (3) - Maybe use repeat like this ?

SPOILER

02:53:066 (2) - Move this note like this? (For symmetrical) Yep

SPOILER

03:07:316 (3) - Maybe use repeat like this ? Again, these two is intentional (:

SPOILER

03:18:066 (1) - Good job this slider i like it.
(suggestion : maybe can you fix slidertick a bit to overlap it?) Uhm, I tried my best... (so hard orz ._.)

SPOILER

Hard

00:04:066 (1) - Remove whistle at the end, I think it look better.
00:06:066 (5) - ^
00:08:066 (1) - ^ Same as Normal, the whistles are to make the part sweeter :3
00:35:566 (1,2) - Maybe use this pattern, it easy to read rhythm xD I did circle + slider instead xD

SPOILER

01:17:316 (4) - Rotate this note like this ? Yep

SPOILER

01:31:566 (1,2) - Same 00:35:566 (1,2) - Pattern. Yep
01:59:816 (3) - Maybe copy (7) then arrange like this ? Uhm, I want to keep the symmetry with (2) here >_<

SPOILER

03:18:066 (1) - Same as Normal suggestion. Okay :3

Lovely storyboard and detective conan >3

Star...

1. If source is Detective Conan you probaly should add "TMS" as a tag, too. You know, it's a cretors of this anime :V

1. I'm not sure abou the AR.. 5 is common for [normal] diffs and it fits here. but how about using AR4 since it's easiest diff in your mapset and it fits with slider velocity o3o
2. Maybe add one more break since this song is quite long
3. 01:43:101 (3) - (nazi) how about placing (3) this way. It will look good and also will help you to avoid overlap. (overlaps are confusing for easiest diff, right?)
4. 02:53:323 (3) - overlaps. overlaps. overlaps. Actually this overlap isn't really big problem but still can confuse some beginners. (same here 02:58:573 (1))

1. 00:10:319 (4,5) - it would be great if you will use ctrl+g for those two circles. i think that, they're sounds different from 00:10:819 (6) - and that's why it would be a great idea to separate them. if you'll do it - try to put new combo at (6) to make this pattern easier to read?
2. 00:32:194 (1) - how about ending this spinner 00:34:069 - here? because there's an offset change and i think that it's better to point it out.
3. 00:50:817 (4) - I don't know if you forgot Nc here or just don't want to put it here. Anyway, I think that you should put New combo here because it looks quite confusing with hidden, imo. o3o and it won't hurt map because it fits with music/vocals, too.
4. 01:02:315 (7,1) - erm.. NC swap here? Personally, i think that if you'll swap new combo here it will follow vocals much closer.
5. 01:17:315 (4) - if you will rotate this slider this way it will make perfect blanket with (5) (nazi)
6. 01:28:190 (1) - same as 00:32:194 (1) but this time i want you to end spinner at 01:30:079. ( and reason is the same, too)
7. 01:42:601 (5) - Hm.. i think that beat at 01:43:101 - should be mapped and it would be a good idea to add reverse at 01:42:601 (5) - but it will ruin your pattern :<
   
   maybe something like this? (image inside)

   
8. 02:12:157 (1) - maybe make this spinner louder? There's a loud beat in the end of spinner you can try to put even finish here o3o
9. 02:20:470 (2) - there's a beat at 02:20:595 - of course it not as loud as mapped beats but i think you should try to convert 02:20:470 (2,3) - into slider with tick. goes this way (same for some similar patterns. (and 02:21:970 - this beat should be mapped too, imo) (02:23:970 - and this o3o)
10. 02:38:095 (1) - overlapped with hp-bar. looks messy and this little problem shouldn't ruin this awesome map, right? (03:02:573 (1) - same here)
11. 03:22:813 (2) - hm.. don't you think that jump here is too hard? I mean it's still [Hard] diff and x3.0 jumps are too hard o3o

-Bakari- wrote:

Hi Niva! I want to improve my modding and that's why i decided to start with modding some awesome maps Hope it's okay.

[General]

1. If source is Detective Conan you probaly should add "TMS" as a tag, too. You know, it's a cretors of this anime :V o.o? The creator is Aoyama Gosho orz, TMS Entertainment isn't that relevant I think :3

[Normal]

1. I'm not sure abou the AR.. 5 is common for [normal] diffs and it fits here. but how about using AR4 since it's easiest diff in your mapset and it fits with slider velocity o3o Eh... Sure orz
2. Maybe add one more break since this song is quite long Where xD
3. 01:43:101 (3) - (nazi) how about placing (3) this way. It will look good and also will help you to avoid overlap. (overlaps are confusing for easiest diff, right?) I know, it has been suggested previously but I don't like the flow to be honest...
4. 02:53:323 (3) - overlaps. overlaps. overlaps. Actually this overlap isn't really big problem but still can confuse some beginners. (same here 02:58:573 (1)) Uhm, do you mean 'touching HP bar'? They're not overlapping orz >_<

[Hard]

1. 00:10:319 (4,5) - it would be great if you will use ctrl+g for those two circles. i think that, they're sounds different from 00:10:819 (6) - and that's why it would be a great idea to separate them. if you'll do it - try to put new combo at (6) to make this pattern easier to read? Err, I prefer (4) being encircled by (3), but I like your new combo idea thoguh~
2. 00:32:194 (1) - how about ending this spinner 00:34:069 - here? because there's an offset change and i think that it's better to point it out. 'open my eyes' ends in 1/8, I've tested this many times in 25% playback~
3. 00:50:817 (4) - I don't know if you forgot Nc here or just don't want to put it here. Anyway, I think that you should put New combo here because it looks quite confusing with hidden, imo. o3o and it won't hurt map because it fits with music/vocals, too. Oh, it's intentional~ (not that confusing orz)
4. 01:02:315 (7,1) - erm.. NC swap here? Personally, i think that if you'll swap new combo here it will follow vocals much closer. Yep
5. 01:17:315 (4) - if you will rotate this slider this way it will make perfect blanket with (5) (nazi) ...it was like that actually, but I rotated it because of R e v i v e's suggestion~
6. 01:28:190 (1) - same as 00:32:194 (1) but this time i want you to end spinner at 01:30:079. ( and reason is the same, too) Same, the vocals here is also 1/8...
7. 01:42:601 (5) - Hm.. i think that beat at 01:43:101 - should be mapped and it would be a good idea to add reverse at 01:42:601 (5) - but it will ruin your pattern :< orz >_<
   
   maybe something like this? (image inside)

   
8. 02:12:157 (1) - maybe make this spinner louder? There's a loud beat in the end of spinner you can try to put even finish here o3o Oh yes, I forgot finish here :3
9. 02:20:470 (2) - there's a beat at 02:20:595 - of course it not as loud as mapped beats but i think you should try to convert 02:20:470 (2,3) - into slider with tick. goes this way (same for some similar patterns. (and 02:21:970 - this beat should be mapped too, imo) (02:23:970 - and this o3o) Uhm, I don't want to ruin the star formation personally ._.
10. 02:38:095 (1) - overlapped with hp-bar. looks messy and this little problem shouldn't ruin this awesome map, right? (03:02:573 (1) - same here) Moved lower, based on (2)'s approach circle (:
11. 03:22:813 (2) - hm.. don't you think that jump here is too hard? I mean it's still [Hard] diff and x3.0 jumps are too hard o3o I'm avoiding overlap with the next pink (1) here... Moved a bit though xD

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Great! ~

Sorry for the short mod, but this map is amazing. >.</

Edit: whooops~ looks like You fixed your timing before i finised this post. orz

grumd wrote:

Tags: i want to meet you
Maybe delete "i" and "to" since they're too short for search and are ignored anyway?

grumd wrote:

Tags: i want to meet you
Maybe delete "i" and "to" since they're too short for search and are ignored anyway?

1. A black.jpg and white.jpg. If there's a white.jpg, a black.jpg is unnecessary, why don't you just recolor the white one into black? And, 640x480 for a white.jpg is too big, especially if combined with another effects from another sprite. Why not 1x1 and resized For a simple storyboard this is fine actually :3 just please remove the black.jpg and its scripts on the .osb
2. 640x480 dimension for the mayaniva.jpg had surely destroyed the image quality, especially for a nice image like this. Why don't you use 800x600 or 1024x768 (doesn't mean you resized the curent one into bigger one) and resize it on the editor? No, 1024x768 for a static sprite like this shouldn't be unrankable, trust me
3. The bglight.jpg doesn't look different compared with the background. Why don't you make it "lighter" i mean, brighter?

1. I see you are using black.jpg to cover the background. This is just ridiculous imo, why don't you just fade the background itself?
   
   1. To do this, first disable the actual song background, and add the background into the editor as a storyboard sprite. Make sure you differentiate the filename for the actual background and the background for storyboard. Add this code to the script:
      

      Sprite,Background,TopLeft,"INSERT-YOUR-ACTUAL-BACKGROUND-NAME-HERE.jpg",0,0

      Remember, actual background name, not background for sprite name.
   2. If successful, when you entered the editor, the editor background should only shown black.
   3. Then you can add the background sprite and you can animate it as you wish (fade, move, etc)
2. 02:44:073 - 03:16:073 - SB Load approaches 7.37x. You are using two 640x480 sprite, and rotate and fade them in the same time. The only solution to fix this is by using another effects on it. I have one that looks like you but with different effects and lower SB load.
   

   Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"SB\yellowspace.jpg",320,240
    L,162073,9
     M,0,0,4000,960,240,-320,240
    F,0,162073,,0
    F,0,164073,165073,0,0.25
    F,0,196073,,0
   Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"SB\yellowspace.jpg",320,240
    L,164073,8
     M,0,0,4000,960,240,-320,240
    F,0,162073,,0
    F,0,164073,165073,0,0.25
    F,0,196073,,0

   Just replace the current yellowspace.jpg properties with this.

1. No lyrics? The storyboard will be much better if you could add lyrics here
2. I think the title text will be better if placed here 01:08:065 - 01:12:065

inverness wrote:

okay okay >.<

[Sprites Optimization]
Optimizations for storyboard sprite filesize, dimensions, and property

1. A black.jpg and white.jpg. If there's a white.jpg, a black.jpg is unnecessary, why don't you just recolor the white one into black? And, 640x480 for a white.jpg is too big, especially if combined with another effects from another sprite. Why not 1x1 and resized For a simple storyboard this is fine actually :3 just please remove the black.jpg and its scripts on the .osb I still need both personally, plus I tried to use 4x3 but it won't scale properly to 160x o.o
2. 640x480 dimension for the mayaniva.jpg had surely destroyed the image quality, especially for a nice image like this. Why don't you use 800x600 or 1024x768 (doesn't mean you resized the curent one into bigger one) and resize it on the editor? No, 1024x768 for a static sprite like this shouldn't be unrankable, trust me ...gambarnya dikasih lewat Facebook orz, yah...
3. The bglight.jpg doesn't look different compared with the background. Why don't you make it "lighter" i mean, brighter? It's already brighter actually, made a bit more brighter though

[Technical Optimization]
Optimizations for storyboard commands, scripts, and SB Load

1. I see you are using black.jpg to cover the background. This is just ridiculous imo, why don't you just fade the background itself?
   
   1. To do this, first disable the actual song background, and add the background into the editor as a storyboard sprite. Make sure you differentiate the filename for the actual background and the background for storyboard. Add this code to the script:
      

      Sprite,Background,TopLeft,"INSERT-YOUR-ACTUAL-BACKGROUND-NAME-HERE.jpg",0,0

      Remember, actual background name, not background for sprite name.
   2. If successful, when you entered the editor, the editor background should only shown black.
   3. Then you can add the background sprite and you can animate it as you wish (fade, move, etc) I used F command here, it reduces SB load as well and already used to it orz
2. 02:44:073 - 03:16:073 - SB Load approaches 7.37x. You are using two 640x480 sprite, and rotate and fade them in the same time. The only solution to fix this is by using another effects on it. I have one that looks like you but with different effects and lower SB load.
   

   Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"SB\yellowspace.jpg",320,240
    L,162073,9
     M,0,0,4000,960,240,-320,240
    F,0,162073,,0
    F,0,164073,165073,0,0.25
    F,0,196073,,0
   Sprite,Foreground,Centre,"SB\yellowspace.jpg",320,240
    L,164073,8
     M,0,0,4000,960,240,-320,240
    F,0,162073,,0
    F,0,164073,165073,0,0.25
    F,0,196073,,0

   Just replace the current yellowspace.jpg properties with this.
   Did something else around here, now it's 4.28x (:

[Optional Optimization]
Optimization for "missing" or misplaced storyboard contents and other design/visual things

1. No lyrics? The storyboard will be much better if you could add lyrics here I don't want to add lyrics :3
2. I think the title text will be better if placed here 01:08:065 - 01:12:065 Done

Well, maybe that's all I can optimize? Good luck for the storyboard and the map rankage b

does storyboard mods also deserve kudos? /slapped