14:32 *Kawawa is editing [https://osu.ppy.sh/b/871129 Mastermind(xi+nora2r) - Dreadnought [4K Battlespace]]
14:32 Kawawa: 00:20:908 - 00:21:221 - 00:21:377 - I think It can be emphasized as crash sound.
14:33 Kawawa: yeah so you added on this section?
14:33 Kawawa: I got dc for 1min
14:33 Kawawa: \w\
14:34 Kyousuke-: 00:21:221 - 00:21:377 - 2 notes, 00:20:908 - 3 notes
14:34 Kawawa: yeah, alright then,
14:34 Kawawa: next.
14:34 Kyousuke-: 00:11:221 - 00:11:377 - since this is louder lol
14:34 Kawawa: 00:28:096 (28096|2) - And If you don't mind, you can remove this note. It will be better for smooth structure.
14:35 Kawawa: 00:30:908 - 00:31:221 - Add a note. same mod with above. It is same crash section (before 20sec part.)
14:35 Kawawa: should be consitency to each other.
14:35 Kyousuke-: 00:28:096 (28096|2) - sure
14:36 Kyousuke-: okkie about the same mod before
14:37 Kawawa: 00:32:471 - ~ 00:39:346 - this drum roll part are not good to me.
14:37 Kawawa: oh nvm.
14:37 Kawawa: I misunderstand the part.
14:38 Kawawa: here is nvm.
14:38 Kyousuke-: oh lel so it's fine? .w.
14:38 Kawawa: yeah,
14:38 Kawawa: 00:47:471 - remove a note at here, It can't feel much than 00:48:721 - 00:49:346 -
14:39 Kyousuke-: okay
14:40 Kawawa: 01:00:127 (60127|1,60179|2,60231|0,60283|3,60283|1,60361|2,60439|1,60517|0,60596|3,60596|1,60596|2) - I think It will be issue as vauge expression.
14:40 Kawawa: 01:00:179 (60179|2,60231|0) - It expressed as beep sounds. but can't feel much about this. If you can consider on 100% playback.
14:41 Kawawa: And I also could feel weird on this section as well. 01:00:283 - ~ 01:00:596 -
14:41 Kawawa: 01:00:439 - ~ 01:00:596 - because It is 6snap beep sounds.
14:41 Kawawa: If I can give you a feedback, Sample :: http://puu.sh/qqNY7/7d6c4b84eb.jpg
14:42 Kawawa: what do you think about?
14:43 Kyousuke-: oh ya i will consider it
14:43 Kawawa: should be improved at least.
14:43 Kawawa: consider it.
14:44 Kyousuke-: 01:00:127 (60127|1,60179|2,60231|0,60283|1) - but this sound is more prominent, than 01:00:439 - ~ 01:00:596 - this imo
14:44 Kawawa: yeah, It depends on each feeling.
14:44 Kawawa: so It is really up to you. but I don't recommend this. personally
14:45 Kawawa: but you can choose yours anything.
14:45 Kyousuke-: in bms chart they follow both lol with 1/6
14:46 Kawawa: anything fine.
14:50 Kyousuke-: wait http://puu.sh/qrxib/f949337e7f.jpg changed like this
14:50 Kawawa: okay
14:50 Kawawa: looks good than before
14:50 Kawawa: okay then. next section.
14:50 Kawawa: 01:07:471 - Add a note. same crash section with 01:06:846 - 01:08:096 -
14:50 Kawawa: You can consider it once again. It will be better for impact.
14:52 Kyousuke-: uh keep some for the playability
14:52 Kawawa: alright then
14:52 Kyousuke-: the 3 notes are only in the double white tick
14:52 Kawawa: 01:53:096 (113096|1,113148|2,113200|3) - It is 6snap? right?
14:52 Kawawa: confirmed in bms chart?
14:53 Kyousuke-: yeah if i add them i must re-arrange the whole stream xd and quite worse for it .w.
14:53 Kyousuke-: w8 lemme see the chart lol
14:53 Kawawa: I'm not sure about this yet.
14:53 Kawawa: need some information
14:55 Kyousuke-: uh that sound is not followed in bms lel
14:55 Kyousuke-: but avalon has approved it
14:55 Kyousuke-: (also in raika diff)
14:55 Kawawa: raika did this snap first?
14:55 Kawawa: than you?
14:55 Kawawa: I trust his snapping.
14:55 Kyousuke-: yes raika first xd
14:56 Kawawa: okay
14:56 Kawawa: let me skip then
14:56 Kawawa: 01:53:721 - ~ 01:54:346 - I think can be improved at least in this part.
14:56 Kawawa: 01:53:721 (113721|0,113773|1,113825|2,113877|3,113929|0,113981|1,114085|0,114137|1) -
14:56 Kawawa: It is kinda weird
14:57 Kawawa: http://puu.sh/qrxBQ/87df49dd87.jpg
14:57 Kawawa: what do you think about?
14:58 Kyousuke-: ok nice
14:58 Kawawa: http://puu.sh/qrxEa/2fdbd89dd0.jpg because It is really not good for piano structure
14:58 Kawawa: the piano structure changed from this section 01:54:033 -
14:58 Kawawa: and players can feel it surely.
14:59 Kyousuke-: yes i understand it, and i just realized it lol
14:59 Kawawa: 02:04:346 - ~ 02:11:846 - I'm so sorry, It's weird a lots. to me.
15:00 Kawawa: because of this 02:07:783 (127783|0,127861|1,127939|3,128017|2,128096|0,128174|3,128252|1,128330|2,128408|0,128486|3,128564|1,128642|2,128721|0,128799|3,128877|1,128955|2,129033|0,129111|3,129189|1,129267|2,129346|0,129424|3,129502|1,129580|2,129658|0,129736|3,129814|1,129892|2,129971|0,130049|3,130127|1,130205|2,130283|0,130361|3,130439|1,130517|2) -
15:00 Kawawa: 02:04:346 (124346|3,124424|2,124502|1,124580|0,124658|3,124736|2,124814|1,124892|0,124971|3,125049|2,125127|1,125205|0,125283|3,125361|2,125439|1,125517|0,125596|3,125674|2,125752|1,125830|0,125908|3,125986|2,126064|1,126142|0,126221|3,126299|2,126377|1,126455|0,126533|3,126611|1,126689|2,126767|3,126846|0,126924|1,127002|2,127080|3,127158|0,127236|1,127314|2,127392|3,127471|0,127549|1,127627|2,127705|3) -
15:00 Kawawa: from this part, I could feel high up for drum roll.
15:00 Kawawa: 02:07:783 (127783|0,127861|1,127939|3,128017|2,128096|0,128174|3,128252|1,128330|2,128408|0,128486|3,128564|1,128642|2,128721|0,128799|3,128877|1,128955|2,129033|0,129111|3,129189|1,129267|2,129346|0,129424|3,129502|1,129580|2,129658|0,129736|3,129814|1,129892|2,129971|0,130049|3,130127|1,130205|2,130283|0,130361|3,130439|1,130517|2,130596|0) -
15:00 Kawawa: but from this part, I felt weird, suddenly something vauge.
15:01 Kawawa: It's not unrankable, but can be improved in case.
15:01 Kawawa: what do you think about?
15:01 Kyousuke-: change like the first?
15:01 Kawawa: umm
15:01 Kyousuke-: yea i make it differently with the first part
15:01 Kawawa: can you follow my column first, I will give you a feed back first.
15:02 Kawawa: 02:06:533 (126533|3) - move to 3, 02:06:689 (126689|2,126767|3) - change the column
15:02 Kawawa: 02:07:939 (127939|3,128017|2) - change the column
15:02 Kyousuke-: moved
15:02 Kawawa: 02:08:096 (128096|0,128174|3,128252|1,128330|2,128408|0,128486|3,128564|1,128642|2,128721|0,128799|3,128877|1,128955|2,129033|0,129111|3,129189|1,129267|2,129346|0,129424|3,129502|1,129580|2,129658|0,129736|3,129814|1,129892|2,129971|0,130049|3,130127|1,130205|2,130283|0,130361|3,130439|1,130517|2) - and
15:02 Kawawa: and in this part
15:02 Kawawa: you can make the trill. than this.
15:02 Kawawa: It will be highlight than before.
15:03 Kawawa: ofc, It's a suggetion.
15:04 Kyousuke-: can you suggest the trill lol
15:04 Kyousuke-: but i never make the trill pattern before ._.
15:04 Kawawa: http://puu.sh/qrxTi/cf2829ca22.jpg
15:04 Kawawa: http://puu.sh/qrxSy/494559450b.jpg
15:04 Kawawa: two option.
15:05 Kawawa: but I recommend you 1st pic
15:05 Kawawa: personally.
15:05 Kawawa: up to you.
15:06 Kawawa: 2 also good.
15:06 Kawawa: oh 2 is more better
15:06 Kawawa: xD
15:06 Kyousuke-: choose the option two
15:06 Kawawa: yeah
15:07 Kyousuke-: but maybe will rearrange a bit lol
15:07 Kawawa: And last is
15:07 Kawawa: http://puu.sh/qrxZU/cac2b41712.jpg
15:08 Kawawa: because It changed 6snap to 8snap suddenly, so If you can make the seperate as pattern, It will be better.
15:09 Kawawa: because 1234 1234 1234 1234 1234 1234 1234 only is
15:09 Kawawa: can't feel the impact for 8snap.
15:10 Kyousuke-: 00:38:096 - same like this?
15:10 Kawawa: so I think it needs to be seperate the pattern to each 6,8snap.
15:10 Kawawa: there is okay.
15:12 Kyousuke-: oh okay so only changed in second section
15:15 Kawawa: 02:56:846 (176846|1,176846|0,177002|3,177002|2,177158|0,177158|1) - remoe a note?
15:15 Kawawa: remove a note on each section?
15:15 Kawawa: what about think?
15:16 Kyousuke-: oh yeah will delete it
15:16 Kawawa: yeah, was heavy feeling than music.
15:16 Kawawa: 02:57:314 - here is okay.
15:21 Kawawa: 04:38:096 (278096|1) - remove this? first part also removed.
15:22 Kawawa: 04:40:908 - 04:41:221 - 04:41:377 - then add a note at here as well.
15:22 Kawawa: 04:50:908 - 04:51:221 - same reason with above.
15:23 Kyousuke-: oh okay
15:24 Kawawa: 04:51:846 - ~ 04:58:721 - in this part.
15:24 Kawawa: I can't understand, why you used 1chord on snare section.
15:25 Kawawa: suddenly, became too weak from before part.
15:25 Kawawa: 04:52:158 - 04:52:471 - 04:52:783 - 04:53:096 - 04:53:408 - because you skipped these snare sound.
15:25 Kyousuke-: 00:01:846 - like the opening?
15:26 Kawawa: oh.
15:26 Kawawa: make sense.
15:26 Kawawa: but nevertheless,
15:26 Kawawa: have to consider It is last part.
15:27 Kawawa: I will point it out to raika's diff as well.
15:27 Kawawa: something too empty suddenly.
15:27 Kawawa: than music feeling.
15:28 Kawawa: 04:56:846 - ~ 04:58:721 - look, like in this part.
15:28 Kawawa: became high up more.
15:28 Kawawa: it is not same with start opening.
15:29 Kyousuke-: isn't the difference is just with the 3 noters?
15:29 Kawawa: start opning = did not be high up. just keep that mood. but final part is different.
15:30 Kawawa: hmm
15:30 Kawawa: If you want to keep, It's okay then.
15:30 Kawawa: there is a intention at least.
15:30 Kawawa: so can keep.
15:30 Kyousuke-: hue sorry but i finding it's fine for me
15:31 Kawawa: 4K is that's all.
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