1. okay.

1. 00:16:075 (1) - I don't recommend to use x0.5 in the easiest diff because some of the newbie may get a miss from speed change, also they cannot recognise the speed change, so probably change it to x0.75 or even remove the speed change?
2. 00:57:383 (7) - Probably add a whistle at the beginning of the slider and the end of the slider to fit the instruments.
3. 01:01:306 (5) - How about adding a whistle at the beginning of the slider because of high pitch?
4. 01:12:613 (4) - ^
5. 01:14:921 (4) - ^

1. 00:17:575 - , 00:17:690 - Probably add a note here and there so that it will become a triplet which can follow the drum sound, but it will form a jump between the triplet and (1)- so you can reduce the spacing if you change it. However I think the jump is acceptable in hard.
2. 01:23:921 (1) - I don't think triplet fits the music here, I would say something like simple 1/2 is enough.
3. 01:44:460 (3) - A new combo here?
4. 03:27:844 ~ 03:33:383 - I would like to place the new combo on accents like 03:28:075 - ,03:28:998 - if I was you.

1. 00:06:844 (3) - I highly recommend to remove the 3/4 here because there is nothing to support the 3/4, so could you reduce the length of 00:06:844 (3) - to 00:07:190 - ?
2. 00:07:536 (4) - ^
3. 01:08:229 (6) - Were you doing this on purpose? Please reduce the spacing here if not.
4. 01:22:075 (8) - Consider a new combo here because this chain of combo is longer than others, so a new combo there can maintain the consistency.
5. 01:25:767 (6) - ^
6. 01:30:613 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Imperfect star-shape. Could you do some adjustment on this?

kanpakyin wrote:

Hi.

[General]

1. okay.

[Normal]

1. 00:16:075 (1) - I don't recommend to use x0.5 in the easiest diff because some of the newbie may get a miss from speed change, also they cannot recognise the speed change, so probably change it to x0.75 or even remove the speed change? k, changed
2. 00:57:383 (7) - Probably add a whistle at the beginning of the slider and the end of the slider to fit the instruments. k
3. 01:01:306 (5) - How about adding a whistle at the beginning of the slider because of high pitch? k
4. 01:12:613 (4) - ^ no for this, it sounds odd for me
5. 01:14:921 (4) - ^ k

[Hard]

1. 00:17:575 - , 00:17:690 - Probably add a note here and there so that it will become a triplet which can follow the drum sound, but it will form a jump between the triplet and (1)- so you can reduce the spacing if you change it. However I think the jump is acceptable in hard. I think double 1/4 beat notes after a slider end is a little hard to beat, so keep it
2. 01:23:921 (1) - I don't think triplet fits the music here, I would say something like simple 1/2 is enough. change to 1/2
3. 01:44:460 (3) - A new combo here? It should be fine as it is now
4. 03:27:844 ~ 03:33:383 - I would like to place the new combo on accents like 03:28:075 - ,03:28:998 - if I was you. Pity you are not me

[Insane]

1. 00:06:844 (3) - I highly recommend to remove the 3/4 here because there is nothing to support the 3/4, so could you reduce the length of 00:06:844 (3) - to 00:07:190 - ? k
2. 00:07:536 (4) - ^ This one is fit the "stop" in the lyric
3. 01:08:229 (6) - Were you doing this on purpose? Please reduce the spacing here if not. yes it's on purpose, since the whole combo is 1.6xDS
4. 01:22:075 (8) - Consider a new combo here because this chain of combo is longer than others, so a new combo there can maintain the consistency.
5. 01:25:767 (6) - ^ I think they are fine, turn NC would made last combo too short imo
6. 01:30:613 (1,2,3,4,5,6,7) - Imperfect star-shape. Could you do some adjustment on this? lol I'm too stupid to make it perfect, I tried...at least they are distance spaced /o/

peppy wrote:

Why is this called "Unnatural Girl"?

D33d wrote:

Not a bad map. The hitsounds in particular are pretty neat.

It bothers me slightly that the map feels like it's going around and around--perhaps it could use more directional changes and varied phrasing. That's my take on it, so perhaps you could consider that sort of thing (and more long sliders) for your next map. I also wish that you'd added an obvious hitsound to that overmapped 1/4 stack at the start, but it doesn't detract from the gameplay. Just food for thought!

The storyboard's lovely and, after being wary of the normal-hard gap, the spread seems to be pretty successful as well. I think that [Hard] is actually my favourite, because the rhythm's broken up a bit more and it has some nice structure to it.