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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2017年10月11日 at 16:45:59

Artist: Miku Sawai
Title: Colorful.(Asterisk DnB Remix)
Source: 冴えない彼女の育てかた
Tags: saenai heroine no sodatekata saekano
BPM: 175
Filesize: 8724kb
Play Time: 05:11
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  • Oni (4.61 stars, 1863 notes)

Download: Miku Sawai - Colorful.(Asterisk DnB Remix)
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18:15 Charlotte: 404さん 時間あるときテストプレイ頼んでもいいですか?
18:15 404 AccNotFound: imademo
18:15 404 AccNotFound: iindesu!
18:15 *Charlotte is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/1421041 Sawai Miku - Colorful. (Asterisk DnB Remix) [Oni]]
18:15 Charlotte: link!
18:15 404 AccNotFound: ari!
18:21 404 AccNotFound: god map =v=
18:21 Charlotte: maji?
18:22 404 AccNotFound: majide
18:22 404 AccNotFound: 00:22:654 (108) -
18:22 404 AccNotFound: 00:22:654 -
18:22 404 AccNotFound: 00:25:225 (125,126,127) -
18:22 404 AccNotFound: koko
18:23 404 AccNotFound: 00:25:397 - toka 00:25:740 - koko
18:23 Charlotte: un
18:23 404 AccNotFound: fill shitara
18:23 404 AccNotFound: more smooth ?
18:23 Charlotte: fill?
18:23 404 AccNotFound: fill in
18:23 Charlotte: aa
18:23 Charlotte: umeru
18:23 404 AccNotFound: aa souda
18:23 404 AccNotFound: ww
18:24 404 AccNotFound: nihongo bakade gomen
18:24 Charlotte: kinishinai
18:24 404 AccNotFound: melody wa little stacatto
18:24 404 AccNotFound: but drum sonomonowa jutto play shitakara
18:24 404 AccNotFound: jotto kininatta desu
18:24 404 AccNotFound: dochiraka o umeru kotowa?
18:25 404 AccNotFound: 00:23:082 - or konna bashotoka 2 stream shite
18:25 Charlotte: 00:22:997 - add k
18:25 Charlotte: どうですか?
18:26 404 AccNotFound: ii
18:26 404 AccNotFound: xD
18:26 Charlotte: ok fixed.
18:26 404 AccNotFound: 01:00:197 (350,351,352,353) -
18:26 Charlotte: hokano bashomo umemasu
18:27 404 AccNotFound: arigatou =v=
18:27 404 AccNotFound: 01:00:197 (350,351) - delete?
18:27 Charlotte: oto naikara sakuzyo?
18:28 404 AccNotFound: ye maybe
18:28 404 AccNotFound: if you like, 01:00:025 (349) - finisher =v=
18:28 Charlotte: fixed!
18:28 404 AccNotFound: yey
18:28 404 AccNotFound: 01:00:882 (354) -
18:29 404 AccNotFound: koko K?
18:29 404 AccNotFound: yappa drum k sound ga
18:29 404 AccNotFound: amarini impact sugi ww
18:30 Charlotte: ddk d k にした
18:30 404 AccNotFound: oh more good
18:30 404 AccNotFound: 01:28:654 (512,513,514) -
18:31 404 AccNotFound: koko SV irete dandan osoku nattara?
18:31 404 AccNotFound: no impact here
18:31 Charlotte: それは少し考えます
18:31 Charlotte: 漢字わかりますか?
18:31 404 AccNotFound: little
18:31 404 AccNotFound: know
18:32 Charlotte: soreha sukosi kanngaemasu
18:32 404 AccNotFound: oh
18:32 404 AccNotFound: arigatou translate!
18:32 404 AccNotFound: and more freindly speak, ok! desu desuka iya
18:33 404 AccNotFound: like stone
18:34 404 AccNotFound: 02:10:911 - koko umerunowa doudesuka?
18:34 Charlotte: wakarimashita!
18:34 404 AccNotFound: bikurishita wwwwwww
18:34 404 AccNotFound: timing waru ww
18:35 Charlotte: 02:10:911 - koko ka...
18:35 Charlotte: riyuu ha arimasuka?
18:35 404 AccNotFound: tokuni ni ;w;
18:35 404 AccNotFound: https://osu.ppy.sh/ss/9179351
18:35 404 AccNotFound: anobasho
18:35 404 AccNotFound: korewa?
18:36 404 AccNotFound: boku wa little fill awkward,
18:36 404 AccNotFound: nanka wakaranai kedo konna kiga shita. baka de gomen xp
18:37 Charlotte: 1/2 yori 1/4 de ikioi ga hoshii kannji desukane?
18:37 404 AccNotFound: ye soreda!
18:37 Charlotte: soreda!
18:37 404 AccNotFound: www ari
18:38 404 AccNotFound: finisher demo nainoni 1/2 stream wa jotto awkward to me hehe
18:38 404 AccNotFound: but imanomo
18:38 404 AccNotFound: bokuwa suki
18:38 404 AccNotFound: 02:13:225 (809) - maybe k?
18:38 404 AccNotFound: so impact k =v=
18:39 404 AccNotFound: 02:12:882 (805,806,807,808,809) - maybe ddddk or smth?
18:39 Charlotte: fixed
18:39 404 AccNotFound: 02:29:340 (917,918) - same place
18:40 Charlotte: sudeni kaeta!
18:40 404 AccNotFound: haya www
18:40 404 AccNotFound: 03:19:397 (1240) - delete?
18:40 404 AccNotFound: otoga nai and delaying part of 03:19:225 (1239) -
18:41 404 AccNotFound: 03:21:625 (1253,1254) - ctrl g for the pitch?
18:43 Charlotte: 03:19:397 - ここ悩むなぁ
18:43 Charlotte: nayamu
18:43 Charlotte: 03:21:625 (1247,1248) - fixed
18:43 404 AccNotFound: kok
18:43 404 AccNotFound: 03:57:797 (1426) - finisher?
18:44 404 AccNotFound: iya yapari nai
18:44 Charlotte: おk
18:44 404 AccNotFound: 04:27:968 (1658) - kokokara
18:44 404 AccNotFound: suki
18:44 404 AccNotFound: daisuki
18:45 404 AccNotFound: end!
18:45 Charlotte: ok
18:45 Charlotte: post please
18:45 404 AccNotFound: ye ari!
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hey, quick check as requested! :D

00:00:540 - 90% volume for the calm part at the start seems a bit over the top imo, maybe lower it to like 60 or 70 or something?
00:24:025 - i feel like you could emphasize the beeping in the background a bit more here with a pattern like kdk k d kdk k d or something like that to group most of them together and get several consecutive 1/2 ks for better emphasis but i guess the k d k d k d also works
00:43:740 - ddddk for more emphasis on the stron clap at 00:44:082 - , then ctrl G 00:42:797 (248,249) - and change 00:43:225 (250,251,252) - to k for better flow
00:48:882 - this kinda breaks the rhythm you've built up already and there isn't really anything special to emphasize with a strain point like 2 triplets in a row here, so i'd just suggest moving 00:48:968 - to 00:48:625 - and adding a d at 00:49:482 -
01:06:540 - you could lower the SV and volume a bit starting here for better pacing
01:34:482 - the lack of color change here doesn't flow very well, something like kdkkd would be a lot more natural imo
01:50:940 - ddddk again for the same reason as earlier
02:12:711 - change to k for better flow
02:35:682 - you could lower the SV and volume again from here for better pacing
03:18:711 - change to ddkkd for better flow, the k k k 1/2 from 03:18:368 - flows pretty awkwardly
03:23:854 (1257,1258) - ctrl G to match the pitch better?
03:20:768 - you could lower the SV and volume here again
03:33:111 - this is probably the least intense part of the song, which could even have a break but it's mapped pretty densely with 1/2.. i'd suggest cutting down the notes here largely to match the pace of the song
03:51:111 - this pattern doesn't really fit into the scheme of what you used otherwise in the diff so i'd suggest changing it to something different
04:25:568 - k k k awkward flow again, 04:25:911 - change this to d and we good
04:49:054 - change to k and for flow and 04:49:225 - to ddddk for emphasis on 04:49:568 -
04:50:254 - could lower the scroll sv and volume again here

以上です。
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hey, quick check as requested! :D

00:00:540 - 90% volume for the calm part at the start seems a bit over the top imo, maybe lower it to like 60 or 70 or something?
00:24:025 - i feel like you could emphasize the beeping in the background a bit more here with a pattern like kdk k d kdk k d or something like that to group most of them together and get several consecutive 1/2 ks for better emphasis but i guess the k d k d k d also works
00:43:740 - ddddk for more emphasis on the stron clap at 00:44:082 - , then ctrl G 00:42:797 (248,249) - and change 00:43:225 (250,251,252) - to k for better flow
00:48:882 - this kinda breaks the rhythm you've built up already and there isn't really anything special to emphasize with a strain point like 2 triplets in a row here, so i'd just suggest moving 00:48:968 - to 00:48:625 - and adding a d at 00:49:482 -
01:06:540 - you could lower the SV and volume a bit starting here for better pacing
01:34:482 - the lack of color change here doesn't flow very well, something like kdkkd would be a lot more natural imo
01:50:940 - ddddk again for the same reason as earlier
02:12:711 - change to k for better flow
02:35:682 - you could lower the SV and volume again from here for better pacing
03:18:711 - change to ddkkd for better flow, the k k k 1/2 from 03:18:368 - flows pretty awkwardly I think k-k-k is not bad.
03:23:854 (1257,1258) - ctrl G to match the pitch better?
03:20:768 - you could lower the SV and volume here again
03:33:111 - this is probably the least intense part of the song, which could even have a break but it's mapped pretty densely with 1/2.. i'd suggest cutting down the notes here largely to match the pace of the song
03:51:111 - this pattern doesn't really fit into the scheme of what you used otherwise in the diff so i'd suggest changing it to something different
04:25:568 - k k k awkward flow again, 04:25:911 - change this to d and we good same as above.
04:49:054 - change to k and for flow and 04:49:225 - to ddddk for emphasis on 04:49:568 -
04:50:254 - could lower the scroll sv and volume again here

no comment = fixed.

以上です。


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did a bit of irc to follow up on some of my suggestions, fix a bug with the SV and changed the BG.
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2017-10-02 21:08 Charlotte: 質問良いですか?
2017-10-02 21:08 Charlotte: こんばんは
2017-10-02 21:08 Chromoxx: いいですよ
2017-10-02 21:08 Charlotte: the lack of color change here doesn't flow very well, something like kdkkd would be a lot more natural imo
2017-10-02 21:09 Charlotte: 01:34:482 - the lack of color change here doesn't flow very well, something like kdkkd would be a lot more natural imo
2017-10-02 21:09 Charlotte: これはどこでkdkkdを使えと言ってますか?
2017-10-02 21:09 Chromoxx: うん
2017-10-02 21:11 Charlotte: うん?
2017-10-02 21:12 Chromoxx: カラーチェンジの方が自然な流れなのでkdkkdみたいなパターンがいいと思うってこと
2017-10-02 21:12 Charlotte: タイムスタンプの場所ですか?
2017-10-02 21:13 Chromoxx: そう
2017-10-02 21:13 Charlotte: ok.ありがとう!
2017-10-02 21:13 Chromoxx: 今はdkd kだけどkdkkdに変えたほうがいいと思う
2017-10-02 21:13 Charlotte: 翻訳頑張ります
2017-10-04 00:47 Chromoxx: じゃあ
2017-10-04 00:47 Chromoxx: あとちょっとあります
2017-10-04 00:48 Charlotte: hai
2017-10-04 00:48 Chromoxx: 01:17:340 - ここの音符はバーラインに付いてない
2017-10-04 00:49 Chromoxx: バーラインは前のSVと同じで音符だけが早くなるので何とか直してください
2017-10-04 00:49 Charlotte: 緑線増やしてみます
2017-10-04 00:50 Chromoxx: 1/16前にしたら大丈夫だと思う
2017-10-04 00:50 Chromoxx: 03:20:768 - それとここもSVを下げたほうがいいんじゃないですか?
2017-10-04 00:52 Charlotte: 入れておきます
2017-10-04 00:52 Charlotte: 入れてるつもりだった
2017-10-04 00:52 Chromoxx: 03:33:111 - それとこれからの密度はまだちょっと高いと思う
2017-10-04 00:53 Charlotte: うーん
2017-10-04 00:53 Chromoxx: 03:33:111 - 03:33:797 - 03:34:482 - 03:34:825 - 03:35:168 - 03:35:854 - 03:36:540 - 03:37:054 - この音符だけがあるみたいな感じがいいかなって思う
2017-10-04 00:54 Chromoxx: もちろんそのあともこんな感じで続いていく
2017-10-04 00:54 Chromoxx: ボーカル以外の音楽は完全に止まってる感じなので
2017-10-04 00:54 Charlotte: 削ります
2017-10-04 00:55 Chromoxx: :ok_hand:
2017-10-04 00:56 Chromoxx: 更新したら言ってね
2017-10-04 00:56 Charlotte: ok hand
2017-10-04 00:56 Charlotte: バーラインのやつはバグかなんかですか?
2017-10-04 00:56 Chromoxx: バグらしいですね
2017-10-04 00:57 Charlotte: なるほど
2017-10-04 00:57 Chromoxx: それともう一回resnap all notesするといいと思う
2017-10-04 00:58 Charlotte: ok
2017-10-04 00:59 Chromoxx: 俺も大体バーラインを音量やSVを変える時にちょっと音符の前に入れる、ちょっと早すぎて押したらバーラインの前の音量で聞こえることもあるので
2017-10-04 01:00 Charlotte: 1/4前とかでも問題ない?
2017-10-04 01:00 Chromoxx: 問題ないです
2017-10-04 01:00 Charlotte: ok
2017-10-04 01:03 Chromoxx: キアイを付けるときだけ前に入れちゃダメですけどw
2017-10-04 01:03 Charlotte: ずれますからね
2017-10-04 01:03 Chromoxx: うん
2017-10-04 01:05 Charlotte: updated
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why isn't unicode title カラフル。(Asterisk DnB Remix) ?
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