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This is a really nice beatmap. I can't help much though, perhaps you should ask a BAT on IRC to help you out? Nobody is really looking at my WIP beatmap so... I'm absolutely no help, probably.

BPM: 85.00
Offset: 22850 (not perfect but close)

This is actually not bad for one of your first maps. Your spacing is not bad for not using distance snap, but you should use distance snap because some the spacing is unintuitive.

I am not sure if your beat placement on the timeline is correct. You seem to place notes according to the lyrics at times, but a lot of the beginning was going with the drums. Some of the lyrics in the beginning were supposed to be snapped to quarter notes. Try listening to the song slower and fix this.

Other suggestions I will make is make sure all your beats are aligned correctly. For example, 00:36:61 (3) - should be moved 1 grid left on the lvl 3 grid to be aligned with 2

This is a sort of a weird problem but get rid of unreadable sliders.
Ex: 01:02:34 (6) - you can't tell where the slider goes in the part near the end

Seems you are off to a good start with decent spacing and alignment, keep on mapping and editing and this map will turn into a success.

fxd.

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done -.-

Good map <3. Star.

Может я и не очень хороший битмапер, но все же некоторые мысли:
[Hard]
00:23:202 - clap
00:23:908 - ^
00:24:614 - ^
00:25:673 - clap не нужен
00:26:026 - clap
00:26:732 - ^
00:27:438 - ^
00:28:850 - ^
00:29:555 - ^
00:30:967 - ^
00:31:673 - ^
00:33:791 - ^ + сдвинь чуть ниже
00:34:497 - ^
00:35:202 - ^
00:35:908 - ^
00:37:320 - ^
00:38:026 - ^
00:38:732 - ^
00:39:438 - ^
00:39:791 - убери clap на всем слайдере
00:41:555 - опусти чуть ниже + clap
00:42:261 - clap
00:43:320 - убери clap
00:43:673 - clap
00:43:791 - передвинь на 00:44:026
00:44:379 - clap
00:45:085 - ^
Дальше начинается что-то ужасное оО не в ритм, придумай как это исправить и продолжай в том же темпе. Потом приду еще мыслей напишу xP

Исправил.

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(General)
The placement of your notes on the timeline are the major flaw in this map; you seem to be against putting anything not part of a stack on the blue ticks (1/4 notes), and, if you're following the lyrics, you need to or drastically change your timing. You also need to work a bit on when new combos come into play; they should occur when a new phrase of lyrics or music begins.

Though I did like the inherited sections in Hard, so that's a good point.

(Timing)
I got 84.935 for the BPM (I actually got double that, but halved it to be more consistent with your original one). A good BPM typically won't be a whole number.

Also, and this is a finer point, but please use 2 for your slider tick rate. I know it doesn't seem like it'd make that much of a difference, but to the regular player, it sounds weird to have a 4/4 song with a tick rate not a factor of 4.

[Easy]
Pretty hard for an Easy; I would recommending renaming this "Normal", and perhaps shrinking the circle size by one level.
00:42:26 (1,2) - This is a bit confusing-looking, especially since the circles are so large.
00:49:67 (1) - Don't start a slider beneath another slider like this; either place it so it doesn't start below the previous slider at all, or place it directly under (stacked) either of the previous slider's two endpoints (the far one should be fine; turn off distance snap for the moment).

[Hard]
00:24:96 (7) - Don't really need a repeat here; put another circle for the missing spot (if you do, make it a new combo).
00:26:73 (1) - Remove the new combo.
00:28:49 (4) - New combo.
00:29:55 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:31:32 (3) - Should be aligned with #1.
00:33:79 (6) - Same spot as #4.
00:36:61 (3) - Remove the repeat, slide over to the white tick, new combo (move on the playfield to make sense).
00:39:79 (5) - New combo.
00:41:55 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:43:84 (6) - Turn this into a slider that lasts until the current end of 00:44:37 (7), removing 00:44:37 (7).
00:45:43 (9) - New combo.
00:47:55 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:48:79 (1) - Remove new combo.
00:57:79 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:00:61 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:02:37 (4) - New combo.
01:03:79 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:05:20 (3) - New combo.
01:05:55 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:20:02 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:22:14 (5) - New combo.
01:22:84 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:23:90 (1) - Remove new combo.
01:47:90 (1) - Remove new combo.
02:47:55 (1) - Remove new combo.
02:51:08 (1) - Remove new combo.
02:53:20 (2) - Slider beneath slider, see similar comment in Easy.
02:54:61 (1) - Remove new combo.
03:06:96 (1) - Remove new combo.
03:11:90 (1) - Remove new combo.
03:16:14 (1) and similar - Remove new combo.

Don't be too overwhelmed; with a better timing set and a clearer dedication to either the lyrics or instruments, most of this will fall into place. Keep at it!

Someone mod it please. D;

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