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Yakushi Ruri - Ruri-iro

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Imouto koko
This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 2018年6月13日 at 18:12:45

Artist: Yakushi Ruri
Title: Ruri-iro
Source: 鯨神のティアスティラ
Tags: avg galgame whirlpool 天川 凑月 tenkawa mizuki Oiso Pata-Mon kujiragami no tearstilla 84461810 firika
BPM: 143
Filesize: 8169kb
Play Time: 04:02
Difficulties Available:
  1. 844's Easy (1.47 stars, 235 notes)
  2. Firika's Normal (1.82 stars, 351 notes)
  3. Imouto-Mon's Hard (3.09 stars, 640 notes)
  4. Tearstilla (4.12 stars, 973 notes)
Download: Yakushi Ruri - Ruri-iro
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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2nd Mapset.
好甜好甜。

844's Easy by 84461810 Finished
Firika's Normal by Oiso Finished
Imouto-Mon's Hard collab by Pata-Mon & me Finished
Tearstilla by me Finished

学习意识流摸图

Gust wrote:

你离中间就几个像素,不放中间,有种感觉就是,和妹子告白被妹子甩了然后赌气

papapa213 wrote:

你这个pattern的感觉,让我想到了初中的时候我喜欢隔壁班的女孩子好久,但是最后她却和别人在一起了,那种看到有人对她好很欣慰但是心里又很不是滋味的矛盾感觉,所以建议2放到中间做个对称

PinkHeart wrote:

没有这种经历,不改

Pata-Mon wrote:

虽然你追不到姑娘很可怜但我还是不改
Mikazuki
社保哇
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

Mikazuki wrote:

社保哇
高弹棉大大卷鸽 :)
papapa213
[normal]
4大拍一nc 太长了,建议减一半
节奏感觉怪怪的
00:17:117 (6,7,8) - 听起来像这样↓
00:20:473 (1,2,3) - 别把老哥,这段背景音这么明显的↓
emmmm节奏和我想预差有点大,我不建议跟全跟人声
随便下了一下节奏
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你不想改就不改吧,也怪麻烦

01:10:823 (5,6,7) - kiai都是跟背景音,别突然就跟人声了↓
01:26:557 (8,9,10) - 我的下法↓
后面一样

02:54:879 (1,2) - 有点搞事

什么垃圾,不能收到box里

hard
[hard]
舍不得关ds啊你
02:07:047 (2) - 滑条声消掉
02:22:991 (1,2,3,4,5,6,1) - overlap,这段有点乱了啊
insane
[insane]
00:25:508 (5) - NC
01:15:438 (6) - 往下错开一点吧
01:41:243 - 这段break是shenmegui,01:40:403 (4,5,6,1) - 本来这个地方间距慢慢缩回来就挺适合接着摆后面这一段子的
02:23:201 (2) - 这地方已经看不到被02:22:152 (5) - 包住了,还不如挪开防止和02:24:250 (7) - 擦边
02:58:236 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 按照前面的趋势,02:59:914 (1) - 一串应该是从02:59:494 (7) - 上面顺时针转下来,02:59:914 (1) - 刚好是前面八个音达到最大值的时候,你这反而憋住了
03:29:285 (1,1) - 1/4间隔的滑条离这么远我只见到这一次,我觉得变sv已经足够了,还是贴上比较好
03:38:935 (2) - 出界
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

papapa213 wrote:

insane
[insane]
00:25:508 (5) - NC 会补,不过全图nc打算重下一遍。
01:15:438 (6) - 往下错开一点吧 改了个排列。
01:41:243 - 这段break是shenmegui,01:40:403 (4,5,6,1) - 本来这个地方间距慢慢缩回来就挺适合接着摆后面这一段子的 不怎么喜欢做这段人声,没什么节奏还是break吧。
02:23:201 (2) - 这地方已经看不到被02:22:152 (5) - 包住了,还不如挪开防止和02:24:250 (7) - 擦边 说得好,我把后面挪走了。
02:58:236 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,1) - 按照前面的趋势,02:59:914 (1) - 一串应该是从02:59:494 (7) - 上面顺时针转下来,02:59:914 (1) - 刚好是前面八个音达到最大值的时候,你这反而憋住了 改了。
03:29:285 (1,1) - 1/4间隔的滑条离这么远我只见到这一次,我觉得变sv已经足够了,还是贴上比较好 。没懂,这个距离不是一大堆么,我前面也是这样的。
03:38:935 (2) - 出界 改了。
Hard那段也改了 :)
thx for mod
[Kamiya]
马克

[Oiso's Normal]

NC简化一下吧,上10了不太好。
比如像00:10:403 (5) - 00:17:117 (6) -
后面类似的。

00:20:473 (1,2) - 人声稍微有点误差打起来都会觉得不舒服 所以这个地方换个节奏摆放如何,或者你加个音效00:21:942 (2) - 在这个的开头

00:57:396 (6) - nc
01:04:110 (5) - nc
01:10:823 (5) - ^
01:17:536 (5) - ^
01:24:250 (5) - ^
后面的节奏一样我就不重复了。

[Imouto-Mon's hard]

这个难度名。很容易误导 感觉collab最稳妥 (主要还是小心搞事的

03:31:802 (1,2) - 这个遮挡有点突兀 不能说是梗吧。 感觉改flow好些。

[Insane]

01:08:306 (3,4,5,6,7) - 再弯一点 感觉弯的还不够

03:02:431 (1) - 03:02:851 (3) - 这俩为什么不ctrl g哇 反过来会很顺手的。

03:04:110 (1,2,3,4) - 这里就相当于前面一段03:03:271 (1,2,3,4) - 的逆时针旋转90度再摆在1的位置上。感觉会好点

就这些吧 qwq
gl~!
Pata-Mon
这种难度名允许的,很安全,没事~

@雷米 看了一眼感觉你那边最大的问题可能是难度分布,作为曲子高潮的kiai几乎没有1/2,不太合理,建议加点
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

[Kamiya] wrote:

马克
[Imouto-Mon's hard]

这个难度名。很容易误导 感觉collab最稳妥 (主要还是小心搞事的

03:31:802 (1,2) - 这个遮挡有点突兀 不能说是梗吧。 感觉改flow好些。 改啦。

[Insane]

01:08:306 (3,4,5,6,7) - 再弯一点 感觉弯的还不够 好!

03:02:431 (1) - 03:02:851 (3) - 这俩为什么不ctrl g哇 反过来会很顺手的。 当时做这段就有点欠考虑,你提的都改啦,后面也修了一点。

03:04:110 (1,2,3,4) - 这里就相当于前面一段03:03:271 (1,2,3,4) - 的逆时针旋转90度再摆在1的位置上。感觉会好点 同上。

就这些吧 qwq
gl~!
蟹蟹四萌 :)
Fia
00:07:886 (5,6,7) - 不好 歌曲这里突出的是行进感 结果却空了一拍
00:22:571 (2,2,2) - 3/4滑条接个没音的note游戏体验极差 特别是重音在3/4上的时候
00:42:292 (1,2,3) - 保持一下一致用不跳过白线的节奏比较好 你这一段每个小节开头都是跟鼓的
00:44:599 (4) - 上边比下边舒服
00:47:956 (6,7,8) - 有点没看懂想突出哪个轨 跟背景音里那个锣的话drumfinish这个音效是削弱这种音的 建议删了或者换点别的比如normalfinish
01:11:662 (7,8) - 01:25:089 (4,5) - 两个音一样的 8也用滑条比较好 而且你这间距有点小和后面的空拍长度不太搭
01:29:285 (1,2,3) - 整段跟鼓你却只有这个梗跟了电吉他 是真的僵硬

后两段没看 估计同上
Dored
[Imouto-Mon's Hard]

00:28:236 (3) - 这个是不是有点太靠下了?在编辑器里已经看不到滑条的下沿了 要是在两边还好 在中间被判定条盖上了一点不太舒服 往上微调一下比较好吧

[Insane]

00:27:606 (2,3) - 前面基本都是滑条和圈差1/4的音 突然冒出来一个1/2的用和1/4一样的形式感觉不太好 区分一下比较好 后面还有些同样的也是
kiai部分有些三连和相同作用的折返滑条规划一下比较好 要不就都用同一种 要不就有vocal音时用一种 只有乐器音时用另外一种 看现在这个好像没什么特定规律 要是你用某种规律我没看出来不要打我
01:39:984 (1,2,3) - 不如和01:39:354 (1,2,3) - ctrl+H一下 然后后面四个note就相应调整一下
01:59:285 (7,1) - 包歪了
3分钟开始的那段吉他solo部分里有些同向平行的1/4滑条擦边 不太好看

整体上还是不错的 大佬就是大佬
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

PinkHeart wrote:

00:07:886 (5,6,7) - 不好 歌曲这里突出的是行进感 结果却空了一拍 改啦。
00:22:571 (2,2,2) - 3/4滑条接个没音的note游戏体验极差 特别是重音在3/4上的时候 想了很久实在是不会改……姑且修了一部分。
00:42:292 (1,2,3) - 保持一下一致用不跳过白线的节奏比较好 你这一段每个小节开头都是跟鼓的 改了。
00:44:599 (4) - 上边比下边舒服 对!
00:47:956 (6,7,8) - 有点没看懂想突出哪个轨 跟背景音里那个锣的话drumfinish这个音效是削弱这种音的 建议删了或者换点别的比如normalfinish 换normalfinish了。
01:11:662 (7,8) - 01:25:089 (4,5) - 两个音一样的 8也用滑条比较好 而且你这间距有点小和后面的空拍长度不太搭 先尝试了个摆法,改了。
01:29:285 (1,2,3) - 整段跟鼓你却只有这个梗跟了电吉他 是真的僵硬 改啦。

后两段没看 估计同上 都看了看也改了。

Dored wrote:

[Insane]

00:27:606 (2,3) - 前面基本都是滑条和圈差1/4的音 突然冒出来一个1/2的用和1/4一样的形式感觉不太好 区分一下比较好 后面还有些同样的也是 这段算是重新调整了一下。
kiai部分有些三连和相同作用的折返滑条规划一下比较好 要不就都用同一种 要不就有vocal音时用一种 只有乐器音时用另外一种 看现在这个好像没什么特定规律 要是你用某种规律我没看出来不要打我 kiai有个固定位置的三连音啊,白线起所以全都三连/折返不太舒服就加了一些flow合适的折返。红线三连我是不用折返的。
01:39:984 (1,2,3) - 不如和01:39:354 (1,2,3) - ctrl+H一下 然后后面四个note就相应调整一下 感觉空一拍的还是原地好一些。
01:59:285 (7,1) - 包歪了改啦。
3分钟开始的那段吉他solo部分里有些同向平行的1/4滑条擦边 不太好看1/4滑条我个人是觉得无所谓滑条本身的overlap的……读起来也是读成单点才好打吧。

整体上还是不错的 大佬就是大佬 :( 但是毫无内容啊,感觉做鱼了。
DalouBot
一米四无敌!
第一次写摸,啥都不会,不过试试吧写的不好别打我
就先摸主难度好了

[Tearstilla]

00:23:830 (1,2) - 第一个滑条建议按照前面的一样改成往返条。因为打下来感觉后一个滑条仿佛是在一堆鼓点中突然跟了一下人声,导致这个停顿的节奏很别扭。
00:49:739 - 这里可以加一个note,既然跟背景就别漏这里。02:10:299 - 同理
01:28:340 - 同上,位置放在3号滑条头偏左上一点就行。这里本身就有一个音感觉漏了不好。
01:29:180 - 同上,这里可以把原地三连改成01:28:865 (4) - 的当前位置到下一个滑条头区间的移动五连打。理由(包括上面那个改动)是从前面kiai的各种切指连打到这里间奏时候,按键的节奏突然变的很简单不太适应,可以稍微加少量note过渡一下。
01:29:599 - 同上,放在2号滑条头重叠位置,理由也同前面的。
01:39:354 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 把每次三连打的原地改成间距0.9x斜向右上方向吧,第二次三连打稍微是第一次往左偏30码这样(或许偏右也行?),大概效果是下面这个图。这样直觉感觉更好呢。
02:20:893 (1) - 改成单点吧(既然前面一个都是单点了),前一段kiai是两下滑条,这里两下单点感觉更搭配。
02:56:557 (3) - 这个滑条可以改成往返条,这样和下一个单点在节奏和移动上都更加契合。
03:00:753 (1,2) - 第一个滑条改成0.5x然后时间拉长1/4,第二个滑条改成1.2x(或者1x也行),然后排列成下面这样
03:08:306 (1,2,3,4) - 3次折返打起来不是很舒服,不过我自己尝试好久也不会改略尴尬。试了一下前面一个改成2次折返+单点,后面一个改成短滑条+2次折返+单点或许好一些
03:11:662 (1) - 这滑条也改成往返条吧
03:13:970 (2) - 这个break的开始时间不自然,感觉更应该靠后一点。所以用一个滑条拉长到下一个长白线这样比较合适,顺便脑洞大开摆了个下面这个样子
完全瞎摆别在意,不过节奏上来说舒服很多。
PS:其实我觉得第一段的break也超级不自然,但是想了想也不知道怎么改就先不说了。
03:56:979 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 滑条尾好像没啥背景音,干脆再拉长1/4吧接上后面连打,然后这个连打间距是不是有点大了
03:58:655 - 这后面一段时间节奏又突然好简单,大概和1分半那个地方的感受差不多。
04:15:462 (4) - 位置放到1号滑条尾那里看着舒服些

具体就是这些感想了,可能有的地方我没考虑仔细,总之上面说的都是自己打起来别扭的地方
另外kiai段总体还行,等以后有点想法了再来写吧
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

DalouBot wrote:

一米四无敌!
第一次写摸,啥都不会,不过试试吧写的不好别打我
就先摸主难度好了

[Tearstilla]

00:23:830 (1,2) - 第一个滑条建议按照前面的一样改成往返条。因为打下来感觉后一个滑条仿佛是在一堆鼓点中突然跟了一下人声,导致这个停顿的节奏很别扭。 emmmm……我觉得可能个人感受更多一点?我是没这么觉得啦。
00:49:739 - 这里可以加一个note,既然跟背景就别漏这里。02:10:299 - 同理 我听不太出这里的音……而且我想强调后面的1212。
01:28:340 - 同上,位置放在3号滑条头偏左上一点就行。这里本身就有一个音感觉漏了不好。 这段是全跟鼓的。(虽然这里我也没听出有音)
01:29:180 - 同上,这里可以把原地三连改成01:28:865 (4) - 的当前位置到下一个滑条头区间的移动五连打。理由(包括上面那个改动)是从前面kiai的各种切指连打到这里间奏时候,按键的节奏突然变的很简单不太适应,可以稍微加少量note过渡一下。 同上。
01:29:599 - 同上,放在2号滑条头重叠位置,理由也同前面的。 同上。
01:39:354 (1,2,3,1,2,3) - 把每次三连打的原地改成间距0.9x斜向右上方向吧,第二次三连打稍微是第一次往左偏30码这样(或许偏右也行?),大概效果是下面这个图。这样直觉感觉更好呢。 改了个差不多的。
02:20:893 (1) - 改成单点吧(既然前面一个都是单点了),前一段kiai是两下滑条,这里两下单点感觉更搭配。 单点有点无聊诶。
02:56:557 (3) - 这个滑条可以改成往返条,这样和下一个单点在节奏和移动上都更加契合。 改了。
03:00:753 (1,2) - 第一个滑条改成0.5x然后时间拉长1/4,第二个滑条改成1.2x(或者1x也行),然后排列成下面这样 emmmm,说不来哪个好,不过姑且还是先改了。
03:08:306 (1,2,3,4) - 3次折返打起来不是很舒服,不过我自己尝试好久也不会改略尴尬。试了一下前面一个改成2次折返+单点,后面一个改成短滑条+2次折返+单点或许好一些 。这为什么会不舒服 :(
03:11:662 (1) - 这滑条也改成往返条吧 听起来实在怪怪的……而且flow摆不好了。
03:13:970 (2) - 这个break的开始时间不自然,感觉更应该靠后一点。所以用一个滑条拉长到下一个长白线这样比较合适,顺便脑洞大开摆了个下面这个样子 break改了,跟轨仔细听了几遍还是不改了。
完全瞎摆别在意,不过节奏上来说舒服很多。
PS:其实我觉得第一段的break也超级不自然,但是想了想也不知道怎么改就先不说了。 个人喜好的break而已。
03:56:979 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9) - 滑条尾好像没啥背景音,干脆再拉长1/4吧接上后面连打,然后这个连打间距是不是有点大了 滑条尾改不改感觉无所谓的,连打间距是正好的(甚至摆之前和摆之后星数是不变的)。
03:58:655 - 这后面一段时间节奏又突然好简单,大概和1分半那个地方的感受差不多。 因为鼓就是这样的哇。
04:15:462 (4) - 位置放到1号滑条尾那里看着舒服些 。放1太丑了吧,不过想了想还是拉开了点距离放上面了。

具体就是这些感想了,可能有的地方我没考虑仔细,总之上面说的都是自己打起来别扭的地方
另外kiai段总体还行,等以后有点想法了再来写吧
感谢mod :)
- Cappuccino -
mod as req in pm

Tearstilla
00:02:012 (3) - 开头的两个遮挡梗可以小小错位下

00:03:690 (3) - 这八个单点可以考虑换成短滑条 背景鼓声我觉得还是蛮突出的

开头这段感觉滑条后2连和三连有点多

pm里聊过的 排列整体有点紧了
00:33:900 (5) - 比如这里排列真的有点挤
00:51:103 (5,7,1) - 也是一个事情 这么多note放在一个点 而且之前一句都没有重叠

00:59:389 (2,3) - 这个遮挡 感觉不好读 你试试第二个滑条做成3/4拍

kiai部分节奏本来应该是最紧凑的 可是和开头那段对比 三连和滑条后2连都少很多
建议适当减少下开头的二连三连 增加kiai部分的

01:25:403 (5) - 做成两个note打起来舒服点

02:20:473 (4) - 建议换成和第一段的滑条 可以弄成慢速滑条 两段跟不一样的音挺奇怪的

03:03:271 (1,1) - 这两组短滑条头可以拉开点间距弄点角度 03:05:788 (1,2) - 像这样就挺好

03:56:977 (1) - 这里是没鼓声的 九连最后一个follow人声挺违和的
你试试做成7连 然后最后一个note换成短滑条 03:56:873 (8) - 顿在这里

04:14:611 (2,3) - ctrl+g 试试 有意思的

以上~
Topic Starter
Imouto koko

- Cappuccino - wrote:

mod as req in pm

Tearstilla
00:02:012 (3) - 开头的两个遮挡梗可以小小错位下 已经错位了哇。

00:03:690 (3) - 这八个单点可以考虑换成短滑条 背景鼓声我觉得还是蛮突出的 短滑也不是不好……只是我不会摆orz

开头这段感觉滑条后2连和三连有点多 口号是塞爆。

pm里聊过的 排列整体有点紧了
00:33:900 (5) - 比如这里排列真的有点挤 算是为了flow牺牲一下?也有我是个默认HD玩家的缘故吧。
00:51:103 (5,7,1) - 也是一个事情 这么多note放在一个点 而且之前一句都没有重叠 感觉这里的鼓点挺适合重叠的。

00:59:389 (2,3) - 这个遮挡 感觉不好读 你试试第二个滑条做成3/4拍 换3/4可能是好打一点,但是这里渐强还是不太想这么改,看看之后有没有人提吧。

kiai部分节奏本来应该是最紧凑的 可是和开头那段对比 三连和滑条后2连都少很多
建议适当减少下开头的二连三连 增加kiai部分的 kiai节奏下满了哇,难度也的确是最难的了。

01:25:403 (5) - 做成两个note打起来舒服点 但是就overmap了,怪怪的。

02:20:473 (4) - 建议换成和第一段的滑条 可以弄成慢速滑条 两段跟不一样的音挺奇怪的 想了想还是点+滑条比较符合先抑后扬的人声,所以把前面的的也改成点滑条了。

03:03:271 (1,1) - 这两组短滑条头可以拉开点间距弄点角度 03:05:788 (1,2) - 像这样就挺好 改了。

03:56:977 (1) - 这里是没鼓声的 九连最后一个follow人声挺违和的
你试试做成7连 然后最后一个note换成短滑条 03:56:873 (8) - 顿在这里 这里follow的是鼓啊……滑条是静音的,用减速来强调了鼓点的停顿吧。

04:14:611 (2,3) - ctrl+g 试试 有意思的 作为player我挺讨厌这种的)

以上~
看法有好多分歧呢 :) 感谢mod!
Firika
ALL FIXED

Thanks for your moding! :)

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yf_bmp
鸽了好多天不好意思

这首好像可以做286bpm ver

https://osu.ppy.sh/s/622146
[Tearstilla]
给我的感觉是滑条速度整体偏慢 也没什么变速来强调 整个图就略平淡
部分可以放开跳
1/2节奏过多 有的节奏可以替换
连续跳摆的比较怪 滑条flow少了点灵性
音效有点惨

kiai我感觉整体怪 看了下总结是滑条速度+节奏密度和间距+flow不符 意思就是 kiai要么最好去除一些1/2节奏 要么就是降低滑条的速度 要么就是拉开部分梗的距离比较好,要么就是优化一下flow(目前很乱,flow我的角度不是看局部哪些梗的flow 而是一个整体感)。四选一吧

00:06:208 (1) - 试下3/4. 会更合曲 然后00:06:942 (1) - 可以放心地放的更远
00:12:082 (5,6,7) - 2个3/4 加速 表现力比现在的好
00:16:697 (3,4,1) - 这个组合就很奇怪 打着并不好 突然一个跳然后flow又折回去了
00:19:005 (4,5) - 过近
00:44:809 (5) - ctrl+g 168, 348 推荐 flow. 而且这个finish即使是故意加的也不好
00:47:956 (6,7,8) - 过于平淡 推荐加速
00:51:313 (6,7,8,9,1,2) - 推荐复制前面的改梗
01:02:431 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 不够灵 但我不知道怎么建议改… 要不先关注一下这
01:04:529 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - ^
01:11:977 (8) - 推荐1/2
01:12:501 (3,4) - 这里好换梗了 不要1/2滑条
01:15:858 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - 这里我就比较喜欢
01:20:893 (1,2) - 太近
01:25:403 (5) - ^ 所有一样的地方都这么推荐 下面不提
01:32:641 (1,2,3) - 同上类似
02:08:515 (6,7,8) - ^
后面这段应该跟前面差不多. 直入solo
03:00:753 (1,2) - 3/4会比1/2好
03:01:592 (1,2,3,4) - 03:02:431 (1,2,3,4) - 不要碰到, 或者后面的03:03:271 (1,2,3,4) - 碰到, 不过推荐前者
03:05:788 (1,2,3,4) -
03:13:340 (1,2) - 空的很怪啊 要么就在距离上摆远点
03:36:417 (1) - 不如1/4 强调那个停顿,但排列上需要更换下
04:13:972 (4) - +个慢速1/4很有感觉(虽然我会+3/8)
04:14:185 (1,2,3,4) - 不要碰

[Pata-koko's Hard]
00:55:508 (1) - finish
02:58:655 (2,4) - 这两个不如不叠,02:58:655 (2,3) - 然后这里跳点 效果好
03:32:222 (2,3,4) - @kencho
04:13:236 (5,2) - 不建议后面这堆和这挤着

[WudiOiso's Normal]
横平竖直还行
03:15:019 (2,4) - 这么摆非常不建议 主要是乱
Firika

Wudiyf_bmp wrote:

[WudiOiso's Normal]
横平竖直还行
03:15:019 (2,4) - 这么摆非常不建议 主要是乱 改了改了 √
感谢竵捱玸大师的摸 ;)

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Topic Starter
Imouto koko

yf_bmp wrote:

[Tearstilla]
给我的感觉是滑条速度整体偏慢 也没什么变速来强调 整个图就略平淡
部分可以放开跳
1/2节奏过多 有的节奏可以替换
连续跳摆的比较怪 滑条flow少了点灵性
音效有点惨

kiai我感觉整体怪 看了下总结是滑条速度+节奏密度和间距+flow不符 意思就是 kiai要么最好去除一些1/2节奏 要么就是降低滑条的速度 要么就是拉开部分梗的距离比较好,要么就是优化一下flow(目前很乱,flow我的角度不是看局部哪些梗的flow 而是一个整体感)。四选一吧

00:06:208 (1) - 试下3/4. 会更合曲 然后00:06:942 (1) - 可以放心地放的更远
00:12:082 (5,6,7) - 2个3/4 加速 表现力比现在的好
00:16:697 (3,4,1) - 这个组合就很奇怪 打着并不好 突然一个跳然后flow又折回去了
00:19:005 (4,5) - 过近
00:44:809 (5) - ctrl+g 168, 348 推荐 flow. 而且这个finish即使是故意加的也不好
00:47:956 (6,7,8) - 过于平淡 推荐加速
00:51:313 (6,7,8,9,1,2) - 推荐复制前面的改梗
01:02:431 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - 不够灵 但我不知道怎么建议改… 要不先关注一下这
01:04:529 (3,4,5,6,7,8,1,2,3,4,5) - ^
01:11:977 (8) - 推荐1/2
01:12:501 (3,4) - 这里好换梗了 不要1/2滑条
01:15:858 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9,1) - 这里我就比较喜欢
01:20:893 (1,2) - 太近
01:25:403 (5) - ^ 所有一样的地方都这么推荐 下面不提
01:32:641 (1,2,3) - 同上类似
02:08:515 (6,7,8) - ^
后面这段应该跟前面差不多. 直入solo
03:00:753 (1,2) - 3/4会比1/2好
03:01:592 (1,2,3,4) - 03:02:431 (1,2,3,4) - 不要碰到, 或者后面的03:03:271 (1,2,3,4) - 碰到, 不过推荐前者
03:05:788 (1,2,3,4) -
03:13:340 (1,2) - 空的很怪啊 要么就在距离上摆远点
03:36:417 (1) - 不如1/4 强调那个停顿,但排列上需要更换下
04:13:972 (4) - +个慢速1/4很有感觉(虽然我会+3/8)
04:14:185 (1,2,3,4) - 不要碰

[Pata-koko's Hard]
00:55:508 (1) - finish
02:58:655 (2,4) - 这两个不如不叠,02:58:655 (2,3) - 然后这里跳点 效果好
03:32:222 (2,3,4) - @kencho
04:13:236 (5,2) - 不建议后面这堆和这挤着
基本都改了,除了极少数实在不会改。
非常感谢! :)
Pata-Mon
都改了 谢摸
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