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This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on Sunday, March 19, 2017 at 7:15:49 PM

Artist: cosMo@BousouP
Title: Monopole. (Long Ver.)
Tags: For UltraPlayers Aste- Shinzo- ARTCORE ROCK beatmania IIDX 22 PENDUAL
BPM: 201
Filesize: 9069kb
Play Time: 05:17
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Download: cosMo@BousouP - Monopole. (Long Ver.)
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A Loose Magnet wandered into the world of rhythm

ReDL if you DL before Feb 14th. Mp3 changed. Extended the song more.


STATUS: REVIVED. ALL DONE. READY FOR MOD/BN CHECK.


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IRC mod about some patterns and general structure of the map:
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12:59 -Kamikaze-: yo
12:59 MEGAtive: yo
12:59 -Kamikaze-: first off, you have garbled unicode artist
12:59 -Kamikaze-: æš´èµ°P
12:59 -Kamikaze-: a
12:59 MEGAtive: Whoa
13:00 MEGAtive: Didn't see that
13:00 -Kamikaze-: Kiai's end isn't snapped!    03:00:447
13:00 MEGAtive: I just droppped it from the album right away
13:00 -Kamikaze-: aimod shouts about timing sections being <5% volume but I guess that hitsounds are wip
13:00 MEGAtive: Yep
13:01 MEGAtive: Still figuring out the hitsounds
13:01 -Kamikaze-: yeah np
13:02 -Kamikaze-: ok so, I'll point out little things I've noticed and give you general idea of what I find wrong along the way because I have some complaints about the structure
13:02 -Kamikaze-: but let's start from the beggining
13:02 -Kamikaze-: 00:00:165 - I see no reason for it to be a double
13:02 MEGAtive: Ok
13:02 MEGAtive: I thought it's for the choir-esque sound and the piano
13:03 -Kamikaze-: yes but you don't accent choir later
13:03 -Kamikaze-: so you should be consistent about it
13:03 MEGAtive: Hmm, you're right
13:03 MEGAtive: Deleting that, then
13:03 -Kamikaze-: not gonna attempt at checking pitch because I suck at that lol
13:04 -Kamikaze-: oh and you might want to raise hp on that
13:04 MEGAtive: Lol
13:04 -Kamikaze-: I passed it without trying hard
13:04 -Kamikaze-: with like 632k
13:04 MEGAtive: Raise the HP
13:04 MEGAtive: Okay
13:04 MEGAtive: 8.5 or 9?
13:05 -Kamikaze-: try 9
13:05 MEGAtive: Ok
13:05 -Kamikaze-: if pepole complain about it too much go down to 8,5
13:05 MEGAtive: Hmm, got it
13:06 -Kamikaze-: 00:09:717 (9717|0) - move to 6 maybe?
13:06 -Kamikaze-: smoother transition by a little
13:06 MEGAtive: I think |1| is pretty empty so I put the note there
13:06 -Kamikaze-: okay, so move 00:09:717 (9717|2,9866|3) - 1 right
13:07 MEGAtive: Ok
13:07 -Kamikaze-: 00:09:418 (9418|1,9717|2,9717|0) - this can be surprising with sudden change of snaps later
13:08 -Kamikaze-: 00:23:448 (23448|4,23597|4,23747|0,23747|3,23896|3,23896|0) - I get the idea, but it felt kinda weird to me on sightread
13:08 -Kamikaze-: idk
13:09 -Kamikaze-: maybe reverse direction of 00:23:299 (23299|3,23448|2,23597|1) - and start it from col 1?
13:09 MEGAtive: Ok
13:09 MEGAtive: Felt better
13:10 -Kamikaze-: 00:24:269 - missed 1/4, not sure if intentional
13:10 MEGAtive: Whoa, missed that sound
13:11 -Kamikaze-: 00:25:090 (25090|4,25090|3) - not sure why there is a double here
13:11 -Kamikaze-: feels off because there's no drum here
13:12 MEGAtive: I think there's a drum playing there
13:12 -Kamikaze-: can't hear it/really weaker then the one before
13:12 MEGAtive: Well, it's
13:12 MEGAtive: It's weaker
13:13 MEGAtive: Make it single, then?
13:13 -Kamikaze-: ok I can hear it, but *imo* it should be single just because it's a weaker sound
13:13 -Kamikaze-: more intuitive
13:13 MEGAtive: Ok then
13:13 -Kamikaze-: same here 00:25:687 (25687|1,25687|4) - 
13:13 -Kamikaze-: and in all following instances
13:14 -Kamikaze-: not gonna list the all
13:14 -Kamikaze-: them*
13:14 MEGAtive: Okay
13:15 -Kamikaze-: 00:28:523 (28523|3,28622|2,28722|1,28821|0) - It's really anti-climatic to have that drum as a stair tbh, make it something like 3425
13:16 MEGAtive: Hmm, applied
13:16 -Kamikaze-: 00:31:433 - missed note
13:16 -Kamikaze-: and this should be double 00:31:508 - 
13:17 -Kamikaze-: 00:29:045 - missed again
13:17 -Kamikaze-: not sure if intentional but you're missing a lot of those 1/4s
13:17 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:18 MEGAtive: Applied them
13:19 MEGAtive: Dunno why I kept missing some instruments
13:19 -Kamikaze-: 00:33:299 (33299|5,33299|3,33448|2,33448|0) - those are heavier drums from what I hear so maybe add a note to each?
13:19 MEGAtive: So triplets?
13:20 -Kamikaze-: 456 for first and 123 for second
13:20 -Kamikaze-: ye
13:20 MEGAtive: Okay, then applied
13:20 -Kamikaze-: (triplets refer to three notes in succesion and not three at the same time btw)
13:21 MEGAtive: Oh
13:21 -Kamikaze-: 00:37:403 - missing note again lol
13:21 -Kamikaze-: aa I said I won't point out more of them
13:21 -Kamikaze-: w/e
13:22 MEGAtive: Lol why do I kept missing those notes Orz
13:22 -Kamikaze-: 00:42:851 (42851|3,42851|1,42926|2,43000|3,43000|5,43075|4,43150|5) - this pattern is bad to play tbh
13:22 MEGAtive: Is it?
13:22 -Kamikaze-: and I don't hear any significant sounds for the 1/4s inbetween doubles unless it's for that guitar
13:23 -Kamikaze-: yeah that's a really awkward pattern
13:23 -Kamikaze-: 00:42:851 (42851|3,43000|5) - those notes are too close to the stair
13:23 -Kamikaze-: would like to see a more scrambled pattern here tbh
13:23 MEGAtive: Oh yeah that's an echo
13:23 MEGAtive: So delete those 1/4 notes
13:23 -Kamikaze-: oki
13:24 -Kamikaze-: 00:47:926 - from now on you should make chords heavier to mark the intensity increase
13:25 MEGAtive: So make the chords triplets?
13:25 -Kamikaze-: triples*
13:25 -Kamikaze-: yea
13:26 MEGAtive: Oh yeah Triples
13:26 -Kamikaze-: 00:50:015 (50015|4,50015|5,50164|3,50164|2) - you could start layering the breakcore sounds slowly
13:26 -Kamikaze-: o wait wrong pasta
13:27 -Kamikaze-: that's for after those chords
13:27 -Kamikaze-: I was going to say that you could jack those chords to accent that beat
13:27 -Kamikaze-: 00:52:403 (52403|3,52553|4,52702|3) - same here, jack for beat seems nice
13:27 MEGAtive: Hmm, Okay Jacked
13:27 -Kamikaze-: 00:53:597 (53597|2,53747|3,53896|2) - ^
13:28 MEGAtive: Jacked them
13:28 -Kamikaze-: ok cool
13:28 -Kamikaze-: 00:57:478 - you totally should double those jacks
13:28 -Kamikaze-: I saw you layer similar jacks later with 3 notes
13:29 -Kamikaze-: 00:58:672 (58672|2,58771|2,58871|2) - you can leave that one alone tho because beat that's going alongside jacks is going into a burst
13:29 -Kamikaze-: not sure if you want to map it
13:30 -Kamikaze-: 00:59:866 - same
13:30 MEGAtive: Well that's Pharos' Part
13:30 MEGAtive: 00:58:672 (58672|2,58771|2,58871|2) - Mine's from here
13:30 -Kamikaze-: ok so will point out things and you can link him the log
13:30 -Kamikaze-: ok?
13:30 MEGAtive: Ok
13:31 -Kamikaze-: 01:01:060 - missing 1/4 piano stream
13:31 -Kamikaze-: 01:01:657 - should be doubled as well imho, not necessairly jacks
13:32 MEGAtive: Isn't that already a double?
13:32 -Kamikaze-: I mean the notes after
13:33 MEGAtive: Oh
13:33 -Kamikaze-: 01:01:657 (61657|0,61707|1,61757|2,61856|4,61956|5,62055|2,62155|4,62254|5) - 
13:33 MEGAtive: Ok
13:33 -Kamikaze-: you should use more scrambled patterns because I see an awful lot of stairs btw
13:34 MEGAtive: Hmm, Ok
13:34 -Kamikaze-: 01:06:433 (66433|0,66508|2,66582|0,66657|2,66732|0) - this pattern is ughhhh as well
13:34 -Kamikaze-: with the jack on right hand
13:34 -Kamikaze-: do a 23232 trill, should be better
13:34 MEGAtive: Ok
13:35 MEGAtive: Should 01:06:881 (66881|0) - moved to 2 as well?
13:36 -Kamikaze-: nah it's fine
13:36 -Kamikaze-: I'm kinda irked about the structure too
13:36 MEGAtive: Ok
13:36 -Kamikaze-: what I mean is
13:36 -Kamikaze-: you have so many sounds
13:36 -Kamikaze-: the breakcore rhythm
13:36 -Kamikaze-: and you don't map nearly anything from it
13:37 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:37 -Kamikaze-: I'll show you what I mean in a second
13:37 MEGAtive: I think so
13:37 MEGAtive: I should map the breakcore then
13:37 -Kamikaze-: 01:11:508 (71508|5,71582|4,71657|3,71732|2,71806|1) - layering this piano 1/4 with an overwhelming fast burst not mapped is lol
13:38 MEGAtive: Lol
13:39 MEGAtive: What snap it's?
13:39 MEGAtive: Wait, I think Pharos is mapping the piano there
13:39 -Kamikaze-: yes but mapping that piano on top of a 5 times louder burst
13:40 -Kamikaze-: is bad
13:40 -Kamikaze-: imho
13:40 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:40 MEGAtive: Should he add an LN for the Burst and map the Piano?
13:40 -Kamikaze-: on his place I wouldn't map piano
13:40 -Kamikaze-: just the burst
13:40 -Kamikaze-: it feels so forced
13:40 MEGAtive: Or fully map the burst? Though I don't know what snap it's
13:41 MEGAtive: Ok
13:42 -Kamikaze-: from 01:11:806 - this is what annoys me, this part is intense, has a lot of sounds, many possibilities to make it exciting
13:42 -Kamikaze-: and look how easy it is
13:43 -Kamikaze-: 01:15:985 (75985|0,75985|4,76060|4,76060|1,76135|2,76135|4,76209|4,76209|0,76284|4,76284|1) - tho this should be more like http://puu.sh/l4hOl/cc82f8e711.png
13:43 MEGAtive: Hmm Tbh I'm agree with you
13:44 MEGAtive: Maybe he's really sticking with the pitch there.
13:44 -Kamikaze-: so make it a 25 jack
13:44 -Kamikaze-: one column jack and onehanded stair at the same time is so awkward
13:45 -Kamikaze-: 01:44:642 (104642|5,104642|0,104717|4,104717|1,104791|2,104791|3,104866|1,104866|4) - same here
13:45 MEGAtive: Hmm, agree actually
13:45 -Kamikaze-: as well as this pattern 01:44:717 (104717|1,104717|4,104791|3,104791|2,104866|4,104866|1,104941|3,104941|5,104941|2,104941|0) - can be awkward to play
13:45 -Kamikaze-: I got it on first time but I just feel that it might not be good
13:45 -Kamikaze-: not sure about it though
13:45 MEGAtive: Oh, that's mine
13:46 -Kamikaze-: 01:54:791 - suddenly piano notes stop
13:46 -Kamikaze-: when they're still playing
13:46 MEGAtive: I'm still unsure how to map those
13:46 MEGAtive: Pianos....
13:46 MEGAtive: Okay, that's Shinzo's part
13:47 MEGAtive: Will talk to him later
13:47 -Kamikaze-: just keep a consistent stream of notes as piano is consistently playing all the time
13:47 -Kamikaze-: 02:23:249 (143249|4,143349|3,143349|4,143448|3) - this thing is awful
13:48 -Kamikaze-: second jack is okay, but two mixed like that are ewww
13:48 MEGAtive: Ok
13:49 MEGAtive: That Jack is bad?
13:49 -Kamikaze-: it's dreadfully weird to play
13:49 -Kamikaze-: second one is fine like I said
13:49 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:50 MEGAtive: Ok, then
13:50 -Kamikaze-: but those two mixed that way, with other notes, holding down LN and switching to next one
13:50 MEGAtive: 02:23:249 (143249|4,143349|4,143349|3,143448|3) - You mean these Jacks?
13:50 -Kamikaze-: '_>'
13:50 -Kamikaze-: yes
13:50 MEGAtive: 02:27:627 -
13:50 MEGAtive: Wrong paste
13:50 MEGAtive: Ok
13:50 -Kamikaze-: 02:27:627 (147627|3,147627|4,147727|4,147727|3,147826|1,147826|2,147926|2,147926|1) - those are fine
13:51 MEGAtive: Ok
13:51 -Kamikaze-: 02:59:866 - I'm not sure why second half of that chordstream has same density as first half because sound kinda dies off there
13:51 -Kamikaze-: and 02:59:941 (179941|1,179941|4,180015|5,180015|0,180090|4,180090|1,180164|5,180164|0,180239|1,180239|4,180314|5,180314|0,180388|1,180388|4) - 
13:51 -Kamikaze-: those trill
13:52 -Kamikaze-: holy shit
13:52 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:52 MEGAtive: That's mine
13:52 -Kamikaze-: there's really not much I can say about that map tbh
13:52 MEGAtive: Hmm, I can't figure a better pattern for that
13:52 MEGAtive: Ok
13:53 -Kamikaze-: it's just too focused on piano
13:53 -Kamikaze-: and needs more focus on breakcore part
13:53 -Kamikaze-: patterns are generally good
13:53 MEGAtive: Yeah, I know
13:54 MEGAtive: From 02:38:373 - I use LNs, should I map the Breakcores too?
13:54 -Kamikaze-: as for 02:59:866 - try something like this http://puu.sh/l4if7/602a8d8bfb.png
13:55 MEGAtive: 03:00:164 - Triple?
13:55 -Kamikaze-: 02:38:373 - apart from pattern being ass stairy it's fine, single notes can work for a breakcore part as well
13:55 -Kamikaze-: 03:00:164 - yeah, idk why that's a quad tbh
13:56 -Kamikaze-: clap isn't that loud
13:56 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:56 MEGAtive: Okay, made it a triple
13:57 -Kamikaze-: 04:10:911 - this is a perfect example of what's wrong with this map
13:57 -Kamikaze-: it's very intense
13:57 -Kamikaze-: has kiai even
13:57 -Kamikaze-: and it's soooo easy
13:57 -Kamikaze-: so underwhelming
13:57 -Kamikaze-: that it feels WIP even
13:58 MEGAtive: Hmm
13:58 MEGAtive: Agree
13:58 MEGAtive: That's Pharos' Part.... Again XD
13:59 -Kamikaze-: lol
13:59 -Kamikaze-: so anyway, I really don't have anything more to say about that map, sorry if I'm not much of a help
13:59 MEGAtive: Ok
13:59 MEGAtive: It's really helpful, though
14:00 -Kamikaze-: glad to hear that :D
14:00 MEGAtive: Nearly none can mod this
14:00 MEGAtive: Then Yaay finally got one
14:00 MEGAtive: Really, Thanks
14:00 -Kamikaze-: I'm sure you could find pepole who can mod it as well
14:00 -Kamikaze-: but that's after the remaps you need to do
14:00 MEGAtive: Well, I think
14:00 MEGAtive: Ok
14:01 -Kamikaze-: anyway, imma go post log now
14:01 -Kamikaze-: ' w'
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Pharos' Part
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all applied thanks kami
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00:19:344 - Add note?
02:01:135 - move to 02:01:060 -
02:11:881 - move to 02:11:806 -
02:27:030 - consider deleting a note here
03:32:105 - 03:32:403 - Maybe make notes like these triples to emphasize the heavy drum?
04:56:234 - maybe add notes here 04:56:234 - 04:56:259 - 04:56:284 - instead?
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00:19:344 - Add note? No. No necessary instrument available there.
02:01:135 - move to 02:01:060 - The piano isn't there.
02:11:881 - move to 02:11:806 - What note are you pointing?
02:27:030 - consider deleting a note here No, it fit the instruments perfectly.
03:32:105 - 03:32:403 - Maybe make notes like these triples to emphasize the heavy drum? Waiting for Pharos for this part.
04:56:234 - maybe add notes here 04:56:234 - 04:56:259 - 04:56:284 - instead? No, the piano doesn't sounded like that.


Maybe the next time you mod a map, try to hear the instruments perfectly. Use 25-50% Playback Rate is recommended. It really took so much time, but trust me this helps a lot while modding a map ;) .
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00:19:344 - Add note? No. No necessary instrument available there.
02:01:135 - move to 02:01:060 - The piano isn't there.
02:11:881 - move to 02:11:806 - What note are you pointing?
02:27:030 - consider deleting a note here No, it fit the instruments perfectly.
03:32:105 - 03:32:403 - Maybe make notes like these triples to emphasize the heavy drum? Waiting for Pharos for this part.
04:56:234 - maybe add notes here 04:56:234 - 04:56:259 - 04:56:284 - instead? No, the piano doesn't sounded like that.


Maybe the next time you mod a map, try to hear the instruments perfectly. Use 25-50% Playback Rate is recommended. It really took so much time, but trust me this helps a lot while modding a map ;) .


I listened to these parts in 25% :( I can never do this right, its so fking frustrating. I don't understand, I even produced music and studied music theory for 3 years, I try so hard but always fail.
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I listened to these parts in 25% :( I can never do this right, its so fking frustrating. I don't understand, I even produced music and studied music theory for 3 years, I try so hard but always fail.

Hmm, let's see.... When modding, you need to make it as constructive as possible. I mean, don't just suggest a thing without providing a valid reason. That will just make your mods rejected. And, you studied Musical Theory in 3 years that's great. That's already more than enough for you to start modding.

To begin with, you need to see how people are modding a map. When you're in confusion, try googling that or ask in #osumania. And, looks like you just start modding recently from your posts number. Well, to become a good modder you need experiences in modding. There's no such thing as instant-expert. If your mods are rejected, you can check his/her reply. Maybe you can get a constructive reply so you can pay attention to that thing more.

Well, that's it. If you're still confused, you can ask someone to explain things to you.
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for mega. keep cuz the note amount are perfectly counted ( depend on the sound amount on the time )
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Me.......Ga.......

Finally.......Do.....ne

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Dropping this here for the sake of the collaber

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cosMo@BousouP - Monopole. (Long Ver.) (Review)

Quite an interesting collab here, the transition from mapper to mapper was pretty smooth, didn’t really like I’ve instantly been transported into another universe

Intro is pretty nice, though I personally really dig the bass drums that the music provides, was hoping that you pulled off something heavy to indicate those bass drums but the patterns currently kinda lacks the “intensity” to follow suit

Ex.

00:23:747 (23747|0,23747|3,23896|3,23896|0) - would very much prefer this to be 4 note chords so it has the “power” to go with the heavy drums

00:26:433 - Add a note here

00:28:523 (28523|1,28622|2,28722|3,28821|4) - this pattern does not go well with the heavy drums here, it’s too linear and bland, suggesting to have 12 45 23 156 as a pattern here

00:33:299 (33299|3,33299|4,33299|5,33448|0,33448|1,33448|2) - This is pretty good but not enough, hammer these and use 4 note chords for consistency if you did 4 note chords on my suggestion previously

00:38:970 (38970|3,38970|1) - maaaaan 2 note chords is not enough power, you really need to have more notes on the chords or clump those notes together to give it more “mmmph”

01:01:657 (61657|0,61657|5,61707|1,61757|2,61856|4,61956|3,61956|0,62055|2,62155|1,62254|5,62254|0) -
stairs don’t give much impact, you really need to step up the note counts here so as to give more intensity

01:06:433 (66433|4,66582|4,66732|4,66881|4) - use 2 note chords for the piano here on the right hand as to mimic the piano

01:08:224 (68224|1,68299|2,68373|3,68523|2,68597|3,68672|4) - is this for the piano? it should be ⅓ if it is

01:15:985 (75985|4,76060|4,76135|4,76209|4,76284|4) - don’t do this pls

01:17:776 (77776|0,77851|1,77926|2,78075|3,78150|4,78224|5,78299|3) - should be ⅓ but uh the second one is fine if you are mapping to the drum thing

01:23:150 (83150|1,84045|1) - there are piano ¼ s here btw, if you are planning to even map it and missed it

01:34:791 (94791|3,94791|5,94941|0,94941|4,94941|2,95239|1,95239|3,95388|2,95388|4,95388|0) -
these 2 are triplets, kind of a shame that you omitted them or missed them, you can try 46 3 125 as a pattern anyways

01:35:687 - not sure about this section, it feels like you’re mapping to the drum initially since there are no LNs but it’s for the guitar… then 01:38:672 (98672|4,98821|3,98970|2,99120|3,99120|4,99269|2) - you kinda missed the whole ⅓ guitar here and uh im confused, would very much prefer if you’d go ahead for the guitar though but if you’re sticking to the drums here, please add more notes

02:17:478 (137478|3,138075|4) - pretty sure there are ⅓ s here but they are horribly faint

03:21:359 (201359|5,201359|0,201657|0,201657|3) - think you can emphasize the bass drum further but probably that’s just me feeling that the pattern is too “soft” for this

03:33:597 - consider adding on 45, this is too underemphasized

03:48:523 - can understand that you’re skewing the pattern here for PR but my first column feels horribly empty, consider using all 6

04:24:642 (264642|5,264717|4,264791|3,264866|2,264941|5,264941|1,265015|4,265015|2,265090|0,265090|3,265164|1,265164|4,265239|2,265239|5) -
p.sure this is ⅓

04:29:418 (269418|3,269418|1,269493|2,269567|1,269642|0,269717|1,269791|2,269866|3,269941|4) -
horribly underwhelming
04:30:314 (270314|5,270314|3,270762|5,270762|2) - same goes to this, give it more notes

04:31:806 (271806|5,271881|4,271956|3,271956|1,272030|2,272105|5,272105|0) -
do a hand alternation here, personally feel that it’s the more intense part of the song already so give all the patterns more intensity at this point

04:42:553 (282553|5,282577|4,282602|3,282627|2) - & 04:44:941 (284941|2,284941|0) -
keep these similar
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Dropping this here for the sake of the collaber

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Evening wrote:
cosMo@BousouP - Monopole. (Long Ver.) (Review)

Quite an interesting collab here, the transition from mapper to mapper was pretty smooth, didn’t really like I’ve instantly been transported into another universe

Intro is pretty nice, though I personally really dig the bass drums that the music provides, was hoping that you pulled off something heavy to indicate those bass drums but the patterns currently kinda lacks the “intensity” to follow suit

Ex.

00:23:747 (23747|0,23747|3,23896|3,23896|0) - would very much prefer this to be 4 note chords so it has the “power” to go with the heavy drums Well, I made it triple because it isn't that strong

00:26:433 - Add a note here Added

00:28:523 (28523|1,28622|2,28722|3,28821|4) - this pattern does not go well with the heavy drums here, it’s too linear and bland, suggesting to have 12 45 23 156 as a pattern here Applied

00:33:299 (33299|3,33299|4,33299|5,33448|0,33448|1,33448|2) - This is pretty good but not enough, hammer these and use 4 note chords for consistency if you did 4 note chords on my suggestion previously Applied, but I don't change the notecount since I made the previous part as a triple.

00:38:970 (38970|3,38970|1) - maaaaan 2 note chords is not enough power, you really need to have more notes on the chords or clump those notes together to give it more “mmmph” Okay, then.... Applied

01:01:657 (61657|0,61657|5,61707|1,61757|2,61856|4,61956|3,61956|0,62055|2,62155|1,62254|5,62254|0) -
stairs don’t give much impact, you really need to step up the note counts here so as to give more intensity

01:06:433 (66433|4,66582|4,66732|4,66881|4) - use 2 note chords for the piano here on the right hand as to mimic the piano

01:08:224 (68224|1,68299|2,68373|3,68523|2,68597|3,68672|4) - is this for the piano? it should be ⅓ if it is

01:15:985 (75985|4,76060|4,76135|4,76209|4,76284|4) - don’t do this pls

01:17:776 (77776|0,77851|1,77926|2,78075|3,78150|4,78224|5,78299|3) - should be ⅓ but uh the second one is fine if you are mapping to the drum thing

01:23:150 (83150|1,84045|1) - there are piano ¼ s here btw, if you are planning to even map it and missed it Added

01:34:791 (94791|3,94791|5,94941|0,94941|4,94941|2,95239|1,95239|3,95388|2,95388|4,95388|0) -
these 2 are triplets, kind of a shame that you omitted them or missed them, you can try 46 3 125 as a pattern anyways Not following these, But I realized something wrong so rearranged

01:35:687 - not sure about this section, it feels like you’re mapping to the drum initially since there are no LNs but it’s for the guitar… then 01:38:672 (98672|4,98821|3,98970|2,99120|3,99120|4,99269|2) - you kinda missed the whole ⅓ guitar here and uh im confused, would very much prefer if you’d go ahead for the guitar though but if you’re sticking to the drums here, please add more notes

02:17:478 (137478|3,138075|4) - pretty sure there are ⅓ s here but they are horribly faint

03:21:359 (201359|5,201359|0,201657|0,201657|3) - think you can emphasize the bass drum further but probably that’s just me feeling that the pattern is too “soft” for this

03:33:597 - consider adding on 45, this is too underemphasized

03:48:523 - can understand that you’re skewing the pattern here for PR but my first column feels horribly empty, consider using all 6

04:24:642 (264642|5,264717|4,264791|3,264866|2,264941|5,264941|1,265015|4,265015|2,265090|0,265090|3,265164|1,265164|4,265239|2,265239|5) -
p.sure this is ⅓

04:29:418 (269418|3,269418|1,269493|2,269567|1,269642|0,269717|1,269791|2,269866|3,269941|4) -
horribly underwhelming
04:30:314 (270314|5,270314|3,270762|5,270762|2) - same goes to this, give it more notes

04:31:806 (271806|5,271881|4,271956|3,271956|1,272030|2,272105|5,272105|0) -
do a hand alternation here, personally feel that it’s the more intense part of the song already so give all the patterns more intensity at this point

04:42:553 (282553|5,282577|4,282602|3,282627|2) - & 04:44:941 (284941|2,284941|0) -
keep these similar Okay
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Evening wrote:
cosMo@BousouP - Monopole. (Long Ver.) (Review)

Quite an interesting collab here, the transition from mapper to mapper was pretty smooth, didn’t really like I’ve instantly been transported into another universe

Intro is pretty nice, though I personally really dig the bass drums that the music provides, was hoping that you pulled off something heavy to indicate those bass drums but the patterns currently kinda lacks the “intensity” to follow suit

Ex.



01:01:657 (61657|0,61657|5,61707|1,61757|2,61856|4,61956|3,61956|0,62055|2,62155|1,62254|5,62254|0) -
stairs don’t give much impact, you really need to step up the note counts here so as to give more intensity // hmm... can't add mote note.. and don't know what should i do with this.. Mega haeleep~

01:06:433 (66433|4,66582|4,66732|4,66881|4) - use 2 note chords for the piano here on the right hand as to mimic the piano // kay

01:08:224 (68224|1,68299|2,68373|3,68523|2,68597|3,68672|4) - is this for the piano? it should be ⅓ if it is // oops. my bad, Fixed

01:15:985 (75985|4,76060|4,76135|4,76209|4,76284|4) - don’t do this pls // awww but i loved iiit~ okay re-arrange

01:17:776 (77776|0,77851|1,77926|2,78075|3,78150|4,78224|5,78299|3) - should be ⅓ but uh the second one is fine if you are mapping to the drum thing // fixed to 1/3

01:35:687 - not sure about this section, it feels like you’re mapping to the drum initially since there are no LNs but it’s for the guitar… then 01:38:672 (98672|4,98821|3,98970|2,99120|3,99120|4,99269|2) - you kinda missed the whole ⅓ guitar here and uh im confused, would very much prefer if you’d go ahead for the guitar though but if you’re sticking to the drums here, please add more notes // mega.. it's your part


03:21:359 (201359|5,201359|0,201657|0,201657|3) - think you can emphasize the bass drum further but probably that’s just me feeling that the pattern is too “soft” for this // added the bass, and the other part too

03:33:597 - consider adding on 45, this is too underemphasized // got it. and fixed

04:24:642 (264642|5,264717|4,264791|3,264866|2,264941|5,264941|1,265015|4,265015|2,265090|0,265090|3,265164|1,265164|4,265239|2,265239|5) -
p.sure this is ⅓ // woops.. okay fixed and add piano too

04:29:418 (269418|3,269418|1,269493|2,269567|1,269642|0,269717|1,269791|2,269866|3,269941|4) -
horribly underwhelming // got it
04:30:314 (270314|5,270314|3,270762|5,270762|2) - same goes to this, give it more notes // okay

04:31:806 (271806|5,271881|4,271956|3,271956|1,272030|2,272105|5,272105|0) -
do a hand alternation here, personally feel that it’s the more intense part of the song already so give all the patterns more intensity at this point / /got it




Done mai part

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