Sync wrote:

Very quick recheck!

SPOILER

[Heart]
01:00:379 (8) - Consider unstacking this so it is easier to read. ok.

[Hurt]
01:51:567 (5) - Add the new combo here instead of the next note to be consistent (and it makes more sense). fixed.
01:54:379 (4) - Add a hit circle here to keep the beat going keep, it's fine to me
01:57:379 (5) - ^ ^
02:00:567 (7) - Add the new combo here instead of the next note to be consistent (and it makes more sense). fixed.
02:00:567 (7) - ^ .
03:23:067 (6) - ^ fixed.
03:05:067 (1) - Shorten this slider by 2 ticks and add a hit circle at 03:05:442 (2). But I like this and I think it's OK
03:23:067 (6) - Add a new combo here instead .

[Halt]
02:53:067 (1) - Add a whistle here at the beginning of the slider fixed.
03:03:567 (2) - Add a clap at the end of this slider fixed.
03:17:067 (1) - see 02:53:067 (1) fixed.
03:38:817 (2) - Make this slider less obstructed and more straight-forward. fixed.

Very quick reply!
thx.

Bubbled! Good luck.

Wow \:D/

Sync wrote:

Bubbled! Good luck.

Thank you!

祝早日RANK

Komeiji Yuki wrote:

祝早日RANK

Yeah~ 嗯嗯

消失了OAO？顶一下看看

eikkaleyd wrote:

消失了OAO？顶一下看看

之前頂一個有自己GD的泡圖就被說別頂不然會看不出是老泡圖

可這圖已經一個月沒人動了╮(╯▽╰)╭

Komeiji Yuki wrote:

之前頂一個有自己GD的泡圖就被說別頂不然會看不出是老泡圖

可這圖已經一個月沒人動了╮(╯▽╰)╭

现在看得出是老泡图的:3 有显示的啦

[Easy]
00:26:817 (1) - A little soon after a spinner for an Easy. I'd give more time to recover.
00:32:817 (1) - ^
01:02:817 (1) - ^
01:08:817 (1) - ^
02:16:317 (1) - ^ This is also covered really badly by the spinnerosu images and stuff.
02:22:317 (1) - ^
03:02:817 (1) - ^
03:23:067 (1,2) - This overlap was kinda of strange to see after the seeing entire map free of these up to this point
03:29:817 (1) - A little soon after a spinner for an Easy. I'd give more time to recover.
03:35:817 (1) - ^
03:41:817 (1) - ^
03:44:067 (1,2) - Another small overlap
03:47:817 (1) - Soon after spinner

[Hard]
01:22:692 (6,3,6) - As cool as this pattern is, I can't see these sliders at all due to hitbursts. You're going to have to rethink these, sorry.

[Insane]
01:28:317 - The accelerated spacing makes sense until here where the phrase is descending. You should follow suit and reduce spacing back to normal here.
01:33:473 (2) - This following anything in the music?
01:42:192 (1) - Move this up and left 3 grids to adjust for stacking
02:41:817 - Same thing as the last time with the accelerated spacing

Garven wrote:

[Easy]
00:26:817 (1) - A little soon after a spinner for an Easy. I'd give more time to recover. It should be fine now
00:32:817 (1) - ^ ^
01:02:817 (1) - ^ ^
01:08:817 (1) - ^ ^
02:16:317 (1) - ^ This is also covered really badly by the spinnerosu images and stuff. also note place changed.
02:22:317 (1) - ^ ^
03:02:817 (1) - ^ Oh,actually there is a clap existed. If I deleted this,it'll be a weird vacancy before the next note. So I want to keep this rhythm.
03:23:067 (1,2) - This overlap was kinda of strange to see after the seeing entire map free of these up to this point Fixed by increasing DS a little bit.
03:29:817 (1) - A little soon after a spinner for an Easy. I'd give more time to recover. Fixed.
03:35:817 (1) - ^ ^
03:41:817 (1) - ^ ^
03:44:067 (1,2) - Another small overlap Fixed.
03:47:817 (1) - Soon after spinner Fixed.

[Hard]
01:22:692 (6,3,6) - As cool as this pattern is, I can't see these sliders at all due to hitbursts. You're going to have to rethink these, sorry. OK,it's better now~

[Insane]
01:28:317 - The accelerated spacing makes sense until here where the phrase is descending. You should follow suit and reduce spacing back to normal here.
01:33:473 (2) - This following anything in the music?
01:42:192 (1) - Move this up and left 3 grids to adjust for stacking
02:41:817 - Same thing as the last time with the accelerated spacing

Yeah~

Thank you Garven !

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lol in Graveyard // Waiting eikka's reply to this mod~

03:00:567 (1) - I would recommend you map through the spinner then. Using a slider -> circle would work fine considering the strong vocal.

Garven wrote:

[Insane]
01:28:317 - The accelerated spacing makes sense until here where the phrase is descending. You should follow suit and reduce spacing back to normal here. Change into something follow the vocal (pitch?)
01:33:473 (2) - This following anything in the music? I heard something like stream from 01:33:192, anyway if it's hard to play then I changed it
01:42:192 (1) - Move this up and left 3 grids to adjust for stacking Changed, not so sure if I understood this right....
02:41:817 - Same thing as the last time with the accelerated spacing Tried to do the same thing

03:00:567 (1) - I would recommend you map through the spinner then. Using a slider -> circle would work fine considering the strong vocal. Um, I think it's fine to follow the background music, too. So, no change here.

Thanks for modding

http://puu.sh/XZUn

eikkaleyd wrote:

Garven wrote:

[Insane]
01:28:317 - The accelerated spacing makes sense until here where the phrase is descending. You should follow suit and reduce spacing back to normal here. Change into something follow the vocal (pitch?)
01:33:473 (2) - This following anything in the music? I heard something like stream from 01:33:192, anyway if it's hard to play then I changed it
01:42:192 (1) - Move this up and left 3 grids to adjust for stacking Changed, not so sure if I understood this right....
02:41:817 - Same thing as the last time with the accelerated spacing Tried to do the same thing

03:00:567 (1) - I would recommend you map through the spinner then. Using a slider -> circle would work fine considering the strong vocal. Um, I think it's fine to follow the background music, too. So, no change here.

Thanks for modding

http://puu.sh/XZUn

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OK ,updated!

Ah, sorry. That spinner comment was for the easy, not the Insane.

Garven wrote:

Ah, sorry. That spinner comment was for the easy, not the Insane.

Oh, sorry.

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Change the spinner into slider and circle ,hope that I do it right.

[Insane]
02:42:192 (6,7) - Uh, this spacing can't be intentional. Fix that please.

Garven wrote:

[Insane]
02:42:192 (6,7) - Uh, this spacing can't be intentional. Fix that please.

Done.
http://puu.sh/YdD8

eikkaleyd wrote:

Garven wrote:

[Insane]
02:42:192 (6,7) - Uh, this spacing can't be intentional. Fix that please.

Done.
http://puu.sh/YdD8

OK ,Updated.

Crap, sorry, a couple more things.

[Easy]
01:03:192 (1) - New combo
02:22:692 (1) - New combo

Garven wrote:

Crap, sorry, a couple more things.

[Easy]
01:03:192 (1) - New combo
02:22:692 (1) - New combo

OK , fixed ~

Rebubbled!

Garven wrote:

Rebubbled!

XD.. Thanks Garven~

......

還以為要rank了........

Komeiji Yuki wrote:

......

還以為要rank了........

lol 我也是這樣想的...

[Halt]
03:23:067 (1) - having the wrong end of the slider being the closest one to the next note can be confusing for beginners; I suggest that you do an h-flip and re-space to avoid this issue

[Hate]
02:50:067 (1) - you can touch up the blanket on this one by using the approach circle on 2 to space the slider properly
02:51:567 (3) - ^ but with 4

[Hurt]
00:23:817 (4,5) - you might want to switch these two notes to make a more consistent triangle pattern (right-bot-left-right-bot instead of right-bot-right-left-bot)
00:42:567 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this is beautiful
00:59:817 (4,5) - as with 0:23
01:56:629 (4) - i dont think properly spacing 3-4 to match 2-3 would hurt your map
01:58:129 (4) - ^

[Taiko]
03:03:004 (2,2) - these notes are both on offbeats, and honestly it feels a bit weird having notes on them but not on their respective white ticks. It might be better to add a note 1/2 before each of these to keep the rhythm going.
04:03:567 (1) - this is a little bit ridiculous in length...I mean seriously a spinner 120+ long? I'm sure you can find a better way to close the song than that.
Additionally, I think that changing the sv to match the speed of the music would make your map 20% more awesome just sayin'

[Heart]
00:16:129 (6) - maybe flip this vertically so that there isn't any overlap with 5
00:18:192 (8) - stacking this under the end of 6 would also be helpful
00:29:067 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I think you were trying to make a pattern of some sort here but it isn't parcing. The notes are perfectly readable, but it doesn't look like anything organized.
00:36:754 (2) - really, try to avoid messy overlaps like this, it's much more pretty to either move the note entirely out from under the other one or to stack them
00:53:817 (6) - try to move this a bit farther away from 4 so that there isn't overlap please
01:06:192 (7) - putting this under 1 would be rad :3
01:22:879 (7) - more messy overlap
02:08:817 (3,5) - the effect youre going for here is really cool but it's not coming across because the notes are too close together maybe move them 1 grid farther apart?
04:03:098 (2,3) - hate to say it but if you listen to this very carefully you will discover that the 2 and 3 both belong on 1/6 spacing: http://puu.sh/14lOg

This is an excellent map and shows a lot of promise, but I think that there is still a little polish yet to be applied for it to reach its full potential :3 I wish you the best map possible and have a nice day!

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

[Halt]
03:23:067 (1) - having the wrong end of the slider being the closest one to the next note can be confusing for beginners; I suggest that you do an h-flip and re-space to avoid this issue OK ,make some changes

[Hate]
02:50:067 (1) - you can touch up the blanket on this one by using the approach circle on 2 to space the slider properly
02:51:567 (3) - ^ but with 4 lol ,look like optional ,but still adjusted.

[Hurt]
00:23:817 (4,5) - you might want to switch these two notes to make a more consistent triangle pattern (right-bot-left-right-bot instead of right-bot-right-left-bot) well, I don't intent to make triangle pattern there ,the pattern can be played more fluently imo
00:42:567 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8) - this is beautiful ^ ^
00:59:817 (4,5) - as with 0:23 Yes, as with 0:23
01:56:629 (4) - i dont think properly spacing 3-4 to match 2-3 would hurt your map I put 4 in the middle for symmetry
01:58:129 (4) - ^ ^

[Taiko]
03:03:004 (2,2) - these notes are both on offbeats, and honestly it feels a bit weird having notes on them but not on their respective white ticks. It might be better to add a note 1/2 before each of these to keep the rhythm going.
04:03:567 (1) - this is a little bit ridiculous in length...I mean seriously a spinner 120+ long? I'm sure you can find a better way to close the song than that.
Additionally, I think that changing the sv to match the speed of the music would make your map 20% more awesome just sayin'

[Heart]
00:16:129 (6) - maybe flip this vertically so that there isn't any overlap with 5
00:18:192 (8) - stacking this under the end of 6 would also be helpful
00:29:067 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I think you were trying to make a pattern of some sort here but it isn't parcing. The notes are perfectly readable, but it doesn't look like anything organized.
00:36:754 (2) - really, try to avoid messy overlaps like this, it's much more pretty to either move the note entirely out from under the other one or to stack them
00:53:817 (6) - try to move this a bit farther away from 4 so that there isn't overlap please
01:06:192 (7) - putting this under 1 would be rad :3
01:22:879 (7) - more messy overlap
02:08:817 (3,5) - the effect youre going for here is really cool but it's not coming across because the notes are too close together maybe move them 1 grid farther apart?
04:03:098 (2,3) - hate to say it but if you listen to this very carefully you will discover that the 2 and 3 both belong on 1/6 spacing: http://puu.sh/14lOg

This is an excellent map and shows a lot of promise, but I think that there is still a little polish yet to be applied for it to reach its full potential :3 I wish you the best map possible and have a nice day!

Will update after guests replying this mod

Thank you , SFG

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

[Heart]
00:16:129 (6) - maybe flip this vertically so that there isn't any overlap with 5 Done
00:18:192 (8) - stacking this under the end of 6 would also be helpful Done, also changed the spacing of these notes
00:29:067 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - I think you were trying to make a pattern of some sort here but it isn't parcing. The notes are perfectly readable, but it doesn't look like anything organized. I see, and I tried to make a new pattern.I think it also fits the vocal.
00:36:754 (2) - really, try to avoid messy overlaps like this, it's much more pretty to either move the note entirely out from under the other one or to stack them Since I cannot find a good place to put it, I did stack them~
00:53:817 (6) - try to move this a bit farther away from 4 so that there isn't overlap please Done
01:06:192 (7) - putting this under 1 would be rad :3 Hmm, won't that be too far to jump and unexpected? Sorry I didn't change it right now~
01:22:879 (7) - more messy overlap In fact these were all stacked at first, but many people told me it's bad to do so many stacking... OK, do some change!
02:08:817 (3,5) - the effect youre going for here is really cool but it's not coming across because the notes are too close together maybe move them 1 grid farther apart? Maybe done? I forgot what it WAS LIKE after doing this...
04:03:098 (2,3) - hate to say it but if you listen to this very carefully you will discover that the 2 and 3 both belong on 1/6 spacing: http://puu.sh/14lOg Oh wow! I didn't notice that, really thank you!

This is an excellent map and shows a lot of promise, but I think that there is still a little polish yet to be applied for it to reach its full potential :3 I wish you the best map possible and have a nice day!

Thank you for your patient modding~!

http://puu.sh/15vwd

eikkaleyd wrote:

Saturos-fangirl wrote:

04:03:098 (2,3) - hate to say it but if you listen to this very carefully you will discover that the 2 and 3 both belong on 1/6 spacing: http://puu.sh/14lOg Oh wow! I didn't notice that, really thank you!

This is an excellent map and shows a lot of promise, but I think that there is still a little polish yet to be applied for it to reach its full potential :3 I wish you the best map possible and have a nice day!

Oh,wait. The mod should be adopted in each diff. 0 0;

Well ,updated.

Hi ~ sirjuyt ~

pop map for mod ~



Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions




Just few small thing ~ 这里浏览图显示是 太鼓的, 把太鼓难度和BG 删了重新 full sumbit，然后再加回来 选osu难度 full submit 就可以了 ~

Call me back recheck ~ when you are ready ~

Kawayi Rika wrote:

Hi ~ sirjuyt ~ ~hi

pop map for mod ~



Red : Must be fixed
Pink : Should be fixed
Purple : Just suggestions

[Heart]

1. 01:08:817 (1,2) - Try make blanket. ok
2. 02:16:317 (1) - Move to center? ^
3. [color=#FF00FF]02:25:317 (4) - Move to X:188 Y:51 symmetry with 02:24:942 (3). ^

[Hurt]

1. [color=#FF00FF]00:26:442 (1) - Use this code,make more better slider.
   

   196,228,26442,6,0,B|256:248|322:226,1,120.000004577637

   OK.
2. 00:32:817 (2) - ^
   

   196,144,32817,2,0,B|256:128|316:144,1,120.000004577637

   ^
3. 01:59:254 (2) - Move 1 grid left symmetry with 01:59:442 (3). Fixed.
4. 02:06:004 (4) - Ctrl+R flow much better. 嗯，玩起來我是覺得兩邊由上而下是比較順手的~

[Halt]

1. 02:27:567 (2) - Flip slider like this.
   OK.
2. 02:54:567 (2) - Move 2 grid right symmetry with 02:53:067 (1). 這樣前後DS多了一點，我把(1)拉進一點吧

Just few small thing ~ 这里浏览图显示是 太鼓的, 把太鼓难度和BG 删了重新 full sumbit，然后再加回来 选osu难度 full submit 就可以了 ~ 喔 知道了!

Call me back recheck ~ when you are ready ~

Thank you ,Rika!

help eikka fixed!

[Taiko]
That last kiai section is kind of awkward since you can finish the spinner long before the kiai runs out. I'd remove it or add a note at 04:08:067 - to help finish the phrase.

Garven wrote:

[Taiko]
That last kiai section is kind of awkward since you can finish the spinner long before the kiai runs out. I'd remove it or add a note at 04:08:067 - to help finish the phrase.

Oh ,this kiai section is I help him add ,so I think remove it would be better.

Updated.

Great! Ranked!

Congrats!

Well I have to complain about Heart diff. These jumps are very unintuitive and tiring. eikkaleyd, please do something better next time.

congrates for the rank~~

Garven wrote:

Great! Ranked!

Thank you Garven！

and thank you all ~

another touhou map
yay