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Nagarekawa Girls - Mirai Fanfare (TV Size)

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-SukiKi-
7 posts
Joined December 2013
Topic Starter
-SukiKi-
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2015年2月27日 at 下午 09:20:08

Artist: Nagarekawa Girls
Title: Mirai Fanfare (TV Size)
Source: 普通の女子校生が【ろこどる】やってみた。
Tags: 流川ガールズ Nagarekawa Girls ミライファンファーレ Miraifanfare ろこどる locodol
BPM: 178
Filesize: 19429kb
Play Time: 01:28
Difficulties Available:
  1. Easy (1.61 stars, 94 notes)
  2. Hard (3.28 stars, 274 notes)
  3. Insane (4.67 stars, 367 notes)
  4. Normal (2.07 stars, 152 notes)
Download: Nagarekawa Girls - Mirai Fanfare (TV Size)
Download: Nagarekawa Girls - Mirai Fanfare (TV Size) (no video)
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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HELLO ! HAVE FUN :D~

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1/8/2015 first fixed thank for VINXIS modding :D and i fixed EZ & NM voice

1/14/2015 second fixed thank for Erina :3
Last edited by -SukiKi- , edited 40 times in total.
SeminarKT
SeminarKT
nice
AnOzi Changle
119 posts
Joined July 2014
AnOzi Changle
Hard
00:39:294 (4,5,1,1) - 感觉很奇怪 前面节拍很紧凑 这段节奏没变的情况下 4,5 1,1 之间放空和吃了只苍蝇一样难受
00:43:676 (1,2,3,4) - 和上面相反 节奏慢了拍子却很急
01:00:192 (5,1,2) - 这里不适合用整拍滑条 继续用半拍滑条更好
01:01:541 (3,4) - ^ 往返同不适用
01:02:384 (1,2,3,4,1,2,3,1,2,3) - 整体前移半拍
01:05:249 (3) - 移动后同01:05:754 (1,2)放置
01:06:428 (1,2,3) - 连打没有01:05:754 (1,2)效果好
01:10:979 (2) - 删除 并将01:11:148 (3,4,5,1,2,3) - 整体前移半拍
01:13:170 (4) - 删除 换成转盘
01:21:934 (7) - 个人觉得kiai在这里就可以结束了


蠢mod不要在意。我只是来骗kudosu的（泥垢
VINXIS
Featured Artist
3,161 posts
Joined April 2014
VINXIS
alright this map needs som work B^)

from me moddin q


alright you look like a new mapper. If you have any questions for me about my mod, feel free to pm me in game!

general
end kiai time on 01:21:091
take off letterbox during breaks and widescreen support
make some combo colours too
every part you used 100% volume, change it to 80% volume
EZ
00:04:237 (2) - nc
00:04:237 (2,3) - use the same slider shape
00:05:923 (4) - nc
00:05:923 (4,5,6,7) - use the same slider shape
00:08:619 (8) - nc
00:09:631 (1) - remove nc
00:10:979 (3) - nc
00:09:631 (1,2,3,4) - use the same slider shape
00:12:664 (6,1) - fix overlap
00:12:327 (5,7) - stack
00:13:676 (1) - too curved
00:16:372 (1,3) - stack
00:18:395 (4) - add another repeat. And make it less curved
00:22:103 (4) - nc
00:23:114 (1) - remove nc
00:22:103 (4,2) - stack
00:23:114 (1,3) - fix overlap
00:25:473 (1,2) - make them the same slider shape, and Ctrl+G 00:26:485 (2) -
00:29:181 (5) - add another repeat
00:30:192 (1,2,1,2,3,4) - same slider pls
00:35:586 (3) - nc
00:39:631 (1,3) - fix overlap
00:40:642 (2) - nc
00:43:339 (5) - nc
00:46:372 (8) - nc
00:47:721 (1,2) - imo these don't fit. You should just use one slider in 1/6 BSD and have it repeat once like this, and make the slider start at 00:48:058
00:49:743 (11,12) - fix overlap
00:49:069 (3) - nc
01:20:754 (1,1) - starts too close
Also tbh sliders with only 2 repeats don't work most of the time. I'd suggest you change that :x
NM
00:05:923 (1,2) - this overlaps with the part before idk
00:05:923 (1,4) - overlap, and the slider isn't horizontal
00:10:979 (1,2) - same slider pls
00:11:653 (2) - Ctrl+G
00:15:698 (5,6) - x:312 y:8
00:23:114 (3,5) - x:200 y:108
00:23:451 (4) - stack on slider
00:24:125 (6) - Ctrl+G
00:27:496 (1,1,1) - remove ncs and same slider pls
00:32:552 (7) - nc
00:34:237 (10,1) - fix overlap
00:37:271 (6,8) - same slider pls
00:37:945 (7) - nc
00:42:327 (1) - remove nc
00:43:339 (3) - nc
00:44:350 (5,1,2) - fix overlap
00:46:035 (3) - nc
00:47:721 (1,2) - same thing about the timing and stuff. It feels off
00:50:417 (7,1) - overlap
01:04:237 (1) - remove nc
01:04:911 (2) - nc
mmm all the sliders being straight are kinda eh
01:09:631 (1,2) - same slider pls
01:10:305 (2,3) - overlap
01:16:372 (3,6) - fix stack
01:19:069 (1) - remove nc
01:18:395 (1,2) - fix stack
01:27:327 (2,5,6) - overlap
01:28:676 (5) - nc
HD
ok this one looks cool dam
00:16:372 (5,6,7,8) - tbh u sud stack these
00:18:732 (2,4) - stack
00:22:777 (1) - remove nc
00:23:114 (1) - Ctrl+G
00:23:451 (2) - ^
00:30:867 (4) - ^
00:30:867 (4,2) - overlap
00:36:597 (1,1,1,1) - om g
00:39:631 (1,1) - change to a circle and then a slider at 00:39:968
00:42:664 (1,1) - overlap
00:54:125 (5) - nc
00:54:799 (1) - remove nc
01:02:889 (3,4) - same slider and Ctrl+G, and then ctrl+G the slider on the left
01:04:575 (1,3) - overlap
01:07:777 (6) - nc
01:08:282 (1) - remove nc
01:08:788 (2,3,4,1) - overlap
01:14:350 (3,4) - same slider
01:17:384 (2,3) - Ctrl+G each seperately
01:17:384 (2,3,1) - overlap
01:28:676 (4,5) - replace with slider
I have no energy to mod the insane imsorry

tl;dr the map has potential but it is really rough and it could be much better than it is rn c:
good luck!
-SukiKi-
7 posts
Joined December 2013
Topic Starter
-SukiKi-
general
end kiai time on 01:21:091 =>ok, all changed
take off letterbox during breaks and widescreen support
make some combo colours too
every part you used 100% volume, change it to 80% volume =>ok , and i try to used 60%

EZ
00:04:237 (2) - nc =>done
00:04:237 (2,3) - use the same slider shape done
00:05:923 (4) - nc ok
00:05:923 (4,5,6,7) - use the same slider shape ok,i changed
00:08:619 (8) - nc done
00:09:631 (1) - remove nc done
00:10:979 (3) - nc done
00:09:631 (1,2,3,4) - use the same slider shape ok
00:12:664 (6,1) - fix overlap done
00:12:327 (5,7) - stack done
00:13:676 (1) - too curved done
00:16:372 (1,3) - stack done
00:18:395 (4) - add another repeat. And make it less curved done
00:22:103 (4) - nc done
00:23:114 (1) - remove nc done
00:22:103 (4,2) - stack done
00:23:114 (1,3) - fix overlap done
00:25:473 (1,2) - make them the same slider shape, and Ctrl+G 00:26:485 (2) - done
00:29:181 (5) - add another repeat done
00:30:192 (1,2,1,2,3,4) - same slider pls done
00:35:586 (3) - nc done
00:39:631 (1,3) - fix overlap done
00:40:642 (2) - nc done
00:43:339 (5) - nc done
00:46:372 (8) - nc done
00:47:721 (1,2) - imo these don't fit. You should just use one slider in 1/6 BSD and have it repeat once like this, and make the slider start at 00:48:058 done
00:49:743 (11,12) - fix overlap done
00:49:069 (3) - nc done
01:20:754 (1,1) - starts too close done
Also tbh sliders with only 2 repeats don't work most of the time. I'd suggest you change that :xOK,i change
NM
00:05:923 (1,2) - this overlaps with the part before idk I fixed
00:05:923 (1,4) - overlap, and the slider isn't horizontal done
00:10:979 (1,2) - same slider pls done
00:11:653 (2) - Ctrl+G done
00:15:698 (5,6) - x:312 y:8 done
00:23:114 (3,5) - x:200 y:108 done
00:23:451 (4) - stack on slider done
00:24:125 (6) - Ctrl+G done
00:27:496 (1,1,1) - remove ncs and same slider pls done
00:32:552 (7) - nc done
00:34:237 (10,1) - fix overlap done,i fixed
00:37:271 (6,8) - same slider pls done
00:37:945 (7) - nc done
00:42:327 (1) - remove nc done
00:43:339 (3) - nc done
00:44:350 (5,1,2) - fix overlap done
00:46:035 (3) - nc done
00:47:721 (1,2) - same thing about the timing and stuff. It feels off OK
00:50:417 (7,1) - overlap done
01:04:237 (1) - remove nc done
01:04:911 (2) - nc
mmm all the sliders being straight are kinda eh i changed
01:09:631 (1,2) - same slider pls OK,I made same and more mistakes ,sorry
01:10:305 (2,3) - overlap done
01:16:372 (3,6) - fix stack done
01:19:069 (1) - remove nc done
01:18:395 (1,2) - fix stack done
01:27:327 (2,5,6) - overlap done
01:28:676 (5) - ncdone

HD
ok this one looks cool dam
00:16:372 (5,6,7,8) - tbh u sud stack these ok
00:18:732 (2,4) - stack done
00:22:777 (1) - remove nc done
00:23:114 (1) - Ctrl+G done
00:23:451 (2) - ^ ^
00:30:867 (4) - ^ ^
00:30:867 (4,2) - overlap done
00:36:597 (1,1,1,1) - om g I know this sentence :P,i fixed
00:39:631 (1,1) - change to a circle and then a slider at 00:39:968 done
00:42:664 (1,1) - overlapdone
00:54:125 (5) - ncdone
00:54:799 (1) - remove ncdone
01:02:889 (3,4) - same slider and Ctrl+G, and then ctrl+G the slider on the leftdone
01:04:575 (1,3) - overlapdone
01:07:777 (6) - ncdone
01:08:282 (1) - remove ncdone
01:08:788 (2,3,4,1) - overlapdone
01:14:350 (3,4) - same sliderdone
01:17:384 (2,3) - Ctrl+G each seperately
01:17:384 (2,3,1) - overlapdone
01:28:676 (4,5) - replace with sliderdone


Thanks for modding~

Yes, i'm a new mapper . i have more problems in this beatmap,but IDK to fix these problem. Thx u. :)

:D
Erina
114 posts
Joined August 2012
Erina
Hello!~ From my mod for voice queue~

[General]
  1. I believe that the name of the song is "Mirai Fanfare" not "Miraifanfre".
  2. Add "opening futsuu no joshikousei ga [locodol] yattemita" to the tags.
  3. If the insane is made by the user called "idol," add "idol" to the tags as well.
  4. 00:56:653 - Kiai time should generally start on a large white tick. Consider having it start here!
  5. This is mostly a problem in the insane, but some of the other diffs run into this too. A lot of the NCs in this map don't make sense to me :o Consider the following: NCs should be added whenever the music enters a new melody, or a new line. Generally, this means that NCs should fall on the large white ticks., or at least whenever that's possible. Try following that advice, and don't overuse them! NC combos generally up to 10 notes long are fine.
[Idol's Insane]
  1. A lot of the NCs in this map don't make sense to me :o Consider the following: NCs should be added whenever the music enters a new melody, or a new line. Generally, this means that NCs should fall on the large white ticks., or at least whenever that's possible. Try following that advice, and don't overuse them! NC combos generally up to 10 notes long are fine.
  2. Some of your patterns look kinda random, consider using guides like this (https://osu.ppy.sh/forum/t/208596) to make your sliders/circles and positioning look cleaner.
  3. As a whole, pay more attention to the music while mapping. Look at what parts are the downbeats, and what parts need emphasis. Build your patterns around the music.
  4. I'll mention what some examples of the above statements below, but you're on your own to fix the rest!~
  5. 00:02:889 (1,2,3,4) - Pattern looks odd and kinda messy, consider repositioning
  6. 00:03:563 (3) - Ctrl+G for better flow, 00:03:900 (4) - Ctrl+G this one too if so
  7. 00:06:766 (5) - Remove NC from this, and add NC to 00:06:934 (6) - , and remove NC from 00:07:608 (1) - . This makes more sense, since the music here is split into two general sections divided by the white tick.
  8. 00:11:148 (2,3) - Flow here isn't that great. I'd recommend making 00:11:485 (3) - a copy of 00:11:148 (2) - , with ctrl+j and ctrl+h. You'll have to fix the positioning of the objects afterwards however.
  9. 00:11:822 (1) - No need for NC here
  10. 00:13:170 (1) - No need for NC here
  11. 00:13:507 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - This section doesn't follow the music well, as in spacing doesn't match up, and the pattern doesn't on a downbeat. 00:14:518 (1) - Delete this note, then move 00:13:507 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - to the next 1/2 tick. Then, make a note on 00:13:507 (1) - that is positioned at x:264 y:264. This plays better, and makes the pattern more fitting.
  12. 00:17:552 (1) - Remove NC, add NC on 00:17:889 (2) - if you want
  13. From here on out, my main concern is that everything seems equally spaced, aside from some notes under others. Try varying the distance snap somewhat, to emphasis different parts of the music.
  14. 00:21:934 (5,1) - Swap NCs
  15. 00:23:619 (1) - Remove NC
  16. 00:24:294 (3) - Add NC...and so on. I'll stop mentioning NCs here.
  17. 00:25:473 (4,5) - If you make these sliders symmetrical (copies of each other, just with a different rotation), it'd look better.
  18. 00:26:822 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This part doesn't seem to fit the current part you're mapping - it would probably work better if you started it at 00:27:159 (1) - . That way, the guitar in the background matches up better to the individual notes.
  19. 00:30:024 (1,2,3,4) - Make all of these sliders have the same curvature - copy them and rotate them to position. It'd look cleaner.
  20. 00:30:698 (3) - ctrl+g for better flow
  21. 00:30:361 (2,4) - The overlap between the two sliders look ugly. Try avoiding overlapping sliders, unless it's perfectly intentional and you know that it looks good.
  22. 00:37:608 (3,1) - You could blanket these sliders!
  23. 00:40:473 (1,2,3) - Starting from this section, a lower SV/a lower distance spacing would be nice. The song feels slower/softer/more relaxed here, so it'd be nice if your map could reflect that. Don't be afraid to use longer sliders too
  24. 00:51:597 (2,3) - Consider moving to 344/96, looks better and creates a blanket with previous note
  25. 00:57:159 (1,3) - Try blanketing these sliders
  26. 00:59:687 (1,2,3,4,5) - These notes would play and work better as an individual pattern if they started on the downbeat. I recommend removing 00:58:844 (3) - , then moving 00:59:013 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - back a 1/2 tick, and then placing a note on 01:00:530 (7) - at 272/128. It plays better, since the individual notes match up better when they start with the start of the line with the vocals "Fann-fa-re." If you've noticed, I'm really bad at explaining stuff :?
  27. 01:02:384 (5,1) - Try blanketing these notes as well
  28. 01:05:249 (3,4) - Make these sliders symmetrical (copy one of them, and make the other a ctrl+h ctrl+j of the copied one)

    In general, you've got the basic idea, and definitely the potential to make this a lot better. Pay more attention to the music, and make your patterns reflect the music more.
[Hard]
  1. As a general rule of thumb, avoid slider/circle collisions and sliders overlapping onto other sliders, unless it was 100% intentional and you are extremely sure that it looks good, because generally, they look bad.
  2. NC problems are also apparent. Go look at my general comments for more information!~
  3. 00:03:058 (3) - Add NC here because of the different spacing from the previous notes. Remove NC here: 00:03:732 (3) -
  4. 00:05:754 (1,2,3,4,5) - You could make this look a lot cleaner by getting rid of the unnecessary overlap, and taking advantage of blankets. Try this: http://puu.sh/er6XP/703a515cfc.jpg
  5. 00:08:619 (1,2) - Make these the same shape as the first slider (copy the first slider, and then rotate it using ctrl+shift+r), then move 1 to 280/136 so it looks better with the previous pattern (no overlap, triangle formation). Modify 00:08:957 (2,3) - accordingly so that the blanket still exists.
  6. 00:13:844 (1,2) - Make these the same shape/slider, looks cleaner.
  7. 00:19:069 (1) - This is a really strong downbeat, there should DEFINITELY be a NC here, since it's the start of the verse! Remove NC here: 00:19:237 (2) -
  8. 00:20:249 (6) - Add NC
  9. 00:21:091 (1) - Remove NC
  10. 00:22:271 (2) - Stack with the end of 00:21:428 (2) -
  11. 00:31:372 (2,3) - Make these sliders the same shape
  12. 00:34:743 (4,5) - This spacing is hard to read because of how small it suddenly is
  13. 00:35:586 (2,3) - Try to make this blanket better
  14. 00:43:339 (2,1,2) - This spacing might be a bit confusing for a hard, I'm not that sure though
  15. 00:50:249 (5,1,2) - Try something like this: http://puu.sh/er8sn/6d2e0d679b.jpg better blanket imo
  16. 00:51:428 (3) - Start of a new line, with different spacing. Add NC.
  17. 00:59:350 (2,3) - Move to 160/168, then adjust the sliders afterwards accordingly
  18. 01:05:249 (3,1) - This spacing is a bit too hard to read. Try putting slider #1 under the tail of slider #3.
  19. 01:06:766 (4) - There's a sound here - map it! It feels weird without something here.
  20. 01:10:136 (2,6) - Move these so that they aren't colliding
  21. 01:16:035 (3,5) - ^
  22. 01:19:406 (4) - Move to 56/208
  23. 01:19:912 (1) - This spinner is really sudden and uncalled for imo
  24. 01:22:440 (2,3) - Make these sliders the same shape
  25. 01:28:676 (4) - Add NC
[Normal]
  1. Try to avoid unintentional overlaps, as stated in the Hard difficulty. Also, pay more attention to your blankets - these are key to making your map look a lot cleaner.
  2. 00:12:327 (1,2,3) - This pattern doesn't look that great - mainly because the sharper curve on the third slider. Try making all the sliders the same shape.
  3. 00:16:035 (6) - Move to 272/144 to form a triangle with previous notes, adjust spacing of the notes afterwards accordingly
  4. 00:22:440 (2) - Move to 160/104, looks cleaner
  5. 00:24:799 (1,3) - The overlap between these two sliders looks messy :o
  6. 00:32:552 (1) - Stack with 00:31:204 (4) -
  7. 00:33:058 (2) - Stack with tail of 00:34:237 (4) -
  8. 00:34:237 (4,1,3) - Try making all these sliders have the same shape, so the first two can look parallel in curvature
  9. 00:40:136 (2) - It's not recommended to have notes stacked under a slider tail on normal or easy, bc its too hard to read.
  10. 00:39:631 (1) - This combo line in general is kinda messy with the overlapping and colliding sliders/notes...
  11. 00:49:069 (3,5) - Consider moving to 280/104, forms a equilateral triangle
  12. 00:50:417 (7,2) - This overlap looks messy :o
  13. 00:59:518 (2,3,4) - Try making this into a blanket like this: http://puu.sh/erqhJ/5cc9fe7c52.jpg you'll have to adjust the notes afterwards accordingly.
  14. 01:06:934 (4,1) - This spacing difference is too large for a normal difficulty - a change from 1.00x to 1.71x is too much
  15. 01:21:091 (1,2) - Overlap looks kinda messy
  16. 01:23:788 (3) - After a large gap in music, an NC would be best here
  17. 01:28:676 (5) - Add NC since ending phrase
[Easy]
  1. SV feels a bit too high for a easy difficulty, I'd recommend putting it down at 1.00x if possible.
  2. As a general comment, consider reducing the amount of repeat sliders you have. Too many of them get hard to read sometimes for Easy, and having them everywhere also isn't that creative.
  3. 00:07:945 (4,1) - Use distance snap! This distance spacing is too high compared to the rest of the objects in its vicinity.
  4. 00:12:327 (3) - It's strongly advised NOT to have notes under slider ends on Easy difficulty, because it's too hard for beginners to read.
  5. 00:13:339 (5) - ^
  6. 00:16:035 (4) - ^...I'll stop mentioning this here, find and fix the rest yourself :3
  7. 00:22:103 (1,3) - Current overlap looks ugly, consider moving slider 3 to 352/0, and 00:24:462 (4) - to 440/224. Adjust notes afterwards accordingly.
  8. 00:30:192 (1) - Try doing some different rhythms than just the same types of repeat sliders for this entire section! Add circles, and normal sliders sometimes too.
  9. 00:53:619 (1,2,1,2,3) - Try making these sliders the same shape, it'd look better
  10. 01:01:541 (6) - Try changing this to follow the drums or something that doesn't repeat so quickly
  11. 01:04:237 (1,1) - Remove NCs
  12. 01:16:709 (1) - ^, because they switch singers after this one
  13. 01:19:406 (1) - ^, ^
  14. 01:21:091 (1,1) - I believe you need a full measure's recovery after a spinner on Easy.
  15. 01:26:485 (5) - Add NC because start of a new phrase
Aghhh I have a cold right now and I'm not feeling too well >< feel free to call on me to check your map again sometime later if you want!~

Good luck with rank! I'll probably contact you later so we can confirm what you're going to be singing~~~~~
-SukiKi-
7 posts
Joined December 2013
Topic Starter
-SukiKi-
[General]
  1. I believe that the name of the song is "Mirai Fanfare" not "Miraifanfre". I Changed
  2. Add "opening futsuu no joshikousei ga [locodol] yattemita" to the tags. OK~
  3. If the insane is made by the user called "idol," add "idol" to the tags as well. ummm.. I change insane because made by me~
  4. 00:56:653 - Kiai time should generally start on a large white tick. Consider having it start here! ALL change
  5. This is mostly a problem in the insane, but some of the other diffs run into this too. A lot of the NCs in this map don't make sense to me :o Consider the following: NCs should be added whenever the music enters a new melody, or a new line. Generally, this means that NCs should fall on the large white ticks., or at least whenever that's possible. Try following that advice, and don't overuse them! NC combos generally up to 10 notes long are fine. OK~
[Idol's Insane]
  1. A lot of the NCs in this map don't make sense to me :o Consider the following: NCs should be added whenever the music enters a new melody, or a new line. Generally, this means that NCs should fall on the large white ticks., or at least whenever that's possible. Try following that advice, and don't overuse them! NC combos generally up to 10 notes long are fine. I fixed~
  2. Some of your patterns look kinda random, consider using guides like this (https://osu.ppy.sh/forum/t/208596) to make your sliders/circles and positioning look cleaner. Fixed~
  3. As a whole, pay more attention to the music while mapping. Look at what parts are the downbeats, and what parts need emphasis. Build your patterns around the music. Fixed~
  4. I'll mention what some examples of the above statements below, but you're on your own to fix the rest!~ OK I fixed~
  5. 00:02:889 (1,2,3,4) - Pattern looks odd and kinda messy, consider repositioning Fixed~
  6. 00:03:563 (3) - Ctrl+G for better flow, 00:03:900 (4) - Ctrl+G this one too if so OK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :P
  7. 00:06:766 (5) - Remove NC from this, and add NC to 00:06:934 (6) - , and remove NC from 00:07:608 (1) - . This makes more sense, since the music here is split into two general sections divided by the white tick.OK , but I moved the note because that look is messy !OK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :P
  8. 00:11:148 (2,3) - Flow here isn't that great. I'd recommend making 00:11:485 (3) - a copy of 00:11:148 (2) - , with ctrl+j and ctrl+h. You'll have to fix the positioning of the objects afterwards however.OK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :P
  9. 00:11:822 (1) - No need for NC hereOK~
  10. 00:13:170 (1) - No need for NC hereOK~
  11. 00:13:507 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - This section doesn't follow the music well, as in spacing doesn't match up, and the pattern doesn't on a downbeat. 00:14:518 (1) - Delete this note, then move 00:13:507 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - to the next 1/2 tick. Then, make a note on 00:13:507 (1) - that is positioned at x:264 y:264. This plays better, and makes the pattern more fitting. Erina , I don't know what you say but i have fixed that
  12. 00:17:552 (1) - Remove NC, add NC on 00:17:889 (2) - if you want OK
  13. From here on out, my main concern is that everything seems equally spaced, aside from some notes under others. Try varying the distance snap somewhat, to emphasis different parts of the music.Fixed~
  14. 00:21:934 (5,1) - Swap NCsFixed~
  15. 00:23:619 (1) - Remove NCFixed~
  16. 00:24:294 (3) - Add NC...and so on. I'll stop mentioning NCs here.Fixed~
  17. 00:25:473 (4,5) - If you make these sliders symmetrical (copies of each other, just with a different rotation), it'd look better.Fixed~
  18. 00:26:822 (1,2,3,4,5,6) - This part doesn't seem to fit the current part you're mapping - it would probably work better if you started it at 00:27:159 (1) - . That way, the guitar in the background matches up better to the individual notes.Fixed~
  19. 00:30:024 (1,2,3,4) - Make all of these sliders have the same curvature - copy them and rotate them to position. It'd look cleaner.OK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :P
  20. 00:30:698 (3) - ctrl+g for better flowOK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :O
  21. 00:30:361 (2,4) - The overlap between the two sliders look ugly. Try avoiding overlapping sliders, unless it's perfectly intentional and you know that it looks good.OK~
  22. 00:37:608 (3,1) - You could blanket these sliders!OK
  23. 00:40:473 (1,2,3) - Starting from this section, a lower SV/a lower distance spacing would be nice. The song feels slower/softer/more relaxed here, so it'd be nice if your map could reflect that. Don't be afraid to use longer sliders tooYes! This is a good ider !
  24. 00:51:597 (2,3) - Consider moving to 344/96, looks better and creates a blanket with previous noteOK,but i changed notes
  25. 00:57:159 (1,3) - Try blanketing these slidersOK
  26. 00:59:687 (1,2,3,4,5) - These notes would play and work better as an individual pattern if they started on the downbeat. I recommend removing 00:58:844 (3) - , then moving 00:59:013 (3,4,1,2,3,4,5,6) - back a 1/2 tick, and then placing a note on 01:00:530 (7) - at 272/128. It plays better, since the individual notes match up better when they start with the start of the line with the vocals "Fann-fa-re." If you've noticed, I'm really bad at explaining stuff :? OK , but I changed the note because you say that look is messy :P
  27. 01:02:384 (5,1) - Try blanketing these notes as wellOK
  28. 01:05:249 (3,4) - Make these sliders symmetrical (copy one of them, and make the other a ctrl+h ctrl+j of the copied one)OK ~

    In general, you've got the basic idea, and definitely the potential to make this a lot better. Pay more attention to the music, and make your patterns reflect the music more.really? thank you:D
[Hard]
  1. As a general rule of thumb, avoid slider/circle collisions and sliders overlapping onto other sliders, unless it was 100% intentional and you are extremely sure that it looks good, because generally, they look bad. OK! I know what you say
  2. NC problems are also apparent. Go look at my general comments for more information!~OK, I same insane too
  3. 00:03:058 (3) - Add NC here because of the different spacing from the previous notes. Remove NC here: 00:03:732 (3) - Fixed~
  4. 00:05:754 (1,2,3,4,5) - You could make this look a lot cleaner by getting rid of the unnecessary overlap, and taking advantage of blankets. Try this: http://puu.sh/er6XP/703a515cfc.jpgFixed~WOW ! This very detailed :)
  5. 00:08:619 (1,2) - Make these the same shape as the first slider (copy the first slider, and then rotate it using ctrl+shift+r), then move 1 to 280/136 so it looks better with the previous pattern (no overlap, triangle formation). Modify 00:08:957 (2,3) - accordingly so that the blanket still exists.Fixed~
  6. 00:13:844 (1,2) - Make these the same shape/slider, looks cleaner.Fixed~
  7. 00:19:069 (1) - This is a really strong downbeat, there should DEFINITELY be a NC here, since it's the start of the verse! Remove NC here: 00:19:237 (2) - Fixed~
  8. 00:20:249 (6) - Add NCFixed~
  9. 00:21:091 (1) - Remove NCFixed~
  10. 00:22:271 (2) - Stack with the end of 00:21:428 (2) - Fixed~
  11. 00:31:372 (2,3) - Make these sliders the same shapeFixed~
  12. 00:34:743 (4,5) - This spacing is hard to read because of how small it suddenly isFixed~
  13. 00:35:586 (2,3) - Try to make this blanket betterFixed~
  14. 00:43:339 (2,1,2) - This spacing might be a bit confusing for a hard, I'm not that sure thoughFixed~
  15. 00:50:249 (5,1,2) - Try something like this: http://puu.sh/er8sn/6d2e0d679b.jpg better blanket imoFixed~Thank for your explanation!
  16. 00:51:428 (3) - Start of a new line, with different spacing. Add NC.Fixed~
  17. 00:59:350 (2,3) - Move to 160/168, then adjust the sliders afterwards accordinglyFixed~
  18. 01:05:249 (3,1) - This spacing is a bit too hard to read. Try putting slider #1 under the tail of slider #3.Fixed~
  19. 01:06:766 (4) - There's a sound here - map it! It feels weird without something here.HAHA:) OK
  20. 01:10:136 (2,6) - Move these so that they aren't collidingFixed~
  21. 01:16:035 (3,5) - ^Fixed~
  22. 01:19:406 (4) - Move to 56/208Fixed~
  23. 01:19:912 (1) - This spinner is really sudden and uncalled for imoFixed~
  24. 01:22:440 (2,3) - Make these sliders the same shapeFixed~
  25. 01:28:676 (4) - Add NCFixed~
[Normal]
  1. Try to avoid unintentional overlaps, as stated in the Hard difficulty. Also, pay more attention to your blankets - these are key to making your map look a lot cleaner. OK!! I try to do my best:)
  2. 00:12:327 (1,2,3) - This pattern doesn't look that great - mainly because the sharper curve on the third slider. Try making all the sliders the same shape.Fixed~
  3. 00:16:035 (6) - Move to 272/144 to form a triangle with previous notes, adjust spacing of the notes afterwards accordinglyFixed~
  4. 00:22:440 (2) - Move to 160/104, looks cleanerFixed~
  5. 00:24:799 (1,3) - The overlap between these two sliders looks messy :oYES! That look is very messy .I Fixed~
  6. 00:32:552 (1) - Stack with 00:31:204 (4) - Fixed~
  7. 00:33:058 (2) - Stack with tail of 00:34:237 (4) - Fixed~
  8. 00:34:237 (4,1,3) - Try making all these sliders have the same shape, so the first two can look parallel in curvatureDo same
  9. 00:40:136 (2) - It's not recommended to have notes stacked under a slider tail on normal or easy, bc its too hard to read.Fixed~
  10. 00:39:631 (1) - This combo line in general is kinda messy with the overlapping and colliding sliders/notes...Fixed~
  11. 00:49:069 (3,5) - Consider moving to 280/104, forms a equilateral triangleFixed~triangle :D
  12. 00:50:417 (7,2) - This overlap looks messy :o:O OK
  13. 00:59:518 (2,3,4) - Try making this into a blanket like this: http://puu.sh/erqhJ/5cc9fe7c52.jpg you'll have to adjust the notes afterwards accordingly.Picture Example is too easy to understand :D fixed~
  14. 01:06:934 (4,1) - This spacing difference is too large for a normal difficulty - a change from 1.00x to 1.71x is too muchFixed~
  15. 01:21:091 (1,2) - Overlap looks kinda messyFixed~
  16. 01:23:788 (3) - After a large gap in music, an NC would be best hereFixed~
  17. 01:28:676 (5) - Add NC since ending phraseFixed~
[Easy]
  1. SV feels a bit too high for a easy difficulty, I'd recommend putting it down at 1.00x if possible.OK!!
  2. As a general comment, consider reducing the amount of repeat sliders you have. Too many of them get hard to read sometimes for Easy, and having them everywhere also isn't that creative.Fixed~
  3. 00:07:945 (4,1) - Use distance snap! This distance spacing is too high compared to the rest of the objects in its vicinity.Fixed~
  4. 00:12:327 (3) - It's strongly advised NOT to have notes under slider ends on Easy difficulty, because it's too hard for beginners to read.Fixed~
  5. 00:13:339 (5) - ^Fixed~
  6. 00:16:035 (4) - ^...I'll stop mentioning this here, find and fix the rest yourself :3OK~ :3
  7. 00:22:103 (1,3) - Current overlap looks ugly, consider moving slider 3 to 352/0, and 00:24:462 (4) - to 440/224. Adjust notes afterwards accordingly.Fixed~
  8. 00:30:192 (1) - Try doing some different rhythms than just the same types of repeat sliders for this entire section! Add circles, and normal sliders sometimes too.Fixed~
  9. 00:53:619 (1,2,1,2,3) - Try making these sliders the same shape, it'd look betterFixed~
  10. 01:01:541 (6) - Try changing this to follow the drums or something that doesn't repeat so quicklyFixed~
  11. 01:04:237 (1,1) - Remove NCsFixed~
  12. 01:16:709 (1) - ^, because they switch singers after this oneFixed~
  13. 01:19:406 (1) - ^, ^^
  14. 01:21:091 (1,1) - I believe you need a full measure's recovery after a spinner on Easy.Fixed~
  15. 01:26:485 (5) - Add NC because start of a new phraseFixed~
Aghhh I have a cold right now and I'm not feeling too well >< feel free to call on me to check your map again sometime later if you want!~
thx Erina :) You help me very more and thank your modding~

Good luck with rank! I'll probably contact you later so we can confirm what you're going to be singing~~~~~OK:D I will to sing!
Little
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Hi, here from my queue.
Sorry for the long delay.

[General]
  1. I think offset is too early by about 10ms.
  2. Resnap audio preview time in Easy.
  3. Source should be 普通の女子校生が【ろこどる】やってみた。 including the 。 at the end.
  4. Why is Miraifanfre in tags? Where does this even come from?
  5. Disable widescreen and letterbox since these are not used.
  6. I recommend adding custom combo colours.
[Easy]
  1. The map is too hard. I recommend lowering slider velocity and difficulty settings.
  2. 00:04:237 (1,2) - I strongly advise against using 1/2 sliders with multiple repeats in Easy. It's too difficult to read. The same applies to all other parts of the map where this is used.
  3. 00:04:912 (2,1) - Try not to use stacks like these in Easy. It is confusing to read.
  4. 00:14:687 (2) - The spacing is too big here. Please check through your map and ensure that you use consistent distance spacing.
  5. 00:16:372 (1,2) - Placement is confusing. Don't stack like this.
  6. Please remove all the multi-repeat sliders. They're too short, and unreadable.
  7. 01:21:091 (1) - I don't understand why you ended the slider there. It doesn't fit any beat in the music, and the spinner is rather short.
[Normal]
  1. This map is too hard. I recommend lowering slider velocity and difficulty settings.
  2. 00:11:653 (2,4) - This kind of overlap looks bad, and can be confusing the read. Try to avoid this.
  3. 00:11:653 (2,3) - The jump here is huge. Please reduce it and try to keep consistent spacing throughout the map.
  4. 00:16:035 (6,1) - Spacing here is really small, and player can easily confuse it for 1/2 beat spacing.
  5. 00:18:395 (6) - Try to avoid multiple repeats in Normal if possible.
  6. 00:32:552 (1,2) - Distance here is too big, and player will probably miss (2).
  7. 00:35:923 (3,4) - Same here and also at 00:39:631 (1,2) check to make sure the rest of your map is spaced intuitively.
  8. 00:43:339 (1,2) - Slider end stacks like this are not recommended in lower difficulties, as it's hard to read.
[Hard]
  1. I recommend AR8. It makes the map much more readable since BPM and note density is so high.
  2. The rhythms in this map don't seem to have any connection with the music, and it's all just 1/2 beat spam.
  3. The map is awkward to play because slider velocity is high, and distance spacing is really low. Consider increasing the distance between notes to make the map play more smoothly.
  4. 00:10:642 (3,4) - This stack doesn't really play well imo. I think you should move (4) to stack on (1).
  5. 00:19:069 (1) - ^Same here, and check for other similar places in the map.
  6. 00:36:597 (1,2,3,4) - Try not to stack it directly, as the earlier sliders are covering the later sliders, making them difficult to see.
  7. 00:51:428 (1,2,3,4) - Space them out? Player might confuse this for stream.
[Insane]
  1. 00:06:428 (4,5) - This kind of stack breaks the flow, so I suggest to unstack it. Same applies to similar parts.
  2. 00:17:889 (1,2) - Not reason to overmap with 1/4 sliders. Just use two circles.
  3. 00:27:496 (1,2) - Add clap on these too?
  4. 00:40:979 (6,7,8) - It's probably better to not use overmapped slider ends like this, but if you do, try to make the slider ends quieter so it's not distracting.
  5. 00:41:316 (7,8,1) - Spacing is confusing here. Make (8,1) distance the same as (7,8).
  6. 00:51:934 (3,4) - This spacing is awkwardly small. Maybe stack instead?
  7. 00:52:271 (4,6,8) - Maybe add new combos on these?
This map needs a lot of work... I would consider remapping Hard, since the problem with SV and spacing make it hardly playable.
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