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YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-10-18T08:01:01+00:00

This beatmap was submitted using in-game submission on 7 ноября 2015 г. at 21:52:40

Artist: toby fox
Title: Bonetrousle
Source: UNDERTALE
Tags: chiptune radiation
BPM: 150
Filesize: 1816kb
Play Time: 00:57
Difficulties Available:

Hard (2,98 stars, 169 notes)
Normal (1,84 stars, 98 notes)

Download: toby fox - Bonetrousle
Information: Scores/Beatmap Listing
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You're blue now.

NYEH HEH HEH HEH HEH HEH HEH HEH HEH!!!

Last edited by YellowManul 2015-11-07T19:53:10+00:00, edited 21 times in total.

Sieg

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Sieg 2015-10-18T13:44:55+00:00

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Sieg

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Sieg 2015-10-18T14:37:14+00:00

квикмод

мне показалось так намного лучше 149,940 бпм / 30 оффсет
в моде все на старом

хард
00:06:432 (1) - разбей на 2 круга, там же крутой звук на конце слайдера, как тут 00:12:835 (1,2) -
00:14:435 (1) - ^похоже, ну и так еще есть наверное
00:13:835 (5) - может http://puu.sh/kOFtf/d3f3ac2f87.jpg
00:32:843 (3) - софт сет на конец
00:34:043 (2) - ^ \\ 00:35:644 (2) - \\ 00:36:044 (3) - \\00:40:446 (2) - \\ 00:45:648 (3) - итп
00:43:247 (1) - разбей же на круги?
00:51:250 (1) - оч. громко отсюда, уменьши громкость, ну и в целом можно процентов на 10

нормал
по громкости тоже самое

не хватает каких-нибудь софт свистков имо и в конце нормал сет плохо зашел, а так все отлично

YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-10-18T15:02:12+00:00

Sieg wrote:
квикмод

мне показалось так намного лучше 149,940 бпм / 30 оффсет
в моде все на старом

хард
00:06:432 (1) - разбей на 2 круга, там же крутой звук на конце слайдера, как тут 00:12:835 (1,2) -
00:14:435 (1) - ^похоже, ну и так еще есть наверное
00:13:835 (5) - может http://puu.sh/kOFtf/d3f3ac2f87.jpg
00:32:843 (3) - софт сет на конец
00:34:043 (2) - ^ \\ 00:35:644 (2) - \\ 00:36:044 (3) - \\00:40:446 (2) - \\ 00:45:648 (3) - итп
00:43:247 (1) - разбей же на круги?
00:51:250 (1) - оч. громко отсюда, уменьши громкость, ну и в целом можно процентов на 10

нормал
по громкости тоже самое

не хватает каких-нибудь софт свистков имо и в конце нормал сет плохо зашел, а так все отлично

спасибо за мод! о3о
поправил все, сейчас еще над свистками поработаю; тут нормал сет вообще не должен быть, я его забыл убрать, лол. о3о

Kobold84

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Kobold84 2015-10-20T17:07:01+00:00

Коротенькая очень.

Белые полоски вокруг бг смотрятся не очень, но тут твоё дело.
И по-моему, у тебя киай сломался. Ну или это фича такая? Но лучше сделать его нормальным.

хард:
00:31:649 (5) - здесь бы св сделал меньше, так как звук отличается от 00:30:849 (2) -
00:56:849 (3) - его предлагаю разбить на части, так как там тишина идёт какое-то время. http://kobold.s-ul.eu/TE4HQVlf.png — типа вот такого.

нормал:
Не жалей, делай цс3.
00:18:849 (6) - вот тут слайдер можно заменить на ноту, как по мне.

YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-10-21T13:34:47+00:00

Kobold84 wrote:
Коротенькая очень.

Белые полоски вокруг бг смотрятся не очень, но тут твоё дело.
И по-моему, у тебя киай сломался. Ну или это фича такая? Но лучше сделать его нормальным.

хард:
00:31:649 (5) - здесь бы св сделал меньше, так как звук отличается от 00:30:849 (2) -
00:56:849 (3) - его предлагаю разбить на части, так как там тишина идёт какое-то время. http://kobold.s-ul.eu/TE4HQVlf.png — типа вот такого.

нормал:
Не жалей, делай цс3.
00:18:849 (6) - вот тут слайдер можно заменить на ноту, как по мне.

поменял, спасибо :3

Namki

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Namki 2015-10-22T10:26:07+00:00

Небольшой модик!

[General]

Ай-ай-ай.
Белые полосы в бг смотрятся ужасно, убери их.

[Normal]
00:12:849 (1) - немного опустить этот слайдер, выглядит красивее, да и флоу получше будет.
00:16:849 (2) - копипаст предыдущего?
00:17:649 (3,4,5,6,1,2) - что тут со спейсингом?
00:17:649 (3,4,5,6) - имо выглядит некрасиво (мб ты хотел сделать РОМБ, но выглядит небрежно)
00:38:449 (1,2) - spacing owo

[Hard]
По мне хсы громковаты, мб ~30% - 35% (особенно это свисток).
00:10:049 (2,3) - звучит пусто как-то, мб сделать такой паттерн?

В целом очень хорошо. ♥
Ну и звезду!

YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-10-23T21:04:50+00:00

Namki wrote:
Небольшой модик!

[General]

Ай-ай-ай.
Белые полосы в бг смотрятся ужасно, убери их.

[Normal]
00:12:849 (1) - немного опустить этот слайдер, выглядит красивее, да и флоу получше будет.
00:16:849 (2) - копипаст предыдущего?
00:17:649 (3,4,5,6,1,2) - что тут со спейсингом?
00:17:649 (3,4,5,6) - имо выглядит некрасиво (мб ты хотел сделать РОМБ, но выглядит небрежно)
00:38:449 (1,2) - spacing owo

[Hard]
По мне хсы громковаты, мб ~30% - 35% (особенно это свисток).
00:10:049 (2,3) - звучит пусто как-то, мб сделать такой паттерн?

В целом очень хорошо. ♥
Ну и звезду!

поправил паттерны, мп3, спейсинг и волум о3о
спасибо!!!

Auxent

Auxent 2015-10-30T18:00:54+00:00

So I'm here.

• The background has a white corners. Try to get rid of them, because it seems, like the background is forced in the center with the white background color.
• Add some AudioLeadIn (around 1000-1500 would be great).
• Offset +2ms.

Normal:
• Apply some hitsounds. ):
• 00:05:651 (5,6,1) - This triangle-like placement is quite complicated for a newbie players. Put the 00:06:251 (6,1) - in a different angle for better gameplay.
• 00:07:251 (2) - Move little bit higher for better blanket.
• 00:08:051 (3,4) - Place them on the same x axis.
• 00:12:651 (6,1) - Place these notes little bit down. It should make a better curvy pattern.
• 00:19:251 (1) - Ctrl+J?
• 00:28:051 (4,5,1) - Same suggestion as at 00:12:651 (6,1) - .
• 00:33:651 (3) - What about placing this in the same angle as 00:34:451 (4) - ?
• 00:35:849 (2) - Place it little bit to the left for better curvy pattern.
• 00:43:249 (4) - Same suggestion as at 00:33:651 (3) - .
• 00:55:249 (2,4) - Place 00:57:249 (4) - under the end of the 00:55:249 (2) - .

Hard:
• 00:26:849 (5) - Ctrl+J?
• 00:37:449 (3,4) - Fix blanket.

Hard difficulty looks pretty nice, but Normal could be a little bit better. I'm looking forward to see this ranked.

Mint

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Mint 2015-10-30T20:54:42+00:00

Hey Manul!
from in-game request owo

General

* Offset 38 works better for me.
* Not too sure about the metadata. For the artist I got 'toby fox' and source 'UNDERTALE'. Got this from http://tobyfox.bandcamp.com/ and http://undertale.com/ . You should definitely ask for confirmation on this one.

Normal

* Hitsounds please.
* 00:12:849 (1,2) - Please keep your consistent 1.2x spacing.
* 00:40:049 (5,6,1) - Placement of these sliders doesn't really look appealing imo, and the flow from (6) to (1) could be improved. Try this? http://puu.sh/l3zl7/b32e08ace1.jpg

Hard

* HP4 seems too low for this kind of song. It's still a Hard difficulty after all.
* 00:33:649 (1,2,3) - Flow here seems a bit broken, would prefer something like http://puu.sh/l3z16/497b541329.jpg

Sorry for the short mod, only 57 sec map lol.
Weird song... but somehow I like it. GL!

YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-10-31T21:16:10+00:00

fixed suggestions and metadata, ty guys >w<!!!

Kyubey

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Kyubey 2015-11-06T21:42:00+00:00

We did some modding in #russian.

meii18

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meii18 2015-11-06T22:42:26+00:00

Fixed spacing issues and a rhythm in normal and two rhythms in hard diff.Metadata is fine as well https://tobyfox.bandcamp.com/.Everything should be fine!

Qualified!

Okoratu

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Okoratu 2015-11-06T23:44:31+00:00

Yuii-

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Yuii- 2015-11-07T00:30:25+00:00

Okoratu wrote:

This ^

http://tobyfox.bandcamp.com/
http://store.steampowered.com/app/391570/

Maybe having "Toby Fox" capitalized is okay... but stop using "Radiation".

Ameth Rianno

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Ameth Rianno 2015-11-07T01:04:15+00:00

Wrong artist name, temmie chang and tuyoki should be in tags (it's the maker of the game too).

No it doesn't capitalized.

OzzyOzrock

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OzzyOzrock 2015-11-07T01:06:16+00:00

Charles didn't show up to correct this?

Yuii-

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Yuii- 2015-11-07T01:07:47+00:00

Ah yeah

p/4638252/

OzzyOzrock

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OzzyOzrock 2015-11-07T01:23:47+00:00

also get a papyrus background! please! ;w;w;w;w;w;

Ameth Rianno

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Ameth Rianno 2015-11-07T01:25:16+00:00

spoiling undyne and alphys is not allowed kappa

Kyubey

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Kyubey 2015-11-07T01:58:20+00:00

O, I wasn't sure about that and thought «Toby "Radiation" Fox» is the right one because he calls himself like that almost everywhere, while «toby fox» appeared only in that place. And I got confused by Charles' Homestuck map with «Toby "Radiation" Fox» as the artist.

Charles445

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Charles445 2015-11-07T02:25:07+00:00

Artist is "toby fox"

Toby "Radiation" Fox is for homestuck and undertale demo releases.

OzzyOzrock wrote:
Charles didn't show up to correct this?

I show up for maps that are likely to move along quickly, but http://puu.sh/lcd4H/6054076a36.png
Can't be there in time for a speedrank.

Background choice is extremely odd considering the song. fortunately there is no implied context so it isn't really spoilery.

Also good idea to add radiation to tags after artist changes

EDIT like 6: I also forgot to mention, it might be a good idea to source the BG in the map description, there's been a large push to credit fanart around undertale
EDIT 7: Maybe try using some drum hitsounds more? Here's an example diff -> http://puu.sh/lcfTJ/8c3afa4654.osu

riffy

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riffy 2015-11-07T09:23:56+00:00

Greetings!

I am disqualifying this set for the following reason:

Charles445 wrote:
Artist is "toby fox"

A couple of suggestions from my point of view are additional.

[Normal]

Lowering AR wouldn't hurt, as this is the easiest diff and it should be slightly easier than an average Normal.

[Hard]

The way 3/4 sliders are used sort of confuses me, but I can understand what they follow. Try to use Slider Tick Rate 2 to make beats like 00:48:237 - emphasized.

Please be sure to change the artist and adress the other suggestions that were posted in the thread. After that, we'll be more than happy to see the map back!

meii18

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meii18 2015-11-07T09:29:38+00:00

get confused a bit with the metadata.I would agreed with toby fox ;_; Call me for rebubble/requalify

Kyubey

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Kyubey 2015-11-07T10:43:59+00:00

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Charles445

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Charles445 2015-11-07T18:47:52+00:00

Thanks for using the hitsounds

Looks like something happened to the slider at 00:18:037 - on the Hard
Probably was short, then got auto-deleted by the game :S

Here's the slider from the previous diff, you can add it to the [HitObjects] in the .osu file

80,80,18037,2,0,L|88:48,4,20,2|0|2|0|2,1:2|0:2|0:2|0:2|3:3,0:0:0:0:

Popping since this is clearly an error

riffy

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riffy 2015-11-07T19:05:51+00:00

Charles is here to save the day!

YellowManul

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YellowManul 2015-11-07T19:08:48+00:00

Charles445 wrote:
Thanks for using the hitsounds

Looks like something happened to the slider at 00:18:037 - on the Hard
Probably was short, then got auto-deleted by the game :S

Here's the slider from the previous diff, you can add it to the [HitObjects] in the .osu file
80,80,18037,2,0,L|88:48,4,20,2|0|2|0|2,1:2|0:2|0:2|0:2|3:3,0:0:0:0:
Popping since this is clearly an error

Thanks! <3