Byakugan249 wrote:

re-check~ no kd for this post.

[Easy]
00:12:400 (2) - now that you moved it there, add a clap on this circle for a consistent clap pattern.
00:13:812 (2) - ^
00:18:047 (2) - ^
00:19:459 (2) - ^ fixed all
00:34:988 (2) - forgetting a clap here. add it for consistency. fixed
00:38:165 (1) - try Ctrl+> and tell me what you think of the transition. (ofc you have to move the next note around) I think the way I changed it works.

[Normal]
01:52:989 (3) - NC here. it'll be consistent with the hard and insane diff since it's a NC in this part of the song.

[Hard]
00:24:577 (2) - personally, i don't like this shape mainly because it doesn't look good. here consider using the code in the box for a smoother transition in the song during gameplay IMO.

SPOILER

140,284,24577,2,0,B|212:244|220:136,1,160,0|8,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
268,80,25106,1,8,0:0:0
348,48,25283,1,0,0:0:0
421,100,25459,5,0,0:0:0
340,132,25636,1,0,0:0:0
268,80,25812,1,8,0:0:0
180,84,25989,2,0,B|111:80|78:127|100:187,1,160
24,232,26518,2,0,B|48:272|89:271,1,79.9999999999999,8|0,0:0|0:0,0:0:0
172,244,26871,6,0,B|200:215|189:169,2,79.9999999999999
184,332,27400,2,0,B|268:354|329:292,1,160

looks great
01:26:871 (2) - add a clap at the end for consistency in the clap pattern. fixed

[Insane]
00:45:048 (7,1) - why don'you make a equilateral triangle, that way the transition is smoother and it'd be easier to get to for other players. like this. i think i editted this part multiple times, equilateral triangle works for me.

and that's all.

Thanks for the recheck~

[Easy]
00:15:224 (2) - add a clap here for consistency.
00:16:636 (2) - ^

[Normal]
00:37:812 (3,4) - make these stack for consistency with (1,2) since it follows the same phrase.

just this and it should be ready for a re-bubble bubbie ><

Alright, fixed all of those.

yup everything's good here, so here's your bubble bubbie back~

Thanks!

[Insane]
AR9. AR8 is slow and doesn't fit this upbeat song. But this is up to you, the map isn't that jumpy so AR8 can work.
00:57:577 (1,2) - I'd start the new combo on 2 instead. It's on the downbeat and sort of notifies the player that this isn't and immediate stack.

[Normal]
01:51:577 (5,1) - Swap these combos to stay on the downbeat.

[Easy]
01:16:283 (1) - Take this spinner and end it here: 01:18:400. Then add a note at 01:19:106, and then put a new combo on 01:20:518 (2) - . The way you have this currently mapped feels really empty towards the song.
01:24:753 (1) - Extend this spinner out to 01:29:695? Again another really empty feeling section.

[Taiko Oni]
OD6? This is an Oni, OD5 is too low.
01:47:518 (2) - Delete this note. You need a break point here! This string of note is way to long.

[Muzukashii]
Okay... This needs work.

00:12:400 (2) - Finisher? There is no finish sound here so there is no need for a finisher.
00:13:812 (2) - ^
00:14:518 (1,2,1,2) - Double patterns like this should stay the same color for muzukashii, the quick transition in notes is a bit too hard for a newer player to understand.
00:15:224 (2) - Again no finish is needed here.
00:16:636 (2) - ^
00:19:459 (1) - ^
00:18:930 (1,2,3,4,5) - No need for a 5 note stream here. No beats resembling it and since this is muzukashii you shouldn't use too many.
00:20:871 (2) - Remove this finisher just like the others.
00:21:577 (1,2,3,4,5) - There is no need for a 5 note stream here either.
00:30:047 - add a note here? The current rhythm is pretty weird.
00:32:165 (2) - No need for a finish here either.
00:37:636 (1,1) - ^. Red to blue finishers like this are generally not acceptable for muzukashii either.
00:38:518 (1,2,3,4) - Make this 3 1/2 beats instead. This 4 beat stream kills the rhythm. (This pattern works well. http://puu.sh/1nL6E )
00:47:342 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - These beats make no sense. With the vocals fading out there will be nothing to resemble them. Instead you should put a slider for the vocal until it fades out.
00:50:518 (2) - Why is there a finisher here? This part is so quiet a finisher is out of the question.
00:54:577 (1) - ^
00:55:989 (1) - ^
00:57:047 (4) - ^
00:57:489 (1) - Move this forward a tick so it's on 00:57:577. This is unsnapped.
00:58:283 (2) - Again this section is way too quiet for a finisher. And these finishers don't even fit. I'm not going to put down anymore spots for finishers but every single one needs to be removed until 01:07:812 (5) - . (This finisher can stay)
01:12:047 (2) - Add finish to this. Finishes are ok here for making the vocals stand out.
01:30:577 (4) - Remove this finisher, the note before was good enough to resemble the finish beat.
01:30:930 - add a beat here, you have a very awkward rhythm going.
01:31:989 (1) - Remove this finisher, then add a beat at 01:32:165 to keep your rhythm going.

EVERYTHING NEEDS TO BE CHANGED ON THIS DIFFICULTY OR I WILL NOT REBUBBLE.
Sorry but all the random finisher placement and awkward rhythms are nowhere near acceptable.
Chyo I advise you work on your sense of rhythm and finisher use before you prevent another mapset from being ranked. Sorry.

Standard diffs and Mint's Oni were nice though. (And this song is awesome)

MMzz wrote:

[Insane]
AR9. AR8 is slow and doesn't fit this upbeat song. But this is up to you, the map isn't that jumpy so AR8 can work. I originally had it AR9, so its nice to have someone say that it is better
00:57:577 (1,2) - I'd start the new combo on 2 instead. It's on the downbeat and sort of notifies the player that this isn't and immediate stack. alright, i was always iffy on this part

[Normal]
01:51:577 (5,1) - Swap these combos to stay on the downbeat. fixed

[Easy]
01:16:283 (1) - Take this spinner and end it here: 01:18:400. Then add a note at 01:19:106, and then put a new combo on 01:20:518 (2) - . The way you have this currently mapped feels really empty towards the song. nice change
01:24:753 (1) - Extend this spinner out to 01:29:695? Again another really empty feeling section. i had it like this because Aimod told me that it violated easy criteria if I had the next note that close to the end of a spinner, but if you say its okay then I will definitely change, so fixed

[Taiko Oni]
OD6? This is an Oni, OD5 is too low.
01:47:518 (2) - Delete this note. You need a break point here! This string of note is way to long. fixed


Standard diffs and Mint's Oni were nice though. (And this song is awesome)

Thanks for looking at the mapset. I accepted all the changes for my diffs and mint's taiko, and I will have chyo look at his diff and make changes accordingly.

MMzz wrote:

[Muzukashii]
Okay... This needs work.

00:12:400 (2) - Finisher? There is no finish sound here so there is no need for a finisher.
00:13:812 (2) - ^
00:14:518 (1,2,1,2) - Double patterns like this should stay the same color for muzukashii, the quick transition in notes is a bit too hard for a newer player to understand.
00:15:224 (2) - Again no finish is needed here.
00:16:636 (2) - ^
00:19:459 (1) - ^
00:18:930 (1,2,3,4,5) - No need for a 5 note stream here. No beats resembling it and since this is muzukashii you shouldn't use too many.
00:20:871 (2) - Remove this finisher just like the others.
00:21:577 (1,2,3,4,5) - There is no need for a 5 note stream here either.
00:30:047 - add a note here? The current rhythm is pretty weird.
00:32:165 (2) - No need for a finish here either.
00:37:636 (1,1) - ^. Red to blue finishers like this are generally not acceptable for muzukashii either.
00:38:518 (1,2,3,4) - Make this 3 1/2 beats instead. This 4 beat stream kills the rhythm. (This pattern works well. http://puu.sh/1nL6E )
00:47:342 (1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1,1) - These beats make no sense. With the vocals fading out there will be nothing to resemble them. Instead you should put a slider for the vocal until it fades out.
00:50:518 (2) - Why is there a finisher here? This part is so quiet a finisher is out of the question.
00:54:577 (1) - ^
00:55:989 (1) - ^
00:57:047 (4) - ^
00:57:489 (1) - Move this forward a tick so it's on 00:57:577. This is unsnapped.
00:58:283 (2) - Again this section is way too quiet for a finisher. And these finishers don't even fit. I'm not going to put down anymore spots for finishers but every single one needs to be removed until 01:07:812 (5) - . (This finisher can stay)
01:12:047 (2) - Add finish to this. Finishes are ok here for making the vocals stand out.
01:30:577 (4) - Remove this finisher, the note before was good enough to resemble the finish beat.
01:30:930 - add a beat here, you have a very awkward rhythm going.
01:31:989 (1) - Remove this finisher, then add a beat at 01:32:165 to keep your rhythm going.

Everything should be fixed now,thanks for modding my diff.

But this change
00:38:518 (1,2,3,4) - Make this 3 1/2 beats instead. This 4 beat stream kills the rhythm. (This pattern works well. http://puu.sh/1nL6E )
i don't know if I fixed this in the right way,check it please

http://puu.sh/1nSwV

Rebubbled!

ok, now please rank ;_;

Third time's the charm!

0.0

good luck 0.0

hi ></

i really liked this song and map, but i think it need some improvements, especially on hitsounding, so after small talk with Aleks719 i decided to write this mod

[Insane]

first part of this diff is really lack of hitsounds (no single one i can say ><), i suggest u add some whistles here, it will be still quiet but more audible to play:

so whistles:
00:00:048 (1) - head
00:00:577 (2) - head
00:01:106 (3) -
00:01:459 (1) - head
00:01:989 (2) - head
00:02:518 (3) -
00:02:871 (1) - head
00:03:400 (2) - head
00:03:930 (3) -
00:04:106 (4) -
00:04:283 (1) - head
00:04:812 (2) - head
00:05:342 (3) -
00:05:695 (1) - head
00:06:224 (2) - head
00:06:753 (3) -
00:07:106 (1) - head
00:07:636 (2) - head
00:08:165 (3) - head
00:08:518 (1) - head
00:09:047 (2) - head
00:09:753 (4) -
00:09:930 (5) - head
end of this part~ please add em all at once and listen to the song, before make a decision

the part of diff with custom clap: that clap is good but too quiet, its like fit the song so much u dont even hear difference if the clap on or off on notes. i suggest use this clap: http://puu.sh/1oaZ0 , its ur clap, but with 50% more increased volume, so its still fit the song but a bit more audible during play, just replace it and its rdy to go~

the next part dont have any single hitsound also, lets put some whistles like at first part:
00:56:518 (1) -
00:57:048 (4) - head
00:57:930 (1) - head
00:58:636 (2) - head
00:59:342 (1) - head
00:59:871 (2) - head
01:00:753 (1) - head
01:01:283 (2) - head
01:02:165 (1) - head
01:02:695 (2) - head
01:03:577 (1) - head
01:04:106 (2) - head
end of this part~

the next part already sounds good, just some suggestive fixes:
01:12:400 (2) - whistle on head
01:13:106 (5) - whistle
01:18:048 (2) - whistle on head
01:18:753 (5) - whistle
01:24:048 (5) - whistle on head
01:24:400 (6) - whistle on head
01:28:989 (1) - looks like missed whistle on head here
01:52:283 (4) - whistle
01:52:636 (5) - whistle
thats all~

[Hard]

OD+1

00:04:283 (1) - remove nc and add at 00:04:636 (2) instead, its rly confusing during play when u put nc on the end of stack like this
00:23:695 (3) - missed clap?
00:26:871 (1) - missed clap on tail?

[Normal]

00:08:518 (1) - missed whistle? similar to prev diffs



well, thats all, pre congratz on ur first ranked map, really good job~ ></

As h3k1ru said we had conversation about your mapset, so he wanted to improve hitsounds and i'm agree with him, map sounds "empty". too many places without hitsounds, where they really need. It gives negative affect especially in Insane, because it has high AR and many notes. Hitsounds help to catch rhythm easier.

By the way, some words from me :

Hard
01:04:283 (1) - end of spinner sounds strange and not on right place. Set end of spinner 1/1 earlier, here : 01:07:106 - and add whistle. on free space you can add note, right here 01:07:459 -

Normal
00:36:224 - add note
01:36:047 (5) - make more curve? Now your slider looks not tasty :S maybe this?

Easy
Well, not long combos in easy diffs are good, but not when new combo is set for every object, just for your next maps -, -

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popped for now, and check h3k1ru's post about whistles too please, we worked on hitsounds together, but he made really REALLY biggest part of work

Aleks719 wrote:

As h3k1ru said we had conversation about your mapset, so he wanted to improve hitsounds and i'm agree with him, map sounds "empty". too many places without hitsounds, where they really need. It gives negative affect especially in Insane, because it has high AR and many notes. Hitsounds help to catch rhythm easier.

By the way, some words from me :

Hard
01:04:283 (1) - end of spinner sounds strange and not on right place. Set end of spinner 1/1 earlier, here : 01:07:106 - and add whistle. on free space you can add note, right here 01:07:459 - i see what you mean, fixed

Normal
00:36:224 - add note fixed
01:36:047 (5) - make more curve? Now your slider looks not tasty :S maybe this?

think fixed

Easy
Well, not long combos in easy diffs are good, but not when new combo is set for every object, just for your next maps -, - ok, i think i was trying too hard to making the combo lengths similar to other diffs, will keep in mind for the future

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popped for now, and check h3k1ru's post about whistles too please, we worked on hitsounds together, but he made really REALLY biggest part of work

h3k1ru wrote:

hi ></

i really liked this song and map, but i think it need some improvements, especially on hitsounding, so after small talk with Aleks719 i decided to write this mod

[Insane]

first part of this diff is really lack of hitsounds (no single one i can say ><), i suggest u add some whistles here, it will be still quiet but more audible to play:

so whistles:
00:00:048 (1) - head
00:00:577 (2) - head
00:01:106 (3) -
00:01:459 (1) - head
00:01:989 (2) - head
00:02:518 (3) -
00:02:871 (1) - head
00:03:400 (2) - head
00:03:930 (3) -
00:04:106 (4) -
00:04:283 (1) - head
00:04:812 (2) - head
00:05:342 (3) -
00:05:695 (1) - head
00:06:224 (2) - head
00:06:753 (3) -
00:07:106 (1) - head
00:07:636 (2) - head
00:08:165 (3) - head
00:08:518 (1) - head
00:09:047 (2) - head
00:09:753 (4) -
00:09:930 (5) - head
end of this part~ please add em all at once and listen to the song, before make a decision

the part of diff with custom clap: that clap is good but too quiet, its like fit the song so much u dont even hear difference if the clap on or off on notes. i suggest use this clap: http://puu.sh/1oaZ0 , its ur clap, but with 50% more increased volume, so its still fit the song but a bit more audible during play, just replace it and its rdy to go~

the next part dont have any single hitsound also, lets put some whistles like at first part:
00:56:518 (1) -
00:57:048 (4) - head
00:57:930 (1) - head
00:58:636 (2) - head
00:59:342 (1) - head
00:59:871 (2) - head
01:00:753 (1) - head
01:01:283 (2) - head
01:02:165 (1) - head
01:02:695 (2) - head
01:03:577 (1) - head
01:04:106 (2) - head
end of this part~

the next part already sounds good, just some suggestive fixes:
01:12:400 (2) - whistle on head
01:13:106 (5) - whistle
01:18:048 (2) - whistle on head
01:18:753 (5) - whistle
01:24:048 (5) - whistle on head
01:24:400 (6) - whistle on head
01:28:989 (1) - looks like missed whistle on head here
01:52:283 (4) - whistle
01:52:636 (5) - whistle
thats all~ fixed all hitsounds

[Hard]

OD+1 fixed

00:04:283 (1) - remove nc and add at 00:04:636 (2) instead, its rly confusing during play when u put nc on the end of stack like this fixed, this is something i need to break a habit on
00:23:695 (3) - missed clap?
00:26:871 (1) - missed clap on tail? yes to both

[Normal]

00:08:518 (1) - missed whistle? similar to prev diffs
fixed


well, thats all, pre congratz on ur first ranked map, really good job~ ></

Really, thanks a lot to both of you. Updated the map.

Oh well, it was only hitsound suggestions mostly, so i can do this :

Ranked!

Thanks!

Congratulations!!

Gratz on your first rank :3

Sekai-nyan wrote:

Gratz on your first rank :3

;____;

Congratz on your first ranked map :33

Congratulation Moway!

Congratz! Great Map!

Congrats<3

Congratz on first rank :3

YES YES YES FINALLY <3
congrats :3

Wow really good mapped for the first ranking. Congratulations!

That didn't take long!
Congratz.

Congratulations /o/

Hey, well done!

wow that went quicker than i expected o.o

congratz on your 1st rank

Thank you everyone for the kind words

wow it's your first ranked map. grats :3

grats moway XD

sorry, I'm late T_T
congratz!!

Grats Mori! Great things come to those who wait.

Great beatmap! Instantly added to favourites. kudos!